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Through the Veil of Time
mariez:
Another chapter? :) You are smokin', Your Highness - and we love it!
Congratulations on Chapter 30 - and what a warm, wonderful chapter it is!
I really enjoyed seeing the funny, inquisitive side of KE. The categories are great! And I'm glad he's asking questions as well as observing - shows he's making a sincere effort to appreciate and understand!
Of course, you know me - this is my favorite part ...
“I am married. I am married in my heart and if ya think a marriage as a covenant between two people, well, we’re prob’ly the most married people here ...
and "covenant" is one of my favorite words! :)
It's going to be hard for Ennis (and for me) to say good-bye to KE.
Thanks again!
Marie
MaineWriter:
Thanks, Marie!
I have been struggling with the judging...it seemed sort of boring to write, "And then Ennis stood up and gave X certficate to X..." As I pondered it, I realized the reason that Ennis asked KE to help him with the judging...and you just read the results.
Yes, a covenant, as in a solemn promise. Ennis believes himself to be married, and is married, and hates it when the government reminds him otherwise.
Thanks for being a loyal reader and commenter! I so appreciate it!
Leslie
haunted_by_bbm:
--- Quote from: MaineWriter on January 27, 2007, 04:46:20 pm ---Through The Veil Of Time
Chapter 30. Judging Time
http://lazylfarm.livejournal.com/28847.html
Thirty chapters seems like a milestone, so I'll give a little synopsis. This story is a sequel to "A Love Born From Steel." It begins in May 2006 with Jack and Ennis, now 63, living on the Lazy L Farm in Quanah, TX. I started it in response to a prompt to "do something with Jack and Ennis in the present."
Lots of sharing about their love, their lives, and their happiness...thirty years on.
Enjoy!
Leslie
MaineWriter
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Leslie,
Like everyone else, I really loved the interaction between K.E. and Ennis. It just felt dead on perfect. I loved how Ennis used the word 'covenant,' and I also loved how he said that not being able to file jointly really pissed him off.
You always combine just the right amount of thoughtfulness with humor.
I also really loved this part:
"KE nodded, picking up another cup. “Yup, this one, this white chicken chili. I liked the way it looked ‘cause it was white. The chef is a good lookin’ gal, too.”
“Lureen?”
KE nodded and Ennis shook his head. “KE Del Mar, you are too fuckin’ much. Pretty chili and a pretty chili chef.”
“C’mon, you don’t think she’s good lookin’?”
“I s’pose, but I don’t think a Jack’s ex that way. I mostly think a her as a friend. Besides, she musta told ya she’s married.”
KE snorted. “’Course she did. C’mon, give me a break…I’m a dyin’ man goin’ home ta Wyoming in two days. I ain’t lookin’ ta get in her pants, Ennis, I’m just enjoyin’ the scenery.”
I just got such a kick out of that. lol
And this too:
“Well, I guess I got some questions, that’s all. I’m tryin’ ta understand.”
“And I guess it makes sense ta ask me the questions.”
“Well, I ain’t gonna ask that big biker guy!”
hehehe ~~~ Trying to picture 'big biker guy' explaining some of the more delicate facts to K.E.~~~ ;) lol
But this was my favorite:
“Ain’t just the truck, it’s all of it,” KE replied, raising his arm and waving it outward. “This party, yer friends, yer hospitality…” His voice dropped a notch and he gave Ennis an embarrassed smile. “You bein’ nice ta me…welcomin’ me back inta yer life.”
Ennis looked down at his hands, equally embarrassed. “Ah shit, KE…I’m beginnin’ ta think we drank too much beer and the sun is addlin’ our brains…but…thanks.”
Beautiful chapter, Leslie. As always. Thank you!
C*
belbbmfan:
I'll second what C* and Marie said. :)
I really liked this chapter, but you already knew that ;).
*sends a prayer of thanks to your muse*
Penthesilea:
Hey Leslie, I just wanted to let you know I've been back in your Lazy L world for a while now. I started reading at chapter 15 (or so) and was - again - hooked with it. Thank you for this story :-*.
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