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Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
ifyoucantfixit:
--- Quote from: notBastet on December 24, 2006, 10:58:48 am ---Hi guys,
I'm unable to chat or be online much from my holiday locale, but just wanted to wish everyone Merry Christmas and/or Happy Holidays!
Kelly
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still missing you come back soon, dearie
MaineWriter:
Good morning re-readers...
Today, chapters 6 through 10:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/29420.html
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MaineWriter:
from Chapter 7:
“I wish I had somethin else ta say right now, but I gave him some things ta go on an I am gonna give em a few days once I get a picture. Can we get one from his momma, somethin recent?”
“His wife,” Ennis mumbled. “I can call his wife, or maybe you can, you’re the police. She’d send you a picture, might not talk ta me again.”
Ellery looked into his eyes then. “Sweetheart, it’s okay ta feel bad. I knew you would, ya don’t have ta hide it from me. But I do wish there is somethin I could do ta make ya feel better.”
Ennis cleared his throat, two new tears starting in the corner of his eyes. “There is.”
“Tell me.”
“Find the man who killed em. I know you can. Find em.”
Ellery nodded, wordless, wondering for the first time in his career if he warranted the confidence that lay behind his words.
“I will.”
Ennis relinquished his grip, as though remembering it at last, his hand moving up to Ellery’s shoulder, turning, and pulling him in, head on his shoulder. “Didn’t have a single good day since I got that post card, darlin, till you. Had a lot a good days since then... I want ta have good days again with you, lots of em.”
Ellery held onto him, feeling the trembling vulnerability that lay beneath the still exterior he showed to the world, then pulled back slightly, stroking the blond hairs behind his ears. “As many as ya want, sweetheart. Any way ya want.”
Leslie
MaineWriter:
From Chapter 8:
He pulled out his notepad with the number for Lureen Twist, briefly wondering what life was like for Ennis and Jack, living three states apart, both married with children, trying to hold on to one another with everything stacked against them... and a pang of sadness went through him as he dialed.
and later, same chapter:
“Ma’am, did you ask anyone ta do an autopsy?” Ellery pressed... she seemed, though shrill and agitated, someone who was steel-tempered, and he needed to get what he could while he had her on the phone.
“I was supposed ta ask? Don’t they just do that?”
“No ma’am, they didn’t. So you didn’t request it.”
“No course not. I was beside myself, it wasn’t somethin I thought a. I didn’t even know he was in Austin, I thought he was up in Wyomin mixin it up with his old huntin buddy shootin ducks or whatever the hell he did up there.”
“You mean Mr. Del Mar.”
“Yes that sounds like the name.”
“No, he didn’t know anything about this.”
“He is the one askin isn’t he?”
“Yes ma’am.”
“You tell Mr. Del Mar... oh never mind, what use is it now....”
“What’s that ma’am?” Ellery felt his pulse increase.
“You tell Mr. Del Mar... “ she sighed. “I am really sorry I didn’t get in touch, but I didn’t know how. I know he was close.”
and at the end of the chapter, Ellery is talking to Wes:
“I was sorta wonderin why Ennis seemed like such a broken hearted type. He’s too young fer that.”
“Well Wes, if it weren’t fer you keepin good ol boys off my back the last dozen years or so I might be a broken hearted queer with a sad tale same as him.”
“Just my job, Ellery. Bein decent doesn’t cost me anythin.”
Ellery smiled. “That’s what I like about you Wes.”
Leslie
MaineWriter:
Chapter 9, Wayne sees Ennis naked!
The youth nodded, as Ellery handed him a notepad and a pencil. Just then, Ennis came out of the bathroom, naked, rubbing his hair with a towel, into the living room, and stopped dead, staring at Wayne.
“Jesus God Ellery!” he muttered, wrapped the towel quickly around himself and storming into the bedroom.
“Another nail in my coffin today,” Ellery said softly. Wayne was grinning.
“Holy shit, Ellery... he is one hot lookin man without clothes,” Wayne exclaimed softly.
and later...
Wayne’s manner changed completely under the tongue-lashing. “Well I guess I caught you in a bad mood today,” he said softly, visibly hurt.
“Wayne, any day someone comes in the bar askin for Bill is a bad day. Any day my boss kicks me out from behind my desk an orders me to the doctor, is an even worse day. An any day you come knockin on my door an catch Ennis naked comin out a the shower is a fuckin shitstorm. You got that?”
“Yes Ellery.”
“Now get the hell outta here, an that is the last I want ta hear a you on the topic of Ennis.”
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