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Midnight Rant of a Beta

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delalluvia:
Doggone it.  It took 5 years, but that girl tracked me down again and asked me to beta the latest rewrite of part 3 of her story.

*sigh*

She's STILL SUCH a lazy writer, leaving out major details that I have to comment on, lest she think I find it acceptable, so much so that it takes me the better part of 2 hours to do 4 chapters and she's sent me 23 chapters.

The latest ridiculousness - a detective is searching in the "country" for a missing girl.  He's riding a "scooter" and it takes him from sun-up to sun-down to get to the first settlement.  He asks locals about where a local boy was kidnapped.  They reply "not far" and then tell him it will take him the better part of a day to get there on his scooter.  Now this is a story in the future but I have to remind the writer that even if this future warrior detective was riding a Vespa scooter, in a day he would travel nearly 500 miles.  That's nowhere near "close" by any description and basically he would be looking for a child missing from New York City by driving to the state of Virginia.  ::)

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