Author Topic: That Little Bit of Hope, Chapter 17 up! (Read 48702 times)

littleguitar · « **on:** August 09, 2006, 10:47:12 pm »

Ok guys, you asked for it (well, one of you did anyway

). I must be going insane because I've decided to not only write a little fan fic, but to post it over here where anyone can read it $:-\$

Anyway, here it is, it's an AU and it picks up after Ennis turns Jack away when he drives up after the divorce. So far it's very Jack heavy and it will most likely stay in mainly Jack's point of view. It's only two chapters so far and I've planned nothing, so I'm not sure how long it will be. You can find all chapters and info on updates in my live journal here

http://minchout.livejournal.com/

or posted on Brokebackslash.

Comments always welcome (even the harsh ones...) I hope you enjoy!

notBastet · « **Reply #1 on:** August 10, 2006, 12:02:09 am »

Hi,

Thanks for posting the link to your story! I left a comment over on LJ.
Looking forward to future updates,
Kelly (ky77ccL on LJ)

MaineWriter · « **Reply #2 on:** August 10, 2006, 06:16:47 am »

Mandy--

Nice start. Keep going, okay? I want to see what happens next...

Leslie

mvansand76 · « **Reply #3 on:** August 10, 2006, 07:09:15 am »

I think I asked you for it, and I am glad I did! I have saved the two chapters on my computer and will read then asap! Thanks for posting!

Mel

littleguitar · « **Reply #4 on:** August 10, 2006, 06:40:29 pm »

Thanks guys! I'll let you know when the next chapter is up...

mvansand76 · « **Reply #5 on:** August 11, 2006, 10:19:22 am »

I read it just now, and I liked it, wondering where this will go (good thing!) and if I really want Bobby to be exposed to tirant John Twist, maybe that's a good reason for Ennis to offer them a place to stay?

littleguitar · « **Reply #6 on:** August 20, 2006, 08:39:00 pm »

Just wanted to let those who are interested know that I should be updating this tomorrow (tuesday at the latest). Sorry it's taken me so long, been working a lot of double shifts lately...

Anyway, thanks for all the comments, I hope you keep reading

mvansand76 · « **Reply #7 on:** August 21, 2006, 07:00:26 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on August 20, 2006, 08:39:00 pm

Anyway, thanks for all the comments, I hope you keep reading

Definitely!!!

Penthesilea · « **Reply #8 on:** August 21, 2006, 03:01:28 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on August 20, 2006, 08:39:00 pm

Anyway, thanks for all the comments, I hope you keep reading

Yep!

I think I haven't commented yet. But I like it and sure will keep on reading.

littleguitar · « **Reply #9 on:** August 22, 2006, 10:32:41 pm »

ok, I know I said I'd update by tonight but some personal stuff got in the way... I'm really sorry! Hopefully the next chapter will be up tomorrow...

meanwhile, I'm going to go read the new chapter of LMtoYD

mvansand76 · « **Reply #10 on:** August 23, 2006, 06:55:05 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on August 22, 2006, 10:32:41 pm

ok, I know I said I'd update by tonight but some personal stuff got in the way... I'm really sorry! Hopefully the next chapter will be up tomorrow...

meanwhile, I'm going to go read the new chapter of LMtoYD

Yeeeeeh! Me too...

littleguitar · « **Reply #11 on:** August 25, 2006, 12:00:21 am »

Chapter 3 finally up!

you can find it a Brokebackslash on Livejournal or at my own journal here:

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

That link goes directly to my tagged entries, so you don't have to search through everything else to find previous chapters

Penthesilea · « **Reply #12 on:** August 25, 2006, 04:22:28 pm »

Thanks for updating. I read and enjoyed it this morning.

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“You goin’ to Lightnin’ Flat tomorrow, Jack?”

“Unless you say somethin’ different, then I guess I got no choice.”

Ennis said nothing for a real long time. Then, just as Jack was falling asleep, he said, “I really am sorry, bud.”

Oh please, let this stubborn mule do the right thing this time.

notBastet · « **Reply #13 on:** August 25, 2006, 05:01:03 pm »

lol penthesilea. love the stubborn mule comment.

littleguitar · « **Reply #14 on:** August 25, 2006, 09:39:11 pm »

lol, stubborn mule is right... Thanks for reading guys!

littleguitar · « **Reply #15 on:** September 05, 2006, 05:41:54 pm »

Chapter 4 up! all can be found here at my LJ

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

Thanks for reading, comments always welcome!

notBastet · « **Reply #16 on:** September 05, 2006, 09:29:01 pm »

Thanks for the update! I thought it was a great change of pace, finally a "little bit of hope." Ennis living on the edge just a little there at the end...

mvansand76 · « **Reply #17 on:** September 06, 2006, 04:40:55 pm »

That was great, I honestly hope that little Bobby will not have to be exposed to evil John Twist....

Penthesilea · « **Reply #18 on:** September 06, 2006, 04:55:40 pm »

Yay, an update

I left a comment in your journal.

littleguitar · « **Reply #19 on:** September 06, 2006, 11:24:30 pm »

thanks for the comments everyone, as always they are much appreciated

littleguitar · « **Reply #20 on:** September 16, 2006, 12:16:01 am »

Ok, I know I told some that I'd be updating tonight... I'm really sorry that I haven't yet, things got crazy at work the last week or so... I hope to update by sunday, monday at the absolute latest!

littleguitar · « **Reply #21 on:** September 19, 2006, 06:19:30 pm »

A few people have asked me when I will be posting the next chapter... I know it's been a while $:-\$

I plan on posting either late tonight or early tomorrow evening, I'm really sorry it's taken so long, work has been insane!

Thanks again for reading and all updates and info on updates can always be found at my LJ here

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

RouxB · « **Reply #22 on:** September 19, 2006, 11:29:40 pm »

Mandster,

U R A tease...

littleguitar · « **Reply #23 on:** September 20, 2006, 09:29:44 am »

LOL don't I know it....

blame it on Lori for posting a new chapter of Two Crows Joy... and Maiden of the Sea for Over the Bridge... and oh wait, we should probably add Helen in there for Modern Way... oops.

I'm working on it I swear!

notBastet · « **Reply #24 on:** September 20, 2006, 07:42:02 pm »

lol, mandy...

littleguitar · « **Reply #25 on:** September 23, 2006, 12:46:15 am »

Chapter 5 up

Sorry about the wait!

All chapters can be found here:

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

mvansand76 · « **Reply #26 on:** September 24, 2006, 12:13:43 pm »

Hi Mandy! You're getting better with every chapter! This is great! I love your style of writing and your dialogue is excellent! I feel so sorry for Jack, he seems so sad! I hope he will become more responsible towards his little boy, though! Maybe once Ennis makes up his mind?

littleguitar · « **Reply #27 on:** September 24, 2006, 02:49:11 pm »

Quote from: mvansand76 on September 24, 2006, 12:13:43 pm

Hi Mandy! You're getting better with every chapter! This is great! I love your style of writing and your dialogue is excellent! I feel so sorry for Jack, he seems so sad! I hope he will become more responsible towards his little boy, though! Maybe once Ennis makes up his mind?

Thanks! I'm glad you said that, because I was worried with this chapter...

re: Jack becoming more responsible towards Bobby... I think after this chapter I decided that that's one of the things I'm going to try and take on with this fic, Jack learning how to be a good father. In my mind, though Bobby practically worships Jack, Jack has most likely been absent for much of the kid's life and now he's being forced to take an interest and he's finding it both amazing and incredibly frustrating and he's realzing how little he knows. And really, he's got his own problems to contend with before he can become a good father to Bobby... just a few thoughts. This last chapter didn't go in the direction I had planned and it gave me a lot to work with

Bigheart · « **Reply #28 on:** September 24, 2006, 03:30:04 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on September 24, 2006, 02:49:11 pm

Thanks! I'm glad you said that, because I was worried with this chapter...

re: Jack becoming more responsible towards Bobby... I think after this chapter I decided that that's one of the things I'm going to try and take on with this fic, Jack learning how to be a good father. In my mind, though Bobby practically worships Jack, Jack has most likely been absent for much of the kid's life and now he's being forced to take an interest and he's finding it both amazing and incredibly frustrating and he's realzing how little he knows. And really, he's got his own problems to contend with before he can become a good father to Bobby... just a few thoughts. This last chapter didn't go in the direction I had planned and it gave me a lot to work with

I'm looking forward to reading about Jack and Bobby. I enjoyed it in this last update.

