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New Greenlea Tale: The Rookie
louisev:
we're gettin there little darlin, just hold yer horses!
And here is chapter 45: http://louisev.livejournal.com/248309.html
mariez:
--- Quote from: louise van hine on February 02, 2008, 03:25:14 pm ---we're gettin there little darlin, just hold yer horses!
And here is chapter 45: http://louisev.livejournal.com/248309.html
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SPOILERS
Sigh. I do wonder if Ellery will ever learn that he doesn't need to twist the knife once it is firmly in place.
A brilliant portrayal, Louise - displaying the best parts of his nature to displaying the worst parts of his nature overnight.
...if ya don’t believe me, ya can chat with JEREMY about it...
Wince. Cringe. That's just embarrassing - and not for Paula. :-\
Btw, that was superbly written, Louise!
Thanks!
Marie
belbbmfan:
SPOILERS
“You should have discussed this with me!”
“Yeah but I didn’t have to. So I didn’t. Or we would a had this wrangle yesterday an you would a ended up with yer panties in a bunch again an somebody would a stopped me, probably yer boss, an it never would a flown. Now you got yourself a nice juicy confession an that is gonna make you look good. So I am sorry for goin behind yer back but there wasn’t any other way. There wasn’t any way in hell he was gonna give that ta you, now you can just go in an do the paperwork.”
Good Lord, Ellery!
I'm starting to get an idea why Amos Marigold turned out to be such a s.o.b.,.... maybe he'd been working with pestered by Ellery for too long! :o :-\
But, yeah, as Marie said, superbly written. Can't get enough of this.
souxi:
--- Quote from: mariez on February 02, 2008, 03:54:47 pm ---
SPOILERS
Sigh. I do wonder if Ellery will ever learn that he doesn't need to twist the knife once it is firmly in place.
A brilliant portrayal, Louise - displaying the best parts of his nature to displaying the worst parts of his nature overnight.
...if ya don’t believe me, ya can chat with JEREMY about it...
Wince. Cringe. That's just embarrassing - and not for Paula. :-\
Btw, that was superbly written, Louise!
Thanks!
Marie
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But Marie, twisting the knife is all part of Ellerys charm lol. :laugh: I think he,s great the way he tells it like it is. He deffinately reminds me of me lol. Now then Louise, not that I,m keeping on and on and on and on or nagging or whinging or just harping on about it generally, but........................TOYS. :laugh: Next time I look at your LJ, I expect that extra long chapter I keep harping on about, full of begging/pleading noises, you get my drift. :laugh: :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
mariez:
--- Quote from: souxi on February 02, 2008, 04:07:53 pm ---But Marie, twisting the knife is all part of Ellerys charm lol. :laugh: I think he,s great the way he tells it like it is.
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I understand where you're coming from, souxi :)
But, I actually don't find that part of Ellery charming. And he's isn't quite telling everything like it is. My mouth fell open when I realized he hadn't contacted the D.A.'s office after he spoke with Marigold. To let Paula find out from Marigold's attorney, and then to give that "Oh, any news?" line to Paula at the courthouse? *shakes head* I applaud that he was able to get a plea from Marigold, but he was already pretty darn close to crossing the line, and now he's crossed it. I'm very curious to hear what Wes will have to say - and if Ellery will come clean about exactly what he said to Paula.
And just when I thought the story was winding down to a peaceful conclusion, you've got it cranked up into high gear. LOL! Great job, Louise!
Marie
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