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Was: Laramie Tales: New Working Title: Tales of Greenlea County (ARCHIVE)
MaineWriter:
Louise asked me to go searching in the archives, and I managed to find the original essay by Ellery, with comments by Wes, in red pencil. I will share them with you here in hopes that it might make the revised essay turn up.
Ellery,
Good start. You have a few run on sentences and such, but I am not the grammar police. You can correct those on your own.
Glad you discovered Helga's bakery. You are correct, her muffins and pastries would be a welcome addition to the staff room. Maybe we can persuade Joe to switch. I'll mention it to him. I also might be able to persuade Edna to bake for us on Fridays. I know how fond you are of her biscuits.
But, to the heart of the matter. If you spent the week watching TV and eating Dampfnüdels (in between the conduct unbecoming, but I don't want to get into that!) then you must have had some time to think. And what you thought about is what I am interested in hearing. So, this is good start but revisions are needed. Have this back to me in three days.
Wes
belbbmfan:
Oh, Wes is being very nice...
And throwing Edna in the mix! :laugh: :laugh: That Brownie!
mariez:
--- Quote from: belbbmfan on April 04, 2007, 07:25:13 am ---Oh, Wes is being very nice...
And throwing Edna in the mix! :laugh: :laugh: That Brownie!
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Yep, in his own way, Wes can be a caution, too! :laugh: He is being nice, isn't he? I wonder if Edna ever did bake Friday biscuits for the staff room. I loved . . .but I don't want to get into that!) - kind of the precursor to the "I didn't need to know that Ellery" that always makes me laugh!
And, yes, we are all very interested in hearing the thoughts running around in Ellery's fascinating mind!
Thanks for searching the archives, L!
Marie
souxi:
Louise is there a problem with your LJ today? I can log into anyone elses but whenever I try to log into yours I get told I have to be logged in to view this protected entry. It wasn,t like this yesterday.
opinionista:
--- Quote from: souxi on April 05, 2007, 05:31:19 am ---Louise is there a problem with your LJ today? I can log into anyone elses but whenever I try to log into yours I get told I have to be logged in to view this protected entry. It wasn,t like this yesterday.
--- End quote ---
Hey Souxi,
Long time no see! I get the same message too. Maybe she's updating the file or something.
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