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Title: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on February 29, 2008, 10:36:07 pm: and here is chapter 1 of my new story...

http://louisev.livejournal.com/256824.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on February 29, 2008, 11:30:47 pm: yay!! a leap year treat!!

I have a feeling the Grey Girls are gonna give their Daddy some gray hairs before this story is done!! ;) (And

Daddy's girls are gonna get in Ellery's hair because now that they have made the move to Tourmaline they are

going to be even more jealous of the time & attention Colson gives him. But, I think they will have met their

match in Chief cock of the walk!! I love that nickname BTW!)

Hey, are there really enough straight cops in Tourmaline for two girls?? lol!!

Thanks for the quick start to a great new tale Louise!!

Fran
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 01, 2008, 01:30:43 pm: SPOILERS

The dialogue between the twins was so natural and true and it made me feel sad for them. They are still being affected by their parents' history, and the repercussions on their mother's life continues in her second marriage - and that, as well as their father's marriage, can't help but skew their view of relationships and romantic love - in a good and a bad way. And it's understandable that they feel a competition with Ellery for their father's attention and affection - something they feel they've been deprived of.

This is sure to be an eye-opening experience for Colson, too. He lived with Katie Ann while she was a married woman - and seeing his girls "on the prowl" so to speak may give him a better understanding of what their mother had to deal with during their teen-age years. And, again, I like how the stories are dovetailing - just recently in "LWH" Colson told Katie Ann that Ellery's never been a daddy and he naturally wouldn't have the same patience and understanding that Colson was bound to have. So very true - and it will interesting to see how Ellery rises to the challenge in his role as step-father.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 01, 2008, 02:45:22 pm: Quote from: mariez on March 01, 2008, 01:30:43 pm
SPOILERS

The dialogue between the twins was so natural and true and it made me feel sad for them. They are still being affected by their parents' history, and the repercussions on their mother's life continues in her second marriage - and that, as well as their father's marriage, can't help but skew their view of relationships and romantic love - in a good and a bad way.

Thanks,
Marie

I thought it was odd for Pam to want to go find some exciting men, given what has just happened to her. :-\ Your comment makes a lot of sense Marie.

We're off to a great start Louise. I'm sure this is going to be yet another story I'm going to enjoy very much.

Thank you. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 01, 2008, 05:23:10 pm: SPOILER

Well, if I may point out that Pam is the one so desperate to stay in Tourmaline... and she is, in her own subtle way, trying to give Katie Ann reasons to stay, because she knows Katie is interested in finding a new man.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 01, 2008, 10:40:53 pm: and here is... chapter 2

http://louisev.livejournal.com/257181.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 02, 2008, 12:35:58 am: Quote from: louise van hine on March 01, 2008, 10:40:53 pm
and here is... chapter 2

http://louisev.livejournal.com/257181.html

SPOILERS

“I thought Lauren was gonna take care a that, or Sally.”

Wayne, you would try the patience of a saint.....

...they are gonna be there needin stuff an wantin ta spend time with me an... frankly I don’t know...”

Well, yes, they are, and yes, they will - that's all part and parcel of being a parent, Colson.....

“I drove all the way down here ta fetch my girls,an you an your fancy pants policeman better not stand in my way,” said Laura, trembling with indignation.

Sigh. I guess we will be seeing that Laura/Edna meeting.......

You packed a lot of good stuff into this chapter, Louise!

Thanks,
Maire
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 02, 2008, 01:08:40 pm: that is Wayne - he should have a t-shirt that says 'Wearing the Patience of Saints'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 02, 2008, 04:21:52 pm: and here is chapter 3!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/257368.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 02, 2008, 04:39:28 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 02, 2008, 04:21:52 pm
and here is chapter 3!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/257368.html

Whoowee! Two chapters in one day for me. Thanks Louise.

SPOILERS

How Ellery can go and listen to his tapes after that conversation, I'll never understand. But relaxation is something that everyone can use right now. So much tension and desperation.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 02, 2008, 07:18:32 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 02, 2008, 01:08:40 pm
that is Wayne - he should have a t-shirt that says 'Wearing the Patience of Saints'

LOL! And knowing Wayne, he'd wear it proudly!

Quote from: belbbmfan on March 02, 2008, 04:39:28 pm
... So much tension and desperation.

You can say that again. That was difficult to read. And these lines -

Laura took a tentative step, fear visible in her eyes.
..........
“You ain’t gonna arrest me?”

- made me very sad for Laura. She's not only jealous of Ellery, she's intimidated by his power and authority, too. As irrational as her behavior may be, she honestly feels that everyone and everything is conspiring against her. And now she is sitting in her truck, late at night, hours from home, after having embarrassed herself in front of her ex-husband and his man.

Oh my, Louise. You do know how to end a chapter.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on March 02, 2008, 07:22:36 pm: Louise and I (and a few others) watched BBM again in a simulcast yesterday. It was the first time I had seen the movie all the way through in a long time. I was struck again how bad I feel for Alma. She doesn't understand what is going on and has no context for understanding. Laura is very much in the same situation. It is so hard and sad for them.

L
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 02, 2008, 08:44:24 pm: I am going to heat myself up some Chinese leftovers and then maybe be able to dive back into the difficult and complex situation of 'Women who Marry Gay Men'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 02, 2008, 09:56:23 pm: and here we are with chapter 4:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/257537.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 03, 2008, 02:37:41 am: Quote from: louise van hine on March 02, 2008, 09:56:23 pm
and here we are with chapter 4:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/257537.html

:'( :'( :'(

You're doing an excellent job Louise, painful as it may be. No way out but through, right? God, I'd like to give Laura a hug right now *sigh* Colson should get himself a big dose of empathy, he could use it.

“You were sneakin around on me, Colson! It wasn’t like I was dreamin it. With that man!”

“That’s the only way a man can do it when he’s queer. It ain’t somethin ya can do in the open.”

Well, Colson, you're right about that, but that's not what Laura wants to hear. :-\ Colson will need to deal with the guilt he's still feeling over how he treated Laura (and to some extent) his girls. Because he is feeling guilty of course although he's trying to conceal it by by being mad at her.

Poor Laura. Her panic is palpalbe, her life is falling apart, again... And all she did was love a man. :(
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 03, 2008, 08:59:49 am: Quote from: MaineWriter on March 02, 2008, 07:22:36 pm
...... and has no context for understanding.

That is such a key observation.

Quote from: belbbmfan on March 03, 2008, 02:37:41 am
... Colson should get himself a big dose of empathy, he could use it.

Amen, Fabienne.

Quote from: belbbmfan on March 03, 2008, 02:37:41 am
Because he is feeling guilty of course although he's trying to conceal it by by being mad at her.

Exactly.

“Not... not really, no,” he sighed.

She may have known it all along, but actually having it confirmed in words, out loud .... Devastating. There's no other word. It brought tears to my eyes.

Thanks for keeping it real, Louise - no matter how painful.

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 03, 2008, 01:14:59 pm: SPOILER!

whew! I am glad that you readers seem to know what I am trying to do - to portray the rest of Colson's family's lives. While it may be immensely convenient for his ex wife, who did divorce him a decade ago, to be far away, out of sight and out of mind, the pain they all endured is still there lurking, and will emerge during moments of crisis and transition in the lives of their children.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 03, 2008, 01:45:24 pm: One thing I,m finding hard to understand Louise is Lauras reaction to this. This is her daughter who has been raped. And not only does she not seem to give a damn, she seems to think her daughter is just some cheap slut who asked for it!! If, God forbid, that were MY daughter, no force on earth could stop me from going after the guy who did it and cutting his balls of with a rusty chainsaw!! >:( >:( >:( What is her problem? Another thing is Pams reaction. She seems to be very calm at the moment. Now bear in mind I know nothing, thankfully about rape or effects of rape, only what I read. Is she going to remain so calm, or is it suddenly going to hit her like a ton of bricks and cause her to break down completly?
Lauras reaction disgusts me to be quite honest, I could slap her. I can understand her attitude over Colson, fair enough, but her daughter? She needs her mother, and right now Laura is being a heartless bitch, IMO. >:( >:(
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 03, 2008, 01:53:17 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 03, 2008, 01:14:59 pm
SPOILER!

whew! I am glad that you readers seem to know what I am trying to do - to portray the rest of Colson's family's lives. While it may be immensely convenient for his ex wife, who did divorce him a decade ago, to be far away, out of sight and out of mind, the pain they all endured is still there lurking, and will emerge during moments of crisis and transition in the lives of their children.

I can only applaud your writing Louise. It's heartfelt, painful, but extremely well done. You write 'emotional turmoil' very well, but we knew that already.

Thanks :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 03, 2008, 02:23:45 pm: Quote from: souxi on March 03, 2008, 01:45:24 pm
One thing I,m finding hard to understand Louise is Lauras reaction to this. This is her daughter who has been raped. And not only does she not seem to give a damn, she seems to think her daughter is just some cheap slut who asked for it!! If, God forbid, that were MY daughter, no force on earth could stop me from going after the guy who did it and cutting his balls of with a rusty chainsaw!! >:( >:( >:( What is her problem? Another thing is Pams reaction. She seems to be very calm at the moment. Now bear in mind I know nothing, thankfully about rape or effects of rape, only what I read. Is she going to remain so calm, or is it suddenly going to hit her like a ton of bricks and cause her to break down completly?
Lauras reaction disgusts me to be quite honest, I could slap her. I can understand her attitude over Colson, fair enough, but her daughter? She needs her mother, and right now Laura is being a heartless bitch, IMO. >:( >:(

The way I am going about this is to show that Laura has become bitter in several areas, and is clearly unhappy with her present marriage, and this is affecting how she treats Colson and also their daughters - her reaction to Pam's rape is one of utter denial. And this is a reaction many mothers can have - more frequently when it is incestuous abuse by a father or stepfather, but also when it is a stranger.

And Pam is a little too calm at the moment - her need to leave Prescott seems to have caused a momentary relief, but that is not the whole story. If I made it simple there would be nothing left to write about, Souxi!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 03, 2008, 11:01:03 pm: And here is chapter 5:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/257838.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 04, 2008, 09:00:51 am: SPOILERS

Aww..this is was wrenching, Louise. Poor Pam.

Her sister was curled up next to Socks, the stall door still slightly ajar, a tissue pressed against her nose, her once violent sobs now quiet and occasional, one hand stroking the silken neck of the old mare, whose eyes were half closed, dozing lightly

Finding comfort in horses, just like her Daddy. Heartbreaking how much her mother's terrible words have hurt Pam. Right now Laura is understandably the "dried up old hag" in their eyes - and their Daddy is the Knight in Shining Armor. But I do wonder, the longer they stay in Tourmaline, the more time they spend with Daddy and the more distance they have from their mother....will the line begin to blur somewhat between "bad parent" and "good parent"?

“That’s why God made us twins, Pam,” Katie whispered against her sister’s ear. “So we’d never have ta be alone.”

Lovely and touching. Terrific writing, as always, Louise.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 04, 2008, 02:10:43 pm: I agree Marie.

The choice of words Katie Ann uses to describe her mother shows how the black-and-white vision she's been confronted with at home with her mother has influenced her.

One things sure, the girls couldn't be at a better place than the ranch right now. Wes and Edna have a tough job on their hands, but nothing they can't handle I'm sure.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 05, 2008, 12:55:31 am: and here is chapter 6

http://louisev.livejournal.com/258207.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 05, 2008, 07:48:03 am: SPOILERS

“Is this about what happened? Oh sweetheart,” Edna said, giving Pam a quick hug

Aww...a bittersweet moment, because that's the love and comfort Pam should be getting from her mother. Sigh. How many times have we thought "Thank God for Edna?"

“Intimidation value,” Edna said, and gave Pam a wink. “It’s worked on quite a few lunatic situations over the years, you’ll be surprised how much respect Wesley can eke out a that uniform an hat.”

Considering how intimidated Laura was the one time she spoke to Wes over the phone, it's probably not necessary - but it is good to see that they are pulling out all the stops to ensure things don't get any more out of hand than they already are.

I know better than to even try and predict what will happen next! ;)

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 05, 2008, 05:47:17 pm: I try not to predict what is about to happen either! Mainly because I can't!!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 06, 2008, 12:54:50 am: and... chapter 7!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/258358.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 06, 2008, 03:38:32 am: Quote from: louise van hine on March 06, 2008, 12:54:50 am
and... chapter 7!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/258358.html

Once again, I feel very bad for Laura. Someone should show her a bit of sympathy. I hope Edna does (after she knocks some common sense into Laura and Colson too of course).

