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Another Side of the Story by marlb42 (aileb)

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mariez:
Hey, Marl,

As I said on LJ, you've left me wanting more - a Very Good Thing!   :)

As Leslie said, your premise is unique and that's also a Very Good Thing.  There is always so much more to any human being than what meets the eye - and I love exploring that. 

This is terrific - Cassie knows there's so much more behind her image, and is hoping there's so much more behind Ennis's (and, of course, there is, but . . .):

Something about the way he sat there, Cassie knew this one was different, she could feel it.  Maybe this one, maybe this one would understand, maybe this one would realize that even though she joked around and liked to dance and yeah liked the way their hands made her feel that it wasn’t it..  But maybe this one would get it, get it why she just knew there was more to the world than this.  More than just the bars and the drinkin and the dancing, and even the things that went along with that.  Maybe this one would get it

This one short sentence struck me, I love these little details that reveal so much:

He still reached for her hair and gave it a gentle pull whenever she walked by. 

Congratulations, again, Marl. There are so many tragedies left in the wake of society's ignorance and hate, and so many layers to Brokeback, thanks for peeling back another one.

Marie

Arad-3:
Marleen,
I just read it and was delightfully surprised!   You can write Marleen!  And I am glad your writing from a females perspective.  Women see things in a whole different light.

 Cassie was a character I could relate to in the movie. And I would of been interested to learn more about her.

  I will be loooking forward to allot more of this story, as I have a feeling it's gonna be juicy!

MaineWriter:
Chapter 3 is up:

http://aileb42.livejournal.com/1539.html

Leslie

Cameron:
Thank you Marie, and Jeri and Leslie

I do appreciate it.

Chapter 4 is up too.

http://aileb42.livejournal.com/1807.html

I do hope so much that you like it at least a little.

mariez:
I enjoyed Chapters 3 and 4 very much, Marl! 

You're doing a great job with Cassie's backstory and I really feel that I'm getting to know her. We all need to  be needed and loved, don't we?  Chapter 4 reminded me of the song lyrics, "looking for love in all the wrong places."   

Looking forward to more!

Thanks,
Marie

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