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A Love Born From Steel - Ongoing Discussion
MaineWriter:
You should have it, Marie. I emailed it awhile ago.
Thanks for your interest!
L
mariez:
Hi!
Making my way slowly - up to Chapter 12. Just had to take a minute to ramble a little about Chapter 9!
How perfect was that wedding? :) I love how in sync J&E are with each other - no words needed between those two. Jack instinctively picking out the "lovers' braid" ring - which was, of course, just waiting for J&E. And the silversmith, Sarah - she had such a spirtual quality about her and appreciated so fully what was transpiring - how appropriate that she served as the witness to their marriage! How often it is the case that the seize-the-day, straight-from-the-heart moments in our lives turn out to be the most special!
Just wonderful, Leslie! :) :)
Thanks - Marie
MaineWriter:
I love that wedding, too, and I loved writing it. It made me very, very happy for them.
L
mariez:
--- Quote from: MaineWriter on December 23, 2006, 09:06:31 am ---I love that wedding, too, and I loved writing it. It made me very, very happy for them.
L
--- End quote ---
Leslie, you're love for J&E and your love of writing this story shines through every line! :)
A few quick thoughts on Chapter 11 -
So great that Jack "prepared" Ennis so well for his meeting with Alma at the hotel! Attention to details can make all the difference.
This just warmed my heart:
But it wasn’t just clothes, she realized. His face had a happy, relaxed look, and as he was grinning and laughing with his daughters, he looked like a man without a care in the world. Not only that, but as she looked at his face she realized that Ennis had a tan!
Quite a eye-opening moment for Alma!
I loved, loved, loved Ennis's discussion wth Junior on the way back. He was honest, open, and respectful, never talking down to her as adults sometimes feel the need to. Just wonderful.
Out of the mouths of babes:
“My mama thinks this whole thing is bad,” Junior continued. “She’s been sayin’ that for weeks.” Jack nodded at her as she said this. “But, Uncle Jack,” she paused, “I think she’s wrong. It can’t be bad if he’s this happy.”
I'll say it again - you're a smart girl, Junior!
Thanks, Leslie!
Marie
mariez:
Okay, some more ramblings on Chapters 12, 13, and 14 -
So happy the girls love the farm - and Jack - I knew they would! How could anyone not love Jack! :) I'm glad Alma agreed to two more weeks. I do feel sorry for Alma - it's kind of sad to describe the time you're having on your honeymoon as "pleasant" - and it really contrasts the difference in the relationships. J&E have a true, deep, passionate love. I'm happy that Junior and Jenny will have J&E as role models for a marriage.
Jack was right - Ennis did handle Jenny beautifully after she saw them kissing. He used the same honesty and respect as he did in his conversation with Junior.
There are so many "blasts from the past" as I'm reading - my mom's Joy of Cooking was ever present when I was growing up (she got me my own copy about ten years ago) and now the Nancy Drew books! I loved them. I wanted to be Nancy Drew and drive around in that cool convertible solving mysteries! :laugh: I still have some of the books.
Okay, I know everything can't go smoothly - but that Crocker is a real bastard - and so obvious! Jack is right that they need to hold their tempers for now - but that had to be incredibly hard for them both. >:(
My favorite moment:
Jenny had left her suitcase of Barbies. “I’d rather have them here to play with when I come visit,” she said. “That makes them special.” Jack slid the suitcase under the bed and as he did so, he saw a piece of paper. He pulled it out and looked at it. It took a minute to register, then he realized what he was looking at—a drawing by Jenny, of him and Ennis kissing. Jack smiled. It was pretty obvious who was who. They both were wearing jeans, but Jack’s shirt was blue and Ennis’s was brown. Their arms were wrapped around each other. Ennis had a mop of yellow hair while Jack’s was black. Their faces were touching and their eyes were closed. Jack loved the little touch of eyelashes for each of them. The best part—they were wearing their cowboy hats.
Jack smiled at the picture. “Ennis, ya wanted a picture of us kissin’,” he thought, “well, ya got it. I just never expected it t’be a drawing from yer daughter.”
He went into their bedroom and laid the picture on the dresser. The snapshot of them sitting on the porch was there, too. “That’s it,” he thought to himself. “Tomorrow I’m buyin’ picture frames, one for each of these.”
Perfect!
I love how Jack takes care of Ennis and how Ennis takes care of Jack - each in their own way. And I have to say - all the cooking Jack does gets me hungry while I'm reading! :laugh:
I'm glad Hal is able to come home for his last days - I know how found Ennis and Jack have become of him - and Ennis is espcially close to him. That must mean a lot to Hal. What a lovely person Jill is! She's really in sync with J&E.
The woman took his hand in both her own, “It’s wonderful to meet you, Jack,” she said. “I’m Jill Bretz, the hospice nurse from the Visiting Nurses Association.” As she finished clasping his hand in hers, her fingers rubbed against his ring and she looked at it, “Oh this is lovely,” she said. “You must’ve gotten it on July 4th.” Jack nodded. She smiled, lifting up one of her earrings. “I bought these from these from Sarah that day too.”
“They’re very pretty,” said Jack, not sure what else to say.
“Yes, I thought they were beautiful. They spoke to me. Did your ring speak to you?”
“Actually, it did,” said Jack, although he had never thought of it this way.
“Sarah is spiritual,” she said. “It comes through in her jewelry.”
Jack was feeling slightly confused about all of this. Jill didn’t look like any nurse he had ever seen—he was used to the white cap and shoes variety—and her talk of spiritual jewelry seemed a little…odd. On the other hand, everything she was saying was completely true. “I mean,” he thought to himself, “we got married there. What could be more spiritual than that?”
She's going to fit in well, isn't she? She's right - Jack is a good person - and so is Ennis.
Okay, rambled enough today!
Thanks - Marie
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