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Hero by Clyde-B
« on: October 08, 2007, 08:01:57 pm »
Hi, I was asked to repost this story.  It's only ten parts and originally appeared in the Drabble thread.

It didn't have a title there, but I named it Hero for a couple of reasons.

As a gay kid, I grew up on borrowed heroes.  Most people thought that the idea of a gay man being heroic was laughable.  I didn't.  I was too young and too naive to realize that gay heroes were simply suffering the same fate as other minority heroes - pretending they don't exist.

Since there are so many gays in literature and the movie industry, I had hoped the situation would be rectified by now, but it isn't  So I decided to write my own.  Like everybody else, gay kids need their heroes too.

It's also the title of an Enrique Iglesias song.  He became one of my heroes when he picked a cute young gay kid out of the audience to sing this song to at London's G.A.Y. club.  Not many straight male singers would have the guts or the compassion to do that.

Comments, suggestions, etc. at the end of this thread or by PM are welcome.

Thanks

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #1 on: October 08, 2007, 08:21:01 pm »

     A long hot drive home.  Jack, happy he’d decided.  Paper clipped to his invoices a card to Ennis.
     The towtruck from the last gas station barrelled past him and pulled across the road perpendicular to the ditch.  Why the roadblock?  Jack slowed to a stop.  The grizzled old mechanic walked toward him; he had a tire iron in his right fist nervously beating it against his left palm.
    Jack rolled down his window.  “There a problem?”
    “Get out the vehicle.”
     Jack froze, paralyzed.  Something wasn’t right.  “I said, there a problem here?”
     “And I said, get out a your vehicle.”   


      100 words

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« Reply #2 on: October 08, 2007, 08:22:21 pm »

     The wind slammed the metal side of the trailer, seeped in around aluminum frames and rattled windows and door.  Ennis, soaked in sweat, tossed and turned on greasy sheets.  “Jack... Jack...”

    “Twist residence, Lureen speakin.”
    “You should a kept that bullrider a yours in his own bed.”   Lureen shivered, the voice from the receiver didn’t even sound human.
    “Who is this?  Hello? Hello?”
     The line clicked, went dead.

     A stranger in a rusted pickup pulled behind Jack.  Now there was no escape.  No safe haven.  Maybe the abandoned grain silo on the rocky knoll.  The mechanic reached for Jack’s door.

     
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« Reply #3 on: October 08, 2007, 08:23:22 pm »

    Out of the truck, Jack stood tall, a good half foot taller than the mechanic. “This here’s a fine kettle a fish.  Just what the hell’s your problem?”
    They were three against one.
    The mechanic moved in close palming the tire iron.  “Don’t suffer your kind around here.”
     Jack smiled, turned on the charm.  “I sell tractors.  You got somethin against tractor salesmen?”
     nobody laughed.
     The stocky one yelled, “We gone a fish or cut bait?”
    Jack glanced at the silo trying to gauge the distance.
    The mechanic sneered a gap-toothed grin.  “Planin on bein the one that got away?”


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« Reply #4 on: October 08, 2007, 08:24:23 pm »

     Supper ended, Jack wasn’t home.  That phone call had unnerved Lureen.  She fidgeted, raised the receiver, dialed.
    “LaShawn?  This’s Lureen.  What?  No, honey I’ve not tried that pumpkin pie recipe yet.   What?  Yes, Bobby’s piano recital’s next week.”
     Dammit LaShawn, you chatter like a squirrel.
    “Listen honey, this’s important.  Is Randall there?  He is?  Jack’s not home yet, I’m half frantic.  Would you ask him if he knows where Jack is?”

     Over Jack’s shoulder, in the bed of his own truck, a new voice, “Better cancel them retirement plans.”  Jack spun around.  Behind him, the mechanic raised the tire iron.


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« Reply #5 on: October 08, 2007, 08:25:17 pm »

    In a blood red sunset, like an evil talisman, the tire iron cut a cruel arc.

    “NOOOOOOO!!!!!!”

     A shot echoed, ricocheted off the descending metal, the mechanic’s blow deflected, smashed the knee of the ugly one in Jack’s pickup.  A scream, a loud snap, Ugly pitched face-first into the truck bed.
      Jack wrenched the tire iron free.
      The mechanic pulled a gun.  His eyes darted along the horizon searching for the shooter.
      In the silo’s shadow pawed a chestnut stallion with a silver blaze, its rider cocked his .30-.30.  “Believe I’d drop that pistol.  Your horseshoe ain’t that lucky.”


