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A Love Born From Steel - Ongoing Discussion
MaineWriter:
And Marie, since you mentioned the bath....
Jack let himself go limp, feeling like a rag doll as Ennis maneuvered the washcloth down his arms, across his chest, over his neck, and behind his ears. “Ya act like a pro at this,” he mumbled, as Ennis picked up the handheld shower and wet his hair.
“I used t’wash Jenny and Junior,” he said, massaging shampoo into Jack’s scalp. “It was fun givin’ them a bath,” he said, he mind flitting back to the happy memory.
Jack smiled at him. “I hope ya weren’t dressed like that,” he said with a laugh, looking at naked Ennis kneeling next to him on the floor.
“I wasn’t, but it would’ve made sense,” he said. “I always ended up soaked.” He picked up the handheld shower again. “Lean yer head back, I don’t want t’get soap in yer eyes.”
Jack looked up at Ennis. “Nobody’s ever washed my hair before,” he said.
“Nobody?” said Ennis, surprised.
“Well, nobody who’s ever loved me,” said Jack.
“Well then, babe,” said Ennis, leaning in for a kiss. “I’m glad t’be the first.”
Ahhh....
L
mariez:
--- Quote from: MaineWriter on January 02, 2007, 09:47:02 pm ---
Jack looked up at Ennis. “Nobody’s ever washed my hair before,” he said.
“Nobody?” said Ennis, surprised.
“Well, nobody who’s ever loved me,” said Jack.
“Well then, babe,” said Ennis, leaning in for a kiss. “I’m glad t’be the first.” [/i]
Ahhh....
L
--- End quote ---
Ahhh..... is right!! I love having my hair washed! :)
On to Chapter 20 -
After so much sadness and angst, so nice to have things lighten up! Ennis and Jack bed shopping - who thought we'd ever see that day? :) And in keeping with the idea that there are no coincidences . . Ray is their salesman! Once again so proud of Ennis - Jack's love and their marriage has given him such self-confidence and peace!
“Ray?” said Jack, the color slowly coming back to his face.
The salesman nodded. “Yes, Jack, it’s me, Ray. Hi. Long time, no see.”
The three of them stood there awkwardly for a second, then somewhere, from deep inside of Ennis, a thought, and a joke, suddenly emerged. “Ray? You still eat grilled cheese-tuna-toms?”
Ray looked incredulous, then burst out laughing. Jack turned to Ennis, his jaw hanging down, almost speechless, then, “Fuck, Ennis, whatchya sayin’?”
:laugh: :laugh: Well, if that wasn't the perfect way to diffuse an awkward moment, I don't know what was! And ol' Ray was a pretty good salesman, too!
I like that Ennis was secure enough to start this conversation - and I'm so happy he got to hear this:
Ennis looked at Jack as if he still didn’t believe him. “Never fucked? Really?”
“Really. Ray absolutely didn’t want to…fuck me, I mean. He said it was okay for me to fuck him but…it’s not what’s most natural for me, En. The times I have done it with you…” he paused, thinking about it, trying to find the best way to put his thoughts into words. “With you, it’s like, I need to be inside you, because I love you so much, I want to be a part of you. And sometimes, that’s the only way to truly satisfy that desire. It doesn’t happen very often, just once in a while…but when it happens, that’s what I need.” He smiled at Ennis. “Does that make sense?”
Ennis nodded back. “Yeah, I think so.”
Jack continued. “With Ray, I never loved him, so I guess that desire was never there…the thing that pushed me to that place.”
Yes, it certainly does make sense, Jack!! :)
Renovating the bathroom? Wow, they are ambitious!
Norm Crocker's death was a surprise - but I'd be less than honest if I said I got all choked up about it:
“Jack, I’m thinkin’ of Tom, and his philosophy. ‘There are no coincidences…’ Did we make this happen?”
No, Ennis - you didn't make it happen. It's called karma.
The birth of Tom and Janet's baby girl - what a perfect way to end the chapter - and begin the next stage of Ennis and Jack's life together! :) Really lovely, Leslie!