Colson's anwer to Laura was/is running away, he wants her to run away now too. He gave the same message to his girls, thinking that all will be well as long as they're not around their mother anymore. I'm giving Laura credit for sticking around. They can't keep doing this, with all the hurt and anger between all four of them.

And I have to say Ellery is handling this well.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Thanks Louise!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 06, 2008, 09:00:28 am: Quote from: belbbmfan on March 06, 2008, 03:38:32 am

Once again, I feel very bad for Laura. Someone should show her a bit of sympathy. I hope Edna does (after she knocks some common sense into Laura and Colson too of course).

Colson's anwer to Laura was/is running away, he wants her to run away now too. He gave the same message to his girls, thinking that all will be well as long as they're not around their mother anymore. I'm giving Laura credit for sticking around. They can't keep doing this, with all the hurt and anger between all four of them.

And I have to say Ellery is handling this well.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Thanks Louise!

Perfectly stated, Fabienne! It's not an either/or situation. Ellery and Colson's dialogue is so realistic - it's exactly how people talk, which is probably why some of their word choices made me sad. But as much as I deplore Laura's attitude and words to Pam, and as sorry as I feel for Pam (and Katie Ann) - I can't help but feel so bad for Laura, too.

And you're spot on about the "running away" - the fact that the thought of having Laura arrested popped pretty quickly into both Colson's and Pam's minds is indicative of that, I think. Pam is young and hurt and scared and I don't blame her. But it's a pretty immature attitude on Colson's part. Ellery is handling it well - but, frankly, he should be. He has a devoted and loving husband, more money than he knows what to do with, not to mention the fact that they're on his turf where he has all the power, influence and authority.

Yes, there is an awful lot of hurt and anger among all four of them - festering for years - and they can't just keep ignoring it.

Great job, Louise - thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 06, 2008, 01:44:00 pm: Quote from: belbbmfan on March 06, 2008, 03:38:32 am

Once again, I feel very bad for Laura. Someone should show her a bit of sympathy. I hope Edna does (after she knocks some common sense into Laura and Colson too of course).

Colson's anwer to Laura was/is running away, he wants her to run away now too. He gave the same message to his girls, thinking that all will be well as long as they're not around their mother anymore. I'm giving Laura credit for sticking around. They can't keep doing this, with all the hurt and anger between all four of them.

And I have to say Ellery is handling this well.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Thanks Louise!

Show Laura sympathy? What for? Pam is the one whose been raped here, and Laura,s behaviour is nothing short of disgusting. I appreciate she,s still angry with Colson but now really isn,t the time to worry about that is it. Her daughter needs her mum, now more than ever, and all Laura can do is blame poor Pam!! Unbeleivable. Yes Colson encouraged the girls to run away and come to Tourmaline, (think I spelt that right) but I,m not surprised. She,s not showing her any sympathy is she. It,s no wonder she turned to her dad. Yes Ellery is handling this very well, but then he,s a trained police officer, he deals with this kind of thing all the time. Again yes I understand there is still a lot of bitterness between Laura and Colson, and maybe they need to sit down and talk about it like two adults without Laura throwing a hissy fit. Right now the important one is Pam. Thank God for Edna.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 06, 2008, 01:59:32 pm: well now ... let me just say a few things.

First off I am super pleased that everybody is getting into discussing the issues that the situation raises. I don't like writing pure fantasy where everyone roars off into the sunset holding hands and inconvenient truths are taken out of the picture. That is my biggest complaint about so much fanfiction in this fandom is that the remaining "exes" somehow seem to be pacified or are suddenly okay with Ennis and Jack's new life together in the AU's and there is no fallout.

In proceeding with my own original story, I have never believed that Colson was an innocent victim of his own sexuality, nor that he and his wife had ever handled their marriage, or their divorce, in any proper way - the most that can be said is that Colson tried to keep from saying anything negative about Laura, and a lot of that motivation was his own sense of guilt and bearing the burden of the failure of their marriage. It was doomed, and his homosexuality had doomed it from the beginning. So there is both guilt and hurt there, but not something that Colson can do a great deal about unless Laura decides to forgive him. The only thing he can change is his own happiness, and his relationship with his daughters.

However, one thing I wanted to point out is that he has discouraged his daughters from running away from their mother, pretty consistently. For selfish reasons to be sure: 1) he didnt want to suddenly become a full time dad and complicate his relationship, now that he has one that he is happy with and 2) he didn't want to upset Laura by alienating the girls from her and letting them just escape to start over again with him. And the same is true in this situation - he agreed to their moving to Tourmaline because his daughter Pam had been attacked and begged him in tears to help her get out, and this was fueled by a manifest failure of support by her mother. He could hardly refuse under these conditions, and he still is conflicted about it. So Laura blaming him for giving them an exit strategy is not really fair. He could have interfered a lot while he was still in town with them, and never did, so assuming he has decided to step between Laura and their children and try to alienate them from her isn't really logical nor sensible. He is doing the knee-jerk reaction thing to finally help out a daughter that was alienated from him for a long time herself.

However, psychologically speaking, Laura would naturally assume that is what he is up to, since she put a lot of energy into discouraging the girls from having an ongoing relationship with Colson, due to her beliefs about his perversion, and in order to mollify her own hurt feelings. She would naturally assume he is up to the same thing - hence her indignation. But it is in defiance of the facts.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 06, 2008, 03:34:56 pm: Thank you for the wonderful insights, Louise! Always so great to read.

I agree that it was absolutely the right thing for the girls to come Tourmaline at this point - and you're right, Colson has never encouraged them to run away from their mother, and I don't consider their coming to Tourmaline right now "running away." But I do think the fact that he brought up the idea of arresting Laura (even if he wasn't really serious) indicates that he wants to avoid some problems that can't be avoided - and that's what I meant when I referred to "running away." (Not to mention the fact that having her arrested seems like overkill to me :laugh:)

And you're also right, of course, that there is not a lot more Colson can do unless and until Laura decides to forgive him which doesn't seem likely at the moment. Having said that, for him to throw it back in her face - and take umbrage at the fact - that she was having him followed - and then ask her if she didn't have faith in anyone - when he was being unfaithful!!! ....well, maybe it was out of guilt, but that doesn't help matters at all - especially when you add in the things he admitted after that about never really loving or wanting her. Ouch.

It's true that facts and fairness do tend to get thrown out the window when things are at an emotional peak, and when you factor in the long, sad, hurtful history among the parties - it's a recipe for disaster, which is pretty much where we're at right now!

souxi, I just wanted to add that having sympathy for Laura doesn't diminish the sympathy I feel for Pam, or Colson or Katie Ann - I just happen to think that everyone here is worthy of some sympathy.

I am really curious as to how everyone is going to handle themselves. Will Colson "hide" in the bunkhouse? Will Laura make a scene? How will Edna and Wes react? How will Katie Ann handle her mother? Tune in for the next chapter .... LOL! Can you tell we love the story, Lousie?

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 06, 2008, 04:47:54 pm: Yes, Marie, you've expressed it so much better than I could.

Avoidance, that's what's going on here. Well not for much longer it seems...

Maybe I'll skip breakfast tomorrow morning and start the computer right after getting out of bed! :laugh:

I love your writing Louise. (I'm starting to sound like an old record ah well... :D). You care about the story, the characters (heck, I could give Wayne a hug, go figure), it's never black or white.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 06, 2008, 05:13:24 pm: I can't get enough of being told how much you love my stories, Fabienne!! so don't worry about repeating yourself!

I'll try to make the next chapter worth skipping breakfast for!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 06, 2008, 05:18:58 pm: I hear what your saying about Laura Marie, but I find it incredibly hard to feel remotely sympathetic towards Laura, when she is treating her daughter the way she is. This isn,t about Laura and her feelings, it,s about Pam, who has gone through the horrific trauma of rape. IMO Laura needs to put her own bitter feelings aside and give her daughter the emotional support she desperately needs from her mother.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 06, 2008, 11:06:29 pm: and here is chapter 8:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/258808.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 06, 2008, 11:25:13 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 06, 2008, 11:06:29 pm
and here is chapter 8:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/258808.html

SPOILER

I want to be Edna when I grow up. :)

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 07, 2008, 12:39:42 am: I sure hope Fabienne doesn't miss her breakfast and get disappointed! hee hee.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 07, 2008, 02:45:31 am: Quote from: louise van hine on March 06, 2008, 05:13:24 pm
I can't get enough of being told how much you love my stories, Fabienne!! so don't worry about repeating yourself!

I'll try to make the next chapter worth skipping breakfast for!

hehehe, I thought about it. But what would Edna say if I sat here in my pajamas? :o

And no Louise, I wasn't disappointed! No way. I hope everyone is paying close attention to what Edna's saying and how she's saying it. She's giving free lessons here.

“I think it was a good idea, actually,” Edna said, and closed the distance between herself and Laura, taking her arm gently. Laura flinched but did not pull away from the older woman’s touch. “You sound real hurt, and maybe it’s about time ta get a few things said. Just because we are friends – good friends – with Colson don’t mean we can’t be yer friend too. Laura, is it?”

Laura nodded, momentarily dumb. Katie Ann stared at her mother in shock as she let herself be steered to the sofa. Colson watched surreptitiously as he picked up his cup, and Edna sat down next to her.

Yep, that's exactly what Laura needed to hear! It seems to me that Laura hasn't had a friend in a very long time, and it made her bitter.

The world needs more Ednas! :)

:) :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 07, 2008, 01:42:43 pm: Quote from: belbbmfan on March 07, 2008, 02:45:31 am
The world needs more Ednas! :)

It sure does - and in high places! ;D

(http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z196/mariez65/starsandstripes-1-1.jpg)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 07, 2008, 10:53:51 pm: And here is chapter 9!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/259021.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 08, 2008, 12:41:13 am: SPOILERS

Oh, Lord. I did not see that coming. I could've sworn that Colson and Edna made a big point to the girls at the ceremony that they were not to tell their mother!

Well, now I'm going to repeat myself, Louise - you're not predictable that's for sure! And yes, that's a compliment! :laugh:

Now what ........?

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 08, 2008, 12:47:02 am: SPOILER

Yes, and Edna was doing SO WELL up till that point! I guess she isn't going to be running for president after all!

As far as what's next... I guess I'll just have to SLEEP ON IT. It feels good to be writing something that feels completely, entirely NEW. Truth to tell I was getting a bit weary of what was going to happen next with ol' Amos Marigold! Onward with the new generation!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 08, 2008, 12:01:56 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 08, 2008, 12:47:02 am
SPOILER

Yes, and Edna was doing SO WELL up till that point! I guess she isn't going to be running for president after all!

Ha Ha! I thought of that, too. But I'm hoping Edna makes a comeback - most candidates stick their foot in their mouth sooner or later.....let's see how Edna comes out of this one!

But, seriously, it's so great that you're always careful to show that no one is perfect. We've seen before that sometimes Edna can be a wee bit too intrusive into the boys' lives, although she's usually quick to realize it.

And this discussion about getting over past hurts is made even more interesting and poignant because of my re-reads of the revamped original stories. Just last night I read the chapters where we see that Ellery is still hurting over his relationship with Beagle in college (which was almost 20 years ago), in spite of the fact that he is now in a deeply loving and committed relationship. He may not be pining for Beagle anymore, but it was touching to see that reminders of Beagle - and seeing Beagle with another man - bring out some irrational behavior on his part, and I felt his pain. Edna is absolutely right that the only thing to do is "go on" but getting your heart and your mind in sync about that is the tricky part for all of us.

Quote from: louise van hine on March 08, 2008, 12:47:02 am
... It feels good to be writing something that feels completely, entirely NEW.

That's great, Louise - and I can certainly understand it! We're starting to venture more deeply into some territory that we've only skirted before and who knows what else this journey may bring .... and there is still the matter of Jeremy and his sister and their unresolved issues and how that may tie in....

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 08, 2008, 02:25:57 pm: yes I do go to a lot of trouble to paint the warts in. And it confuses people who get really REALLY mad at my characters when they do boneheaded things, mean things, or say nasty things to other people.

It got a few really intense arguments about just how misogynistic Ellery is and whether Colson was being fair to his wife. They are all flawed, and it does make some readers pretty uncomfortable that they are not idealized. But I really can't do it any other way.