About those pics Mandy, Helen posted a whole lot of pics from our trip to the US and Canada on her LJ, I think Ennis's little house is on it. I've only got a few on my LJ so far

littleguitar · « **Reply #29 on:** September 24, 2006, 10:05:52 pm »

Quote from: Bigheart on September 24, 2006, 03:30:04 pm

I'm looking forward to reading about Jack and Bobby. I enjoyed it in this last update.

About those pics Mandy, Helen posted a whole lot of pics from our trip to the US and Canada on her LJ, I think Ennis's little house is on it. I've only got a few on my LJ so far

Thanks June! I'll have to check them out...

notBastet · « **Reply #30 on:** September 25, 2006, 11:05:15 pm »

Hi Mandy,

I'd like to see Jack mature as a father, too... I felt so bad for Bobby, the way Jack seemed to sort of brush him off... And, like, does Ennis ever talk to Bobby?

No beans about it (hah hah), they're in a tough spot - all of them!

Just a follow up comment from LJ re: melodrama - well, imo, life can be melodramatic sometimes! I can see why you would worry about that, but, as the bumper stickers says, "Sh%t happens!"

lol

Bigheart · « **Reply #31 on:** September 26, 2006, 03:36:47 am »

Quote from: notBastet on September 25, 2006, 11:05:15 pm

Hi Mandy,

I'd like to see Jack mature as a father, too... I felt so bad for Bobby, the way Jack seemed to sort of brush him off... And, like, does Ennis ever talk to Bobby?

No beans about it (hah hah), they're in a tough spot - all of them!

Just a follow up comment from LJ re: melodrama - well, imo, life can be melodramatic sometimes! I can see why you would worry about that, but, as the bumper stickers says, "Sh%t happens!"

lol

LOL to the Ennis remark!!
It's true though!

littleguitar · « **Reply #32 on:** September 26, 2006, 09:03:11 am »

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And, like, does Ennis ever talk to Bobby?

um, hmmm good point $:-\$

LOL, I'll work on it...

notBastet · « **Reply #33 on:** September 26, 2006, 10:47:30 pm »

Mandy, you mean Ennis will work on it, right?

LOL. Seriously though, I can see Ennis just sorta watching Jack talk to Bobby and not knowing what to say... Bobby is somewhat of an enigma to me right now... I loved the bits of personality coming out of him in the last chapter, and I look forward to learning more!

nB

littleguitar · « **Reply #34 on:** September 28, 2006, 10:27:44 pm »

Update! Holy shit...

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

mvansand76 · « **Reply #35 on:** September 30, 2006, 03:14:24 am »

Oh no! Poor Bobby!

And are you bringing them up to the Twist ranch now? To Jack's dad? Oh no? Poor Bobby!

littleguitar · « **Reply #36 on:** October 04, 2006, 08:59:11 pm »

Update

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

Enjoy! Please comment!

mvansand76 · « **Reply #37 on:** October 07, 2006, 03:19:29 am »

That was great, thanks for posting. Wondering how Ennis is going to cope with a father in law like John Twist sr. though... Could be interesting...

littleguitar · « **Reply #38 on:** October 07, 2006, 07:04:09 pm »

Quote from: mvansand76 on October 07, 2006, 03:19:29 am

That was great, thanks for posting. Wondering how Ennis is going to cope with a father in law like John Twist sr. though... Could be interesting...

Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it! Yep, John Twist Sr. coming right up... it should be interesting

littleguitar · « **Reply #39 on:** October 08, 2006, 10:11:45 pm »

Chapter 8 up!

A bit angsty

Sorry!

here's the link to this and all previous

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

Bigheart · « **Reply #40 on:** October 09, 2006, 05:47:03 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 08, 2006, 10:11:45 pm

Chapter 8 up!

A bit angsty Sorry!

here's the link to this and all previous

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

So soon! Wow! Great!

*worried about the angsty stuff but rushes off to read anyway*

mvansand76 · « **Reply #41 on:** October 09, 2006, 06:46:10 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 08, 2006, 10:11:45 pm

Chapter 8 up!

A bit angsty Sorry!

here's the link to this and all previous

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

Great!

If you and other writers on here go on like this, bookstores will notice a serious decline in sales...

littleguitar · « **Reply #42 on:** October 09, 2006, 10:12:24 am »

Quote from: mvansand76 on October 09, 2006, 06:46:10 am

Great! If you and other writers on here go on like this, bookstores will notice a serious decline in sales...

LOL no joke, I've only finished two "real" books in the past four months... $:-\$

But I love it anyway

mvansand76 · « **Reply #43 on:** October 09, 2006, 10:18:55 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 09, 2006, 10:12:24 am

LOL no joke, I've only finished two "real" books in the past four months... $:-\$

But I love it anyway

I have five books on my nightstand, and they've been lying there for three months. I AM reading Bill Bryson's "A short history of nearly everything", which is a great recommendation for the era that will be known as post-BBM fanfiction. If there will ever be such a thing.

Bigheart · « **Reply #44 on:** October 09, 2006, 05:37:26 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 08, 2006, 10:11:45 pm

Chapter 8 up!

A bit angsty Sorry!

here's the link to this and all previous

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

Mandy - you must update soon because you really left us hanging here. It surely was angsty

OMFG Jack's father

How can Jack stand staying there with Bobby? I get he has no other place to go to but if I were him I'd just sleep in the truck!
I can't wait for Ennis to arrive in Lightning Flat.
I left a comment on your LJ

littleguitar · « **Reply #45 on:** October 09, 2006, 06:02:02 pm »

Quote from: Bigheart on October 09, 2006, 05:37:26 pm

Mandy - you must update soon because you really left us hanging here. It surely was angsty OMFG Jack's father How can Jack stand staying there with Bobby? I get he has no other place to go to but if I were him I'd just sleep in the truck!
I can't wait for Ennis to arrive in Lightning Flat.
I left a comment on your LJ

I know, sorry! I don't typically like cliffhangers either, but I sure do leave you with some angst. It's funny, originally I had Jack's section first in that chapter but I thought that maybe it might make Jack's section a little easier to read if y'all knew Ennis was on his way, guess it didn't work

Anyway, update should be seriously soon. I had this great scene all written in my head for the next chapter, but I was in my car at the time... so I'm hoping it will come back to me!

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I AM reading Bill Bryson's "A short history of nearly everything"

I've heard that's good! Now, if only I could stop reading fan fiction...

Bigheart · « **Reply #46 on:** October 10, 2006, 02:59:30 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 09, 2006, 06:02:02 pm

I know, sorry! I don't typically like cliffhangers either, but I sure do leave you with some angst. It's funny, originally I had Jack's section first in that chapter but I thought that maybe it might make Jack's section a little easier to read if y'all knew Ennis was on his way, guess it didn't work

Anyway, update should be seriously soon. I had this great scene all written in my head for the next chapter, but I was in my car at the time... so I'm hoping it will come back to me!

I've heard that's good! Now, if only I could stop reading fan fiction...

Oh but that did make it easier. Poor Ennis, we've all kind of pinned our hopes on him!!

Oh man, good luck with trying to stop reading Slash! I just can't. Been doing it non-stop since February and that's pretty much all I do!! SO sad!

souxi · « **Reply #47 on:** October 10, 2006, 07:46:44 am »

Quote from: Bigheart on October 10, 2006, 02:59:30 am

Oh but that did make it easier. Poor Ennis, we've all kind of pinned our hopes on him!!

Oh man, good luck with trying to stop reading Slash! I just can't. Been doing it non-stop since February and that's pretty much all I do!! SO sad!

Sopt reading slash?? but but but, thats impossible!!

Good grief, perish the thought!!

Off to read more George.

mvansand76 · « **Reply #48 on:** October 10, 2006, 08:15:08 am »

Oh My God, that bastard John Twist, can't you let him die of some terribly painful disease?

littleguitar · « **Reply #49 on:** October 10, 2006, 09:34:43 am »

Yeah what was I thinking, stop reading slash?? I think at this point that's impossible LOL I'm obsessed!

Quote from: mvansand76 on October 10, 2006, 08:15:08 am

Oh My God, that bastard John Twist, can't you let him die of some terribly painful disease?

I like to think he'll get what's coming to him... but we'll have to see

Bigheart · « **Reply #50 on:** October 10, 2006, 09:40:23 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 10, 2006, 09:34:43 am

Yeah what was I thinking, stop reading slash?? I think at this point that's impossible LOL I'm obsessed!

I like to think he'll get what's coming to him... but we'll have to see

Let's not talk about stopping anymore, shall we??

