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The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
mariez:
--- Quote from: louisev on April 28, 2009, 11:10:52 pm ---and now back to the thick of the plot!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301952.html
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“I just had an idea. If this is the original crime scene... an we’re missin a knife... then suddenly the toilet is overflowin cause one a the workmen happens ta use it when it’s all clogged up...”
“Ah hah...” Sanchez smiled. “Let’s do some plumbin.”
Ah, yes, police work is so glamorous! Good thinking, Sergeant Dupree. :) Thanks, Louise!
louisev:
--- Quote from: mariez on April 29, 2009, 04:18:40 pm ---SPOILERS
“I just had an idea. If this is the original crime scene... an we’re missin a knife... then suddenly the toilet is overflowin cause one a the workmen happens ta use it when it’s all clogged up...”
“Ah hah...” Sanchez smiled. “Let’s do some plumbin.”
Ah, yes, police work is so glamorous! Good thinking, Sergeant Dupree. :) Thanks, Louise!
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yep, sometimes police work is all plumbing and toilet snakes!
louisev:
and here is chapter 55!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302200.html
mariez:
--- Quote from: louisev on April 29, 2009, 10:10:33 pm ---
and here is chapter 55!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302200.html
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Wow. What a fascinating look at a ruminating Esteban. He's so understandably conflicted over his feelings for Ellery and over just about everything else in his life, too.
He spared a kind look for her – at least she hadn’t changed toward him. Joe, his oldest friend in the department besides Ellery – had seemed to turn on him, especially now that the Griffin thing was coming apart. It was like being the man standing on the streetcorner doing nothing in particular when somebody gets punched in the kidneys.
The way he went to the hospital determined to see Ellery, but then balked and left the card instead really moved me. This was beautifully written, Louise, with such depth and humanity. Thank you!
louisev:
--- Quote from: mariez on April 30, 2009, 01:38:07 pm ---SPOILERS
Wow. What a fascinating look at a ruminating Esteban. He's so understandably conflicted over his feelings for Ellery and over just about everything else in his life, too.
He spared a kind look for her – at least she hadn’t changed toward him. Joe, his oldest friend in the department besides Ellery – had seemed to turn on him, especially now that the Griffin thing was coming apart. It was like being the man standing on the streetcorner doing nothing in particular when somebody gets punched in the kidneys.
The way he went to the hospital determined to see Ellery, but then balked and left the card instead really moved me. This was beautifully written, Louise, with such depth and humanity. Thank you!
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I had originally intended to get much more deeply into the Esteban situation, but it turned out to be a lot more of a group Sheriff's department police procedural - which seems to be what my stories end up being nowadays, I just can't help them getting that way!
Which means maybe I have to do a real Esteban-centric story one of these days!!
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