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Camden Yards by debutante9 (Kumari)
mvansand76:
OK, I am ready to formulate a coherent comment now... :P
1. I thought the conversation between Bobby and Junior was spot-on and the whole teenage banter was exquisite.
2. So, I think I was right about Bobby, he didn't freak out about the pic he found on his dad's computer.
3. I thought it was so cute when Jack said "You're a good kisser". He really is very impressed with E's skills in this department, isn't he? I love that!
4. Adored the part where E smelled Jack before kissing and asked if he had shaved and J said no, then yes and then I can't talk about it. God, how adorable can he get? Not wanting to admit he wanted to look good for him.
5. The little hint that E has looked at J other than 'just' his best friend: what he thought about J's hair.
6. The awkwardness: God how real! The Febreze! LOL!
7. Everything Jack said, he really has it bad, doesn't he? But so does Ennis, as he realises that this can only go forward now.
I will write more later....
mariez:
LOL! Have I read it? You bet. I read it. And I re-read it. And I re-read it. And I re-read it. Holy 'effin Moly.
Ditto on all seven points. I adore Bobby. He's a combination of CY Jack and CY Lureen. He has Jack's razor sharp wit and vulnerability combined with Lureen's cynicism. Interesting that Alma and Ennis waited until after Junior was born before getting married - didn't look like they had kept it a secret from her. I'm not surprised that Alma was pregnant before they got married, but I'm a little surprised that they waited until after Junior was born to actually go through with a ceremony. Wonder what the story is there.
Felt a pang for Alma at the beginning when she is reflexively giving Ennis a little massage ...
And I also felt a pang for Bobby when he asked Jack about going fishing - I hope Jack doesn't disappoint him. Will he go "fishing" with Ennis instead? Another pang for Bobby seeing how bad he's got it for Junior.
No, Bobby didn't freak out about the picture, which makes sense - but he is very concerned about the possibility of his parents spllitting up ..... and if Junior thinks that looking at porn constitutes "cheating" - well, holy shit if she knew the truth. Also interesting that Bobby was defensive of Jack to Lureen...
The awkwardness was perfect and adorable and, in its own way, very hawt. And, yeah, Ennis is admitting to himself that he's been looking at Jack as more than his best friend for a while now...
I'll never look at Listerine, Febreze, Jiffy cornbread mix or Country Time lemonade in the same way ....
God, yes, they both have it so bad. Jesus, what an ending.... Double Guh.
Gotta run - I'll be back later, too!
mvansand76:
--- Quote from: mariez on August 09, 2007, 10:58:24 am ---LOL! Have I read it? You bet. I read it. And I re-read it. And I re-read it. And I re-read it. Holy 'effin Moly.
I'll never look at Listerine, Febreze, Jiffy cornbread mix or Country Time lemonade in the same way ....
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mvansand76:
You know what I think? I think they Jack and Bobby will go on the fishing trip with Ennis. Doesn't Jack always go on fishing trips with Ennis? Jack had already told Ennis that Bobby wanted to go with them! That will be interesting!
I love how Jack voices everything in words and Ennis in actions. Like when Jack says that he is confused about everything and Ennis just buries his face in Jack's neck to devour him (*guh*)
So, do you mean that they got married because Alma was pregnant, that that was the main reason? :-\
Yeah holy shit if she knew the truth! LOL! I can't imagine how she is gonna write that, because I can't even imagine this kind of betrayal. But it is inevitable, isn't it, Ennis realised that.
I loved how he was able to admit to himself that he had looked at Jack's hair because he was lying under him now! Hahaha! I adored that! When he said that thing about Jack's hair, he kind of admitted to Jack that he had been thinking about him like that and that's why Jack said "What if we've always been like this?" God, I thought that was beautiful!
--- Quote from: mariez on August 09, 2007, 10:58:24 am ---I'll never look at Listerine, Febreze, Jiffy cornbread mix or Country Time lemonade in the same way ....