OH pleeease, I agree with Mel, make him suffer!

dot-matrix · « **Reply #51 on:** October 13, 2006, 02:31:14 am »

I just read your story and I'm still shaking, so much emotion and so well written. I'm looking forward to seeing some more chapters. I cannot wait to see what happens when Ennis gets to Lightening Flat. Mean Mr Twist isn't going to like that much especially if Bobby slips up and says something about what he heard and knows about his Daddy and Ennis's relationship.

littleguitar · « **Reply #52 on:** October 13, 2006, 08:46:54 am »

Quote from: dot-matrix on October 13, 2006, 02:31:14 am

I just read your story and I'm still shaking, so much emotion and so well written. I'm looking forward to seeing some more chapters. I cannot wait to see what happens when Ennis gets to Lightening Flat. Mean Mr Twist isn't going to like that much especially if Bobby slips up and says something about what he heard and knows about his Daddy and Ennis's relationship.

Thanks! I appreciate it... it's always nice to get new readers

The new chapter should be up really soon. Though I won't say exactly when, deadlines aren't my friend and you guys are liable to rip my head off if I don't deliver

mvansand76 · « **Reply #53 on:** October 13, 2006, 09:48:35 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 13, 2006, 08:46:54 am

Thanks! I appreciate it... it's always nice to get new readers

The new chapter should be up really soon. Though I won't say exactly when, deadlines aren't my friend and you guys are liable to rip my head off if I don't deliver

You take it easy, OK? We don't want you to get Carpal Tunnel syndrome like I do...

littleguitar · « **Reply #54 on:** October 16, 2006, 04:34:36 pm »

Chapter nine!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

dot-matrix · « **Reply #55 on:** October 16, 2006, 06:33:27 pm »

Just read Chapter 9! All I can say is you blew me away totally. I won't say any more so as not to spoil it for those who have not read it yet. BUT Oh boy! It was GREAT, just GREAT

littleguitar · « **Reply #56 on:** October 16, 2006, 10:12:25 pm »

Quote from: dot-matrix on October 16, 2006, 06:33:27 pm

Just read Chapter 9! All I can say is you blew me away totally. I won't say any more so as not to spoil it for those who have not read it yet. BUT Oh boy! It was GREAT, just GREAT

Thanks! *blushes*

This chapter seems to have been a hit, I'm glad it worked for everyone

mvansand76 · « **Reply #57 on:** October 17, 2006, 07:51:11 am »

Oh yeah! I'm going to read it asap!

Is that a picture of you on your livejournal?

Bigheart · « **Reply #58 on:** October 17, 2006, 08:02:47 am »

SPOILER!!!

Mandy,

Chapter 9 was BEAUTIFUL *sigh* Ennis arrived at just the right time, my heart skipped a few beats when Jack realised it was Ennis at the door, wow.....that was soo lovely.

And the lying down next to him and refusing to leave and the gentle, loving tenderness in the bathroom was breathtaking, incredibly moving.

I do so wonder what will happen next. How will old man Twist react to Ennis being there? Are they staying? If not, where will they go??

I'm SO proud of Ennis and SO happy he's in Lightning Flat!

Hope you update soon, Mandy

littleguitar · « **Reply #59 on:** October 17, 2006, 08:57:17 am »

Quote from: mvansand76 on October 17, 2006, 07:51:11 am

Oh yeah! I'm going to read it asap!

Is that a picture of you on your livejournal?

Nope, though I had to double check because I used to have a pic of me on there and for a minute I forgot I took it down. That's actually Jake, looking ultra feminine. Now that I think about it... I used to have a haircut very similar, LOL

Quote from: Bigheart on October 17, 2006, 08:02:47 am

SPOILER!!!

Mandy,

Chapter 9 was BEAUTIFUL *sigh* Ennis arrived at just the right time, my heart skipped a few beats when Jack realised it was Ennis at the door, wow.....that was soo lovely.

And the lying down next to him and refusing to leave and the gentle, loving tenderness in the bathroom was breathtaking, incredibly moving.

I do so wonder what will happen next. How will old man Twist react to Ennis being there? Are they staying? If not, where will they go??

I'm SO proud of Ennis and SO happy he's in Lightning Flat!

Hope you update soon, Mandy

Thanks, June! I'm really glad you liked it so much. Jack very much needed Ennis at that moment and Ennis delivered. It almost turned out very very different... but I won't tell you how, I'll just leave it at what I wrote

I think "proud" is the perfect word, it was hard for Ennis to do what he did, especially given old man twist is ratteling around that ranch somewhere...

mvansand76 · « **Reply #60 on:** October 17, 2006, 09:52:59 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 17, 2006, 08:57:17 am

Nope, though I had to double check because I used to have a pic of me on there and for a minute I forgot I took it down. That's actually Jake, looking ultra feminine.

You must be kidding me! Aaargh there must be something wrong with me! I honestly did not see that, will have to check again.....

littleguitar · « **Reply #61 on:** October 17, 2006, 10:12:29 pm »

LOL, here's a larger view...(I think this is the one you were talking about...)

Bigheart · « **Reply #62 on:** October 18, 2006, 04:52:02 am »

Ultra feminine indeed, but beautiful.......his lips are to die for.....*sigh*

littleguitar · « **Reply #63 on:** October 18, 2006, 09:02:53 am »

Oh I know! That's one of my favorite pics of him... his lips... I don't even have words

mvansand76 · « **Reply #64 on:** October 18, 2006, 06:06:20 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 18, 2006, 09:02:53 am

Oh I know! That's one of my favorite pics of him... his lips... I don't even have words

Thanks for posting! I love how he looks in the production stills for Zodiac, he looks so 'guy next door' cute in those, but I do also like his looks in the pictures on the Shades thread...

I loved this chapter, very unexpected tenderness from Ennis, and again your dialogue was very good. I loved this:

Ennis pulled away slowly, his eyes still closed. “How much you drink?”

Jack sighed. It turned to a hiccup in his throat and he smiled wide, giggling. “A lot. A whole fuckin’ lot.”

Ennis’ face turned hard again and he opened his eyes. “Can see that, Jack.”

The dialogue is very natural and I hope you will follow up on that promise about John F*****' Twist! I also hope that Jack finds a way to stand up for not only his son, but also for himself, and not back down when his father beats down on him. That son of a *****. Ooops... sorry, getting carried away....

littleguitar · « **Reply #65 on:** October 18, 2006, 11:05:16 pm »

Quote from: mvansand76 on October 18, 2006, 06:06:20 pm

Thanks for posting! I love how he looks in the production stills for Zodiac, he looks so 'guy next door' cute in those, but I do also like his looks in the pictures on the Shades thread...

I loved this chapter, very unexpected tenderness from Ennis, and again your dialogue was very good. I loved this:

Ennis pulled away slowly, his eyes still closed. “How much you drink?”

Jack sighed. It turned to a hiccup in his throat and he smiled wide, giggling. “A lot. A whole fuckin’ lot.”

Ennis’ face turned hard again and he opened his eyes. “Can see that, Jack.”

The dialogue is very natural and I hope you will follow up on that promise about John F*****' Twist! I also hope that Jack finds a way to stand up for not only his son, but also for himself, and not back down when his father beats down on him. That son of a *****. Ooops... sorry, getting carried away....

Oh I know, I love how he looks in the zodiac stills... I wish they would put out more but I guess it just makes me even more excited to see the movie that I've seen almost nothing from it...

And thanks for the comments on my story! I'm glad you like the dialogue and that it seems natural. It's one of the things I concentrate on the most and one of the things that bothers me the most when i'm reading other stories. And that moment you pulled out was actually one of my favorites from this chapter!

More with old man twist on the way.... hopefully with Ennis by his side, Jack will find a little more courage and that asshole will get what's coming to him

mvansand76 · « **Reply #66 on:** October 19, 2006, 05:36:14 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 18, 2006, 11:05:16 pm

And thanks for the comments on my story! I'm glad you like the dialogue and that it seems natural. It's one of the things I concentrate on the most and one of the things that bothers me the most when i'm reading other stories. And that moment you pulled out was actually one of my favorites from this chapter!

More with old man twist on the way.... hopefully with Ennis by his side, Jack will find a little more courage and that asshole will get what's coming to him

When the dialogue and the non-verbal communication that comes with that are good and creatively written, then the story does really come to life, that is what I was always being taught in university during creative writing and screenwriting classes and it's what I always concentrate on too when I write short stories.

In this case, I could really see that happening right in front of my eyes: Jack sighed. It turned to a hiccup in his throat and he smiled wide, giggling. “A lot. A whole fuckin’ lot.” It's sad and hilarious at the same time, well done!

