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Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
MaineWriter:
The FAMOUS conversation in chapter 58!
“I can’t understand why they have to do that fake talkin like they was all imitatin Mae West or somethin. Can’t they act like boys?”
“Well from what I seen, a boy who swishes around doin that high voice thing an wigglin his booty tends ta draw looks. I guess it’s also tellin the manly ones what they’re after.”
“That ain’t hard ta figure.”
“One thing is hard ta figure, Ennis, an that is... what it’s like with you an Ellery. I mean... both a you act perfectly straight.”
“What are you askin, boy?”
“Well... which one... is ... the man.”
Ennis laughed, unexpectedly. “We’re both men, Dupree. What the fuck a you talkin about?”
Dupree blushed. “You know what I mean.. which one a you...is on top.”
“Shit Dupree, ain’t that kinda personal?” His face had reddened suddenly.
“Yeah, but part a why I wanted ta come over here ta work is so I could find out more about what life was like for homosexual men, how’m I gonna do that without askin questions?”
“Fair enough,” Ennis said, his blush fading. He pointed imperceptibly over at Gene, who was giggling loudly enoug for Dupree to hear. “Now if that was Bill’s last boyfriend, an Bill was with Ellery at one time what does that tell ya?”
Dupree blinked. “I wouldn’t a ... thought.”
“Sometimes we change places,” he added in an undertone.
“Learn somethin new every day...” Dupree said, looking down at his beer.
“Okay well you asked, guess you didn’t like the answer.”
“Well... all this time I thought...ya know.. Ellery was well... different.”
“He is. He ain’t like these girly boys.”
“Course not.”
“An it ain’t no disrespect ta him just because he likes it a certain way in bed. It’s a private thing.”
“Sure.”
“But you still are makin that face.”
“I dunno, I didn’t think I had any prejudice about, you know, queers... I guess I sorta do.”
“Dupree, if nobody ever got on bottom then there wouldn’t be nobody on top.”
Dupree smirked. “Good point.” He took a gulp of beer. “I guess this makes us real good friends now that you told me some a yer secrets.”
“You better not say nothin ta Ellery about it. I don’t know what you boys joke around about down at the station but I sure don’t want em thinkin I was talkin about our private bedroom life with you.”
“You didn’t. I asked one question an you answered indirectly. It was quite tactful. So now I can say you never actually divulged anythin about you an Ellery.”
Ennis smiled faintly. “That’s true ain’t it?”
“You are amazinly clever for someone who likes ta play dumb country hick, Ennis. I never bought that act for a minute. An I am sure Ellery don’t neither.”
Ennis grinned at him. “No, he’s cottoned on ta most of it.”
“You really do love em a lot don’t ya?”
Ennis nodded, taking refuge behind his beer glass.
“I can tell, you get that look in yer eye. Same look he gets in his eye. I wish the hell I could get a girl ta look at me that way.”
“Oh come on Dupree, yer a nice lookin piece a man...”
Dupree’s eyebrows shot up again. “What are you sayin Ennis? You think I’m attractive...?”
“I’m just sayin. You would be to a girl.”
“You think I’m handsome don’t you? You check me out when I ain’t lookin?”
“I do not.”
“Come on, you can tell me, we’re buddies.”
“Shut up, Dupree....” Ennis growled.
“You do check me out. I’m gonna tell Ellery.” he stood up with his empty glass.
“Don’t you call em, boy, my little girl is probably half asleep on the sofa!” Ennis said, voice rising with annoyance.
L
MaineWriter:
Chapter 59....
“I haven’t forgotten Ennis. You want me ta wait for ya?”
“No, just tell Junior I’ll be right there.”
“Okay. I love ya. I’ll be home as soon as I can.”
“Yeah.” Ennis hung up, and went back over to where Dupree had started talking with Gene and Wayne.
“Oh hey Ennis, you decided ta notice I was alive I see,” Wayne said, pouting.
