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The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« on: February 26, 2007, 08:42:41 pm »
Guys, I've started a new story  :-\

Um, here you go...


The Bull and Its Rider, Chapter 1

http://minchout.livejournal.com/22244.html

As always, comments and con. crit. welcome!


and if anyone is annoyed by me starting a new thread for this, let me know and I'll move it to one of my other threads....
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‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by me
« Reply #1 on: February 26, 2007, 09:25:48 pm »
What a lovely start! You have such vivid details of the place and the characters and their feelings. I'm really looking forward to more.
Thank you!
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by me
« Reply #2 on: February 26, 2007, 09:39:43 pm »
Thanks Fernly! I'm glad you think my descriptions are vivid  :-*

Thanks for the comment!
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‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #3 on: February 26, 2007, 10:05:50 pm »
I am not annoyed at all and thank you for starting the thread. I did modify the header to put your name in there, to make it clearer who the author was. My opinion....don't hide your light under a bushel!

Thanks for sharing...

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #4 on: February 27, 2007, 12:24:37 am »
Oh good, thanks Leslie! I just have three different threads going over here so I didn't want to be the crazy girl trying to take over the board  ;)  But if no one minds I'll leave it!
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‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #5 on: February 27, 2007, 05:31:42 am »
Well I don't mind at all, Mandy!  :-*

**SPOILERS**

I'm in Mandy! Great start! WOW! How do you do it??!

I love Jack going out at night to watch the stars and I loved how you had Ennis come into the story :) It's comforting to me knowing Ennis will be around the ranch now. Poor Jack :( *sigh*
I loved this little line, it's beautiful:

He grinned at her, a playful sparkle that warmed the air the woman breathed,

I have absolutely no problems with the age difference, it's hardly anything to me.

Looking forward to more, Mandy!  :-*
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #6 on: February 27, 2007, 06:43:45 am »
Quote from: littleguitar on February 26, 2007, 08:42:41 pm
Guys, I've started a new story  :-\

Um, here you go...


The Bull and Its Rider, Chapter 1

http://minchout.livejournal.com/22244.html

As always, comments and con. crit. welcome!


and if anyone is annoyed by me starting a new thread for this, let me know and I'll move it to one of my other threads....

What is that undecided smiley doing there? No need for that!!!! I am gonna read this today and come back and comment!
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #7 on: February 27, 2007, 09:41:49 am »
Well, I'm hooked -

I was trying to limit the number of fics I was reading, thinking I would wait for some to be completed before starting others, but when I read this:

Sometimes they felt as numerous as the stars in that sky he loved so much. But most nights, he could feel their passing, the ticking away of them loud in his ears as he wished that just for once he had more time to be at peace with the world.

and this:

He couldn’t remember ever wishing for night to fade into day, but if it meant seeing this man more clearly then he’d wish for it with all his heart.

How am I supposed to resist?  Now I'll have to go and find the rest of your fics and get sucked into them, too.  Might as well wave the white flag and surrender completely!  LOL!!

Thanks,
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #8 on: February 27, 2007, 10:18:19 am »
Quote from: mariez on February 27, 2007, 09:41:49 am
Well, I'm hooked -

I was trying to limit the number of fics I was reading, thinking I would wait for some to be completed before starting others, but when I read this:

Sometimes they felt as numerous as the stars in that sky he loved so much. But most nights, he could feel their passing, the ticking away of them loud in his ears as he wished that just for once he had more time to be at peace with the world.

and this:

He couldn’t remember ever wishing for night to fade into day, but if it meant seeing this man more clearly then he’d wish for it with all his heart.

How am I supposed to resist?  Now I'll have to go and find the rest of your fics and get sucked into them, too.  Might as well wave the white flag and surrender completely!  LOL!!

Thanks,
Marie

wow Marie, that is some gift you have there, saying exactly what i was thinking!! ;).

Maybe we could start a support group  ;D
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #9 on: February 27, 2007, 10:29:28 am »
Quote from: Snuitje on February 27, 2007, 06:43:45 am
What is that undecided smiley doing there? No need for that!!!! I am gonna read this today and come back and comment!

LOL Mel, the undecided smiliey is me thinking that I'm insane for starting a third story... and, to top it off, this isn't even the story I was planning on starting, this just randomly came out when I sat down to work on JBLaY yesterday.

So, I have a fourth plot bunny rolling around in my head now. But, too bad that story requires a lot of research, and I just don't think I can handle that at the moment...
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‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #10 on: February 27, 2007, 10:31:13 am »
Quote from: belbbmfan on February 27, 2007, 10:18:19 am
wow Marie, that is some gift you have there, saying exactly what i was thinking!! ;).

Maybe we could start a support group  ;D


LOL, can I join?

Thanks you two, I'm really glad you're enjoying it, and that you liked those lines!  :-*
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‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #11 on: February 27, 2007, 10:34:39 am »
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It's comforting to me knowing Ennis will be around the ranch now.

Me too... in the beginning I hadn't planned on bringing Ennis in at all until much later in the story, but then I just couldn't do it, I had to have them together  ::)

I'm glad you don't mind the age difference, I really hadn't even thought that much about it until I started getting comments on it. 5 years doesn't seem that far apart to me, either. Though, I guess it'd be different if Jack was 21 and Ennis 26...

Thanks for the lovely comments, June!  :-*
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‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #12 on: February 27, 2007, 12:12:17 pm »
That BASTARD John Twist!  >:(

I am glad that in my story he is dead and buried!  :laugh: You do write him well though!

I hope Jack is gonna go back to school. I love to read that his teachers asked about him!

