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In the New Yorker...
serious crayons:
Am I reading this wrong or is this a pretty egregious editing error by New Yorker standards? It's from a March 2022 article that I just happen to be reading now.
--- Quote ---Doctors in the Midlands had developed the custom of recording when a baby had died; doctors in London that a miscarriage had occurred.
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Either switch the semicolon for a comma or add a verb to the second part.
Front-Ranger:
That is a seriously messed up sentence! The only way it could work is if the "when" and "that" could be coordinated; either use when in both cases or that in both cases.
Jeff Wrangler:
--- Quote from: serious crayons on February 11, 2023, 03:44:09 pm ---Am I reading this wrong or is this a pretty egregious editing error by New Yorker standards? It's from a March 2022 article that I just happen to be reading now.
Either switch the semicolon for a comma or add a verb to the second part.
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I'd just switch the semicolon to a comma. That said, I do think it would be a better sentence if it were written as "that a baby had died" and "that a miscarriage had occurred." That would make the two parts parallel. "When" makes me think the doctor was looking at his watch and noting the time. But maybe he was?
But I also don't know the context of the sentence.
serious crayons:
--- Quote from: Jeff Wrangler on February 11, 2023, 10:15:24 pm ---I'd just switch the semicolon to a comma. That said, I do think it would be a better sentence if it were written as "that a baby had died" and "that a miscarriage had occurred." That would make the two parts parallel. "When" makes me think the doctor was looking at his watch and noting the time. But maybe he was?
But I also don't know the context of the sentence.
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The article was about how numbers and statistics can be misleading. Those two places were part of one study and I guess that difference messed up the results.
Agreed about "that"!
Jeff Wrangler:
--- Quote from: serious crayons on February 12, 2023, 06:38:06 pm ---The article was about how numbers and statistics can be misleading. Those two places were part of one study and I guess that difference messed up the results.
Agreed about "that"!
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Numbers and statistics misleading? Imagine that! ;D
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