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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #20 on: October 11, 2006, 02:11:24 am »
Phoenix ~

Your poem Bittersweet is beautiful.
I love poetry myself and BBM has brought me back to writing poems after quite a while.

And, the next time your friend gives you a poem, take it and treasure it!  :)


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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #21 on: October 11, 2006, 08:51:29 pm »
Phoenix ~

Your poem Bittersweet is beautiful.
I love poetry myself and BBM has brought me back to writing poems after quite a while.

And, the next time your friend gives you a poem, take it and treasure it!  :)

Thanks alot, and i will treasure his next one.

10/11 two years ago, Christopher Reeves died :(

Today was okay, hot chocolate for breakfast keeps me alive.

No more Sin City books for me, i guess. Bill got them from the library.

I told him he looks like a elf, but not in a offensive way.

I'm breaking up with my Gf because of him (he said i should after i told him i was thinking about it)

Today was nice, except that he has a detention tomorrow, so no talking at lunch...

i'll go crazy

At home i watched GIANT, James Dean's last movie ever.

It was well acted, ecspecially by Dean (his character was so sad, i almost cried) but they didn't show him enough. He should of been shown more, IMO.

And they left him without anything to think on. His character suffered too much, and he was depraved of Elizabeth Taylor, and it was just too sad

going off to work on my short story

thank you all
"He was very afraid of being hurt. He was afraid of opening up in case it was turned around and used against him."


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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #22 on: October 11, 2006, 09:07:23 pm »
I also enjoyed your poem Bittersweet.

It reminds me very much of my own poem. Mystic Madness In The Night which is also the title of the poetry compilation I'll soon be self-publishing.
I'm not sure if its at all proper protocol to respond to a poem with a poem, but I've been doing it on Milli's thread for some time, and she hasn't complained yet.... Still have my fingers crossed on that one. :)


          The flame within me
                               burns in bright gold.
       It's tongues of fire
                              lap my soul
                 Incinerating thought
                     and memory,
           Leaving only the aching experience
                                                  which I call me.
                   The heart within
                      aches and burns
          Focusing upon some inner aspect
                               it twists and turns.
          The line of faith
                    The way of love
          The flame burns and shows light
                     Hope springs above
           What lantern lights my path,
                             casting gentle shadows?
My heart is not my own
                   but sacrificed in column-rows
           and there diced and decimated.
                       I pick up the pieces -
                  one at a time.
                     I put it back together.
            Agony erupts within
                   Time flows silent
             Words swim effortless
                    Images come unbeckoned.
There is nothing to stop them.
             Heart left alone -
               Too often not at home.
         One doorway leads to another.
                  Icy breath smothers.
There is nothing to stop me.
           Dreams become reality.
                    Focus lost within.
           Will fades to dimmest gray.
               Still I suffer.
Why do we consume what we consume?
Why do we believe what we believe?
Why do we accept what we accept?
You have a body, a mind, and a soul.... You have a responsibility.

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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #23 on: October 11, 2006, 11:09:02 pm »
I also enjoyed your poem Bittersweet.

It reminds me very much of my own poem. Mystic Madness In The Night which is also the title of the poetry compilation I'll soon be self-publishing.
I'm not sure if its at all proper protocol to respond to a poem with a poem, but I've been doing it on Milli's thread for some time, and she hasn't complained yet.... Still have my fingers crossed on that one. :)


          The flame within me
                               burns in bright gold.
       It's tongues of fire
                              lap my soul
                 Incinerating thought
                     and memory,
           Leaving only the aching experience
                                                  which I call me.
                   The heart within
                      aches and burns
          Focusing upon some inner aspect
                               it twists and turns.
          The line of faith
                    The way of love
          The flame burns and shows light
                     Hope springs above
           What lantern lights my path,
                             casting gentle shadows?
My heart is not my own
                   but sacrificed in column-rows
           and there diced and decimated.
                       I pick up the pieces -
                  one at a time.
                     I put it back together.
            Agony erupts within
                   Time flows silent
             Words swim effortless
                    Images come unbeckoned.
There is nothing to stop them.
             Heart left alone -
               Too often not at home.
         One doorway leads to another.
                  Icy breath smothers.
There is nothing to stop me.
           Dreams become reality.
                    Focus lost within.
           Will fades to dimmest gray.
               Still I suffer.


