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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #10 on: December 28, 2008, 10:34:31 am »




Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
After four years apart they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart



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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #11 on: December 28, 2008, 03:34:23 pm »
Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
After Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough


=aside=  Janice - I edited your line 8 slightly to make it fit this iambic pentameter stuff - 10 syllables!  This is hard.  Please don't hate me!  Change it some other way if you want to!  I just want to try it the 'right' way a time or two, see if we can do it!
 :-* --Lynne
"Laß sein. Laß sein."

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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #12 on: December 28, 2008, 06:46:10 pm »
Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough
Bitter sweet their love was, from end to start


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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #13 on: December 28, 2008, 07:32:21 pm »
Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough
Bitter sweet their love was, from end to start
Ne'er did a story cause one's heart to wrack

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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #14 on: December 28, 2008, 10:41:37 pm »

Up on Brokeback, alone, for one full moon
Where two cowboys once made sweet blissful love
Their time together ended much too soon
'Twixt passion's flame and fond cooing blithe dove
Ne'er spoke o' loves true name or gave it sound
For their love was true, as true it can be
And it was truly rare, the love they found
Four years apart, they finally could see
True love's ecstasy was theirs sure enough
They tendered the flames of campfire and heart
Alone, apart was exceedingly rough
Bitter sweet their love was, from end to start
Ne'er did a story cause one's heart to wrack
Love Sublime, Jack and Ennis did not lack.
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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #15 on: December 29, 2008, 12:19:12 am »



=aside=
Janice - I edited your line 8 slightly to make it fit this iambic pentameter stuff - 10 syllables!  This is hard.  Please don't hate me!  Change it some other way if you want to!  I just want to try it the 'right' way a time or two, see if we can do it!
 Kiss --Lynne

no worries,, Its just a game. :-\



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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #16 on: December 29, 2008, 05:50:10 am »
Lynne, can we do another one, please?

:)

With apologies to Elizabeth Barrett Browning for the first line:


How do I love Jack?  Let me count the ways.

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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #17 on: December 29, 2008, 08:23:06 am »

How do I love Jack?  Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #18 on: December 29, 2008, 09:18:52 am »
How do I love Jack?  Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze


Lynne, can we do another one, please?

:)

With apologies to Elizabeth Barrett Browning for the first line:


How do I love Jack?  Let me count the ways.

EBB would be honored!  ;)
"Laß sein. Laß sein."

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Re: Let's Write Brokeback Sonnets!
« Reply #19 on: December 29, 2008, 06:02:11 pm »


How do I love Jack?  Let me count the ways.
His radiant countenance, so sublime
The depths of the seas at home in his gaze
To the height, breadth, and width my heart can climb.
« Last Edit: December 29, 2008, 06:53:52 pm by Lynne »



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