And yes, I was thinking that having Ennis by his side will give Jack more courage to finally stand up to his father (but he's not going to let Ennis do it for him I think...) and give him one hell of a verbal beating. Wow, tough dialogue on the way for you to write! :-) Bet you will do fine, though!

littleguitar · « **Reply #67 on:** October 19, 2006, 08:31:01 pm »

Ok, I know I said tonight for the post, but it's looking more like tomorrow afternoon (around 4 or so CST)... I could post what I have now as a short interlude because it's kind of complete in and of itself, but it's only 3 typed pages and I prefer to just go ahead and write the full chapter.

Just to let everyone know... told you I was no good with deadlines

June it's all for you

Bigheart · « **Reply #68 on:** October 20, 2006, 04:24:09 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on October 19, 2006, 08:31:01 pm

Ok, I know I said tonight for the post, but it's looking more like tomorrow afternoon (around 4 or so CST)... I could post what I have now as a short interlude because it's kind of complete in and of itself, but it's only 3 typed pages and I prefer to just go ahead and write the full chapter.

Just to let everyone know... told you I was no good with deadlines

June it's all for you

I'm half dead now.

Thanks Mandy!

mvansand76 · « **Reply #69 on:** October 21, 2006, 09:18:01 am »

Where is it? Where is it?

?

littleguitar · « **Reply #70 on:** October 21, 2006, 05:19:43 pm »

I know I know! Sorry, it isn't up yet... I said it would be up yesterday because I thought I had a half day but wound up working all day and into the night $:-\$ I got home a bit ago and I'm in the middle of writing it right now but I'm kind of stuck on a scene... so it may not be up until tomorrow. Tonight if I get my act together.

I really am sorry, I meant to have it up thursday even before I told you guys I would...

coffeecat33 · « **Reply #71 on:** October 21, 2006, 05:21:22 pm »

S'Alright, s'alright. Just looking forward to the next chapter, whenever it gets posted.
Leslie

littleguitar · « **Reply #72 on:** October 23, 2006, 06:07:03 pm »

Finally, Chapter 10

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

Seriously sorry for the wait... blame Jack's mom and dad, I got kind of stuck on a scene... to tell you the truth I'm still not entirely happy with it, but let be I guess!

Enjoy!

Bigheart · « **Reply #73 on:** October 23, 2006, 06:24:52 pm »

Whoooooohooooo!!

OMG - I'm just blown away by all these great updates today!

I don't know if your update will be great, Mandy! I still have to read it!!!

Just kidding, you know that, right?

littleguitar · « **Reply #74 on:** October 23, 2006, 10:25:54 pm »

Quote from: Bigheart on October 23, 2006, 06:24:52 pm

Whoooooohooooo!!

OMG - I'm just blown away by all these great updates today!

I don't know if your update will be great, Mandy! I still have to read it!!!

Just kidding, you know that, right?

of course

There were so many good ones today... they'll keep me busy tonight for sure! Now, if only we had a Shades update.... a girl can dream can't she?

littleguitar · « **Reply #75 on:** October 26, 2006, 11:54:06 pm »

Chapter 11

Please don't kill me... angst in this one to say the least $:-\$

http://minchout.livejournal.com/8775.html#cutid1

littleguitar · « **Reply #76 on:** October 28, 2006, 10:14:54 pm »

Chapter 12!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/9028.html

Enjoy!

littleguitar · « **Reply #77 on:** October 28, 2006, 10:54:18 pm »

A great song Leslie (coffeecat33) sent me that she said she thought of while reading Ch. 11... I think it works really well for Jack in general

Echo And The Bunnymen
Nothing Lasts Forever

I want it now I want it now not
the promises of what tomorrow brings
I need to live in dreams today
I'm tired of the song that sorrow sings
I want more than I can get just
trying to trying to trying to forget
I walk to you through winds of fire
and never let you know the way I feel
Under skin is where I hide love
that always gets me on my knees
I want more than I can get just
trying to trying to trying to forget
Nothing ever lasts forever nothing ever lasts
forever nothing ever lasts
forever nothing ever lasts forever
I want it now I want it now don’t
tell me that my ship is coming in
Nothing comes to those who wait
times running out before you're running in
I want more than I can get just
trying to trying to trying to forget
Nothing ever lasts forever nothing ever lasts
forever nothing ever lasts
forever nothing ever lasts forever
All the Shadows and the fields are coming to you
all the Shadows and
the fields are coming to you
All the Shadows and the
fields are coming to you

© 2006 LyricsOnDemand.com
All lyrics are property and copyright of their owners. All lyrics provided for educational purposes only. LyricsOnDemand.®

dot-matrix · « **Reply #78 on:** October 29, 2006, 08:47:58 pm »

more angst after two chapters of pleasure...you're killin me littleguitar! I sure do hope things end up happy for your boys otherwise why read fan fiction? Sorry, not to insult anyone, just how I feel. If I'm going to read FF it's to get more of the back story or to have a better outcome...know what I mean? Anyway I'm hooked on your story and waiting anxiously for that next Chapter. Keep up the good work.

littleguitar · « **Reply #79 on:** October 30, 2006, 01:36:39 am »

Quote from: dot-matrix on October 29, 2006, 08:47:58 pm

more angst after two chapters of pleasure...you're killin me littleguitar! I sure do hope things end up happy for your boys otherwise why read fan fiction? Sorry, not to insult anyone, just how I feel. If I'm going to read FF it's to get more of the back story or to have a better outcome...know what I mean? Anyway I'm hooked on your story and waiting anxiously for that next Chapter. Keep up the good work.

Thanks! I'm really glad you're enjoying it!

I know what you mean about wanting a happy ending for our boys. And, though I have nothing planned out yet, it is my intention to give them that happy ending. I set out writing this to get them together for good and plan on keeping it that way, no matter how many chapters it takes me

mvansand76 · « **Reply #80 on:** October 30, 2006, 08:33:33 am »

Hiya Mandy! Oh no, this is becoming a very stressful story to read... in a good way of course!

I am glad that you kind of promised that John Twist would get what he deserved and what he deserves is a terribly painful death at the hands of a furious Ennis, protecting Jack.... oops... getting out of control here...

littleguitar · « **Reply #81 on:** October 30, 2006, 12:24:42 pm »

Quote from: mvansand76 on October 30, 2006, 08:33:33 am

Hiya Mandy! Oh no, this is becoming a very stressful story to read... in a good way of course! I am glad that you kind of promised that John Twist would get what he deserved and what he deserves is a terribly painful death at the hands of a furious Ennis, protecting Jack.... oops... getting out of control here...

LOL I just hope I don't let you guys down... I haven't actually planned anything yet so I kind of said that without any solid reason... but I like to think that he'll get his. He's just too big of an ass to let it go...

Bigheart · « **Reply #82 on:** October 30, 2006, 02:48:54 pm »

Quote from: dot-matrix on October 29, 2006, 08:47:58 pm

more angst after two chapters of pleasure...you're killin me littleguitar! I sure do hope things end up happy for your boys otherwise why read fan fiction? Sorry, not to insult anyone, just how I feel. If I'm going to read FF it's to get more of the back story or to have a better outcome...know what I mean? Anyway I'm hooked on your story and waiting anxiously for that next Chapter. Keep up the good work.

I know what you mean. I feel the same way, that's why I turned to BBM FF for all those happy endings. I think I would have lost it if I hadn't been able to turn to this after watching BBM.

Thanks so much Mandy

You know how much I'm loving your story

Got any new Jack Shades pics to delight us with??

littleguitar · « **Reply #83 on:** October 30, 2006, 06:38:15 pm »

oh man, I actually found one of him in a leather jacket the other day and immediately thought of shades

I'll see if I can find it again, I don't remember where it was $:-\$

littleguitar · « **Reply #84 on:** October 30, 2006, 06:51:40 pm »

ok, I know it isn't black leather, but everytime Amy mentions Jack's leather jacket, this is the image I get in my head *sigh*

Beautiful right???

dot-matrix · « **Reply #85 on:** October 30, 2006, 08:20:12 pm »

He's breathtaking...just so darn gorgeous it almost makes my heart hurt to look at him. *sigh*

dot-matrix · « **Reply #86 on:** November 06, 2006, 05:30:17 pm »

"Mandy oh Mandy...wherefore art thou Mandy....any news of Chapter 13?

", She anxiously asks (

what can I say a writer I ain't)

littleguitar · « **Reply #87 on:** November 06, 2006, 07:19:46 pm »

LOL perfect timing... I actually plan on posting it tonight

I'm going to do another quick read through or two... hopefully I'll post it before Heroes comes on because I'm obsessed with that show and if I don't you guys might never get the update

littleguitar · « **Reply #88 on:** November 06, 2006, 09:01:37 pm »

Chapter 13

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

dot-matrix · « **Reply #89 on:** November 06, 2006, 09:06:53 pm »

Yippee Skippy!