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« Reply #6 on: October 08, 2007, 08:26:26 pm »

    The rider and his mount ambled closer, .30-.30 aimed squarely at the mechanic and his stocky cohort.  “I got two bullets.  You got two minutes.  Don’t forget your ugly friend.”

    In the emergency room she sat twisting her handkerchief.  The young intern wearing the Kokopelli t-shirt under his lab coat stooped down.
    “Will he be okay?”
    “He’s stable and resting.”
    “But will he be okay?”
    “We also found a bleeding ulcer.  It’s a treatable H. pylori infection, but the blood loss isn’t helping.”  Her eyes searched his.  “If the planets in alignment and we catch a little luck... maybe.”



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« Reply #7 on: October 08, 2007, 08:27:51 pm »

     Waiting for the night nurse, she went through his things.
      His shopping list:
      a gallon of milk
      a gallon of paint
      a gallon of gas
     She smiled.  It was just like him.
     His mail: An old advertising postcard?

      Only Jack and the rider remained.
      The rider dismounted.  “They was gone a kill you.  If you’d a been alone.”  He looked haunted.  A long ago transgression he couldn’t forgive himself.  His eyes filled with tears.  “but I saved you...”   
     Jack’s arms enfolded him.  “Was never no doubt, Ennis.  Didn’t we always know you would have?”   He stroked Ennis’s hair.  “S’alright...  S’alright.”



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« Reply #8 on: October 08, 2007, 08:28:52 pm »

     Jack gave the rider a lingering kiss worthy of a hero succeeding an impossible quest.
     “Remember July 20, 1969?”
     “Ennis, you don’t remember dates.”
     “Don’t never forget a good kiss.”  They laughed.
      With the back of his hand Jack caressed Ennis’s cheek.  “I have to go now.”
     “I’ll go with you.”
     “You can’t... not yet.  It’s not your time.”
      The wind ruffled Ennis’s hair.  The rushing in his ears grew deafening.  The horizon blazed unnatural bright, Jack’s outline wavered, shimmered, glowed until all Ennis could see was blinding white.

        “Jack!  Wait!”

       “Daddy?  Daddy?  Jenny, get the doctor Daddy’s wakin up.”



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« Reply #9 on: October 08, 2007, 08:29:43 pm »

       “Where am I?  Am I dead?”
          A brilliant white hospital room, the doctor bending close, Junior standing, looking harried.
         “Mr. del Mar, we thought we’d lost you.”
         “Wouldn’t take me.  Tit for tat, I guess... maybe when hell freezes over.”
         “Daddy We was so worried.”
         “Had the damndest dream.”  Ennis smiled.  “M’friend Jack, alive again.”  He grew wistful.  “Thought he forgave me, maybe we could start from scratch, but... wasn’t real.”  He sighed.
          Something brightly colored on the nightstand caught his eye.
         “What’s that?”
         “Just a advertisement.  Came in your mail.”
          Ennis knew Jack Twist’s handwriting when he saw it.
       

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« Reply #10 on: October 08, 2007, 08:30:40 pm »

     “Holy Sabbath!”  As Ennis read he laughed, he cried.
     Tiny print under Ennis’s address:  Found this postcard clipped to Jack’s last invoice.  It belongs with you.  Lureen
     On the front: the biggest cheese doodle yellow combine Ennis had ever seen.  A banner proclaiming ‘Newsome Farm Equipment’s Best Seller.’   Next to it, proud as punch, in his Resistol, leather jacket and bolo tie, smiled Jack Twist.  Ennis touched Jack’s cheek as though it were more than printed cardboard.
     On the back:  Cant hardly wait to see you again.  Still mad about August, but there’ll be more.  I’ll always be there.  Jack


      100 words






          Well, we’re back where we started at the very first line, we know what Jack decided and his postcard has been delivered, so my little story has come to its end.
          I hope you can forgive me for letting you think Jack was still alive, but if I did my job, I left Ennis willing to fight for those he loves, believing he just might win, knowing for sure that it was him and not somebody else that Jack loved, and thinking that maybe, just maybe, they really will be together again.

