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Brokeback Haiku
by - starboardlight 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 16:48:20 )
Repost some of your old ones, make up new ones, what ever. they can't take away what we love.
The taste of his lips
Linger on the cigarette
And I breathe in deep.
Re: Brokeback Haiku
by - momoro 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 16:58:17 )
Here are three of my old ones, followed by a fourth and fifth I came up with yesterday:
Little dog in coat
Gray-white sheep seeking mountain
Blue boy seeking love.
Lightning Flat prairie
Scorched grass sighing in the wind
Weeds will hold my love.
Mouth gaping, blood red
Staining desert sage gully
Love's terrible price.
Shirts entwined, repose
Hidden in trailer corner
Gathering dust, love.
And sleeping, the boys
Gather warmth from their bodies
Clasping chilled fingers.
Nothing compares, I think, when thinking right, to a good friend.
Re: Brokeback Haiku
by - skinheadskippy 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:00:06 )
I tried but mine just aren't any good...I seem to have lost my flair for writing.
An invitation
by - momoro 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:04:07 )
Share them with us anyway...you might be surprised at how effective others might find them. I really loved our old haiku thread--some real gems there.
Nothing compares, I think, when thinking right, to a good friend.
Alright...
by - skinheadskippy 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:27:44 )
UPDATED Tue Mar 28 2006 17:27:57
Joe On The Mountain
One-eyed man sees nought
But what he fears in himself
Pure love in nature
Thanks,...
by - momoro 58 minutes ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:30:17 )
...I liked that! Old man Aguirre tends to get overlooked in these parts, so your contribution was a welcome reminder of his significant presence.
Keep 'em coming, friend.
Nothing compares, I think, when thinking right, to a good friend.
Re: Alright...
by - RouxB 45 minutes ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:43:10 )
Beans beans good for the heart
Elk is better than mutton
Soup boxes is bad to pack
"We're 'sposed a guard the sheep, not eat em."
Re: Brokeback Haiku
by - Ellemeno 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:02:55 )
Tumbling down the hill
They're soaring on mountain air
Brokeback"s all we got
Ellemeno
Re: Brokeback Haiku
by - starboardlight 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:06:48 )
winds of the mountain
rush through me and I hear him
whispering my name.
Re: Brokeback Haiku
by - Shuggy 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:19:23 )
Jack's shirt was outside
loving Ennis. Now his is
outside, loving Jack.
"If you can't stand it, you gotta fix it" and more at www.cafepress.com/ahua/1167379
Re: Brokeback Haiku
by - jmmgallagher 1 hour ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:21:04 )
New one:
You say he kept his
friends' addresses in his head--
ain't where he kept mine.
(Good'uns all. Love ya, truly I do!)
"He's trying really hard, that's who Jack Twist is to me." --Jake Gyllenhaal
Re: Brokeback Haiku
by - jmmgallagher 48 minutes ago (Tue Mar 28 2006 17:39:38 )
Didn't have to ask
ten different people where you
live, you are my soul--
"He's trying really hard, that's who Jack Twist is to me." --Jake Gyllenhaal
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Suddenly I started writing haiku on my phone. It's just the right length for a text message. Here's one I wrote this morning.
Crow calls at dawn…
Soon the rusty screen door will make its
Sweet-salty sound.