The Heart of the Matter

[Scott6373]

Chapter 1

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/667.html

Chapter 2

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/790.html

[Scott6373]

Chapter 3

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/1072.html

[mvansand76]

Hi Scott,

I liked reading the first two chapters, I thought the ending of the 2nd chapter was especially well-written:


“Ennis?”  He stopped but didn’t turn around.  “Ennis…do you…um…still see that Jack fella?”

The thunder and storm that were outside were no match for the raging cannonade in Ennis now.  He never wanted to hear his name come out of Alma’s mouth again.  Standing rooted where he stood, the words just fell out of him.

“He’s dead.”  Then, he was out of the door, bell ringing cheerily behind him, thunder and rain crashing down on his head.  He made his way quickly down Broadway toward his truck, pausing only briefly at the Exxon long enough to notice that the “Help Wanted” sign was gone.  He continued on.

 

Thanks for posting!

[coffeecat33]

Hi Scott,
This is my favorite line, "Alma and Junior could not have invited more of the people that Ennis hated if they tried." Nice story. And are you headed toward Ennis meeting someone new in Casper - say the stable owner? I think you have the right tone in your story. You may consider a beta-reader to help just a little with smoothing out the flow of words. Keep going.
cc33 / Leslie
ps Mendelson wrote the wedding procession for a friend of his, not Wagner. Wagner would be a bit overwhelming for a little church wedding. 

[Scott6373]

Thanks for the suggestion.  Actually Felix wrote the traditional recessional music.  The traditional processional music is indeed Wagner...from "Lohengrin", and is in fact called "The Bridal Chorus".

[coffeecat33]

I stand corrected.  sorry.  cc33

[Scott6373]

Chapter 4

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/1506.html#cutid1

[ifyoucantfixit]

Chapter 1

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/667.html

Chapter 2

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/790.html

                   I like your new title also..scott

[Scott6373]

Chapter 5

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/1575.html

[Scott6373]

Chapter 6

http://scotth6373.livejournal.com/1889.html