On my way to live journal NOW.

dot-matrix · « **Reply #90 on:** November 06, 2006, 09:53:55 pm »

OMG!, OMG!, OMG! I just finished reading Chapter 13. WOW that is some serious erotica you've written there.

I posted my more blunt comments on Live Journal. Definitely a delicious NC-17 read and still so touching and tender with Ennis finally saying what Jack needed to hear ::sigh:: I think I'll go read it again.

dot-matrix · « **Reply #91 on:** November 07, 2006, 03:22:15 am »

Here I am AGAIN, hogging your story thread but I just loved this chapter! Saw this and thought of you. After all that steamy action I think it fits you very well

Don't you?

Bigheart · « **Reply #92 on:** November 07, 2006, 06:29:03 am »

Quote from: dot-matrix on November 06, 2006, 09:53:55 pm

OMG!, OMG!, OMG! I just finished reading Chapter 13. WOW that is some serious erotica you've written there. I posted my more blunt comments on Live Journal. Definitely a delicious NC-17 read and still so touching and tender with Ennis finally saying what Jack needed to hear ::sigh:: I think I'll go read it again.

OMG YES! I SO agree! Heh heh, I read your comment LOL! that's about what happened to me too

Love you Mandy!

You rock!. Oh God ~ I've read it so many times now, your chapter ending got me real good. I loved it, love this story

littleguitar · « **Reply #93 on:** November 07, 2006, 10:08:16 am »

Quote from: dot-matrix on November 07, 2006, 03:22:15 am

Here I am AGAIN, hogging your story thread but I just loved this chapter! Saw this and thought of you. After all that steamy action I think it fits you very well Don't you?

ROFL! I love it! I think it fits perfectly

I don't even know what to say, I'm glad you guys are enjoying it! You're seriously making me blush

mvansand76 · « **Reply #94 on:** November 07, 2006, 10:46:55 am »

As I already told you via PM, I really loved this chapter, it was kind of sad too... I hope Jack will draw the strength he needs from Ennis telling him how much he loves him, to go back to the Twist ranch and give John Twist Sr. what he deserves, which is a really vicious and violent beating... ooooops, here I go again...

littleguitar · « **Reply #95 on:** November 07, 2006, 09:22:55 pm »

LOL, I think that is the general consensus on old man Twist... hope I don't disappoint!

karen1129 · « **Reply #96 on:** November 08, 2006, 08:52:16 pm »

This was a smoking hawt chapter !!
You write very good smex !! And to think..... 6 months ago I didn't know
what the hell smex was !!!

Karen

littleguitar · « **Reply #97 on:** November 08, 2006, 11:24:49 pm »

Thanks Karen

Quote

6 months ago I didn't know
what the hell smex was !!!

LOL You and me both, the first time I saw that word I thought it was a typo

dot-matrix · « **Reply #98 on:** November 09, 2006, 02:40:46 am »

Sooo Mandy girlfriend is there anything we can do to ~~speed-up~~ ah I mean help you with your writing of Chapter 14...You know sharpen your pencils, put out the cat, walk the dog, rub your back, message your feet....

anything, anything at all, Huh, can we, huh...

OK so I'm anxious for more, sorry

littleguitar · « **Reply #99 on:** November 09, 2006, 03:34:59 am »

Well, I'm probably going to get myself into trouble by saying this (as we all know I have in the past... I'm shit with deadlines $:-\$ ) but as of now the plan is to have the next chapter up tomorrow night (thursday). I really want to start posting on a regular schedule every Mon/Thurs because I'd like to finish this one up and start another...

I'm going to try really really hard, but I can't promise anything

A back rub would be quite lovely though....

Bigheart · « **Reply #100 on:** November 09, 2006, 09:48:42 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 08, 2006, 11:24:49 pm

Thanks Karen

LOL You and me both, the first time I saw that word I thought it was a typo

Me too!!

Bigheart · « **Reply #101 on:** November 09, 2006, 09:52:11 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 09, 2006, 03:34:59 am

Well, I'm probably going to get myself into trouble by saying this (as we all know I have in the past... I'm shit with deadlines $:-\$ ) but as of now the plan is to have the next chapter up tomorrow night (thursday). I really want to start posting on a regular schedule every Mon/Thurs because I'd like to finish this one up and start another...

I'm going to try really really hard, but I can't promise anything

A back rub would be quite lovely though....

SQUEEEE

Twice a week?!?? Whooooo!!

How many more chapters do you think? Oooooh looking forward to your other one!

littleguitar · « **Reply #102 on:** November 09, 2006, 10:28:06 am »

I'm thinking 2, maybe 3 more chapters? Not many... though I really have no clue, I don't even know what's going to happen in the next chapter yet that's how good at planning these things I am

Bigheart · « **Reply #103 on:** November 09, 2006, 11:01:05 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 09, 2006, 10:28:06 am

I'm thinking 2, maybe 3 more chapters? Not many... though I really have no clue, I don't even know what's going to happen in the next chapter yet that's how good at planning these things I am

LOL!! So you don't have it all plotted out? God ~ I so admire you and all the other brilliant writers out there. It's just amazing all the wonderful stuff you keep us so entertained with

littleguitar · « **Reply #104 on:** November 09, 2006, 08:18:02 pm »

Quote from: Bigheart on November 09, 2006, 11:01:05 am

LOL!! So you don't have it all plotted out? God ~ I so admire you and all the other brilliant writers out there. It's just amazing all the wonderful stuff you keep us so entertained with

nope I don't plan anything out. Every time a fan fic writer says they've planned a certain amount of chapters or something like that, I always think to myself that I should do that too, but it just never works out that way $:-\$

karen1129 · « **Reply #105 on:** November 09, 2006, 09:50:38 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 09, 2006, 03:34:59 am

Well, I'm probably going to get myself into trouble by saying this (as we all know I have in the past... I'm shit with deadlines $:-\$ ) but as of now the plan is to have the next chapter up tomorrow night (thursday). I really want to start posting on a regular schedule every Mon/Thurs because I'd like to finish this one up and start another...

I'm going to try really really hard, but I can't promise anything

A back rub would be quite lovely though....

It's Thursday night !!! I'll stay up late !!!
Can't wait. I'll take care of you animals. I get along
better with animals anyway !!

littleguitar · « **Reply #106 on:** November 09, 2006, 10:49:02 pm »

I'm working on it right now so hopefully it will go up tonight... but I got out of work late today so I'm not as far along as I'd hoped, at the latest it will be up tomorrow afternoon, sorry about the delay

karen1129 · « **Reply #107 on:** November 09, 2006, 11:00:41 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 09, 2006, 10:49:02 pm

I'm working on it right now so hopefully it will go up tonight... but I got out of work late today so I'm not as far along as I'd hoped, at the latest it will be up tomorrow afternoon, sorry about the delay

I'll be waiting !! I hate when work interferes with my addiction.

Karen

littleguitar · « **Reply #108 on:** November 09, 2006, 11:06:10 pm »

Quote from: karen1129 on November 09, 2006, 11:00:41 pm

I'll be waiting !! I hate when work interferes with my addiction.

Karen

you and me both, and it does all to often... I mean, I didn't even get to read SOG until almost 7 tonight... what's that about

littleguitar · « **Reply #109 on:** November 10, 2006, 07:07:12 pm »

Ok, an update... still no chapter but it will definitely be posted tonight. I'm more than halfway through and a lot of the rest just needs to be typed because I wrote it at work today. Told you I would get myself into trouble

Bigheart · « **Reply #110 on:** November 10, 2006, 07:35:41 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 10, 2006, 07:07:12 pm

Ok, an update... still no chapter but it will definitely be posted tonight. I'm more than halfway through and a lot of the rest just needs to be typed because I wrote it at work today. Told you I would get myself into trouble

Squeeeee!!

but I'll probably won't be able to read it till tomorrow morning

karen1129 · « **Reply #111 on:** November 10, 2006, 08:46:26 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 10, 2006, 07:07:12 pm

Ok, an update... still no chapter but it will definitely be posted tonight. I'm more than halfway through and a lot of the rest just needs to be typed because I wrote it at work today. Told you I would get myself into trouble

Yee Haw.... I'll be here

littleguitar · « **Reply #112 on:** November 10, 2006, 08:59:37 pm »

Quote from: Bigheart on November 10, 2006, 07:35:41 pm

Squeeeee!! but I'll probably won't be able to read it till tomorrow morning

oh! Sorry June... maybe if I post soon you won't have to wait... of course I have no clue what time it is there $:-\$

Bigheart · « **Reply #113 on:** November 10, 2006, 09:08:55 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 10, 2006, 08:59:37 pm

oh! Sorry June... maybe if I post soon you won't have to wait... of course I have no clue what time it is there $:-\$

It's 2 in the morning here!! I really should go to bed

littleguitar · « **Reply #114 on:** November 10, 2006, 09:29:02 pm »

LOL yeah I'm definitely not going to get it up before you go to sleep

littleguitar · « **Reply #115 on:** November 10, 2006, 11:51:00 pm »

Finally here

Sorry bout the wait...

