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Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
louisev:
In Chapter 8, Ellery's motives for striking his deal with Ennis to work one night a week at the bar are hinted at in his conversation with Rudy, as well as an early look at Ellery's style of relationship advice:
Rudy looked a little sheepish. “Are you pissed at me about somethin Ellery?”
Ellery looked up, pulled on his lip a moment. “For the most part no. You show up, yer reliable, you don’t fuck every man who weighs over 200 pounds that comes through the door, an as far as I know you ain’t harborin my ex partner as a fugitive in yer apartment.”
“And the rest of it?”
“Ennis is uncomfortable with the amount of interest you appear ta show in his personal life.”
“Oh. I guess I spoke outta turn.”
“Speakin about Ennis an me in any respect is probably speakin outta turn. He is a private man an prefers his life ta be private. You may possibly get him to forgive you if you can keep that in mind, Rudy. I am sure there are many other fascinatin people here for you to wonder about.”
“I was just showin an interest, Ellery. An frankly, I ain’t sure it is such a great idea for Ennis to be hangin out here. He don’t like men showin affection in public, an it makes people uncomfortable when he glares at em.”
“He’s a bouncer. Part of why I like em to be here is because he’s uncomfortable. Glaring at people is part of his job.”
“Yeah but he really... glares.”
“He stays. If it comes down to between him an you he stays, Rudy. So try ta lump it. I got Ennis here for my own reasons an unless he don’t want ta be here no more... an don’t give him a reason, Rudy, I warn ya... he stays. You understand that? He is here for a mere 4 hours on a Saturday night an that should not break your back.”
“Whatever you say, Ellery.”
He smiled. “I’m glad we understand each other. Now, any sign of any illicit behavior or passin money in the Gents or panties bein sold on the dance floor?”
“Nope. Chuck caught a couple a guys gettin hot an heavy in a stall night before last but he just broke it up.”
“Make sure. Cause this AIDS thing is gettin really bad press an I don’t want no reasons for anyone declarin my bar as a public health nuisance or whatever crap they can dream up.”
Rudy nodded.
“You set ta move in first a next month?”
“Yep. Listen, you mind if I ask you a personal question?”
“If I mind I won’t answer it.”
“Fair enough. What do you think is the best thing ta do if you think yer man is steppin out on ya?”
“Ask em. That is dangerous behavior in these times, an if you don’t get no straight answer then it might be best ta give em his marchin orders.”
“Then you might need a new bouncer soon,” Rudy smiled tightly.
louisev:
Chapter 9, we find out Ennis is afraid of flying as they prepare to head off to Denver for their AIDS test trial, and we have an early case of Coyote Interruptus.
“So when these folks call back we got ta book a flight, Ennis. Tell me you are gonna get on the plane with me an ain’t gonna make me drive a whole day ta get there. “
“It’s… it’s a little teeny tiny plane Ellery.”
“Yeah well they ain’t less safe than the big fuckin 747’s Ennis. I hate flyin too but it is a lot safer than drivin that truck on the 287.”
“I suppose…” he repeated, sipping his scotch.
“You haven’t answered in the affirmative yet, Ennis,” Ellery frowned.
“I’m thinkin.”
“You got ta think fast, boy. Cause I got ta call the airline.”
“Dammit. Okay. Yeah I’ll fly with ya.”
“Good. Now that is done an over are we gonna watch a movie, go ta bed an fuck or stare at each other?”
“Go ta bed an fuck. C’mere.” Ellery got up from the sofa and slid out of his t-shirt, his unbelted denims already half off his hips, and walked slowly over to where Ennis was sipping the last of his scotch, then set it down, sliding his hands up his thighs and tugging. Ellery’s lose-fitting denims slid down over his hips, dragging his drawers with them, and he stood naked, his cock already half hard, and Ennis leaned forward, nuzzling it. “First maybe do a little a this…” and he sucked the end of Ellery’s cock into his mouth, causing him to gasp.
“What are ya doin, Ennis?” he asked, his voice breathy as he resisted the urge to thrust deeper into Ennis’s mouth, hands gripping his shoulders and digging in with his blunt nails.
Ennis looked up, let his cock go and then gave it a lick. “Makin sure ya come. Feels a whole lot better ta fuck ya after. An I’m gettin ta like doin this.”
Ellery looked down with a sultry smile. “I ain’t gonna argue.”
