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The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
gwyllion:
Hi fernly! Aaaahh mariez, such a sad and lonely Jack :(. It's nice how the tension builds because we know where he is crazy to be ;).
gwyllion:
Here mariez, I hope you don't mind,but I was feeling creative and bored with work today, so I added to yours. Maybe we can find a third contributor? Fern? Anyone?
--- Quote from: mariez on April 07, 2009, 08:35:51 pm ---In the Shadows
Jack undressed quietly and paused to peer through the bedroom window, the moonlight casting shadows on the driveway as the trees rustled in the wind. How many times had he looked down from his bedroom window as a child as that same moon cast shadows on the dirt drive leading to that gravel road stretching south.
He was a thousand miles south of Lightning Flat now, but as he climbed into bed next to his sleeping wife, he knew he hadn't traveled so very far after all. Still crazy to be somewhere else. Still living in the shadows of life.
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He tried to relax, listening to Lureen’s soft breath on the pillow beside him, but the familiar pang of emptiness stabbed his heart. If anything, it was he who was nothing… he who was nowhere.
A tear silently fell. In the shadows of his marital bed, he resolved that he would somehow convince Ennis to change his mind. Like tweezers picking at a thin shard of splinter that had festered and inflamed the surrounding delicate skin, it would hurt at first, but Jack hoped the ensuing relief and healing would be worth the pain of the initial digs and probes.
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mariez:
--- Quote from: Gwyllion on April 08, 2009, 03:56:29 pm ---Here mariez, I hope you don't mind,but I was feeling creative and bored with work today, so I added to yours. Maybe we can find a third contributor? Fern? Anyone?
He tried to relax, listening to Lureen’s soft breath on the pillow beside him, but the familiar pang of emptiness stabbed his heart. If anything, it was he who was nothing… he who was nowhere.
A tear silently fell. In the shadows of his marital bed, he resolved that he would somehow convince Ennis to change his mind. Like tweezers picking at a thin shard of splinter that had festered and inflamed the surrounding delicate skin, it would hurt at first, but Jack hoped the ensuing relief and healing would be worth the pain of the initial digs and probes.
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Hi Gwyllion - no I don't mind at all. In fact, I think it's a cool idea! And I really like how you brought some "hope" along with your beautifully written addition. And you used all three of the prompts - way to go. If I find some time, I may add on myself! Thanks! :)
Marie
gwyllion:
Hope, indeed. Thanks mariez. I am still devastated by the story's conclusion. There has to be hope...
Hey, I didn't use "libido." Now, there's a lovely hope-filled word!
Help!
Luvlylittlewing:
--- Quote from: Gwyllion on April 07, 2009, 11:12:21 am ---Thanks so much Littlewing! I have recently become obsessed with the boys and feel urgently compelled to write about them.
I admired your writing in the "Introducing the "Jack with Ennis" Fan Fic Game - the BetterMost Edition" all day yesterday. I'm only on page 35 of the post and have it so noted on a Post-it note on my desk so I can pick up where I left off later today. If only I didn't have to work! Your writing is simply beautiful.
Here are some silly Drabble prompts that crossed my mind last night if anyone would like to give it a try!
* tweezers
* libido
* driveway
Have fun!
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Thanks for your kind words, Sweetness! I really appreciate it! :-*
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