Angst warning!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

dot-matrix · « **Reply #116 on:** November 11, 2006, 03:31:14 am »

Wooo hooo Mandy! Another great chapter. I left a more detailed reply on livejournal so I wouldn't spoil it for anyone here who hasn't read it yet. More please, pretty please.

mvansand76 · « **Reply #117 on:** November 11, 2006, 08:17:24 am »

Oh no Jack, why did you have to tell him? I know, it's all about honesty....

Maybe not the right timing though... Great chapter! I do hope that Jack gathers some more strength and starts to show some more backbone! I want him to kick some ass.

karen1129 · « **Reply #118 on:** November 11, 2006, 11:51:38 am »

Great chapter Mandi. Left you a comment on your LJ too. I was on the edge of my seat. Yeah, I kind of wish Jack would have held back on that honesty thing.... but.... guess there is no good time for something like that. I can't wait to see where they are going now.... and if that bastard old man Twist is going to cause more trouble.

Karen

littleguitar · « **Reply #119 on:** November 11, 2006, 05:32:44 pm »

Thanks guys!! I appreciate all the comments

Quote

I do hope that Jack gathers some more strength and starts to show some more backbone! I want him to kick some ass.

LOL, I know I know, sorry John Twist didn't die a horrible death in this chapter... maybe the next one, I'm still trying to work it out

Jack does need to show some backbone though, I'm (or he's) working on it...

littleguitar · « **Reply #120 on:** November 16, 2006, 12:17:35 am »

Hey everyone... just to let you know, I've started a new fic. You can find it here:

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/just+by+looking+at+you

Enjoy! As always, I love comments

Bigheart · « **Reply #121 on:** November 16, 2006, 03:55:46 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 16, 2006, 12:17:35 am

Hey everyone... just to let you know, I've started a new fic. You can find it here:

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/just+by+looking+at+you

Enjoy! As always, I love comments

Mandy! I just read it and left a comment. It's exciting, it really is. Loved Jack watching Ennis in the train like that, that was just hot! And the ending.......I can't wait for them to meet! I also love it that Jack's a writer.

Great stuff Mandy, really great. I am so hooked!

littleguitar · « **Reply #122 on:** November 19, 2006, 09:40:47 pm »

New chapter of Just By Looking at You up

http://minchout.livejournal.com/11099.html

That Little Bit of Hope soon... $:-\$

dot-matrix · « **Reply #123 on:** November 19, 2006, 10:03:53 pm »

Chapter 2 is good Mandy, real good, loved the way you had them meet up finally. Can't wait to see then have that drink and to hear Ennis's "how I got to the city" story.

Anxiously waiting for the Chapter of Little bit of Hope too

RouxB · « **Reply #124 on:** November 20, 2006, 02:45:27 am »

Mandy-

I left you a comment on LJ but wanted to say "hey" here and let you know how 'cited I am by this story. My perfect U exactly this kind of AU.

More more more-and of That Little Bit of Hope as well.

littleguitar · « **Reply #125 on:** November 20, 2006, 01:44:25 pm »

Thanks you guys

And don't worry, I haven't forgotten Little Bit of Hope... I'm just having some trouble with this chapter $:-\$ But I am in the middle of it and I have the day off so with some luck there will be a chapter up by tonight...

mvansand76 · « **Reply #126 on:** November 20, 2006, 03:48:40 pm »

I like where your new story is going, Mandy! I'm hooked!

littleguitar · « **Reply #127 on:** November 20, 2006, 07:14:25 pm »

That Little Bit of Hope, Chapter 15 up!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/tag/that+little+bit+of+hope

Quote from: mvansand76 on November 20, 2006, 03:48:40 pm

I like where your new story is going, Mandy! I'm hooked!

Thanks Mel! I'm glad you like it

dot-matrix · « **Reply #128 on:** November 21, 2006, 02:27:11 am »

Just finshed Chapter 15 of LBOH

Oh Mandy! It's wonderful, I felt so sorry for them both, they are each so wrong headed, they really need to talk, really talk and Jack is so wrong Ennis needs to see those shirts! Now I'm dying for Chapter 16! Your writing should come with a warning lable " Warning this story may become habit forming!"

I wonder, do they have a 12 step program for this addiction? $:-\$

littleguitar · « **Reply #129 on:** November 21, 2006, 08:23:56 pm »

Quote from: dot-matrix on November 21, 2006, 02:27:11 am

Just finshed Chapter 15 of LBOH Oh Mandy! It's wonderful, I felt so sorry for them both, they are each so wrong headed, they really need to talk, really talk and Jack is so wrong Ennis needs to see those shirts! Now I'm dying for Chapter 16! Your writing should come with a warning lable " Warning this story may become habit forming!" I wonder, do they have a 12 step program for this addiction? $:-\$

Thanks Dottie! LOL If they have a 12 step program for slash addiction let me know, I'll be the first to join...

I'm glad you're enjoying it so much!!

mvansand76 · « **Reply #130 on:** November 22, 2006, 10:50:53 am »

I liked this:

He gripped the shirts tightly for a moment then folded them the best he could. He’d never even taken them from their hanger and their removal from his room was unsettling him in a way he couldn’t explain.

I could really feel that!

Jack thinks that Ennis thinks he is weak and I as the reader regard him as weak in this story up till now and in this chapter because of the drinking (again with Bobby next to him!

). It's sad, I was hoping that he would have gathered some more strength by now to really do what he needs to do, try to imagine a life for him and Bobby and Ennis.

mvansand76 · « **Reply #131 on:** November 22, 2006, 10:52:18 am »

By the way, do you want to make a seperate thread for Just By Looking at you? I think it deserves one!

littleguitar · « **Reply #132 on:** November 22, 2006, 12:05:59 pm »

Quote from: mvansand76 on November 22, 2006, 10:50:53 am

I liked this:

He gripped the shirts tightly for a moment then folded them the best he could. He’d never even taken them from their hanger and their removal from his room was unsettling him in a way he couldn’t explain.

I could really feel that!

Jack thinks that Ennis thinks he is weak and I as the reader regard him as weak in this story up till now and in this chapter because of the drinking (again with Bobby next to him! ). It's sad, I was hoping that he would have gathered some more strength by now to really do what he needs to do, try to imagine a life for him and Bobby and Ennis.

I'm glad you liked that part

Jack has been weak up to this point, and honestly I'm having a hard time pulling him out of that... it's one of the reasons this last chapter took me longer to post. The problem is, when I started this story, I went into it with the idea that Jack had been very strong up to this point but that when Ennis turned him away it finally broke something in him. I don't view him as weak after that in the film, just more hardned and embittered but when I started my story I made the decision to give him a drinking problem which is causing me (and him...) problems for a few reasons.

I think in the film he had a drinking problem but it was probably a little better hidden then in my story, Ennis finding him the way he did in my story kind of brought the problem to the surface for both of them. And though having Ennis with him makes things much easier for him and makes him happier than he was, he's still having a lot of trust issues with Ennis after 14 years of being shot down by him. Also, I don't think Ennis is just some magic solution to all of his problems that Jack can stop drinking the second he walks back into his life no matter how much happier Ennis makes him because I think Jack's problems run deeper than that. Also, the real time of my story has only been about a week or so it's going to take Jack and Ennis longer than that to come to terms with things. As for drinking in front of Bobby.... there's no excuse. It's not a good thing to be doing and Jack knows it and is trying to justify it to himself right now by having done it while Bobby was asleep. That's why he reacted the way he did when Ennis told him he shouldn't be doing that.

Sorry about all of the rambling, I'm trying to work some things out in this story right now that I've been having trouble with and Jack's weakness has been one of my major problems $:-\$ I want him to be stronger too and I'm trying to work out a way for that to happen. See, this isn't how I usually write, usually I see something through to the end then go back and revise the shit out of it once I've figured out what's going on. But that isn't the nature of fan fiction so this has been a very very different writing experience for me.