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Hahaha, well, we only have the first two on the market here in Holland, but that's enough to have a fit in the supermarket!
:laugh:
mariez:
--- Quote from: Snavel del Snuit on August 09, 2007, 01:29:20 pm ---You know what I think? I think they Jack and Bobby will go on the fishing trip with Ennis. Doesn't Jack always go on fishing trips with Ennis? Jack had already told Ennis that Bobby wanted to go with them! That will be interesting!
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I hope that's the way it goes. I'd like to see Bobby go along with them - I think he is in desperate need of some sincere attention from his dad. I think he's craving it, as a matter of fact. It would bother me if Jack, in a fit of lust, makes some excuse so that he and Ennis can go alone. But, I totally suck at predictions. I didn't see this chapter coming at all - I thought we were going to go through a lot more hemming and hawing on Ennis's part (and who knows, that might kick in later? :-\)
--- Quote from: Snavel del Snuit on August 09, 2007, 01:29:20 pm ---I love how Jack voices everything in words and Ennis in actions. Like when Jack says that he is confused about everything and Ennis just buries his face in Jack's neck to devour him (*guh*)
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Yeah, Jack's a talker, that's for sure. But Ennis does manage to get his point across. ;) I could listen to CY Jack talk all day. One of my favorite AU/AU Jacks. Cracks me up how he's always calling Ennis while he's in the middle of a conversation with someone else, or yelling at a driver on the road. :laugh:
--- Quote from: Snavel del Snuit on August 09, 2007, 01:29:20 pm ---So, do you mean that they got married because Alma was pregnant, that that was the main reason? :-\
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Sorry, Mel - my thoughts on that were very poorly worded (and I'm a native English speaker :laugh:) Here's the part of Junior and Bobby's conversation:
"Oh my God! Did I tell you?! I finally found out why Chiquita Banana is one of my 50 nicknames. Bananas, it was my favorite baby food flavor so your Dad started calling me that.”
“How could that have happened? It doesn’t work out that you’re almost 16.”
“I was already born when my parents got married. You didn’t know that?”
“No! I didn’t, that’s...whoa. Not expected. Check out Playa Ennis, laying pipe...”
Bobby cracks me up! But.... I'm wondering why Alma and Ennis waited so long to get married. It's not unusual for a woman to get pregnant and then the couple gets married. But why did they wait until after Junior was born to get married? I'm wondering if there is a story there. Remember that chapter when Ennis is buying Alma some pajamas for her birthday? A line stuck in my head. After he buys them, he tells Jack that he usually ends up with the first thing he sees. I'm not saying he doesn't love Alma, but was she the "first thing he saw"?
--- Quote from: Snavel del Snuit on August 09, 2007, 01:29:20 pm ---Yeah holy shit if she knew the truth! LOL! I can't imagine how she is gonna write that, because I can't even imagine this kind of betrayal. But it is inevitable, isn't it, Ennis realised that.
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Yes, and this is the most intriguing aspect of this fic. The long-time friendship, the dynamics between the families, and this inevitable betrayal. You could tell that Junior likes the fact that Jack has 50 nicknames for her - he's made her feel special.
--- Quote from: Snavel del Snuit on August 09, 2007, 01:29:20 pm ---I loved how he was able to admit to himself that he had looked at Jack's hair because he was lying under him now! Hahaha! I adored that! When he said that thing about Jack's hair, he kind of admitted to Jack that he had been thinking about him like that and that's why Jack said "What if we've always been like this?" God, I thought that was beautiful!
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Yeah, and then he added "..and what if that’s the truth?” And we know that it is the truth.
Not to mention the discussion about Jack's parents and upbringing vs. Ennis's parents and upbringing. Interesting stuff. And, omg, when Jack started talking about Slater. Not only hilarious - but so many layers in that conversation!
Yeah, shopping will be fun this week! Gotta run again!
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