I wrote a novel in the winter of 2005-06 which I posted on my LJ called 'Your Skinny Girl' and the main character is a rather selfish, exploitive and narcissistic person who doesn't treat women very well, and I had to test it with an audience to find out of there was ENOUGH likeable about my main character for people to care about him. But there was a reason I wrote him that way, and he had to have that nasty streak in him, because it was part of the theme. Just as, in this story, Colson's hot temper and simmering violence masks his fear and vulnerability, and Ellery's arrogance and hard driving nature are compensations for his own feelings of isolation and loss even as he struggles to help his own kind... and of course, the cast of characters around them bring out either the best or the worst in them.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 08, 2008, 10:27:01 pm: and here is chapter 10: warts and all!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/259160.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 09, 2008, 12:18:35 am: SPOILERS

So, Louise, how many times am I going to be saying, "I didn't see that coming!" ? Considering the fact that Edna spilled the beans in about five minutes regarding the ceremony, I'm not sure I'd be trusting her to keep a secret if I were Laura! LOL!

But I do wonder how this is going to factor into things. I had forgotten that Laura and Colson had a son that was stillborn. :( And I hope the twins were wrong in their speculations about Steve having an affair.....but that may be wishful thinking on my part.

Can't wait to see what this cast has in store for us next!

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 09, 2008, 12:30:39 am: SPOILER

Did ANYBODY see that one coming?

muah hahahah, I love it when a plot actually surprises people.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 09, 2008, 07:02:09 pm: ....and chapter 11!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/259343.html

but I am sure EVERYBODY knew this was coming!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 09, 2008, 07:37:24 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 09, 2008, 07:02:09 pm
..but I am sure EVERYBODY knew this was coming!

SPOILERS

Ha! Louise, you've made it so that we don't know what's coming or what's going! LOL!

Poor Ellery - I wouldn't want to take his blood pressure right now. And it's only 9:30 a.m. But it's true that everything does seem to hit the fan at once in life. But it was nice to see Esteban is back and doing well.

And Laura's husband is quite the charmer, isn't he? ::) Ugh.

Great stuff, Louise - thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 10, 2008, 12:54:21 am: I am glad to see I am keeping you loyal readers on your toes!!!

as always I love to read all the comments, keep em coming!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 10, 2008, 10:07:46 pm: and here is chapter 12!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/259593.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 11, 2008, 10:37:48 am: SPOILERS

“Oh Daddy,” Katie Ann clung to him. “You don’t know how much we missed you bein down here. I am awful jealous a Ellery stealin you away.”

Colson laughed nervously. “Well as long as ya don’t play tug a war for me, Katie...

Hmmmm.... interesting choice of words on Katie Ann's part, and they didn't go unnoticed by Colson, of course.

“Cause –“ Katie Ann interrupted. „Cause if she knows you are just as dead serious about Ellery as she was about marryin Steve she’ll finally give ya up an get over it, that’s how come.”

I know Laura has been pining for Colson, but somehow I didn't get the impression that she truly believed Colson was going to come back to her? Or maybe somewhere in her subconscious she held on to that hope? I don't know...matters of the heart get pretty complicated - for everyone.

Now hurry up, Colson - Ellery has to get to the jail!

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 11, 2008, 10:49:03 pm: whoo wee, you don't miss a trick do you Marie?

I am running a little late tonight due to those ever-hard rice noodles in my stroganoff mix, and getting caught up in Obamomentum in the smashing Mississippi victory tonight.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 11, 2008, 11:23:52 pm: and here is chapter 13

http://louisev.livejournal.com/260022.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on March 12, 2008, 07:14:04 am: Thank you, Louise...

A nice little breakfast treat with my coffee. I could make do with some of Edna's sausages and biscuits right about now, I have to say!

L
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 12, 2008, 12:01:50 pm: sausages and biscuits for everyone!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 12, 2008, 01:14:57 pm: Thanks, Louise - I'll have my sausage and biscuits for lunch!

SPOILERS

Well, I see Ellery and I have the same opinion of Mr. Forster! LOL! But I am worried about his blood pressure again, and he doesn't need to see any more of the "ex-wife show," as he so aptly describes it. But, when you're married to someone with an ex and children......

I wonder if Wes will be bothered that Edna spilled the beans about the ceremony? Although at this point, so many people know I guess it hardly matters.

I'm glad the talk about accompanying Colson and Ellery was quashed quickly - the whole point of the trip is to get away from it all! It's clear that having the girls in town is going to be an interesting adventure for everyone, that's for sure!

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on March 12, 2008, 03:24:07 pm: Quote from: mariez on March 12, 2008, 01:14:57 pm

SPOILERS

Well, I see Ellery and I have the same opinion of Mr. Forster! LOL! But I am worried about his blood pressure again, and he doesn't need to see any more of the "ex-wife show," as he so aptly describes it. But, when you're married to someone with an ex and children......

I wonder if Wes will be bothered that Edna spilled the beans about the ceremony? Although at this point, so many people know I guess it hardly matters.

I'm glad the talk about accompanying Colson and Ellery was quashed quickly - the whole point of the trip is to get away from it all! It's clear that having the girls in town is going to be an interesting adventure for everyone, that's for sure!

Thanks,
Marie

Oh yeah-Marie. I worry about the bp too & I also worry that Colson will hold stuff back from Ellery to try to keep him from getting upset. And then I wonder if Laura's new hubby may not be happy about their bun in the oven & Laura will end up in Tourmaline too living with her daughters!! Now there is Ellery's (& Colson's) worse nightmare come true!!

And I laughed at KatieAnn's passing thought about joining Daddy & Step-daddy in Puerto Rico. Girls can be so pushy sometimes!! I think Ellery would send them off to a vacation on their own anywhere else in the damn world to avoid a Grey Family Vacation!!

I don't know where the hell Louise is leading us this time...but it's a whole lotta fun!! :)

Fran
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 12, 2008, 11:13:06 pm: I didn't know I was going to finish 'The Law of Greenlea County' editing tonight but my mind is just roiling right now, and not about our girls!

But I'll see what I can do!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 12, 2008, 11:53:11 pm: and here is chapter 14 for a changeup!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/260109.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 13, 2008, 01:40:09 pm: Quote from: frantic65 on March 12, 2008, 03:24:07 pm
.. I think Ellery would send them off to a vacation on their own anywhere else in the damn world to avoid a Grey Family Vacation!!

LOL! This is true - what is the furthest geographical point from Puerto Rico?

SPOILERS - Chapter 14

I'm feeling Ellery and Paula's pain. It's a frustrating "game" for sure. Effin' Amos. But he can only run so long.
Glad to see that Ellery kept his cool - it's never too late for any of us to learn and change. And I was really glad to see the truce between Ellery and Paula continue and expand. Having Pam talk to Paula is an excellent move - and a very interesting one! As always, a fascinating and complicated set of dynamics.

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: opinionista on March 13, 2008, 08:19:33 pm: Quote from: mariez on March 13, 2008, 01:40:09 pm
LOL! This is true - what is the furthest geographical point from Puerto Rico?

Probably Hawaii.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 13, 2008, 11:35:18 pm: next stop, chapter 15

http://louisev.livejournal.com/260601.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 14, 2008, 01:41:42 pm: SPOILERS

Remind me never to tell Edna a secret! LOL!!

But I do understand the fine line here and the trickle-down effect of Laura's pregnancy on the entire situation, which has moved beyond complicated.

...Edna I think is tryin ta think a the right casserole ta bake for wartime.”

LOL! There's a new cookbook idea!

Great story, Louise! Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 14, 2008, 11:27:23 pm: and here is chapter 16! http://louisev.livejournal.com/260700.html

(I took a break from Obamania!!!)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 15, 2008, 12:29:24 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 14, 2008, 11:27:23 pm
and here is chapter 16! http://louisev.livejournal.com/260700.html

(I took a break from Obamania!!!)

And we appreciate it, Louise!

SPOILERS

A psychologist would have a field day with this conversation! So much said - and not said. I thought Pam was remarkably calm and forgiving in light of her mother's reaction/non-reaction to the fact that she was up all night because of nightmares and also in light of the fact that Laura's horrific words to Pam remain standing. How sad that Laura's own feelings of hurt and betrayal have not only blinded her to her daughter's pain, but have increased that pain a hundred-fold.

I do wonder if the girls subsconsciously (or perhaps even consciously) sometimes see the animosity between their parents as something that can be manipulated to their advantage. The feeling that the girls are being "bribed" would only be reinforced by stories such as the one Pam told about their father buying them red stallions for Christmas (I know she was using the story as a cover-up for being in the bar, but .....). And Katie Ann seemed content to let her mother believe Colson had been encouraging her to move...

Well, I guess one immediate objective has been reached - Laura has left town. But that doesn't even scratch the surface of resolving so many issues. Thought-provoking stuff, Louise.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 15, 2008, 08:40:17 pm: Ah, I wish I had the day to while away psychologizing a bit more on Colson's family, but alas I have been at work for the past 9 hours implementing some software updates, and fortunately it has gone extremely well and has been about 99% successful.

I am hoping to be able to write later but I feel pretty wrung out.

Thanks for the comments, as always!!! you always have something interesting to say - all of you!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 16, 2008, 06:34:26 pm: Okay, I caught up on my sleep, had my nap, and now it's Sunday and I am all out of excuses, so I'm writing the next chapter!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 16, 2008, 07:17:14 pm: and here we are!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/261045.html "Chapter 17"
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 16, 2008, 09:09:14 pm: SPOILERS

Well, that must've been a great nap, Louise!

“You shoulda. Don’t you know havin women lustin after you brings out my jealous streak?”

LOL! I love it! Now that's putting a positive spin on things! Those tapes and the walks must be working! I'm relieved to see Ellery in a better frame of mind - and I'm really glad the boys are getting some nice alone time.

But, speaking of women...Colson had me scratching my head a little with this remark:

...it was her idea ta boot me out in the first place...” Colson muttered

Well, he's right that it's not his fault the divorce didn't "cure" nothin, as he put it, but as for the "booting out" part- I wonder what he thinks Laura should've done :-\

Looks like Wes and Edna have some houseguests for at least the immediate future....and the fact that Katie Ann is already pouting after only 24 hours .....hmmmm.....my head is already spinning! LOL!

You've worked your magic again, Louise - thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 17, 2008, 02:53:43 am: Quote from: louise van hine on March 16, 2008, 07:17:14 pm
and here we are!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/261045.html "Chapter 17"

Great chapter Louise.

I'm glad Colson and Ellery get to spend some time together. It was good to hear Colson repeat the fact to Katie Ann and Pam that he had to get home to be with Ellery. They still are in 'we're moving in with daddy' mode and they are bound to be dissapointed about that.

And now with Laura gone, I do fear they will get back to 'avoiding' all the issues between them. Like what Colson said about the divorce. Marie raises a good question, what was Laura supposed to do?

I think we've only begon scratching the surface on this one.

Thanks Louise! :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 17, 2008, 11:49:30 pm: Hope it isnt too late for an update for all of you hungry readers!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/261183.html 'Chapter 18'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on March 18, 2008, 06:50:15 am: Interesting revelation in the last paragraph.

Thanks, Louise.

L
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 18, 2008, 08:14:56 am: SPOILERS

...Come on now ya lunk, yer heavy when you ain’t fuckin.”

LOL! Have I told you lately how much I love Ellery? - and Colson, too. The "pillow talk" dialogue is brilliant. After all these stories, I still continue to be amazed by how natural and fresh and "real" the dialogue is.

Yes, I agree - that was an interesting revelation in the last paragraph - as well as sad and pathetic. Sigh. I hope the boys get some more rest because about the only thing I can be sure of is that they're going to need it.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 19, 2008, 12:15:13 am: and here is chapter 19: http://louisev.livejournal.com/261793.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 19, 2008, 07:43:02 am: SPOILERS

You’ve seen how Colson gets when he ain’t around Ellery – I think he’s been lonesome without his girls.”

I think so, too - more than he realizes.

"And now it begins,” Wes said, pocketing the note and sitting back down wearily. “I don’t envy that girl one whit.”

I don't either. Poor Pam. It's a relief that Eldredge has been caught, of course - but experienced Sheriff Brown knows that Pam's nightmare is far from over. She has no idea what is ahead of her - and she's going to need all the support she can get.

Great story. Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 19, 2008, 10:25:15 pm: chapter 20: http://louisev.livejournal.com/262376.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 20, 2008, 09:22:39 am: SPOILERS

Did I just hear Ellery refer to Paula as "really nice"? Wonders never do cease! LOL! Paula's kind offer should cement their truce even further, and he's right that she really is the perfect person to advise Pam. Lineup? Bah!! And it would interesting, indeed, to see Paula and Laura interacting.....