Thanks as always, Marie
mariez:
Hi again -
Oh, good! An entire Interlude for the bed christening!!
Just beautiful - I loved all the candles - so romantic. And we have toys in our new nightstand drawers - yay! ;D But I loved that they only wanted and needed themselves for the christening.
Eventually Jack settled down, the trembling ceased, and Ennis could tell from the hitch in his breathing he was falling asleep. “Before ya go, lover,” he whispered, “look at the moon.” Jack turned and looked at the silvery light illuminating the room. “It’s full, like it was our first very first night on Brokeback and then a month later, our first time in the tent,” he said. “I will always love full moons.”
“And I will always love you,” said Jack, his voice thick, his eyes heavy lidded and no longer able to resist the forces of sleep.
“And I you,” said Ennis, pulling Jack in close, falling asleep with his lips buried in his lover’s hair, his arms holding him in an embrace that would never end, the moon shining across them in their new bed where they planned to sleep together, every night, for the rest of their lives.
Sigh. I am such a sap - but God I love happy, romantic, schmoopy endings!!!
And the Epilogues -
I am so impressed with how much thought and and all the details you put into these Epilogues (Minutia is Good! LOL!!!) Just great.
Bobby a vet! Love it. I know I'm biased - but I like to give Ennis credit for this because he helped Bobby overcome his fear of horses! :) Lureen is right - it does take a special gift to be a vet. It's nice to see that Lureen is happy, too.
Junior a librarian - how perfect! I really relate to Junior and her love of books - before I decided on law school, I considered getting a Masters in Library Science, too! And I really hope Junior writes that book - that's a story that needs to be told!
Thank God Jenny has her dad (and Jack) in her life! How sad that Alma has cut herself off from her daughter. I just can't wrap my mind around it - how can a mother do that?
I just love picturing Jack and Ennis surrounded by children and grandchildren on the Lazy L! And also being a part of a wonderful community. Really a dream come true. I'm so glad Jack's mom got to know and love Ennis - I like Jack's philosophy of mothers - if our children are happy, we're happy!
HaHa! Kissing as a therapy to quit smoking! :laugh: That would make a great infomercial! :laugh:
Jack and Ennis online! Who would have ever thought! Jack enthusiastically forwarding all those jokes - that is so funny - I think we've all been on the receiving end of that!!
Jack and Ennis going to see the movie about "two gay cowboys!" Another stroke of genius. And yeah, I like your J&E's ending better (and I wasn't too fond of that mustache, either, Jack! LOL! )
“Yeah,” said Jack, “but I bet the audience wanted more. We were hot. That reunion kiss—shit! It got me goin’ in the theater.”
Ennis smiled at him. “I remember that kiss. It was hot. But guess what?” he said, as he leaned in.
“What?” whispered Jack, feeling Ennis’s breath like fire on his face.
“This one’s gonna be hotter.”
Sigh.
I sure do wish I could have been at J&E's 30th Anniversary Party! I like just typing that!
Leslie, thank you so much for your brilliant story. I would be somewhat bereft - except that I know I can now start reading "Through the Veil of Time!" :)
Yay! I'm really looking forward to it!
Thanks again - Marie
MaineWriter:
Hey Marie,
Thanks for those great quotes and comments. I so appreciate it!
This came up in relation to another story, but in case you are wondering...
If you are standing at the foot of the bed, Ennis's side is on the left, closer to the windows, and Jack is on the right, closer to the door.
There is a blanket chest at the foot of the bed.
Any other minutia you would like to know?
L
mariez:
Hi Leslie!
You know for some reason, I always do picture Ennis on the left - don't know why that is! :)
And I am, for the moment, satisfied in the my quest for bits of minutia! But I am sure that will change. LOL!
I've started TTVOT - and am, of course, loving it!
Question for you: Because you are still writing that story - how should I comment? Will it be easier and less confusing for you on your LJ? Don't want to upset the flow of your thread here! Of course, I'm finding myself reading late at night at a good pace - I may just finish the entire story before I know it!
Thanks again - Marie
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