it sounds good.  ;)

I will post on someone elses when i have time, but i'm really busy with my short story (which is of course inspired by Brokeback Mountain) its for a school contest, and i so long to win. its due friday ;D
"He was very afraid of being hurt. He was afraid of opening up in case it was turned around and used against him."


Heaven holds a sense of wonder

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w0VVoScBd4k

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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #24 on: October 13, 2006, 08:24:48 pm »
These last two days...there are not words to express how horrible they were and how i felt

10/12

I got my first detention assigned Thursday for not bringing my Literature Book to class. >:( That, IMO, is a very stupid reason to ruin someones pride and esteem. I have to serve it Monday.

Bill was absent, and well, would of had to serve a detention he got for not putting a book cover on his book anyway.

I got a D on my midterm in Journalism, and i felt stupid. I'm a A/B honor roll student, who is in Honor's English, and i get a D in a easy class? My mom flipped, and of course blamed it on the computer :laugh:
But its a B already, i just had to turn in something i had neglected to. ;D

I stayed up really late finishing my Short Story for the contest. It came out bad IMO, but oh well, i knew i wouldn't win

10/13
even worse. I usually DO NOT have bad luck on friday the 13th, but geez i did today.
First, i'm dead tired from the night before. I hardly get to talk to Bill. He had to make up his detention since he wasn't at school the day he was suppose to serve it. That means i will have to freaking wait till Tuesday to have contact with him....
My Girlfriend told me about a 'rumor' was going around that i was going to break up with her, and she was trying to make me feel bad. It was a very stupid attempt, but i had to tell her something, so i said i hadn't decided yet. I should of denied the charges, but i wasn't thinking straight, because Bill had went home early, and i couldn't talk to him on our long walk to our buses. I have the worst luck in the world.

I have 50 pages for homework
My nephew his here for the weekend  :'( i'm not happy anymore.

One thing thats good, is i might got to the movies Sunday with a friend of mine. We want to see The Grudge 2 :D

peace. And i'm working on a new Poem, that will be about being a loner/outcast aka, me
"He was very afraid of being hurt. He was afraid of opening up in case it was turned around and used against him."


Heaven holds a sense of wonder

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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #25 on: October 15, 2006, 12:08:04 am »
10/14

I've found the best song of 2006

Hurt by Christina Augilera



what a ballad. Her best song ever, AND PUSH ALL OTHER PRE-NOTIONS YOU HAVE AGAINST AUGILERA. This song is really different from her other works, its very sad, i almost cried.

I'm making a brokeback Mountain music video with it! :o

Its that good.

I made a Texas Chainsaw Massacre Music video using the song "I Love the Dead'  :D

it turned out great.

I downloaded something new to help make the pictures I make look better

not a bad day, tomorrow I'm seeing The Grudge 2

I haven't read the last two chapters of Two Crows Joy, and i don't know when i will!
« Last Edit: October 15, 2006, 12:09:39 am by RebelWithSadness »
"He was very afraid of being hurt. He was afraid of opening up in case it was turned around and used against him."


Heaven holds a sense of wonder

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w0VVoScBd4k

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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #26 on: October 16, 2006, 06:28:05 pm »
Some people, wow, how can they be so rude?

10/15

I saw The Grudge 2 with a friend. It was atroscious. Too repeditve, and stupid. Only like two parts made me jump or even skip a beat. It was freaky, but hardly worth making a movie over. The first one, IMO, is the scariest movie of the passed 10 years. People love to hate both  ::)

10/16

My first detention, figures. It wasn't bad at all, today wasn't bad at all, actually.

Well...i had to do my Journalism homework in class, and i felt bad about the teacher accepting it late, without any consequences for me.