I love how naturally you mingle the characters and the plot lines, Louise.....I'm sure we haven't heard the last from Jeremy and his issues on this, either....

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 20, 2008, 12:51:49 pm: I was rather proud of the "Pro what?" Ellery loses track when he starts using big legal words and doesn't realize that Colson's eyes start crossing about then!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 20, 2008, 01:07:21 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 20, 2008, 12:51:49 pm
I was rather proud of the "Pro what?" Ellery loses track when he starts using big legal words and doesn't realize that Colson's eyes start crossing about then!

LOL! I liked that, too! Poor Colson's head still hadn't cleared from the "affidavits," "appearances," "preliminaries," and "arraigned" that Ellery threw at him! "Free" is much better!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 20, 2008, 01:51:53 pm: I've said it before, but Pam couldn't be in better hands that with Wes and Edna. And now Paula is helping her too. It's great that this 'broadens' Pams circle of friends, even though it's under such terrible circumstances.

And maybe the truce between Ellery and Paula (I love how he just decides to call her that even though Paula just made it clear she was keeping her distance! LOL) can be of some inspiration between Colson and Laura?

I'm enjoying this story immensly Louise. And thank you for posting every single day! It's just amazing. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 20, 2008, 10:32:19 pm: okay folks, the next phase of the drama!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/262431.html Chapter 21!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 21, 2008, 09:40:17 am: Quote from: louise van hine on March 20, 2008, 10:32:19 pm
okay folks, the next phase of the drama!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/262431.html Chapter 21!

SPOILERS

You weren't kidding about drama, Louise. Being back home only seems to have increased Laura's irrational (and, to be frank - repugnant) attitude. If she thinks Pam's ordeal is "ridiculous" (and if she still believes that Pam "asked for it") why does she want to "see her through it" at all? To view your own daughter's rape as nothing more than another way of "competing" with your ex-husband.....well, I don't even know what to say about that. I'm curious about what's been going on at her house since she's returned. I have to believe it's been pretty ugly.

“I wish yer friend Paula could a done it – she wouldn’t a argued with a D.A.”

Friend, huh? Well, Paula's status in the Cantrell/Grey household got elevated pretty quickly. LOL! And rightly so. I can see already that Paula's presence and counsel is going to be invaluable - and not just because of her legal skills. It can only be a good thing for Pam (and Katie Ann) to come in contact with an independent, intelligent and educated woman who knows she is the equal of any man.

And, yeah, after that conversation, poor Colson definitely needs some quality time with his husband to lower his blood pressure. :)

Wonderful, as always, Louise. Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 21, 2008, 10:59:51 pm: Amazing how much Paula has gone up in the estimation of Ellery and Colson, isn't it ?

heheh

And now... another kind of girl talk!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/262828.html Chapter 22
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on March 22, 2008, 01:01:50 am: Chapter 22 Spoilers

“You know that big study they did on sexuality with the sliding scale from 100% straight to 100% gay?”

“The Kinsey scale?”

“Yes that’s it. Believe me when I tell you Dreamboat Cantrell is all the way on the gay end. " *snort*

“I met his .. husband, too. Built like a brick shithouse as they say out here in the Wild West. Trains horses.” *double snort"

Let's bring Kelly to town-she sounds like a lot of fun. I was a little surprised at Paula's admission of fantasizing about Chief Deputy Dreamboat though.

You are on such a roll with this installment of the Greenlea Tales, Louise!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 22, 2008, 02:10:09 pm: SPOILERS

Quote from: frantic65 on March 22, 2008, 01:01:50 am
...Let's bring Kelly to town-she sounds like a lot of fun...

Yes, let's! Then Ellery can have two girlfriends - and both of them "girl lawyers," too! LOL!

You sure are on a roll, Louise - there wasn't one word in that conversation that didn't ring true.

...and the sheriff’s office up north didn’t care for my New York accent or the fact that the victim has a lawyer. I guess they thought they would discourage her from moving forward and it would go away.”

Yeah, the lineup thing was a bad sign.... >:( - and a victim always has the right to private counsel! The D.A.'s office in Prescott is making me more than a little uneasy....

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 22, 2008, 02:56:04 pm: The genesis of Paula's 'real feelings' about Ellery can be found early in 'Dupree's Choice' when she places her first call to her confidant, Kelly. Ellery caught her eye immediately, and later on, during the story 'The Chesterfield Fortune', she clashes with Ellery at the hospital and ends up bringing him home from the clinic with an episode of back pain, and that is the moment Colson becomes aware of some hidden feelings she may be harboring for him.

Nothing is ever easy in this town!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 23, 2008, 12:24:57 am: better late than never...

"The Grey Girls: Chapter 23": http://louisev.livejournal.com/262977.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 23, 2008, 07:03:08 pm: SPOILERS

“What a pair of pistols,” she said to herself, shaking her head.

LOL! You can say that again! And why do I get the feeling that we ain't seen nothing yet? Thank goodness Ellery and Colson didn't hear that conversation! Good grief. Dreamboat Cantrell certainly has a powerful affect on women.....but I can't say I don't understand why. ;D

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 23, 2008, 07:07:02 pm: and now, more of our pair of pistols, and Daddy pistol as well!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/263352.html 'Chapter 24'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 24, 2008, 07:30:15 am: Quote from: louise van hine on March 23, 2008, 07:07:02 pm
and now, more of our pair of pistols, and Daddy pistol as well!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/263352.html 'Chapter 24'

LOL! And Step-Daddy pistol, too!

SPOILERS

..."boy I’m glad I don’t got a wife no more sex.”

:laugh: Good one, Colson! I love when our boys act like a typical married couple - both a little out of sorts after a long day.

...Finally I got sick of it an gave her Paula’s number an said she can go bitch to my lawyer if she’s gonna bitch.”

Oh, this I want to hear!

“I think that Paula Samuelson’s got somethin for men in uniform if ya ask me,” Katie Ann said from behind Ellery.

Well, that's one thing I think we all saw coming ......Paula wouldn't appreciate that at all, Katie Ann (although Paula really must learn to keep her cards closer to the vest when it comes to her Ellery infatuation, as understandable as it is!).

So much to look forward to!

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 24, 2008, 11:55:53 am: yes unfortunately Paula isn't much of a poker player - she must have perked up just a little too much when the girls started talking about Ellery.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 24, 2008, 12:08:01 pm: Quote from: mariez on March 24, 2008, 07:30:15 am

“I think that Paula Samuelson’s got somethin for men in uniform if ya ask me,” Katie Ann said from behind Ellery.

Well, that's one thing I think we all saw coming ......Paula wouldn't appreciate that at all, Katie Ann (although Paula really must learn to keep her cards closer to the vest when it comes to her Ellery infatuation, as understandable as it is!).

You think so Katie Ann?? ;D. And Ellery's response had me thinking 'What? You really had no idea?' ???

And I agree, Paula forgot for a moment she was talking to her client and not to Kelly! I thought it was kinda unprofessional of Paula to make such a remard about their stepdad.

And Pam's and Katie Ann's remark about Ellery were disrespectful, in my opinion. They really shouldn't say things like that (even though they're all true of course!) to someone they just met five minutes ago.

Edna's going to have her hands full with these two! :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 24, 2008, 01:30:52 pm: Quote from: belbbmfan on March 24, 2008, 12:08:01 pm
And Pam's and Katie Ann's remark about Ellery were disrespectful, in my opinion. They really shouldn't say things like that (even though they're all true of course!) to someone they just met five minutes ago.

Edna's going to have her hands full with these two! :)

Yep, I thought it was disrespectful, too - and immature. 20 is young - but it's not that young! These girls have a lot of growing up to do, for sure. I think Edna already has her hands full - no wonder she breathed a sigh of relief when Colson and Ellery arrived!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 24, 2008, 01:51:21 pm: If everybody acted grown up there would be NO FUN AT ALL in Tourmaline, ladies! That is why everyone is so badly behaved!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 24, 2008, 04:28:56 pm: Quote from: mariez on March 24, 2008, 01:30:52 pm
Yep, I thought it was disrespectful, too - and immature. 20 is young - but it's not that young! These girls have a lot of growing up to do, for sure. I think Edna already has her hands full - no wonder she breathed a sigh of relief when Colson and Ellery arrived!

Marie

Thank you Marie; those girls being immature is something I,ve always thought, and had heated discussions over in the past lol. Oh I,m back by the way, anyone miss me? Like a sore arse I bet lol. :laugh: :laugh: My old pc blew up!! Hence the reason I havn't been about. I've had a lot of catching up to do though, which was very nice. I read your post about Jake and Heath Louise and I agree with everything you said. Yes for once I agree lol. Night all, see ya tomorow.
Souxi. xxxx
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 24, 2008, 04:55:46 pm: Hey! it's SOUXI! Welcome back! And I'm happy to report that fic has been going on in the meantime and there is plenty to read, so never mind with that sleep nonsense!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 24, 2008, 08:46:21 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 24, 2008, 01:51:21 pm
If everybody acted grown up there would be NO FUN AT ALL in Tourmaline, ladies! That is why everyone is so badly behaved!

This is true, Louise, and we wouldn't want it any other way! And with the twins, Wes and Edna and Ellery and Colson can have double the FUN! LOL!

Quote from: souxi on March 24, 2008, 04:28:56 pm
Thank you Marie; those girls being immature is something I,ve always thought, and had heated discussions over in the past lol.

Nice to see you, souxi! Sorry about your computer woes. Yeah, the girls are a bit immature, but I like them - they're basically good girls with good hearts and they do love their Daddy. :) (Although he better not find out what they were telling Paula LOL!) It will be interesting having them in town, that's for sure!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 24, 2008, 11:28:15 pm: too late, Marie! In a house of detectives what do you think is going to happen?

http://louisev.livejournal.com/263616.html 'Chapter 25'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on March 25, 2008, 01:07:52 am: Chapter 25
Spoilers

Thank you Lord for giving me sons!!!

These girls are totally outta control!! If this is the result of Laura's influence as a mom then I feel sorry for the kids she has/is having with Steve!!

“Oh do tell,” Ellery clasped his hands together. “And I’d love some pie... I hear Katie Ann made it. It’s gonna have ta be real good ta go with this story.”

Would that be humble pie that Katie Ann made?? If so, I think she & Pam need the first two slices!!

Well-Wes & Edna always wanted a big family and I guess they are getting that wish granted in a really big way!

I must say though that Colson, while embarassed, has been keeping his cool strangely well recently. Although I like how Ellery didn't let him sneak out into the kitchen and away from the action!

And Ellery-lol!-I love the way he gives those girls more than enough rope to hang themselves with!

And this was great: “I’ll tell ya. But it ain’t for polite company,” Pam said, standing up, and went over to Ellery and whispered in his ear. He blanched. Ahhhh!!! Sisters!!! Always ready to rat you out!!

I am lmao with every installment! Thanks Louise!!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 25, 2008, 08:02:26 am: SPOILERS

OMG, Louise - this was great. :laugh: I figured it would come out eventually, but that was fast; I should've known, with Chief Deputy Cantrell on the case! He played Katie Ann like a violin. I love that man.

And, yeah, my mom (who had both) always said us girls were harder to handle! LOL! But, I can't in fairness lay all of this at Laura's feet - Pam and Katie Ann are old enough to know better- and that's about the last thing in the world their mother would want them gossiping about. And, after all, Daddy Colson wanted to slip out of the room and avoid dealing with the whole thing! LOL!

...But you might want ta mind yer P’s and Q’s a bit more if ya don’t want ta be interferin in yer sister’s case here against this lowlife predator, Katie Ann,” Wes said.

Yes. This is what concerns me. Paula certainly has her work cut out for her. And we haven't met the prosecutor yet - or the defense attorney. :-\

Never a dull moment in Tourmaline! Great stuff, Louise.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 25, 2008, 08:14:27 am: I think Wes needs to make them write an essay! ::)

But on the topic of 'letting something slip', well, a lot of people have let things slip in Tourmaline. Edna talking to Laura about the wedding, Colson talking to Wayne about ties and all that, just to name a few.

Maybe it's something in the water! ;D
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 25, 2008, 10:02:21 am: Quote from: belbbmfan on March 25, 2008, 08:14:27 am
I think Wes needs to make them write an essay! ::)

But on the topic of 'letting something slip', well, a lot of people have let things slip in Tourmaline. Edna talking to Laura about the wedding, Colson talking to Wayne about ties and all that, just to name a few.

