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louisev:
I have posted an original fiction story - it is part romance, and part fantasy.  If you saw and enjoyed "Kate and Leopold" this is sort of the reverse:

"Your Skinny Girl"

Index:  http://louisev.livejournal.com/161282.html

Chapter 1:  http://louisev.livejournal.com/161550.html    32 chapters starting at this link.

Let me know what you think!

twistedude:
I liked it a lot, Louise (if I may call you that--you sign it so). I left you a comment--mainly picky about names---

I wish I knew if you speak German...silly question, I guess.

Cavil: Would a seasoned businessman think of a CEO as "Mr. CEO"? Even if he didn't want to be there?

louisev:
not to his face, he wouldn't!

merrobot:
I've just finished reading chapters 1 and 2 of this new story and had a couple of comments/queries:

Very interesting start - Wolfgang blaming his "hepatitis" for his sexual dysfunction which is probably more likely to be explained by the fact that Maggie "wasn't her" (i.e. a psychological rather than physical barrier to sexual function).  However, I am at a complete loss how the diagnosis of Hepatitis C Virus (HCV) was made.  It was my understanding that many HCV carriers tend to remain asymptomatic and when they do present with symptoms in the acute phase they are typically non-descript (fever, nausea, jaundice).  I wonder what would prompt the ER doctor to come up with this diagnosis in the absence of a blood test - does Wolfgang have a history of IV drug use, haemophilia (leading to risk of infected blood transfusion) or has he been exposed via sex with an infected partner?  I also don't know what purpose antibiotics would serve as there is no mention of a related bacterial infection.  Perhaps all will become clearer as I read on!

ETA:  Having read chapter 4 I'm wondering if WP has alcohol-related hepatitis rather than HCV given that he does seem to have an alcohol dependence problem.  Also, hepatitis is not like the flu - it doesn't infect people in waves, and obviously is not passed from person to person if it is alcohol-related.  I believe that Hepatitis A infection is more easily acquired and perhaps this is what Wolfgang was referring to as travellers to developing countries are at risk of HAV infection if they are not vaccinated.  Which begs the question has he "been sent" outside the Western world.

ifyoucantfixit:
               louise i did read your book,,,chapter 1-4 and all the rest...i found it a very interesting and challenging read..a type of mystery if you will.  is the man a madman.  is he having psychotic episodes, or is it an alcohol induced hallucination...it was a very fun and puzzling story to decipher..and i didnt pick on an insignificant detail about how a diagnosis might be made...it wasnt my job..i wasnt writing the story...i didnt find the realism to be compromised one way or the other by the way he was discovered to have the disease...                   thank you for a fun read,,janice

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