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New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
louisev:
And here is chapter 5:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/257838.html
mariez:
SPOILERS
Aww..this is was wrenching, Louise. Poor Pam.
Her sister was curled up next to Socks, the stall door still slightly ajar, a tissue pressed against her nose, her once violent sobs now quiet and occasional, one hand stroking the silken neck of the old mare, whose eyes were half closed, dozing lightly
Finding comfort in horses, just like her Daddy. Heartbreaking how much her mother's terrible words have hurt Pam. Right now Laura is understandably the "dried up old hag" in their eyes - and their Daddy is the Knight in Shining Armor. But I do wonder, the longer they stay in Tourmaline, the more time they spend with Daddy and the more distance they have from their mother....will the line begin to blur somewhat between "bad parent" and "good parent"?
“That’s why God made us twins, Pam,” Katie whispered against her sister’s ear. “So we’d never have ta be alone.”
Lovely and touching. Terrific writing, as always, Louise.
Thanks,
Marie
belbbmfan:
I agree Marie.
The choice of words Katie Ann uses to describe her mother shows how the black-and-white vision she's been confronted with at home with her mother has influenced her.
One things sure, the girls couldn't be at a better place than the ranch right now. Wes and Edna have a tough job on their hands, but nothing they can't handle I'm sure.
louisev:
and here is chapter 6
http://louisev.livejournal.com/258207.html
mariez:
SPOILERS
“Is this about what happened? Oh sweetheart,” Edna said, giving Pam a quick hug
Aww...a bittersweet moment, because that's the love and comfort Pam should be getting from her mother. Sigh. How many times have we thought "Thank God for Edna?"
“Intimidation value,” Edna said, and gave Pam a wink. “It’s worked on quite a few lunatic situations over the years, you’ll be surprised how much respect Wesley can eke out a that uniform an hat.”
Considering how intimidated Laura was the one time she spoke to Wes over the phone, it's probably not necessary - but it is good to see that they are pulling out all the stops to ensure things don't get any more out of hand than they already are.
I know better than to even try and predict what will happen next! ;)
Thanks, Louise!
Marie
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