I'll go ahead and make another thread for Just by Looking at You

mvansand76 · « **Reply #133 on:** November 22, 2006, 12:32:28 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on November 22, 2006, 12:05:59 pm

Sorry about all of the rambling, I'm trying to work some things out in this story right now that I've been having trouble with and Jack's weakness has been one of my major problems $:-\$ I want him to be stronger too and I'm trying to work out a way for that to happen.

I understand that and I think it's my frustration as a reader that I can't go in there and kick Jack's ass and at the same time I understand your problem because I know that when you write sometimes the characters don't seem to do what you want them to do. Sometimes it's difficult to find a way out for them. But I know that you will find a way, and I agree that things like this don't happen in a few days (I sometimes forget that your story up till now is a week in real time...)...

RouxB · « **Reply #134 on:** November 22, 2006, 05:52:12 pm »

The importance of different perspectives! I like the characterization of Jack because it is complex. I don't perceive him as weak as much as I do troubled and a bit out of control. I like that you did not package him up in a tidy little box with a bow. In so much fic it is just Ennis that is a whack job and the reality, I think, is that they both would have been severly emotionally damaged by their relationship. The are, and should be, incredibly dysfunctional and you are portraying that well. The fact that I want to slap the hell out of both of them says alot

By the way, this is my first fan fiction plot commentary

littleguitar · « **Reply #135 on:** November 22, 2006, 06:41:04 pm »

Quote from: RouxB on November 22, 2006, 05:52:12 pm

The importance of different perspectives! I like the characterization of Jack because it is complex. I don't perceive him as weak as much as I do troubled and a bit out of control. I like that you did not package him up in a tidy little box with a bow. In so much fic it is just Ennis that is a whack job and the reality, I think, is that they both would have been severly emotionally damaged by their relationship. The are, and should be, incredibly dysfunctional and you are portraying that well. The fact that I want to slap the hell out of both of them says alot

By the way, this is my first fan fiction plot commentary

Oh Thanks Roux! I'm glad you like what I've done with Jack, I've been having some problems writing this one lately and your post put my mind at ease a bit

That's one of the problems I've had with some of the fics too is that Jack seems to be incredibly well adjusted despite the fact that he's had a very hard life and a lot of times all it takes is Ennis' confession of love for him to be well off... I just don't think that could be possible for him. I think he has a lot more problems outside of his relationship with Ennis that have nothing to do with Ennis at all but that are maybe part of the reason he sticks with Ennis through everything.

Quote from: mvansand76 on November 22, 2006, 12:32:28 pm

I understand that and I think it's my frustration as a reader that I can't go in there and kick Jack's ass and at the same time I understand your problem because I know that when you write sometimes the characters don't seem to do what you want them to do. Sometimes it's difficult to find a way out for them. But I know that you will find a way, and I agree that things like this don't happen in a few days (I sometimes forget that your story up till now is a week in real time...)...

So true, sometimes characters take on a life of their own and you have absolutely no control over what they do. I think some of the best stories can come from this but it is incredibly frustrating to be the writer when that's happening! $:-\$

Just to let everyone know, it might be a bit before the next update. I won't let it go over 2 weeks and I'm going to try for a week but I need to think a few things through before I keep going.

dot-matrix · « **Reply #136 on:** December 11, 2006, 10:26:47 pm »

That 2 week self imposed deadline is looming $:-\$ any headway on wrappin up this one Mandy? I feel kinda bad for Ennis, Jack and Bobby kinda hangin like they are caught between commitment and a sense of betrayal with the potential threat from Old Man Twist still doggin them. I went back last night and read all 15 Chapters from beginning to end, you've touched my heart with your characterizations and I really would like to know how this one turns out...happy I hope, but I'll still go where ever you lead me.

littleguitar · « **Reply #137 on:** December 11, 2006, 10:48:04 pm »

oh Dottie! You are amazing, I can't believe you went back and read all the chapters

No worries, I'm not letting this one go, I just had a bit of a setback. I'm halfway through writing the next chapter and though I told Ruby I would have it posted tonight it's looking like tomorrow or wednesday. I'm going to work on it some more tonight, though! A lot of things should be cleared up in this chaper between the boys and I'm thinking there will only be one or two more after it and an epilogue.

I know it's been a long time since I've updated, I'm really really sorry! $:-\$

littleguitar · « **Reply #138 on:** December 11, 2006, 11:05:51 pm »

oh, and I've just realized I've reached 1,000 posts

mvansand76 · « **Reply #139 on:** December 12, 2006, 04:42:47 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on December 11, 2006, 11:05:51 pm

oh, and I've just realized I've reached 1,000 posts

Congratulations!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

littleguitar · « **Reply #140 on:** December 12, 2006, 01:59:09 pm »

Thanks

I'll tell you what, I've been around this place way too long to have just now reached 1,000

notBastet · « **Reply #141 on:** December 13, 2006, 11:22:46 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on December 11, 2006, 11:05:51 pm

oh, and I've just realized I've reached 1,000 posts

Oh - a belated congratulations!

(I'm sad to hear your almost done with your story, but of course I'm looking forward to the updates... I'm one of those people that always wishes the stories would go on forever...

)

littleguitar · « **Reply #142 on:** December 13, 2006, 07:55:41 pm »

Thanks for the congrats!

I'm the same way about stories I love, I want the authors to never stop writing them! Who knows, maybe after all my grad school stuff is over and I have more time I'll try out a sequel... I can't promise anything, but it could happen

Anyway, hopefully the new chapter will be up tonight... it's going slowly because I'm behind on just about everything in my life right now because of how long I was sick, but I've got a huge chunk of it written.

Bigheart · « **Reply #143 on:** December 13, 2006, 08:01:28 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on December 13, 2006, 07:55:41 pm

Anyway, hopefully the new chapter will be up tonight...

*Squeeeeeeee* Something to look forward to when I wake up!

littleguitar · « **Reply #144 on:** December 13, 2006, 09:23:23 pm »

I'll try not to let you down June

Anyone want a teaser??

“Damn, Ennis,” Jack said, he shook his head. “Know what this means, don’t ya? We’re really makin’ a go of it.”

“Guess so.”

“It’s gonna be real good, you’ll see. Finally get that sweet life, you and me.”

“Ain’t gonna be that easy. Ain’t figured nothin’ out yet.”

“I know it.”

“Shit.”

“What?”

“Trouble.”

Ennis gestured with his chin out the windshield and Jack turned to look. Three pick-ups lined up in a row, bumper to bumper across the road, blocking the way. Men, probably five by Jack’s count, milled about, looking lively at the sight of the truck making its way toward them. Not one of them had a gun, a few baseball bats, some wrenches, a tire iron. Jack saw his dad off to the side, leaning against the front bumper, his face stern.

“Fuck,” Jack said. “Turn around Ennis.”

“Can’t,” Ennis said.

Jack turned and saw that more trucks had blocked their way out. Fear raced through his body, thumping in his chest and his temples, making him dizzy. Ennis gripped the steering wheel so tight his knuckles were white.

“Fuck,” Jack said again.

Bobby woke. “What’s goin’ on, Daddy?”

“Nothin’, Bobby,” Jack said. He looked at Ennis, his face full of “what now”, Ennis’ face full of something. But what Jack wasn’t sure. He knew Ennis’ mind had probably only registered one thing, that one tire iron out of the whole group of men and weapons. That tire iron had finally come for him. “It’ll be all right,” he said.

Ennis nodded.

littleguitar · « **Reply #145 on:** December 13, 2006, 11:29:11 pm »

who needs a teaser when you have the real deal right here???

Chapter 16 http://minchout.livejournal.com/13785.html

dot-matrix · « **Reply #146 on:** December 14, 2006, 05:49:24 am »

GOOD CHAPTER MANDY!

My heart was beating so fast when they were surrounded. That John Twist is an evil man telling that lie and setting those men out to kill his own son. But I was so proud...Jack stood up to them, and to his Daddy. Oh WOW. I was so touched when Ennis told Jack he was the strongest person he knew. So good! I swear I'm not being greedy but I hope it's not too long before we get the rest.....but no pressure

littleguitar · « **Reply #147 on:** December 14, 2006, 10:36:42 am »

Thanks Dottie!! I think I really needed a proud of Jack moment... I don't know, this chapter had me really worried (melodrama, unbelievability...) but everyone seems to have liked it! I'm glad you did

And Mel better be out there somewhere, I wrote this chapter just for her

notBastet · « **Reply #148 on:** December 14, 2006, 11:06:43 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on December 13, 2006, 11:29:11 pm

who needs a teaser when you have the real deal right here???

