Author Topic: Dreaming by Cathalin  (Read 44983 times)

Offline welliwont

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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #30 on: August 11, 2006, 01:57:41 am »
Ha, you an me both Milli!  We are kindred spirits, both Albertans an all....   :D  I think that is the sweetest hottest love scene....  :-* :-*

Yeehaww!!   ;D ;D
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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #31 on: August 11, 2006, 02:09:48 am »
SPOILER ALERT................CHAPTER 12.............. ;)









AN EXCERPT:

Jack was still laughin’ when he started to strip off Ennis’ clothes, once in a while sayin’ “hard and fast,” and once Ennis said, “good thing fer me,” and then Jack dipped in ta’ lick where he’d unbuttoned Ennis’ shirt and Ennis couldn’t talk no more.

Ennis kept reachin’ for Jack, but he swatted his hands away, focused on each button, then licked where Ennis’ shirt parted and left an inch or two of skin showin’. He worked his way down slow, till all the buttons were open, then licked, all the way back up to Ennis’ neck, lickin’ there, then suckin’ on his neck. Ennis arched up into Jack’s mouth, ran his hands soft on Jack’s arms.

Jack was pullin’ the shirt to the sides, slow, and the fabric scrapin’ soft over his nipples made him shiver, somethin’ Jack spotted, ‘cause he leaned down to run that wicked tongue ‘round and over first one, then the other.

Ennis was thrustin’ into the air now, writhin’ under that tongue. Jack’s voice, hoarse with desire, said, “You always liked that,” and Ennis remembered wrestlin’ in the sun, Jack pinnin’ him down and playin’ with his nipples, Ennis never able ta’ admit what it did ta’’ him.

Now he could admit it, so he moaned “Jack,” and somethin’ changed in Jack at Ennis’ tone of voice, and he wasn’t playin’ around any more. He stripped Ennis’ shirt off him fast, fumbled with Ennis’ belt, but Ennis reached down, strippin’ his pants and shorts off quick, sayin’ “take off yer clothes, Jack.”

Then they was naked and Jack was lickin’ Ennis startin’ down at his ankle, lickin’ slow up one leg, sometimes movin’ over to the other. Ennis kept reachin’ with his hands, dyin’ to feel Jack’s skin, but he was too far away. He tried to sit up to reach for him, but Jack pressed a hand firm on his belly, pushin’ him down, said “lie down” and Ennis did.


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Hawt damn..and it only gets better from there too .. ;D



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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #32 on: August 11, 2006, 02:29:26 am »
Goodness, ladies, if I had know you wanted scenes like that.....

Well, it would have required Dee's cooperation. :)
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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #33 on: August 11, 2006, 03:41:26 am »
I don't really like the premise of HI and TCJ,

And I didn't like the premise of "Dreaming", but loved the story anyway  :)

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And I love the ending of the first chapter of OTB: Jack just sitting there and taking it all in. On Brokebackslash maidenofthesea announced that the fourth chapter of OTB will be posted sometimes this weekend. Yeah  :)

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Re: ***S P O I L E R S *** Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #34 on: August 11, 2006, 03:51:36 am »
****SPOILERS for Dreaming in this post***

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Chapter 13 and 14 brought me down a little, and sad to say that there are only two chapters left to come, and then an epilogue.  I thoulght it was sweet how Jack phoned from the road, and was oh so scared that Ennis was gonna pack it in and he was so vulnerable to his Ma, and she in turn was so sweet to Ennis.   :-*  That part was good.  But the twist after that, on Jack's part, hmmm,  I hope things torque back pretty damn quick!

J


I second every thought of you. Jack calling from the road was so sweet. The girl's visit was great, but the twist after that was a downer.
It's hard to wait nearly a full month for the next installment. I'd prefer to read one chapter every two weeks instead of two chapters once a month. But sure this decicion is to cathalin and I won't complain.

Yes, it's sad that there are only two chapters plus an epilogue left.

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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #35 on: August 11, 2006, 09:40:28 am »
That excerpt.... damn.  So so good... it makes me want to read the whole thing over again ...
‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #36 on: August 11, 2006, 05:29:26 pm »
Hi y'all! I'm jumping in a bit late here, but I found out about this forum only yesterday. Very friendly and literate--I love it already! (Thanks, julievognar.)