Bill gave me another poem and i'm keeping this one  ;)

its called Insanity, and it goes very smoothly. Thats one gift he has, the gift of smooth.

he told me something that hasn't left my mind all day, and i feel sick thinking about it.......................

After school, i was walking outside to my bus, and Bill came up behind me as usual, and i handed him my poem (see below "Painkiller") anyways, he stops in front of the school, which is unusual, mainly because his bus is all the way at the end of the line. I asked if he was waiting on someone, and he said

"Yes. I get a ride home now, since my bus driver sexually assaulted me.............."

All i could do is stare, and i looked at him and we kept a gaze, something that we rarely do, and i said

"Theres always something." He agreed, and thats it.

I felt ill till i got home from school, everyone was pressuring me to tell them what was wrong. But i told no one, i just told a friend that it was something that Bill had said, which was more than enough.

that kid will never get a break, and him saying that, or rather admiting that to me kind of made/ruined my day. It almost bittersweet, god, i hope he has 7th period lunch next semester.

I'm making a Brokeback Mountain music video.  :D

i'll post it when i'm done

this is my new poem that i gave Bill

Pain Killer

All this time around old companions
But still i sit abandoned
damned by my solitude
never finding the amplitude
that would send me to completion

I've never seen the light
I always plummet before its here
Ever more to remain sober
from its uplifting essence

I'm deprived
in an unsettling way
but still i can yell
in this hell
but i cannot tell
that you are my morphine
you make me,
sympathy
And i can't understand why
I'm suppose to Die



oddly its kind of about him..... THOUGHTS?
"He was very afraid of being hurt. He was afraid of opening up in case it was turned around and used against him."


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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #27 on: October 16, 2006, 06:38:10 pm »
Your poem is very interesting because there are quite a few contradictions and contrasts in it, especially in the title which talks about pain killer but it also seems to talk about the source of your pain. It seems to me like you are saying that sympathizing with your friend makes your pain go away, but you "die" or "plummet" before that can happen and so you miss it. Am I right? Excellent poem with lot of visuals. BTW I went to the poetry "slam" last night and that was the first time I ever heard this type of poetry. It was so intense, I started crying tho I didn't know exactly why.
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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #28 on: October 16, 2006, 06:46:42 pm »
Your poem is very interesting because there are quite a few contradictions and contrasts in it, especially in the title which talks about pain killer but it also seems to talk about the source of your pain. It seems to me like you are saying that sympathizing with your friend makes your pain go away, but you "die" or "plummet" before that can happen and so you miss it. Am I right? Excellent poem with lot of visuals. BTW I went to the poetry "slam" last night and that was the first time I ever heard this type of poetry. It was so intense, I started crying tho I didn't know exactly why.

Poetry of this type? lol, i'm not quite sure what you mean... Thanks for reading my poem.

This poem is odd.

It means, i will not find complete happiness or self-content, but YOU (my crush) are my pain killer, he helps the time pass by, and makes the road a tad less bumpy. No, i'm still not quite uplifted, but his friendship is a good distraction from it all.

And when i say 'I'm suppose to die" i mean, that through all this pain and abandonment, one should be dead emotionally or physically, but my pain killer keeps that away.
« Last Edit: October 19, 2006, 05:34:14 pm by RebelWithSadness »
"He was very afraid of being hurt. He was afraid of opening up in case it was turned around and used against him."


Heaven holds a sense of wonder

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w0VVoScBd4k

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Re: I miss you on weekends
« Reply #29 on: October 16, 2006, 11:06:30 pm »


My newest Brokeback Music Video, very, very sad. The song is Hurt by Christina Aguilera

BUT!!!!

even if you don't like pop (like me) you will like this video. The song is so good, i think it has cross over appeal. Please supply feedback ;)

Phoenix
"He was very afraid of being hurt. He was afraid of opening up in case it was turned around and used against him."


Heaven holds a sense of wonder

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w0VVoScBd4k