Maybe it's something in the water! ;D

Ha! I like the essay idea. And it's funny, I was thinking the same thing about the water - there is an endless list of "slippers' in that town! ;D

But.....no matter how Katie Ann tries to define it - that was no slip on her part. She deliberately asked Paula if she would keep everything they said in private - and then she spilled the beans about seeing Ellery naked. Once she saw that Paula was interested, she couldn't wait to hand out that juicy little tidbit! LOL! And apparently, she thought that keeping things private only applied to Paula - Ellery wasn't in the house for five seconds before she told him about Paula having a thing for men in uniforms! I really do hope both the girls have learned a lesson here - there's no room for "slips" and juicy bits of gossip in a legal proceeding.....so maybe it's best that this happened sooner rather than later!

And the next meeting between Paula and Ellery should be interesting - and awkward.

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 25, 2008, 11:00:14 am: I think the homily of the day that applies here is "Need to know basis!!"

thanks for all the great feedback. Can you tell I grew up in a household full of sisters?
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 25, 2008, 11:06:19 am: Quote from: mariez on March 25, 2008, 10:02:21 am

And the next meeting between Paula and Ellery should be interesting - and awkward.

Marie

Oh, yes definitely. Is Ellery going to 'let it slip' ;D that he knows what she told the girls and what the girls told her?

Awkward indeed.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 25, 2008, 04:19:51 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 25, 2008, 11:00:14 am
I think the homily of the day that applies here is "Need to know basis!!"

I think I've heard ~~Reverend~~ Sheriff Brown give that homily! LOL!

Quote from: louise van hine on March 25, 2008, 11:00:14 am
Can you tell I grew up in a household full of sisters?

Well, that explains it - except that you know the boys really well, too, Louise! :)

Quote from: belbbmfan on March 25, 2008, 11:06:19 am
Oh, yes definitely. Is Ellery going to 'let it slip' ;D that he knows what she told the girls and what the girls told her?

Awkward indeed.

Ha Ha! And we know that Paula isn't much of a poker player, but we also know that Ellery is an excellent poker player! So if Ellery lets it "slip" it won't be by accident! ;D

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 25, 2008, 04:29:08 pm: there might be some poker playing going on... who knows ...?

::)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 25, 2008, 11:25:25 pm: And now, chapter 26! http://louisev.livejournal.com/263882.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 26, 2008, 07:34:03 am: SPOILERS

Well, that was sad and pathetic, not to mention embarrassing. Aside from the fact that she's treating her daughters horribly, Laura is making a fool out of herself. I know she can't be heartless - but I have to wonder what it will take to make her think of Pam's needs first, and to stop viewing everything as a competition between her and Colson. Clearly she thinks Paula is just one more person on Colson's side in this "conspiracy" to separate her from her daughters. :-\

It was easy for Paula to size the situation (and Laura) quickly. I do wonder if maybe her thoughts regarding oppressive mothers come from personal experience.

Nice to see Paula and Ellery both behaving like adults and professionals!

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 26, 2008, 08:21:30 am: Your right Marie, she IS treating both her daughters appallingly. I think she is an incredibly bitter and twisted woman, who simply can,t get over the past or let it go. She still feels so much resentment for Colson I think it,s affecting how she treats her daughters. She thinks everyone is against her all the time. Yes I know that finding out that Colson was gay had to hurt a LOT, no argument there, but come on, it was so long ago now. She,s really got to learn to get over herself because right now the important one is Pam. She,s been raped for Christ,s sake and Laura is being an absolute cow. She,s thinking about herself and HER feelings ALL the time. It,s all "me me me" and "look at me, look how hurt I am, look what Colson did to me" etc etc. Get over it Laura, ffs and start acting like an adult and more importantly a mother, because if she,s not careful, she,ll loose those girls for good, and it will be entirely her own fault. That,s my two cents for what it,s worth. Good to be back by the way. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 26, 2008, 01:23:39 pm: hey Souxi,

And it is great to have you back with all your bluff and bluster! I love it!

Part of why it is useful to have Edna and Paula as part of the "extended family" is that it gives Colson's daughters some other role model than the emotionally frayed and bitter Laura, who has lots of reasons for being resentful, but none of them really help her children at all. The fact that her resentments are being newly fueled by having an unexpected pregnancy and trouble at home, as well as being shown up by a fancy-pants "husband" for her ex, doesn't sit well either, so she is going to have to do something or simply explode.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 26, 2008, 01:31:44 pm: Well I,m very glad you love my bluff and bluster Louise, about time someone did lol. :laugh:
As I said, I can fully see why Laura is so bitter and twisted and resentful, but she,s got to try and learn to deal with it and let it go, especially now she,s pregnant or she,s going to give herself high blood pressure and an ulcer.
I,m glad the girls are staying with Wes and Edna and I like the way Edna reminds them of their manners, I would too, although probably a bit more forcefully than Edna lol. :laugh:
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 26, 2008, 03:22:56 pm: Quote from: souxi on March 26, 2008, 01:31:44 pm
... and I like the way Edna reminds them of their manners, I would too, although probably a bit more forcefully than Edna lol. :laugh:

LOL! It would have been great to see you at the Browns' dinner table the other night, souxi! ;D

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 26, 2008, 03:36:02 pm: Quote from: mariez on March 26, 2008, 03:22:56 pm
LOL! It would have been great to see you at the Browns' dinner table the other night, souxi! ;D

Marie

Hahaha. Tell you what, could you imagine it if it was me, the Browns, those irritating girls and cousin Julia? OMFG that would be a riot lol. :laugh: :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
Ok I,m off now because for the next five nights, it,s Most Haunted Live in Turin, which, so legend says, is the City of Satan!!! :o :o
So with any luck I,m going to be scared out of my wits lol.
See you all tomorow.
Souxi. xxx
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 27, 2008, 11:04:07 am: last night I was out for a "goodbye" dinner with a colleague and didn't have a lot of time to do anything, so hopefully I will be back on track today with a new chapter!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on March 27, 2008, 06:22:35 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 27, 2008, 11:04:07 am

last night I was out for a "goodbye" dinner with a colleague and didn't have a lot of time to do anything, so hopefully I will be back on track today with a new chapter!

That's ok Louise. Does anyone know what the equivalent of a meth clinic is when you miss a daily hit of your favorite slash?? (I feel the shakes coming on!) ;)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 27, 2008, 06:46:00 pm: the Rereaders Clinic! Or the archives of the commentaries that you can find right here in the Creative Writing Forum!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on March 27, 2008, 07:54:07 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 27, 2008, 06:46:00 pm
the Rereaders Clinic! Or the archives of the commentaries that you can find right here in the Creative Writing Forum!

;D
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 27, 2008, 08:51:44 pm: and here is the chapter of the day du jour!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/264185.html 'Chapter 27'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 28, 2008, 03:12:08 am: :) I liked this 'chapter du jour'.

It seems the girls (I remember Colson referring to them as a 'gaggle of girls' in The Long Way Home :laugh:) are driving everyone 'up in the curtains' as we say over here. ;D

Next in line: their neighbours to be Jeremy and Nicky. Are they ready for lots of female silliness? Hmmm, I doubt it.

I liked it when Ellery said 'I need a little time with my man.' Good plan Ellery!

And it's good that Joe is in such a good mood, eating his muffins! I can resist just about anything except temptation. :laugh: Ain't that the truth.

Thanks Louise. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 28, 2008, 09:46:51 am: Quote from: belbbmfan on March 28, 2008, 03:12:08 am
It seems the girls (I remember Colson referring to them as a 'gaggle of girls' in The Long Way Home :laugh:) are driving everyone 'up in the curtains' as we say over here. ;D

"Up in the curtains." LOL! Oh, I like that expression, Fabienne - and it sure fits. Colson (a/k/a "Walking Guilt Trip") won't tell his girls that he can't spend all day playiing with them - he has an actual JOB to do - and the girls are so excited about being free from Prescott and Laura and thrilled to be getting Daddy's attention and in need of some distraction that they are oblivious. Something has to give. God bless Edna and Wes - they can't skip the second helping of pie and go home! LOL!

Quote from: belbbmfan on March 28, 2008, 03:12:08 am
Next in line: their neighbours to be Jeremy and Nicky. Are they ready for lots of female silliness? Hmmm, I doubt it.

I doubt it, too. And I'm very interested to see J&N's reaction to the twins once they get to know them a little better - and the twins' reaction to J&N. If I remember, Jeremy met them at E&C's house once and Nick saw them briefly when they came into the bar at Christmas.

And Joe quoting Oscar Wilde - I love that guy! :laugh:

Don't think we've seen Ellery work on a child abuse case before. Really tough stuff. >:(

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 28, 2008, 10:46:26 pm: and now, chapter 28: http://louisev.livejournal.com/264317.html

which might rightly be titled 'Friday Night at the Fights'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on March 28, 2008, 11:12:59 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 28, 2008, 10:46:26 pm
and now, chapter 28: http://louisev.livejournal.com/264317.html

which might rightly be titled 'Friday Night at the Fights'

Or maybe "Fright Night" seeing as how it ended on a mighty scary note!! :o lol!! Poor Colson!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 28, 2008, 11:37:33 pm: SPOILERS

No one can move a story along with dialogue like you, Louise! This chapter is an instant classic.

“Tell ya what. If ya die just gimme a call an I’ll be sure ta come by.”

LOL! And I love Ellery adopting the Wes lingo -...."it's yer fearless leader."

“None a yer pains in the ass, sweetheart, just one a mine. Too funny - that's exactly what I was thinking while he was talking to Wayne!

Fright Night, for sure, Fran! Could you hear me screaming "No, don't answer the phone!" A call from Laura - what a perfect way to top off Colson's day. ::)

Thanks, Louise
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 28, 2008, 11:49:16 pm: I sort of figured you'd like this chapter! It brings back to mind Ellery's Percodan-dazed first night with his answering machine, when Wayne kissed Colson down at the bar and Ellery wasn't picking up the phone.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on March 29, 2008, 04:50:35 am: Hahahaha, great chapter Louise.

It's not only Colson that has kids to deal with! :laugh:

Loved the Wayne conversation. Great stuff.

And can someone book that holiday in Puerto Rico NOW please???
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 29, 2008, 07:07:53 pm: someone may have to! And call the exterminator!

Here's chapter 29: http://louisev.livejournal.com/264617.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 29, 2008, 09:43:02 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 29, 2008, 07:07:53 pm
someone may have to! And call the exterminator!

Here's chapter 29: http://louisev.livejournal.com/264617.html

SPOILERS

Add "call the phone company" to that list! Holy Shit, Louise. Laura has seriously gone off the deep end and she's digging herself in deeper and deeper by the minute! Doesn't she have a young son at home with her? I'm not sure she's capable of caring for him at this point. And when will it hit her that Ellery knows she's pregnant and that Edna must've spilled the beans?

You’d best make sure I stay close by so Pam don’t get herself in a heap a trouble...

I think you've got that backwards, Laura. Thank God Ellery knows the law and can't be intimidated by her crazy rantings! He handled her perfectly (have I mentioned lately how much I love Ellery?). No, it's certainly not in the best interest of the prosecutor to make Pam look bad, but the defense attorney ......... :-\. Well, deep breath. One step at a time.

This is some story! Thanks!
Marie

P.S. Lauren is sweet, but if I hear one more word about those effin' mice, I may have to kick his ass along with Wayne's! LOL!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 29, 2008, 10:49:57 pm: hahahahah 'those effin mice!'

I love to read your comments, Marie! Whoo wee! And everyone else's too! Maybe that's why I keep writing this crazy stuff!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 30, 2008, 08:47:20 pm: and here is chapter 30:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/264762.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on March 31, 2008, 08:06:52 am: SPOILERS

Poor Colson. I shudder to think what would happen if he weren't married to a chief deputy sheriff and close personal friends with a sheriff.

...Like the day you caught Larry Esteban out in the woods an kept punchin em.”..

We all know that long-standing and pent-up fear, resentment and anger are dangerous things to ourselves and those around us, and Colson went off the deep end with Larry Esteban and was lucky enough to have Ellery around to snap him back to reality and give him a sense of security. The situations aren't precisely the same, of course, but it appears that those same emotions are causing Laura to basically lose her mind - and it doesn't appear that she has anyone to rein her in or give her that sense of security. From what we saw in "The Long Way Home," her husband only serves to exacerbate the problem. Edna was kind and a temporary balm, but basically Laura views her as part of Colson's camp. I started re-reading "Red Stallions for Christmas" last night and was reminded that Katie Ann thought Pam's lie about the red stallions was "genius" and that it would be "fun" for Laura to keep believing it - because she quickly saw it as a way to manipulate her parents into getting her way (ironically something she probably learned from her mother, but not "fun" or helpful in the least). Sigh.