I'm honored to be mentioned in a thread about Dreaming, one of those stories I WILL give the attentive reading it deserves. But I do know from what I've read that not only is Cathalin a damn good writer, but she knows how to do HOT too! She really gets inside Jack and Ennis' skin, gets down to the tactile details that make sex scenes between the two guys real, doesn't she?

Otherwise, I'm real impressed by many of the stories--and yes, sex scenes--that are written by women. Some get inside the male characters' heads better than others, and frankly some stories may not even require that they do. Maybe some of the action isn't drawn out or very exciting, no semen hitting the wall and all that, yet the erotica is touching and lovely. Obviously there are endless possibilities as to how writers continue the story and present their ideas.

It's great that a number of readers like how I handle Jack and Ennis' relationship, especially since I'm a canon writer, and that turns a lot of people off. For me, the beauty of the story is in their ultimate separation and Ennis' bereavement. Don't ask, but if you read my stories, you know that pain leads to pleasure. I've internalized both men and sometimes feel I'm writing an autobiography, not only physically as a man (a lot of fun, thank you), but psychologically too (maybe even more fun). I usually try to put character before plot, but sometimes I miss.

Concerning Fanfiction.net vs. LiveJournal: FF's no NC-17 policy threw me off at first, and I thought WTF? But I tried editing to see what would happen. First, a confession: I also write as "rvanv", my persona (presently inactive) who writes stories about Jack's death or later, while "belgianboy" writes the boys while they are very much alive indeed! I suppose it's telling that belgianboy has the reputation here, huh? ;) I edited an rvanv story called Smile (my first series) for FF. I think the plot and personalities are reasonably well developed, the sex not too bad for a first-timer like myself. Anyway, in the FF version, you can't always tell who is doing what to whom during sex. In the original LiveJournal version, nothing is left to the imagination. If you don't like NC-17 (or shouldn't be reading it!), read the FF version.

I wanted to post Summer of Love on FF, but how do you edit a series about two horny nineteen-year-olds discovering sex, what with all that jizz flying around here, there and everywhere? I gave it a go anyway, and to my surprise came up with something reasonably sexy, I think. So much is about the psychology, and I was surprised at how much I didn't have to change. But if you want it down and dirty, go to LiveJournal. Right now, the story is posted there in seven chapters, but I'm going to combine them soon. Ditto for the Reunion series that I just finished.

Veteran fans, thanks so much for your comments. I'm tickled that some new readers from this fine forum may be wandering over!  :)

Belgianboy

P.S. My apologies, Cathalin, for taking up so much space in the Dreaming thread. It just seemed the best place to address the comments about my own work that have been posted here recently. 


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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #37 on: August 12, 2006, 01:29:43 am »
Hey BelgianBoy!  Welcome to Bettermost!!  :D
There is also a thread created by JakeTwist, dedicated to your work!

Now we gotta get Cathalin here too! :)



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« Reply #38 on: August 12, 2006, 01:23:41 pm »

these are the Real Deal  people, about our beloved Jack and Ennis, about the time they truly were together!!

I would like to clarify this comment in case it is taken the wrong way, and perhaps people might feel slighted.  My praise for Belgianboy's writing is about Belgianboy's writing only.  I was not implying that his writing is the Real Deal, ergo other BBM fiction is not the Real Deal.  Not in the least.  I appreciate almost all BBM fanfic, (except the dark stuff, I don't like dark or supernatural or devil stuff, but that is way off the topic here, LOL.   :)).

I usually always write very literally, and my sentence was meant to be a self-contained sentence, so to speak.  The first half of the sentence "Real Deal" is further explained by the second half of the sentence "about our beloved Jack and Ennis, about the time they truly were together".  Nothing else.  Nothing else is implied.

This post was solely about Belgianboy's writing, to bring it to the attention of my fellow Brokies who like to read fanfic.  I posted it first in the "Dreaming" thread, then I created a Belgianboy thread where it would be more appropriate.  I am gonna delete it from the Dreaming thread I guess... or not....

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Re: Dreaming by Cathalin
« Reply #39 on: August 12, 2006, 08:20:11 pm »
Jane, I never thought you were trying to slight anyone's work.  No worries .. ;)