CB

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #11 on: October 08, 2007, 10:59:49 pm »
I loved this when I read it the first time, and feel just the same now. Wonderful story. Thank you so much for giving us the chance to read it like this.

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     ...if I did my job, I left Ennis willing to fight for those he loves, believing he just might win, knowing for sure that it was him and not somebody else that Jack loved, and thinking that maybe, just maybe, they really will be together again.
You did.
on the mountain flying in the euphoric, bitter air

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« Reply #12 on: October 09, 2007, 07:58:45 am »
I loved this when I read it the first time, and feel just the same now. Wonderful story. Thank you so much for giving us the chance to read it like this.
You did.

Thanks Fern,

I love reading your stuff too!  I admire your nice smooth delivery.  Makes reading them like sliding downhill.

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« Reply #13 on: October 09, 2007, 09:06:27 pm »
Great to see this thread, Clyde!  The drabbles flow together beautifully. You and I see Ennis exactly the same way - and want the same things for him. 

Thanks,
Marie
The measure of a country's greatness is its ability to retain compassion in times of crisis         ~~~~~~~~~Thurgood Marshall

The worst loneliness is not to be comfortable with yourself.    ~~~~~~~~~ Mark Twain

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« Reply #14 on: October 10, 2007, 08:26:11 am »
Great to see this thread, Clyde!  The drabbles flow together beautifully. You and I see Ennis exactly the same way - and want the same things for him. 

Thanks,
Marie

Thanks Marie,
Your generous encouragement helps me to keep at it.

Ennis seems like an old friend, doesn't he?  Sometimes it's hard to believe he's not real.

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« Reply #15 on: October 10, 2007, 01:39:54 pm »
......Sometimes it's hard to believe he's not real.

SAY WHAT??   ;D

Marie
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« Reply #16 on: October 16, 2007, 12:49:06 am »
     “Holy Sabbath!”  As Ennis read he laughed, he cried.
     Tiny print under Ennis’s address:  Found this postcard clipped to Jack’s last invoice.  It belongs with you.  Lureen
     On the front: the biggest cheese doodle yellow combine Ennis had ever seen.  A banner proclaiming ‘Newsome Farm Equipment’s Best Seller.’   Next to it, proud as punch, in his Resistol, leather jacket and bolo tie, smiled Jack Twist.  Ennis touched Jack’s cheek as though it were more than printed cardboard.
     On the back:  Cant hardly wait to see you again.  Still mad about August, but there’ll be more.  I’ll always be there.  Jack


      100 words






          Well, we’re back where we started at the very first line, we know what Jack decided and his postcard has been delivered, so my little story has come to its end.
          I hope you can forgive me for letting you think Jack was still alive, but if I did my job, I left Ennis willing to fight for those he loves, believing he just might win, knowing for sure that it was him and not somebody else that Jack loved, and thinking that maybe, just maybe, they really will be together again.

CB

Clyde, how did I miss this?  I really have to look around more!  :laugh: Anyway, beautiful writing, my friend.  I loved reading every word!  I especially like this:

Ennis touched Jack’s cheek as though it were more than printed cardboard.
     On the back:  Cant hardly wait to see you again.  Still mad about August, but there’ll be more.  I’ll always be there.  Jack


I never believed Jack gave up on Ennis.  Thanks for this, Clyde!

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« Reply #17 on: November 07, 2007, 12:22:38 am »
Hi Clyde.  I just found this.  You are a master of the 100 word drabble, and this series is very compelling.  Thanks for posting your series here together.  And I hope that you come back to the BBM boards very soon.  I misss your presence and your posts.

Gary

I second this, Gary!  I really miss you, Clyde.  Come back to us!

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« Reply #18 on: November 08, 2007, 10:18:31 pm »
Evenin'.

Well, how are you, Clyde? Miss your posting here, and miss reading the Wylie/Ennis drabbles which I think of as chronicles.  Would sure like to read what has happened since Ennis woke up naked with that hangover and headed down to breakfast! 

Then again, here I am asking for an update when mine is way overdue!! Difference in being a reader and not the writer of the story. 

Hope to hear from you soon.

Thanks again. 

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« Reply #19 on: November 10, 2007, 02:31:34 pm »
I love your drabble series, Mr Clyde-B. Very original and compelling.
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