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louisev:
I am glad you are enjoying it, Jo - what about the rest of you readers, now that you have had a taste of Ellery's point or view of sizing up a 40-something ranch hand in Bill's apartment, to finding excuses to keep him in Laramie long enough to charm the pants off him...?
richardg49:
--- Quote from: louisev on December 17, 2006, 10:12:39 pm ---I am glad you are enjoying it, Jo - what about the rest of you readers, now that you have had a taste of Ellery's point or view of sizing up a 40-something ranch hand in Bill's apartment, to finding excuses to keep him in Laramie long enough to charm the pants off him...?
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Louise, this new story is great. One of the many good things in your Laramie Saga is the way you characterise Ellery through his manner of speaking - sarcastic, witty, and no-nonsense to everyone who annoys him. I've culled out a few examples which I especially liked:
Ellery's very first comment when Ennis is mentioned on the phone by Bill: "Ennis who? Is that a boy or a girl?”
And his first observation of Ennis when they meet: "And there he sat. Keeping his eyes well away from Gene, but when I showed up, givin me an up and down that I felt like a bare hand on my ass."
A neatly sarcastic throwaway comment: "....Bill said, strikin' a Thinkerish pose."
One of the frequent references to Ellery's film-star tastes: "I gave him my best John Wayne to Monty Clift reassurin smile, hoping he responded with the same level of hero worship and trust Monty did in “Red River” and I couldn’t have been more wrong."
And his first success in getting Ennis to smile:
“There ain’t one word a that ain’t true, Bill. I volunteer here to investigate this shit, an you drag Ennis into this Byzantine crapola for whatever reason I do not know, an we’re sittin here like statutes while you have some noontime nookie with your U a W piece a ass. Priorities, Bill.”
“It was just a quick –“
“Don’t tell me the fuckin blow by blow.” By now, Ennis had definitely decided to smile “If I wanted some schoolboy I’d go down an pick somebody off the wrestlin team, but I ain’t.”
I love that phrase: 'Byzantine crapola', - whatever it is!! :)
caramelle58:
After "devouring" the story about Dupree's erotic awakening I'm - again - completely addicted to "Day off". I am enjoying Ellery's sarcastic eloquence and it's always interesting to hear, what to people who eventually get together felt during their first meeting.
Being a detective Ellery know how to interpret people, I wonder how long it takes for him to feel the strong attraction towards the stranger who doesn't smile.
Like it - very much so, thank you
Caramelle
belbbmfan:
you're right Caramelle, Ellery is good a reading people. He knows how far he can go with the questions and knows when Ennis has had enough.
this dialogue is so intens and sad, Ennis's life in only a few words...
“You ever been with a man, Ennis?”
“Yeah – so?”
“So you ain’t wonderin about yourself...”
“No – just wonderin about everybody else. Never met no other queers.”
“So what happened? It didn’t work out? Yer wife find out an kick ya out?”
Ennis went from gray to green. “Got killed.”
“Sorry ta hear it, Ennis. Violence?”
“I dunno, don’t want ta think about... it wasn’t that long ago, if ya don’t mind.”
“Sure, okay.
magicmountain:
--- Quote from: richardg49 on December 18, 2006, 02:26:51 am --- "And there he sat. Keeping his eyes well away from Gene, but when I showed up, givin me an up and down that I felt like a bare hand on my ass."
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Yeah well he sure was gonna feel that bare hand on his ass in the near future that's for sure!
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