Author Topic: Ennis's second visit to the Twist ranch  (Read 7851 times)

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Re: Ennis's second visit to the Twist ranch
« Reply #10 on: January 02, 2009, 10:47:37 pm »
Marc,

Good to see you here at Bettermost friend.  This story is a masterpiece.  It's truly excellent!  Thank you for writing it.  :-*

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Re: Ennis's second visit to the Twist ranch
« Reply #11 on: May 15, 2009, 12:52:26 pm »
I just tweaked the story to delete Ennis's use of the f-word.  Two readers said it bothered them that Ennis would say that in Jack's mother's presence, and that persuaded me I'd made a mistake.

And it gave me an opportunity to fix something that had bothered me.  The conversation where the f-word occurred was critical to the story, because it's where Ennis unwittingly reveals his love for Jack.  But I didni't think it was revealing enough leading up to Ennis realizing what he has said.  So I moved and edited the f-word sentence to address that problem.

This is probably too detailed to mean much to anyone except the author.  But let me thank readers to helping me improve the story.

The story still make me cry.