Chapter 16 http://minchout.livejournal.com/13785.html

spoiler

about to say something stupid, but i usually don't let that stop me...

maybe, in a way, it's good that the 'tire iron' came for them - thus they've faced it and survived, so now it's not looming over their heads. (of course, they're not 'safe' yet, I realize)
oh well - just looking for a silver lining.

great chapter mandy!

littleguitar · « **Reply #149 on:** December 14, 2006, 06:44:32 pm »

Quote from: notBastet on December 14, 2006, 11:06:43 am

spoiler

about to say something stupid, but i usually don't let that stop me...

maybe, in a way, it's good that the 'tire iron' came for them - thus they've faced it and survived, so now it's not looming over their heads. (of course, they're not 'safe' yet, I realize)
oh well - just looking for a silver lining.

great chapter mandy!

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it

And that isn't stupid... that makes sense to me

Bigheart · « **Reply #150 on:** December 14, 2006, 06:52:49 pm »

Quote from: notBastet on December 14, 2006, 11:06:43 am

spoiler

about to say something stupid, but i usually don't let that stop me...

maybe, in a way, it's good that the 'tire iron' came for them - thus they've faced it and survived, so now it's not looming over their heads. (of course, they're not 'safe' yet, I realize)
oh well - just looking for a silver lining.

great chapter mandy!

Makes perfect sense to me too, Kelly

I seriously was thinking that when i read it.

I LOVED this chapter, Mandy. And I can't wait to find out what the plan is, where they'll be heading. I seriously thought Jack had killed his fucker of a father, so glad he didnt in a way cause that would have been so bad for Jack.

littleguitar · « **Reply #151 on:** December 14, 2006, 09:59:55 pm »

You have no clue how happy it makes me that you guys liked this chapter

I was seriously worried about this one, I know I say that all the time... but this one even more so than the rest, so I'm glad no one thought I was insane

RouxB · « **Reply #152 on:** December 15, 2006, 12:38:52 am »

Quote from: Bigheart on December 14, 2006, 06:52:49 pm

I seriously thought Jack had killed his fucker of a father,

That made me laugh through my migraine pain

littleguitar · « **Reply #153 on:** December 15, 2006, 01:31:36 am »

Quote from: RouxB on December 15, 2006, 12:38:52 am

That made me laugh through my migraine pain

oh migraine

God, feel better roux, I woke up with one tuesday morning and was a wreck... there is nothing worse.

Bigheart · « **Reply #154 on:** December 15, 2006, 04:25:40 am »

Quote from: RouxB on December 15, 2006, 12:38:52 am

That made me laugh through my migraine pain

~ but aww, migraines? *shudders* poor you

Feel better soon

coffeecat33 · « **Reply #155 on:** December 26, 2006, 09:58:05 pm »

That Little Bit of Tongue

littleguitar · « **Reply #156 on:** December 26, 2006, 10:13:14 pm »

ROFL

ok, that was unexpected

I loved it! Leslie you always find the most amazing pics of him!

coffeecat33 · « **Reply #157 on:** December 27, 2006, 01:10:45 am »

It's part of my life's work to find as many amazing photos of Jake as I can.

one_of_one · « **Reply #158 on:** December 27, 2006, 06:47:28 am »

Quote from: coffeecat33 on December 27, 2006, 01:10:45 am

It's part of my life's work to find as many amazing photos of Jake as I can.

And we are forever grateful to you for taking on this task!

Bigheart · « **Reply #159 on:** December 27, 2006, 08:44:50 am »

Quote from: one_of_one on December 27, 2006, 06:47:28 am

And we are forever grateful to you for taking on this task!

Yep! We sure are!

Pleeeeeeease don't ever stop!!

littleguitar · « **Reply #160 on:** December 31, 2006, 12:26:16 am »

Chapter 17 (final chapter

)

I hope you enjoy!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/15461.html

RouxB · « **Reply #161 on:** December 31, 2006, 01:12:59 am »

Lovely ending Mandy. Enough resolved but not everything tied up into a neat little package. Well done.

mvansand76 · « **Reply #162 on:** December 31, 2006, 05:43:23 am »

Hi Mandy!

The last chapter!

I loved how you ended it with the shirts... Your dialogue is great and it was good to read that Jack was able to comfort Ennis now by holding him. How is Jack ever gonna get the divorce papers? Oh I forgot, this is the last chapter!

I wish that Jack would've stayed in Bobby's bed though. I think Bobby was acting tough when he said that and still needed his daddy with him. And sex right next to the little boy? Ouch! I don't know about that!

It was a great story, I think I need to read it again from start to finish!

Mel

Bigheart · « **Reply #163 on:** December 31, 2006, 06:50:21 am »

Quote from: mvansand76 on December 31, 2006, 05:43:23 am

I wish that Jack would've stayed in Bobby's bed though. I think Bobby was acting tough when he said that and still needed his daddy with him. And sex right next to the little boy? Ouch! I don't know about that!

I kind of wished that too! I think it would have been really good for Bobby to snuggle up against his father

Heh and the sex, well I guess they really needed each other at that moment but I think I would have gone into the shower or something!

Thanks for this beautiful story, Mandy

I'm really sorry to see it end

I've loved it so much for such a long time but you ended it beautifully and I thank you for that

littleguitar · « **Reply #164 on:** December 31, 2006, 01:42:43 pm »

I was wondering if anyone would say anything about that sex scene... I knew it would make a few people shudder. I'm with you, I don't think that it was the best move to make and yeah I think Bobby probably did need his dad at that point, even if he was the one to say something. I really don't have any explaination other than I think there was just so much tension after everything that happened that neither one of them could resist... they weren't thinking. I actually wrote a shower sex scene but it felt wrong... I don't know, I just kept thinking Bobby would wonder what they were getting up to in the shower together so I might as well go with my initial instinct and have them just wait till he's asleep.

(also, I find quiet sex incredibly erotic

)

Thanks for the kind words everyone, I hope this last chapter wasn't too much of a let down. A few people didn't seem to expect it to end and I know that there is a lot that I didn't tie up. $:-\$

mvansand76 · « **Reply #165 on:** December 31, 2006, 01:56:33 pm »

And of course good luck with all the other stories you are gonna write and continue (JBLAY anyone?)

littleguitar · « **Reply #166 on:** December 31, 2006, 02:01:48 pm »

LOL, if you're real nice you might get a chapter of JBLaY before I go out for the night

(That's if I can get this damn personal statement done...)

Bigheart · « **Reply #167 on:** January 01, 2007, 12:47:46 am »

Quote from: littleguitar on December 31, 2006, 01:42:43 pm

I was wondering if anyone would say anything about that sex scene... I knew it would make a few people shudder. I'm with you, I don't think that it was the best move to make and yeah I think Bobby probably did need his dad at that point, even if he was the one to say something. I really don't have any explaination other than I think there was just so much tension after everything that happened that neither one of them could resist... they weren't thinking. I actually wrote a shower sex scene but it felt wrong... I don't know, I just kept thinking Bobby would wonder what they were getting up to in the shower together so I might as well go with my initial instinct and have them just wait till he's asleep.

(also, I find quiet sex incredibly erotic )

Thanks for the kind words everyone, I hope this last chapter wasn't too much of a let down. A few people didn't seem to expect it to end and I know that there is a lot that I didn't tie up. $:-\$

Aww Mandy ~ in NO way was this last chapter a let down! Absolutely not! It was beautiful

And the sex scene didn't make me shudder at all!

And yeah, I definitely agree about the quiet sex

I thought Ennis's hand over Jack's mouth was incredibly erotic

So no worries and thanks again!

Oh and I will have to read JBLaY in the morning!

I SO need to sleep now!

dot-matrix · « **Reply #168 on:** January 02, 2007, 04:28:38 am »

All I'm gonna say is I cried Mandy and they were good tears. Thank You.

notBastet · « **Reply #169 on:** January 17, 2007, 06:38:46 pm »

Quote from: littleguitar on December 31, 2006, 01:42:43 pm

I was wondering if anyone would say anything about that sex scene... I knew it would make a few people shudder. I'm with you, I don't think that it was the best move to make and yeah I think Bobby probably did need his dad at that point, even if he was the one to say something. I really don't have any explaination other than I think there was just so much tension after everything that happened that neither one of them could resist... they weren't thinking. I actually wrote a shower sex scene but it felt wrong... I don't know, I just kept thinking Bobby would wonder what they were getting up to in the shower together so I might as well go with my initial instinct and have them just wait till he's asleep.

(also, I find quiet sex incredibly erotic )

Thanks for the kind words everyone, I hope this last chapter wasn't too much of a let down. A few people didn't seem to expect it to end and I know that there is a lot that I didn't tie up. $:-\$

I'm a regular reader, but a late responder - I didn't think it was a let down at all!

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