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Tainted Evidence by Beatriceorme
Beatrice:
Very short teaser tonight. Well, compared to last week's that is.
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“Trauma Four?” Where’s Jack? The question was tossed out there to the scrubs ebb and flow as he ran, Doc Martins squealing and sliding – “Trauma Four?” Where’s my Jack? – twisting and turning and spinning along the buffed to an eye squinting sheen linoleum, passing room after room – file, medication, supply - no luck, no peace, no Jack – “Where’s Trauma Room Four?” – asking person after person - looking for answers, searching for explanations, begging for comfort - I’m coming, Jack! I’m coming! "Trauma Four? Trauma Four?"
Modern medical science only had time for a general ‘That way’ wave as it scurried off to perform another miracle. Ennis' thanks was just as demonstrative.
Jack was shot, and he was alone. Jack was shot, and he needed help. Jack was shot, and I wasn't there.
Nurse's station, unisex rest room, bereavement area and Ennis was still running.
Jack was shot because I couldn't protect him. Jack was shot because I failed. Jack was shot -
Laundry, water fountain, housekeeping closet.
- and I can't even find him!
"Where the fuck is Trauma Room Four?"
"Ennis? What on earth are you doing here?"
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As much as it pains me to say this, #33 will not be up tomorrow. Saturday/Sunday, yes, Wednesday, no. Sorry.
B
mariez:
Hey, how did I miss this?
Where’s my Jack? –
Love that possessive pronoun! Thanks for the teaser, B! Saturday/Sunday - whatever! We'll be here!
Marie
ifyoucantfixit:
I AM SO SORRY; I hope you are doing well, and real life is just" a bitch of
an unsatisfactory situation." We all have times like that, and i hope yours
is resolved sooner rather than later..Just to know we are all waiting and
loving what you do. See you when you can make it... Janice
mvansand76:
I have to admit that until now I have had a hard time really following this story at times! Made me feel stupid at times because I didn't seem to understand what was going on in some chapters.....but..... it's so worth it because I so love your style of writing Beatrice, it's so funny and your Jack is absolutely hilarious and heartwarming! The dialogue is some of the best I have ever read.
So I have decided that I am going to wait until the story is finished, then print it and read it in one go! Will you provide me with a TE-manual (including a glossary and timeline)?
:D
belbbmfan:
--- Quote from: mvansand76 on February 15, 2007, 05:54:07 pm ---I have to admit that until now I have had a hard time really following this story at times! Made me feel stupid at times because I didn't seem to understand what was going on in some chapters.....but..... it's so worth it because I so love your style of writing Beatrice, it's so funny and your Jack is absolutely hilarious and heartwarming! The dialogue is some of the best I have ever read.
So I have decided that I am going to wait until the story is finished, then print it and read it in one go! Will you provide me with a TE-manual (including a glossary and timeline)?
:D
--- End quote ---
I know exactly what you mean Mel. I sometimes feel i should be a New Yorker to understand all the references etc. But it really helps to have it on paper and reread (which is not a bad thing alltogether ::)). Sometimes reading the comments is helpful too. Hey, maybe we can start our on thread to discuss this and do it in dutch so no one knows what kind of 'stupid' questions we have! :laugh:
You're right though, this story is very good. I like her Jack and Ennis very much.
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