BetterMost, Wyoming & Brokeback Mountain Forum
Brokeback Mountain: Our Community's Common Bond => The Lighter Side => Topic started by: Lynne on December 28, 2008, 12:02:14 am
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There is so much talent here at BetterMost - The Performance Thread, Limericks, The Twelve Days of Christmas, illustrated-style!
Can we try a thread where we write Brokeback Sonnets? Please? Pretty please?? ;)
From Wikipedia:
A Shakespearean sonnet consists of 14 lines, each line contains ten syllables, and each line is written in iambic pentameter in which a pattern of a non-emphasized syllable followed by an emphasized syllable is repeated five times. The rhyme scheme in a Shakespearean sonnet is ABAB CDCD EFEF GG, in which the last two lines are a rhyming couplet.
For example:
This example, Shakespeare's Sonnet 116, illustrates the form:
Let me not to the marriage of true minds (a)
Admit impediments, love is not love (b)
Which alters when it alteration finds, (a)
Or bends with the remover to remove. (b)
O no, it is an ever fixed mark (c)
That looks on tempests and is never shaken; (d)
It is the star to every wand'ring bark, (c)
Whose worth's unknown although his height be taken. (d)
Love's not time's fool, though rosy lips and cheeks (e)
Within his bending sickle's compass come, (f)
Love alters not with his brief hours and weeks, (e)
But bears it out even to the edge of doom: (f)
If this be error and upon me proved, (g)
I never writ, nor no man ever loved. (g)
I vote we help each other out with suggestions, etc...if we miss the mark, especially as we're getting started!
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound.
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
After four years apart they finally could see,
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
After four years apart they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
After four years apart they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
After Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough
=aside= Janice - I edited your line 8 slightly to make it fit this iambic pentameter stuff - 10 syllables! This is hard. Please don't hate me! Change it some other way if you want to! I just want to try it the 'right' way a time or two, see if we can do it!
:-* --Lynne
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough
Bitter sweet their love was, from end to start
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough
Bitter sweet their love was, from end to start
Ne'er did a story cause one's heart to wrack
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Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough
Bitter sweet their love was, from end to start
Ne'er did a story cause one's heart to wrack
Love Sublime, Jack and Ennis did not lack.
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=aside=
Janice - I edited your line 8 slightly to make it fit this iambic pentameter stuff - 10 syllables! This is hard. Please don't hate me! Change it some other way if you want to! I just want to try it the 'right' way a time or two, see if we can do it!
Kiss --Lynne
no worries,, Its just a game. :-\
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Lynne, can we do another one, please?
:)
With apologies to Elizabeth Barrett Browning for the first line:
How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
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How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
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How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
Lynne, can we do another one, please?
:)
With apologies to Elizabeth Barrett Browning for the first line:
How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
EBB would be honored! ;)
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How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
To the height, breadth, and width my heart can climb.
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What a great idea, Lynne! (I'm not sure if I have this right, but I'll dip my toe in cautiously .....)
How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
To the height, breadth, and width my heart can climb.
His lips so full, his hair like a raven
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What a great idea, Lynne! (I'm not sure if I have this right, but I'll dip my toe in cautiously .....)
Thanks! You got it!
How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
To the height, breadth, and width my heart can climb.
His lips so full, his hair like a raven
Clumsy, awkward, yet in glorious in youth
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How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
To the height, breadth, and width my heart can climb.
His lips so full, his hair like a raven
Clumsy, awkward, yet in glorious in youth
His strong embrace provides a safe haven
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How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
To the height, breadth, and width my heart can climb.
His lips so full, his hair like a raven
Clumsy, awkward, yet in glorious in youth
His strong embrace provides a safe haven
We were spied on by such hidden uncouth
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How do I love Jack? Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
To the height, breadth, and width my heart can climb.
His lips so full, his hair like a raven
Clumsy, awkward, yet in glorious in youth
His strong embrace provides a safe haven
We were spied on by such hidden uncouth
There, frustration so intense dare we look