“You look after Colson now, an I don’t want ta know any a the details,..”

LOL! Thanks for that little bit of classic, Wes.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on March 31, 2008, 11:37:45 am: SPOILERS!

Yes, I'm afraid the resentment lies deep, and perhaps it was only a matter of time after Colson found his own life and his own way that Laura would figure out that his relationship with Ellery wasn't a passing thing and that it would continue to irritate her. But her daughters' desire to abandon ship was not expected, and with their pushing to get away from her, that has to hurt really badly.

And now it is finally coming to head, under the worst possible circumstances.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on March 31, 2008, 12:56:10 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on March 31, 2008, 11:37:45 am
SPOILERS!

Yes, I'm afraid the resentment lies deep, and perhaps it was only a matter of time after Colson found his own life and his own way that Laura would figure out that his relationship with Ellery wasn't a passing thing and that it would continue to irritate her. But her daughters' desire to abandon ship was not expected, and with their pushing to get away from her, that has to hurt really badly.

And now it is finally coming to head, under the worst possible circumstances.

I,ve said this before Louise, I can honestly totally understand Lauras continuing resentment about all this I really can, BUT. If she can,t ever fully accept Colsons relationship with Ellery, and that is highly unlikely, she,s just going to have to learn to live with it, because if she doesn,t it,s going to make her ill. She,s getting herself so worked up and stressed about it all that she,s going to give herself an ulcer and probably high blood pressure too, and with her being pregnant that is not good for her or the baby. She has offered her daughter no support atall through all this so it,s no wonder they can,t wait to get away from her. She,s going to drive away everyone if she,s not very careful and she,ll end up a very lonely old woman. She,s about as bitter and twisted as she can get at the moment. She still thinks of herself as the "wronged wife" and yes, she was wronged in the worst possible way, but it was a long long time ago and she has re-married. I really think it,s time she let or at least tried to let it go. Colson didn,t set out to be gay and hurt her, that,s just the way things went. He tried and tried for so long to fight against it because of the way he was brought up and look what happened, he lost Adam, the love of his life. You can,t help who you are or who you fall in love with. I honestly think she,ll end up being really ill over this if she,s not careful and loose the baby. I sincerely hope NOT, but stress can do alarming things to a womans body, especially when she,s pregnant.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 01, 2008, 10:00:30 pm: and, chapter 31...http://louisev.livejournal.com/265178.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 02, 2008, 07:33:30 am: SPOILERS

The return of "Uncle Ellery" LOL! Who wouldn't be okay with Uncle Ellery and his checkbook? Sign me up. ;D

Pam doesn't need any more stress, and she certainly doesn't need or deserve her mother's anger directed toward her. I'm glad both Colson and Ellery realize that communications between Laura and Pam (and anyone in Tourmaline for that matter) have to stop and are ready to take action.

It will be interesting to see Colson visiting Jeremy and Nick - we've never seen him or Ellery at their apartment! And I've been curious about how Jeremy's issues with his sister's sexual assault and his own strained relationship with his mother will play into the situtation, especially now that it looks like he and Nick will be neighbors with the twins. Interesting developments...

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 02, 2008, 05:54:37 pm: SPOILERS

I forgot to mention my favorite part:

“We’re gonna have ta watch ourselves with these girls,” Ellery added. “We start out gettin em an apartment an we might come home with a farm.”

I love the familial tone of this - two parents talking about their girls. :) And Ellery hasn't given up the farm idea!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 03, 2008, 12:44:27 am: no, Ellery has definitely not given up on the farm idea.

Have to have 'future developments' don't you know!

And now, a late-breaking Chapter 32. Sorry about that, I have been somewhat distracted with job applications and politics blogs and such. Mea Culpa!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/265369.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 03, 2008, 07:40:14 am: Geez, Louise, no need to apologize - and I always like the sound of "future" developments!

SPOILERS

It's always great to listen in on a Colson-Jeremy talk. They have such a natural rapport and it was nice for Jeremy to have a turn at reassuring Colson.

“Good deal. If he gets one a the unfurnished ones them girls might be talkin em inta matchin bedroom sets an a hi fi console in the livin room.”

LOL! Our Nicky is no slouch himself at getting what he wants, so it's not surprising that he's got the twins pegged exactly!

“I couldn’t say no, you know how us uncles are,” Ellery said, smiling modestly.

Ha! Uncle Ellery you old softie, you! :laugh:

Great story, Louise Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 03, 2008, 11:23:06 am: SPOILER!

You said it, Marie,

he knows what he would do with a rich uncle, that's for sure, push for whatever he can get!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 04, 2008, 11:16:01 pm: okay, no I haven't forgotten!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/265496.html 'Chapter 33'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 05, 2008, 07:43:53 am: We know you'd never forget your Tourmaline boys (and girls), Louise. :)

SPOILERS

I like Nick's practicality and matter-of-factness; a nice counter-point to all the drama. This is going to be a huge adjustment for both girls, especially Pam; but, hopefully, being somewhat independent will help both of them mature. I'm glad they have a support system in place, though, because there is no way that Pam can fully realize what is in store for her.

I'm also glad the girls got to see Daddy and Uncle Ellery grousing at each other a bit so that they don't have an overly idealized view of any relationship. Changing phone numbers is a good thing; but I have an uncomfortable feeling about the restraining order..........

It was a brief visit, but it would be interesting to hear J&N's private impressions of the quick glimpse they got of the girls and the situation. There's always so much going on beneath the surface in every chapter!

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 05, 2008, 11:31:42 pm: well gang, I started out a bit late today and got cracking on a long-overdue project with my taxes, and I am a bit blown out now.

Whew.

If anyone wants to know what I've been up to, I posted on my blog. But that part is done, I probably have another hour or two to check math and fill out some 'clean' forms before getting the stuff ready to post, but for THIS weekend, the tax thing is DONE. I am hoping to have my stamina back so I can resume my story tomorrow, and maybe send out some new resumes.

I am hoping to hear about the gummint job in Oklahoma City on Monday and a possible screening interview.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 06, 2008, 04:02:13 pm: and here is chapter 34!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/265810.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 06, 2008, 06:07:05 pm: SPOILERS

I've been waiting for the Teddy Eldredge connection to be made and now it has been. I'm glad Pam has Paula in her corner.

I'm glad Wes was able to ease Colson's mind a little. But I'm wondering what kind of ideas he has for putting the reins on Laura....I think Wes should answer the phone the next time it rings, he seems to be the only one Laura's been intimidated by so far!

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on April 07, 2008, 03:57:35 am: Quote from: Gabriel on April 06, 2008, 06:07:05 pm
SPOILERS

I've been waiting for the Teddy Eldredge connection to be made and now it has been. I'm glad Pam has Paula in her corner.

I'm glad Wes was able to ease Colson's mind a little. But I'm wondering what kind of ideas he has for putting the reins on Laura....I think Wes should answer the phone the next time it rings, he seems to be the only one Laura's been intimidated by so far!
Thanks, Louise!
Marie

Let me at her Marie, I,ll bloody intimidate the old cow with one of my famous Souxi glares. Apparantly my sons mates are terrifed of me, they think I,m well scary. :laugh: :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 07, 2008, 08:49:51 am: Quote from: souxi on April 07, 2008, 03:57:35 am
Let me at her Marie, I,ll bloody intimidate the old cow with one of my famous Souxi glares. Apparantly my sons mates are terrifed of me, they think I,m well scary. :laugh: :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:

LOL! No doubt, souxi! I think they're in need of a new bouncer at the bar - I'll bet the "Souxi glare" would work there, too! :laugh:

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 07, 2008, 10:24:31 pm: you are giving me evil ideas for new bar staff!

But now here is chapter 35!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/266198.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 08, 2008, 07:49:37 am: SPOILERS

...weighed down with grief, tormented with guilt, or petrified with anxiety...

What an awful way to live. That breaks my heart - for both Colson and Ellery. It's understandable that his fears and anxieties (which are not completely baseless) would surface again. Vengeance is such a hollow shell. Does Laura feel better after gossiping to the detective and making sure Colson knew? Not at all.

“We’ll get through this too, ya know.”

It's wonderful to see how supportive and protective the boys are of each other's needs (and the little bit about who is the best shot in the county was sweet). :)

And I can't believe I'm saying this - but it was a relief to hear about those effin' mice again! LOL! And Ellery's standard "..the bar burnin down?” always makes me laugh.

Beautifully written chapter, Louise - thanks!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 08, 2008, 12:13:44 pm: SPOILER!

It was a bit unexpected for me too but ... this is the nature of his legacy of being in the closet. By now it's more like a bad habit but there isn't any way to deal with it except head-on, and with a lot of liquor!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on April 08, 2008, 01:37:19 pm: No way out but through, right?

I thought it was sad that Ellery thinks that Colson is still ashamed of who he is. I think at this point, it's more fear. And Colson has been right to be fearful.

I was thinking driving home from work that, although there have been attacks against Colson and Ellery, Colson has been in a supportive environment on a daily basis since moving to Tourmaline. Ellery's colleagues, Wes and Edna, the customers at the Red Stallion, they accepts him for who he is. I wonder how many other people in Tourmaline know about them? I suppose a lot of people do.
And now, with the girls settling in Tourmaline, making friends or even, in the long term, starting a family there, more people will know about their father. It's inevitable. Maybe Colson hasn't given this any thought, but he will have to find a way to get used to this.

I hope they get through the whole Pam ordeal ok.

Thanks Louise! :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 09, 2008, 11:05:51 pm: okey doke... sorry I have been somewhat preoccupied the last couple of days, but I pulled my mind together for an extra-length chapter of Ellery goodness!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/266382.html Chapter 36
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 10, 2008, 07:56:48 am: Well, there's not many things better than extra-length Ellery goodness! ;D

SPOILERS

I agree with Ellery that I don't believe Pam is telling a lie about the rape. But I also agree with Paula - it is odd that Pam didn't mention the fact that she had dated Teddy Eldredge, even if it was just a "passing fancy." And, more importantly, a defense attorney is going to pounce on that fact and try to run with it. Poor Pam. I fear she's going to find out why many sexual assault victims choose to remain silent. >:(

Well then I guess my next call is the hard one, to go over all of this with Pam.”

Yes, Paula has her work cut out for her - a delicate situation that has to be handled frankly.

Add Paula to the growing list of people who now know Laura's "secret" about her pregnancy. Ol' Ben Franklin sure knew what he was talking about when he said "three can keep a secret if two are dead."

Really great stuff, Louise. Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on April 10, 2008, 10:39:44 am: Spoilers

What's this about Ellery's extra length??? (Oh goodness-yes of course what was I thinking?) ::)

Okay call me suspicious but did that discussion really need to be had over breakfast at the diner? Methinks ADA

Samuelson may be subconsciously using her position as Pam's attorney to get in a little social time with the

unavailable yet hunky Chief Deputy. You know, like when you're in high school and you join a club just so you can

spend time with someone you're crushing on even though you have zero chance of catching the person's eye.

I'm not blaming her for it, I'd probably do the same thing. ;)

I can see her trying to make this a weekly thing. And I love Ellery sweet talking the waitress while Paula must have

been sitting there thinking "What the hell.....?"

Terrific as always Louise!!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 11, 2008, 11:11:53 pm: Chapter 37 for the changeup!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/266698.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 12, 2008, 08:48:06 am: Quote from: louise van hine on April 11, 2008, 11:11:53 pm
Chapter 37 for the changeup!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/266698.html

SPOILERS

The changeup and some curveballs, too! I did have the feeling the plea agreement was going to be in trouble, but Amos's new attorney was a surprise. That's all Colson and Ellery need on top of everything else - a Beagle reminder. And who are these other new clients in Greenlea County that Eagleton and Spry have taken on? That can't be good.

Wes, as usual, gave Ellery good advice about the restraining order. That idea was making me uncomfortable and I don't think it would have been helpful at all in the long run. The phone number, however, does need to be changed "toot sweet" as Wes would say.

...an then when she never did get pregnant I began ta worry somethin worse was wrong with her.”

Ellery's not the only one who wants to hear more about this! Not a good day for Ellery's blood pressure, but he did keep his cool in the meeting, so he is learning.

Now what?

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 13, 2008, 11:43:07 pm: and this is now what!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/266960.html 'Chapter 38'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 14, 2008, 07:34:52 am: SPOILERS

Paula handled that well. I do hope Pam remembers to keep all her answers short and specific. Laura didn't even want her 20 year old daughter to talk to boys? Oh, my.