“You seemed ta have plenty a company there Wayne, why should I butt in?” Ennis said, obviously uncomfortable.
Wayne turned to Gene, who looked up at Ennis disdainfully. “Ennis don’t like me because I’m flabby an don’t ride horses an I ain’t enough of a man fer him.”
“That figures. Ain’t nobody good enough for em but the lord high Ellery Cantrell, ain’t that so Ennis?” Gene said.
“You want ta talk shit about the guy who opened this bar go ahead, but do it outside,” Ennis said. “Listen Dupree, I got ta go. Ellery is goin in to the station an I don’t want Junior ta be home alone.”
“Course not.”
“I’d ask ya along except that’d leave the bar without a bouncer an that ain’t good considerin.”
“I can have the patrol stay on, Ennis, don’t worry. Lauren here can help if Wayne an Gene start throwin punches at each other over which one of em wants ta go ta bed with ya first.”
“Jesus Christ Dupree, ya just made my stomach turn.”
Both Gene and Wayne glared at Dupree, who returned their looks with a sweet smile. “You know ya both find em irresistible. What’d Jim call ya? The Marlboro Man.”
“Shut up Dupree, I swear,” Ennis said, and walked rapidly out of the bar to the sound of combined chuckles and giggles.
L
MaineWriter:
More from Chapter 59:
Ennis pulled her close, smoothing her hair. “I am real sorry about this, Junior, real sorry. Is there anythin I can do?”
She nodded, sadly. “Yeah, but I don’t think you will, Daddy. Not after what I seen today.”
“You want me ta come back ta Riverton.”
She nodded again, pressing her head against his shoulder.
“Darlin I would if I had some kind a job ta keep me, an if I didn’t have ... the life here, ya know I would. I didn’t leave Riverton ta run away from ya.”
“I know Daddy,” she said, voice very soft. “I know. But things are real bad, an if Curt don’t find a job I just know he is gonna move back in with his momma an just cut me dead.”
“Darlin if Curt leaves ya... ya can come down ta me an I’ll... help ya out here. Me an Ellery, an Wes an Edna. Tell you what... stay for the party tomorrow an meet em an you’ll get ta know what life is like for me here. I got a really good job, an I got a good life.”
“What if... things don’t work out with you two? I mean it’s only been a little while.”
“It don’t work that way with me darlin. I always knew it was Jack fer me from the get go... an it’s the same here... it wasn’t like marryin yer momma. I always knew why I done that, an it was always a mistake. But no, we ain’t goin nowhere here, an if you need me an don’t want ta go ta Bill an yer momma you come down here an we’ll figure it out.”
“You sure?” she said, pulling back slightly and looking in his eyes.
“Sure I’m sure. In fact I’ll tell Ellery about how things are an maybe he can come up with some ideas. He knows a lot a people in this town, and so do Wes an Edna. I ain’t hopin fer Curt ta leave you, if ya don’t want em to, but if he does, you wont be left high an dry. You got that?”
“Okay Daddy. In that case I should probably call Curt in the mornin an tell em I won’t get gettin home till Monday. He won’t be happy but he won’t complain when I bring home half the rent money either.”
Ennis patted her head. “That’s my gal. Now you get some sleep, an I’m gonna lie down a bit, who knows when Ellery’ll be back.”
“Okay Daddy, good night now.”
Ennis kissed Junior good night, shut off the living room light, and took one of his five minute showers, wrapped himself in a towel and went into the bedroom. He picked up “The ABC Murders” which he hadn’t finished, and tossed it down when his eyes got heavy. He looked longingly at the phone, hoping Ellery would call, but the phone remained silent. He drifted off to sleep with the book in his hand.
L
mariez:
Hi gang - another great set of chapters!
--- Quote from: MaineWriter on January 23, 2007, 10:25:37 am ---The FAMOUS conversation in chapter 58!