So Jack is 16 and Ennis 21?  :o I bet Jack's almost 17 and you are gonna make them wait until Jack's 18, like in BFF!  :laugh:
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #13 on: February 27, 2007, 02:46:32 pm »
Quote from: belbbmfan on February 27, 2007, 10:18:19 am
wow Marie, that is some gift you have there, saying exactly what i was thinking!! ;).

Maybe we could start a support group  ;D

LOL!!  There's a lot of that "great minds" stuff floating around, Fabienne!  And, yes, a support group is a great idea.  I'll step up to the microphone first - "My name is Marie and I'm a Brokebackaholic - and I don't want to be cured." 

Great to see you, Fabienne - hope you had a great holiday!   :)

Marie
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #14 on: February 27, 2007, 03:00:11 pm »
Quote from: mariez on February 27, 2007, 02:46:32 pm
LOL!!  There's a lot of that "great minds" stuff floating around, Fabienne!  And, yes, a support group is a great idea.  I'll step up to the microphone first - "My name is Marie and I'm a Brokebackaholic - and I don't want to be cured." 

Great to see you, Fabienne - hope you had a great holiday!   :)

Marie

*takes the microphone from Marie* 'My name is Fabienne and i'm a brokaholic and fanfic-aholic. And i don't want to be cured'  ;D

We had a great week in Italy Marie, thanks! good to be back.



So, my dear author, when do we get our next 'fix'??  ;)
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #15 on: February 27, 2007, 10:29:17 pm »
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So Jack is 16 and Ennis 21?   I bet Jack's almost 17 and you are gonna make them wait until Jack's 18, like in BFF! 


LOL I'm not good at evil! I'll leave the incredibly frustrating sexual tension to Sienna, queen of angst! Though, you're right, Jack is almost 17  :)


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So, my dear author, when do we get our next 'fix'?? 


Soon I think, I can't get this one out of my head... (even though I should be working on JBLaY  :-\)


Thanks everyone for the comments! I was actually really worried about this one!
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‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #16 on: February 28, 2007, 12:12:56 am »
Quote from: belbbmfan on February 27, 2007, 03:00:11 pm
*takes the microphone from Marie* 'My name is Fabienne and i'm a brokaholic and fanfic-aholic. And i don't want to be cured'  ;D

"My name is Coffeecat and I'm a Gyllenhaalic, Brokaholic, and a fan-fic slash writer-reader! I don't want to be cured, either!"

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #17 on: March 26, 2007, 03:38:43 pm »
Chapter 2 is up!!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/


I love this story!  :)
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #18 on: March 26, 2007, 07:09:07 pm »
Quote from: belbbmfan on March 26, 2007, 03:38:43 pm
Chapter 2 is up!!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/


I love this story!  :)

Thanks for the heads up, Fabienne.  I love it, too.  Gorgeous writing!

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #19 on: March 27, 2007, 11:04:27 pm »
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #20 on: March 29, 2007, 02:02:04 am »
I was gonna try to wait until the story was more along before I started it but it just keep calling. Now, once again, I am completely hooked. I am in awe of how Minch can completely suck you into a mood from the first paragraph.

Love it, love her

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #21 on: March 29, 2007, 08:18:47 pm »
Thanks everyone, for keeping this thread updated! I apprecaite it and am really glad you're enjoying the story  ;D
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-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #22 on: March 30, 2007, 08:33:19 pm »
And I am glad you are here to tell us you're glad  ;D


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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #23 on: April 03, 2007, 07:31:12 am »
Chapter 4 is up!

http://minchout.livejournal.com/25108.html


SPOILER



"Jack was full of dreams and hopes, most of which he knew, in the deepest part of the night when even the stars seemed to dull, were foolish things that would never come to pass. But Ennis was brighter than all of those. Jack saw life there."


Isn't that beautiful? 


Marie
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #24 on: April 03, 2007, 11:32:46 am »
Oh, Marie! You're doing it again!  :) That was my favorite line too. Beautiful writing. Can't wait for more.

Thanks Littleguitar
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #25 on: April 10, 2007, 11:10:07 pm »
All of Mandy's stories are good, but this one is even better! I recommend it.
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar-Chapter 5 up!
« Reply #26 on: April 13, 2007, 02:01:42 am »
Chapter 5 is up!  AND it is SWEET  :D

http://minchout.livejournal.com/26748.html#cutid1
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #27 on: April 13, 2007, 06:58:40 am »
That's for letting us know!

I love this story  :)


*off to read*
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #28 on: April 13, 2007, 09:49:30 am »
Quote from: belbbmfan on April 13, 2007, 06:58:40 am
That's for letting us know!

I love this story  :) 

I do too - it's worth repeating.

It’s hard to put into words how it felt for him to smile at the sun, to take pride in the earth and to have the joy he felt at the day make the night all that much brighter. He’d managed to bring day with him, earth to his sacred night. The two had melded in a way he hadn’t thought possible.


"...earth to his sacred night...."  Sigh. 

Marie
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #29 on: April 22, 2007, 01:39:38 am »
Chapter 6 is up and it's excellent as always but has some twist at the end  :-\

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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #30 on: April 22, 2007, 11:11:09 am »
*slight spoiler*

I loved this chapter as I do all the others but the end of this one... *gulp*  :-\ what will happen now!?
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #32 on: May 10, 2007, 12:01:25 pm »
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Re: The Bull and Its Rider, by littleguitar
« Reply #33 on: May 10, 2007, 11:14:33 pm »
Another great chapter  :-*
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