Poor thing. On top of everything else, she's still counting days and worrying about a pregnancy. And speaking of pregnancies, I wonder if the next time Laura calls the Cantrell/Grey household she'll get a recording telling her that number is no longer in service! That should bring about some interesting reactions.....

Great job, Louise. Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 16, 2008, 01:12:17 am: sorry for the irregular postings, folkses... I had some personal business to attend to and I'm still a little too fascinated with political blogging, but I promise I will be resuming work on this story as soon as possible!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 16, 2008, 10:52:54 pm: and finally, chapter 39!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267048.html

a little humor.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 17, 2008, 07:14:25 am: Quote from: louise van hine on April 16, 2008, 10:52:54 pm
and finally, chapter 39!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267048.html

a little humor.

SPOILERS

More than just a little.

The day I start lookin at women’s asses is the day I finally check into psychotherapy.

LOL! Gotta love Ellery. I really needed that, Louise! I'm dealing with my own Amos-type and I've been feeling as stressed as Ellery. But your writing is better than his boring relaxation tapes! :)

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on April 17, 2008, 12:47:06 pm: Quote from: mariez on April 17, 2008, 07:14:25 am
I really needed that, Louise! I'm dealing with my own Amos-type and I've been feeling as stressed as Ellery.

Marie

:o

Oh, poor Marie!

Now let's see what we can do to help you relax a bit more...

hmmmm, how about a nice sunday roast made by Edna

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/Sunday_roast_-_roast_beef_1.jpg)

accompanied by a side of ...

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/sides_biscuits.jpg)

and afterwards, enjoy a little

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/how-to-cope-with-back-pain-2.jpg)

while sipping on a

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/images-5.jpg)

and if all else fails, just stare at these for a while.

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/hugh-jackman.jpg)

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/Hugh_Jackman_001.jpg)

How's that working for ya? ;) ;D

Hang in there! :-*
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on April 17, 2008, 12:55:11 pm: Quote from: belbbmfan on April 17, 2008, 12:47:06 pm
:o

Oh, poor Marie!

Now let's see what we can do to help you relax a bit more...

hmmmm, how about a nice sunday roast made by Edna

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/Sunday_roast_-_roast_beef_1.jpg)

accompanied by a side of ...

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/sides_biscuits.jpg)

and afterwards, enjoy a little

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/how-to-cope-with-back-pain-2.jpg)

while sipping on a

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/images-5.jpg)

and if all else fails, just stare at these for a while.

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/hugh-jackman.jpg)

(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/Hugh_Jackman_001.jpg)

How's that working for ya? ;) ;D

Hang in there! :-*

Those pictures of Hugh do it for me EVERY time. What a gorgeous man he is....................*sigh*
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on April 17, 2008, 10:20:43 pm: Fabienne,

HJ pix=*ded* :-*

He is drop-dead gorgeous!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 17, 2008, 10:25:40 pm: (((((Fabienne)))))

The roast beef was tender and delicious, the biscuits were light and fluffy, the massage was heavenly, the beer was crisp and refreshing, but this:

Quote
(http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/other/hugh-jackman.jpg)

is definitely working for me!!!!!! :D Hard to believe one man can possess such perfection. You made my day - thanks! :-* :-*

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on April 18, 2008, 03:13:11 pm: God, he is gorgeous, isn't he? Man oh man oh man.....

I posted some pictures yesterday from Australia (the movie) over on the Hugh Hugh Hugh thread on anything goes. I am really looking forward to that movie. I hope it is good!

Hugh's new movie, Deception is scheduled for a wide opening on April 25. It also stars Ewan McGregor and Michelle Williams. No reviews yet on Rottentomatoes.com

L
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 18, 2008, 03:30:55 pm: they CHANGED THE NAME AGAIN?

First it was "The Tourist"

Then it was "The List"

now it's "Deception"?

And was it you who said that they were debating having it go direct to DVD?
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on April 18, 2008, 03:56:38 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on April 18, 2008, 03:30:55 pm
they CHANGED THE NAME AGAIN?

First it was "The Tourist"

Then it was "The List"

now it's "Deception"?

And was it you who said that they were debating having it go direct to DVD?

Yes, now it is Deception and yes, I did read a comment on IMDb about the direct to DVD possibility. But it is coming out a week from today.

Given its checkered history, it might be wise to go see it fast (if you want to see Hugh) since it might only be in the movie theater for a short time.

L
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 18, 2008, 05:41:58 pm: maybe if it is playing around here I can see it on my final weekend in California - which will be next weekend!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 19, 2008, 05:53:12 pm: at last, another chapter!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267455.html Chapter 40
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 19, 2008, 08:21:49 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on April 19, 2008, 05:53:12 pm
at last, another chapter!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267455.html Chapter 40

SPOILERS

Yikes! Teddy Eldredge phoning Pam? Why? That's wrong in so many ways I don't know where to begin. Paula and the Yavapai county prosecutor need to be notified "toot sweet" as Wes would say. And what is Laura's angle? Before all this happened, she doesn't want Pam speaking with Teddy and now she gives him, the brother of the alleged perpetrator, the Browns' phone number?!?!!!! Maybe it is time for that restraining order......

And I can't quite figure out what's going on in Ellery's mind about the ranch, either.....

I love how you keep us guessing, Louise!

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on April 20, 2008, 12:37:07 am: SPOILERS

Chapter 40

Looks like everyone needs a new phone number thanks to Laura's raging hormones or whatever her deal is.

And who's idea was it to have Teddy look Pam up anyway? Laura has just been twisted enough lately to be the

one to reach out to him like maybe Pam would drop the charges if she's dating her rapist's brother. Ick!

Ellery's ranch obsession is confusing to me because he is feeding the flames, as it were, Colson really doesn't seem

interested and actually may be getting annoyed by his pushing the idea and I think Ellery is encouraging even more

headaches with these unpredictable Grey girls when he keeps bringing it up.

Never a dull moment!!

Thanks Louise!

Fran
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 21, 2008, 07:30:30 am: Chapter 41 popped up on my f-list this morning, so I'll post the link! :)

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267654.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/267654.html)

SPOILERS

I think Laura needs to be taught a few words and phrases. Blackmail is a form of extortion, which is a felony. Interference with a criminal investigation is also a felony. Obstruction of justice is also floating around in my mind. She's pathetic, desperate and ignorant and I understand that, but if she wants to play hardball (and apparently she does) she needs to learn the rules of the game. (Can you tell I've had a bad couple of weeks and I'm not in the mood for b.s? LOL!)

I hope the Glenfiddle helps, these boys needs some serious relaxation!

I can't even guess what the next chapter will bring ....

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on April 21, 2008, 08:44:33 am: Quote from: mariez on April 21, 2008, 07:30:30 am
Chapter 41 popped up on my f-list this morning, so I'll post the link! :)

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267654.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/267654.html)

SPOILERS

I think Laura needs to be taught a few words and phrases. Blackmail is a form of extortion, which is a felony. Interference with a criminal investigation is also a felony. Obstruction of justice is also floating around in my mind. She's pathetic, desperate and ignorant and I understand that, but if she wants to play hardball (and apparently she does) she needs to learn the rules of the game. (Can you tell I've had a bad couple of weeks and I'm not in the mood for b.s? LOL!)

I hope the Glenfiddle helps, these boys needs some serious relaxation!

I can't even guess what the next chapter will bring ....

Thanks,
Marie

Marie have a read of my comments on Louise,s LJ. I,ll teach that old crone a few words and phrases and I promise you, NONE of them will be polite ones either. grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr. >:( >:( >:( >:( >:(

(http://bestsmileys.com/violent/18.gif)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 21, 2008, 01:20:45 pm: Quote from: mariez on April 21, 2008, 07:30:30 am
Chapter 41 popped up on my f-list this morning, so I'll post the link! :)

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267654.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/267654.html)

whoooops! I don't know how I forgot to post the link! Oh well, writing it is the important thing!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 23, 2008, 10:20:56 pm: did you think I forgot?

Nope!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/267845.html 'Chapter 42'

a few fireworks in the offing.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on April 24, 2008, 06:54:00 am: Ah, the perfect way to start the day. A new chapter and a cup of coffee. Thanks, Louise!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 24, 2008, 07:18:11 am: Quote from: MaineWriter on April 24, 2008, 06:54:00 am
Ah, the perfect way to start the day. A new chapter and a cup of coffee. Thanks, Louise!

I second that!

SPOILERS

“Don’t you understand?” Laura looked at her as if Paula were stupid. “This is all a big whitewash an you been dragged right in the middle of it. She made the whole thing up, an this is all ta make sure those girls end up down here by Colson an they don’t got ta grow up an be responsible for themselves!

The saddest - and scariest - part is that she truly believes her own words. Fueled by the difficulty of accepting the idea of Pam being raped and her resentment and jealousy (interesting that she believes Ellery is the puppet master here, and that Colson and the Browns are following his lead) she's lost touch with reality. She needs serious professional help. I'm afraid that by the time Laura has her own "rude awakening" it may be too late to salvage her relationship with her daughters.

What a poignant portrait you've painted, Louise - really wrenching.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on April 24, 2008, 07:26:59 am: Quote from: mariez on April 24, 2008, 07:18:11 am
I second that!

SPOILERS

“Don’t you understand?” Laura looked at her as if Paula were stupid. “This is all a big whitewash an you been dragged right in the middle of it. She made the whole thing up, an this is all ta make sure those girls end up down here by Colson an they don’t got ta grow up an be responsible for themselves!

The saddest - and scariest - part is that she truly believes her own words. Fueled by the difficulty of accepting the idea of Pam being raped and her resentment and jealousy (interesting that she believes Ellery is the puppet master here, and that Colson and the Browns are following his lead) she's lost touch with reality. She needs serious professional help. I'm afraid that by the time Laura has her own "rude awakening" it may be too late to salvage her relationship with her daughters.
What a poignant portrait you've painted, Louise - really wrenching.

Thanks,
Marie

What gets me is, WHY can,t she accept that her daughter WAS raped? Why has she got it all twsited in her silly head and thinks that it,s all some elaborate scheme for the two of them to "escape" to be near their father? They don,t need permission from her to be near their father ffs, they are adults Laura!! They have every right in the world to be near him, and right now he,s being far more supportive of her than her useless lunatic mother is. I mean fancy driving 300 miles to post a letter on Colsons door and then turning up to see Paula at her office? The woman is a total fruit cake. And Louise, dont, forget what I did to Bunny, it,s getting to that stage again...............grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr@Laura. *gets her bomb ready* ;)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 24, 2008, 08:04:43 am: SPOILERS

Quote from: souxi on April 24, 2008, 07:26:59 am
What gets me is, WHY can,t she accept that her daughter WAS raped?

I imagine because it's too painful. Why did it take Colson so many years to accept his own sexuality? Isn't it ironic that his denial caused so much pain to his family (and himself and Adam)....and now they seem to be stuck in this loop of hurt, blame, and guilt and everyone suffers for it. But it does seem that things have reached a boiling point and something has to give ....no matter the circumstances, Laura simply can't be allowed to continue inserting herself into a criminal matter and making threats.

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on April 24, 2008, 08:13:52 am: Sure maybe it is painfull for Laura, but think how much more painful it is for poor Pam, she was the one who was raped. I think Laura is a selfcentred hateful bitter twisted old cow. She thinks about no one but herself. Her daughter has gone through one of the worst things a woman can possible go through and she needs her mothers love and support. Laura is going to end up a very lonely old woman, because she,ll drive everyone away from her at this rate. She,ll have no one to blame but herself for that. I'm having a bad week and I,m right out of sympathy, can you tell? :laugh:
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 24, 2008, 08:28:50 am: Quote from: souxi on April 24, 2008, 08:13:52 am
Sure maybe it is painfull for Laura, but think how much more painful it is for poor Pam, she was the one who was raped. I think Laura is a selfcentred hateful bitter twisted old cow. She thinks about no one but herself. Her daughter has gone through one of the worst things a woman can possible go through and she needs her mothers love and support. Laura is going to end up a very lonely old woman, because she,ll drive everyone away from her at this rate. She,ll have no one to blame but herself for that. I'm having a bad week and I,m right out of sympathy, can you tell? :laugh:

souxi, I'm not trying to defend Laura and I'm certainly not trying to deny poor Pam's anguish - I was just giving my thoughts on your question about "why" Laura can't accept the fact that Pam was raped. It's totally frustrating to try and apply logic to irrational behavior. And I completely agree that if she continues in this manner she will end up alone.