L
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Oh - Famous, indeed! Wow - that is something to re-read that now! ;D In J&N's holiday story Nick worries that his mom will ask that same embarrassing "who's the man" question! I like this line especially -
"Dupree, if nobody ever got on bottom then there wouldn't be nobody on top."
:laugh: :laugh:
I thought this exchange, which takes place immediately preceding the FAMOUS conversation, was very interesting (a bit of foreshadowing?) in light of "A Small Circle of Friends":
“No, I was gonna say too much of a recluse. You an Ellery must get along good because you both like ... I dunno, you ain’t party people, is the best way I can say it.”
“That’s fer sure, only party I can remember goin to is the one when Ellery got his promotion.”
I'm also finding Jeremy teasing Ennis in the bar really funny - little did he know that in a few months he himself would become the target of some teasing - and he won't find it funny at all!!
Great quotes, Leslie! Thanks!
Marie
mariez:
Well, you didn't think I was going to skip this, did you? This scene is memorable for many reasons - I can't remember another time when we've seen this particular, er, number pop up on E&E's dance card. I guess we find out why when we read Ellery's last line!
As soon as Ennis broke the kiss, rising onto his knees, Ellery shook his head. “Boy what are you doin?”
“What’s it look like?” Ennis whispered, stroking his cock with a wicked grin on his face.
“Gettin me hard as a rock, Jesus Ennis, you gonna fuck me with yer daughter in the other room?”
“Was thinkin a somethin different actually, maybe not so loud... like suckin each other off.”
Ellery moaned again softly as Ennis skillfully stroked him, his hips rising slightly off the bed. “Well okay if yer sure.”
“Got ta have somethin boy, can’t go all night like this,” and Ellery noticed in the moonlit darkness that Ennis was fully erect.
“You been thinkin about me.”
“Dreamin.. had a dream,” he said. “We gonna talk or get to it?”
“You want ta do this at the same time?” Ellery said, still doubtful.
Ennis nodded.
“Okay then turn around an climb over me...” he instructed softly, and Ennis turned, lowering his knees as he stretched out over Ellery’s body, keeping a firm hand on his cock, and shivered as his cock slipped into Ellery’s mouth, then opened his own mouth and began to lick the tip of Ellery’s cock, sliding it bit by bit deeper into his mouth and rested on his elbows while his own cock was swallowed energetically. It was difficult for Ennis to concentrate or to use any technique, with the enthusiastic treatment his own cock was getting, but he sucked and stroked with the rhythm of Ellery’s rising hips, his own hips bucking with the intense stimulation.
It became clear as he felt a surge of pressure, that Ellery was trying to make him come rapidly, but by then, he could no longer concentrate or hold back, and almost choked on a groan as his hips tensed up and he erupted suddenly, Ellery swallowing his jet of come without difficulty. Ennis redoubled his efforts as his orgasm settled, Ellery still sucking him, and he squeezed the base of his cock, knowing that it was the more vigorous and violent action that usually triggered Ellery off, and slipped his free hand around and pushed it into his sphincter dry, causing Ellery to buck hard and spasm, squirting a mouthful of salty fluid into Ennis’s mouth, his own mouth falling open with a loud gasp and a shudder.
Ennis pulled his finger out when Ellery finished coming, and rolled off him, panting, then rose to his knees. His face was messy with come.
“You look a sight, boy,” Ellery said, grinning up at him.
“Yeah, but I feel real good,” he replied, lying down on the pillow. “How about you?”
“I look a sight too, but I haven’t got all that spunk on my face.” He leaned in, and lapped at Ennis’s cheek and chin, and Ennis chuckled softly while Ellery lapped his come off his face, sneaking a kiss in the middle of it. “Much better,” he pronounced as he tickled Ennis’s cheek with the tip of his tongue.
“You like that good enough?”
“Good enough for not havin no sex, sure,” Ellery said, digging his elbow into Ennis’s ribs.
Ha, ha, Ellery - no sex! Ah, well, with Junior on the other side of the wall - emergency measures needed to be taken!
Marie
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