Ennis pulled Ellery’s hips toward him, taking more of his cock in his mouth, sucking hard, artless, dominant and insistent as he moved his head, sliding off and then deeper in, bringing his cock as far down his throat as he could manage before choking on him, and Ellery was beginning to thrust back, when the phone rang.
“Uh, sweetheart…” Ellery gasped. “Might be the medical center…”
Ennis pulled off, mouth dripping. “Goddammit.”
louisev:
And in Chapter 10, Ellery learns about two things that drive Ennis to dominant sexual aggression: getting interrupted by the phone... and jealousy:
Ennis nodded, holding the dildo. “Pull em up, hold on to yer knees…” and Ellery obeyed, eyes glued to Ennis’s face as he knelt between his knees and brushed his fingers up against his hole and slipped them into his ass, twisting them to stretch him as he held the dildo ready, and Ellery gasped, bucking up slightly against the pleasurable sensation, and Ennis suddenly pulled his fingers out, pushing now with the head of the dildo until it slid in, then knelt, sucking the end of Ellery’s cock into his mouth, sliding along it as he buried the dildo in one long, slow thrust, Ellery’s cock twitching hard and rigid against the roof of his mouth.
He did not wait, but pulled back and began fucking him in long, slow strokes, sucking hard… there was nothing subtle about his onslaught, and it occurred to Ellery briefly that he was competing in some small way with the unnamed gun dealer who had not satisfied him, proving to Ellery that he cared about whether he came, he was determined to bring him pleasure before he had any himself… It was a strange reversal, and Ellery stroked his fingers across Ennis’s pale cheek , up through the short, blond curls, feeling the beginning trickle of sweat along his nape as he sucked mercilessly, moving the dildo all the way in and then back out, long, hard, relentless, and Ellery stiffened, his spine arching.
“Oh sweetheart, oh fuck…” he arched up and bucked hard, and came in a sudden spurt, his sphincter grasping hard onto the toy as his hips rode up and his cock strained against the licking tongue. Ennis blinked several times, swallowed, then opened his mouth, gasping, as dribbles of come appeared at the edges of his mouth, and he pulled the dildo out in a single stroke, picked up the Vaseline and began to lube himself with rapid, masturbating strokes, looking down at Ellery’s flagging cock with a heavy-lidded gaze.
“Hold still right there, keep yer knees up…” an he leaned over, a dribble of warm come making its way down his face and neck and then drizzling over Ellery’s chest as he pushed the end of his cock into the still-twitching sphincter… “oh Jesus god….” Ennis closed his eyes, thrust hard with his hips, and began immediately thrusting hard into the hot tightness he craved.
Ellery teetered again at the edge of orgasm almost immediately, holding tight to his knees, and Ennis loomed over him, mouth open and wet, descending on his mouth and cutting off his moans, thrusting his tongue in with the same violence as his cock thrust into his ass, the salty musk taste of his own fluid filling Ellery’s mouth as Ennis’s tongue pushed against his, and he sucked his tongue, thrashing.
It was over in a minute or less, Ennis suddenly pulling back, arching like a bow, and shuddering as he responded to Ellery’s fast-building orgasm, and he groaned out what sounded like a prayer, a second, smaller spurt of come jetting up between their bodies with his final thrusts before he placed his hands over Ellery’s hands and pried them off his knees, letting his feet fall back to the bed, forcing his cock out, and he collapsed on top of Ellery’s body, panting heavily.
“Man what got inta you?” Ellery said softly in his ear.
“Dunno… don’t like ta be interrupted.”
mariez:
Good Morning, all! Wow - fantastic quotes and commentary! Thank you, Louise!
Speaking of favorite lines:
--- Quote from: louisev on January 13, 2007, 10:13:36 am ---In Chapter 7, Ennis's bad day is not without its silver lining, as he makes his way home to "Officer Darlin." I quoted this in part because it contains Fred's favorite Ennis line: "That too." It's also notable for fitting in Ennis's distinct fetish for Ellery's uniform - nothing like ending a twenty year stretch of fearing larger society by getting a blowjob from an officer of the law, wearing his hat!
“Will that be all sir?”
--- End quote ---
That one ranks very high on my list of favorites! So very Ellery - which is always a good thing!
Thanks! Marie
NavyVet:
Sorry for the OT, but this is so funny, I just had to share it:
Chinese food song
Put on your speakers and enjoy
http://jflores.com/jokes/chowmein.htm
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