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 26, 2008, 04:47:03 pm: mooooore story!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/268246.html 'Chapter 43'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 26, 2008, 09:28:39 pm: SPOILERS

....I’ve taken a belt ta my boy.”

Hmm...ya know, Esteban, I think you're making Joe's case for him. Larry, Jr. isn't exactly an advertisement for the success of corporal punishment.

I'm glad to see that Paula seems to be hitting her stride as a.d.a. And it's really nice to see her and Ellery working together so well, but the cirumstances are so sad. I agree that Pam shouldn't be burdened with the details of Laura's note, but I think Paula did the right in obtaining the restraining order. After the phone call from Teddy, the note, and Laura's behavior with Paula, I don't see how Wes could make an argument against one, but I am concerned about Laura's reaction when she's served. I'm very interested in finding out what Detective Blue is up to, also - and if the prosecutor is aware of it.

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 28, 2008, 06:12:18 pm: thank you all once again for all of your comments, particularly Marie who is here all the time, I thrive on comments!

In case you don't follow my blog, I am doing my last minute moving, cleaning, and errand things, and today is Jiffy Lube day for the car, so I just don't have a lot of time available right now to write. I am hoping I have enough mental time to get some writing in while I am on my 4 day trip but I"m not promising anything there, either!! Please be patient while I get relocated to my next destination, thanks!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 28, 2008, 10:22:20 pm: okey doke, chapter 44!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/268486.html

This might be the last chapter I can get done before leaving town so it's extra large!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 29, 2008, 07:49:13 am: Quote from: louise van hine on April 28, 2008, 10:22:20 pm
okey doke, chapter 44!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/268486.html

This might be the last chapter I can get done before leaving town so it's extra large!

What a nice surprise this morning - you're too good to us, Louise!

SPOILERS

Can't say it enough - thank God for Wes! I'm relieved he served Laura personally. You could hear the years of experience in every measured, wise word he spoke. I thought it was so telling that Laura basically ignored everything Wes said about the rape and Pam trying to seek justice and focused once again on the fact that Pam is moving away from her and taking up with her "pervert Daddy." And I see that she now includes Katie Ann as part of the conspiracy. When (if) the truth finally hits her about Pam's assault, I'm afraid it's going to hit very, very hard. I'm more than curious about what's been going on in Prescott with the detectives and prosecutor. And Laura said there would be no threats in her letter to Pam, but will it be loaded with guilt trips?

That was excellent!

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 30, 2008, 10:58:20 am: Well gang, here it is, my last day at my job in California, and I am going to be packing up and getting ready to go when I arrive home. My cable modem is packed in a box ready to go back to Comcast and I have to go pick up a prescription as I head out of town, so I won't be writing anymore before I go.

I hope things have got to a comfortable "pause" in the story so you can wait a few days, because I have to go off and drive all day for the next four days!

thanks for your patience and as always, for the wonderful comments!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on April 30, 2008, 03:40:12 pm: Have a safe trip Louise! 4 days huhn? You're certainly not travelling round the coffeepot looking for the handle are you? :)

I think I'll do some rereading...
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 30, 2008, 05:57:07 pm: no I sure am not! I get around, Fabienne! And I will be posting some photos of various places on my blog.
I wrote my itinerary up there - from northern California, through northern Utah, across southern Wyoming, Nebraska southwest to northeast, Iowa right across the middle, and across the top of Illinois.

At the height of spring!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on April 30, 2008, 09:47:42 pm: Good luck, Louise!

Yes - thank you for the "comfortable pause." I think all the folks in Tourmaline and Prescott need a bit of a cooling off period, too. LOL! There's an awful lot of pain to work through all the way around, but hopefully things will start to improve bit by bit.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: frantic65 on April 30, 2008, 11:04:52 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on April 30, 2008, 10:58:20 am
Well gang, here it is, my last day at my job in California, and I am going to be packing up and getting ready to go when I arrive home. My cable modem is packed in a box ready to go back to Comcast and I have to go pick up a prescription as I head out of town, so I won't be writing anymore before I go.

I hope things have got to a comfortable "pause" in the story so you can wait a few days, because I have to go off and drive all day for the next four days!

thanks for your patience and as always, for the wonderful comments!

Safe trip...four driving days...yuk!! But you are always worth waiting for and I agree with Marie, the fine upstanding citizens of Tourmaline need to chill...maybe have a few shots of Glenfiddle...get fancy...the important things in life!

**ponders which Greenlea Tale to re-read first while patiently waiting**
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on April 30, 2008, 11:42:54 pm: I am on a rest break from packing up - things are pretty much all done with the exception of the final vacuuming, putting together my lunch bag and bringing my luggage down to the car. The printer is in the trunk, as is the bread machine and flour and supplies, and my food dry goods. So I'll throw a little commentary out there.

My goal in writing this story is to paint in the backdrop of a relatively 'normal' dysfunctional lower class family in rural America. I suppose what has given fuel to my writing has been relating the knowledge of growing up in a lower class family with severe money problems, limited opportunity and limited education in a rural setting. I never saw a city of any true size until I was 14 years old, and spent my first 20 years of life in a rural setting and at least part of it on a farm. My goal was not to make Laura a caricature but rather a relatively typical woman of limited education, background and means, dealing with situations that are far beyond her ability to comprehend or appreciate, with a big chip on her shoulder about men, based upon her poor relationships with both husbands, one of whom cheated on her with a man in secret, the second of whom is cheating on her with a woman - something of a step up. And her only real 'milieu' is her children, from whom she gets most of her social strength. As such, her resentment and lack of understanding of someone as sophisticated as Ellery, particularly considering his wealth and education, makes her resentful and insecure. But I don't consider her unusual in any respect. She could be one of my aunts from Vermont, who thought it perfecty acceptable to take a broom to a daughter to teach her a lesson about wearing her skirt too short. There are a lot of people who are like this, and I think they represent a relatively 'normal', using the statistical meaning of the term, rural mindset.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 01, 2008, 06:32:52 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on April 30, 2008, 11:42:54 pm
My goal was not to make Laura a caricature but rather a relatively typical woman of limited education, background and means, dealing with situations that are far beyond her ability to comprehend or appreciate, with a big chip on her shoulder about men, based upon her poor relationships with both husbands, one of whom cheated on her with a man in secret, the second of whom is cheating on her with a woman - something of a step up. And her only real 'milieu' is her children, from whom she gets most of her social strength. As such, her resentment and lack of understanding of someone as sophisticated as Ellery, particularly considering his wealth and education, makes her resentful and insecure. But I don't consider her unusual in any respect. She could be one of my aunts from Vermont, who thought it perfecty acceptable to take a broom to a daughter to teach her a lesson about wearing her skirt too short. There are a lot of people who are like this, and I think they represent a relatively 'normal', using the statistical meaning of the term, rural mindset.

Louise, thank you so much - I love hearing your commentaries!

I think you've pretty much achieved your goal. I do see Laura this way, and that's why I can't help but have sympathy for her. She's not evil and she's not heartless. She is, as we all are to a certain extent, a product of her time, experience and environment. And let's face it - life has thrown her some pretty hard breaks. I don't say that as an excuse or denial of her behavior - but, rather, as a statement of fact. And, yes, one thing that's been particulary heartbreaking is that it's very clear that she has no support system or social life at all outside of her daughters.

I can appreciate how much thought must go into each chapter you write, Louise!

Thanks again,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 01, 2008, 07:01:11 pm: when I pulled back a little and thought about it, I realized I was putting a lot more into the characters of people I actually know, with similar problems and limitations!

Always good to get a context!

Go over to my blog if you want to know what I'm up to today, I am unwinding a bit after my first 500 mile push, now I'm 25% or so of the way to Chicago!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 10, 2008, 06:07:23 pm: okay gang, the story resumes!

Chapter 45: http://louisev.livejournal.com/268931.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 10, 2008, 09:45:43 pm: It's great to be back in Tourmaline, Louise! :)

I hope Wes is right and that things do improve, for everyone's sake. It did seem like Wes made some headway in getting through to Laura. I guess the letter will be some indication.

Katie Ann mentioned Steve being furious - I've been wondering about him, too. I know she brought a lot of it on herself, but I can't help but feel sorry for Laura. It appears that she really doesn't have anyone to turn to or to support her, and that can't help but make her feel all the more alienated.

I hope Pam gets a good night's rest and is well prepared for tomorrow.

Thanks, Louise!
Marie

P.S. Isn't Katie Ann's car a Monte Carlo?
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on May 11, 2008, 06:29:59 am: Nope sorry Marie I can,t feel in the slightest bit sorry for Laura. If she has no one to turn too it,s her own fault. Her behaviour is alienating everyone, even her own daughters. She hasn,t offered her ONE BIT of support, all she seems to do is think about herself. She,s just so bitter and twisted all the time. What is she hoping to achieve by behaving like this? Is she hoping that Pam will "stop all this nonsense" about being raped and move back home and find herself a nice man and settle down? Well that aint gonna happen any time soon is it. She,s got a rape trial to get through, and I,m dreading the prosecutors questions, because they can get tough. If Laura can,t give her daughter support at this horrendous time then going back from whence she came is the best thing she can do for everyone. Hateful woman she is. >:(
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 11, 2008, 10:34:29 am: Quote from: mariez on May 10, 2008, 09:45:43 pm

P.S. Isn't Katie Ann's car a Monte Carlo?

yikes! Don't you hate it when your fingers do things like that? I reminded myself and everything!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 11, 2008, 06:47:39 pm: ...and chapter 46!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/269057.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 11, 2008, 08:31:50 pm: SPOILERS

Let me see if I'm following the sequence of events correctly....Laura left the first note at Colson and Ellery's, then went to see Paula, and then went to the Browns where she left the second note, before she went back to the motel and Wes served her with the restraining order, and now she's, presumably, on her way back to Prescott. Do I have that right? And when Laura talks about "smiles and kind words" is she referring to Edna and Paula?

Ack! This is very frustrating. I'm itching to jump into the story and do....something! If only Laura could see that she's only making Colson (and Ellery!) look like heroes in the girls' eyes. It's at the point where history is going to be revised in their minds so that their daddy was never at fault for anything that went wrong in the marriage.

As far as Colson fretting that he doesn't have anything good to say - I vote that he doesn't say anything more at all to the girls about Laura, good or bad. If he needs to vent, he should do it outside of the girls' presence. There should be plenty of conversation to be had about the girls' move.

Speaking of the move - I'm relieved on Wes and Edna's behalf (and Colson's and Ellery's). At the risk of sounding uncharitable, the girls' immaturity is sitting on my last nerve and I think it can only help for them to be in their own apartment and back in college where they won't be so concerned with Daddy and Uncle Ellery.

And am I reading too much into it, or is there more behind Edna's tears than what we've been told? Even though it seemed to have fallen on deaf ears, I was glad to hear her speak of compassion.

Well, you can tell by my rambling that you're doing your job well, Louise! LOL!

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 11, 2008, 08:48:14 pm: it is always great to read your comments, Marie, and yes, the 'Smiles and kind words' were Laura's comments about Edna and Paula that day, she most likely wrote the note as she was leaving the ranch and before she returned to the motel.

I'm glad you liked the format change on LJ today, I noticed that the fonts looked different (i.e not so good) so I looked through the available formats and selected one that I thought would be easy on the eyes.

And yes, it is time for the girls to get back to their own lives, and for Colson and Ellery to get on with their own lives -- and their own relationship.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on May 12, 2008, 01:51:46 am: Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr@that bloody f*****g woman!!!!!! . Can I have a walk on part Louise just so I can give her a black eye? If she ends up alone with no one and her daughters never speak to her again she has no one to blame but herself. She,s just a nasty spiteful bitter twisted old crone. >:( >:( >:( >:( >:( >:(
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 12, 2008, 09:47:08 am: Just to clear things up a bit... the note Colson found in the tack room was left by Laura when she was at the ranch, before she returned to the motel, and before she was served with the restraining order.

So no, she didn't violate the restraining order.

And Soux, while it might make for some excitement in Tourmaline, I think an enraged Englishwoman might not fit in too well unless it"s Jeeves' sister from across the sea!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on May 12, 2008, 01:30:33 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on May 12, 2008, 09:47:08 am
Just to clear things up a bit... the note Colson found in the tack room was left by Laura when she was at the ranch, before she returned to the motel, and before she was served with the restraining order.

So no, she didn't violate the restraining order.

And Soux, while it might make for some excitement in Tourmaline, I think an enraged Englishwoman might not fit in too well unless it"s Jeeves' sister from across the sea!

Thats perfect Louise! I can be Jeeves mad sister from across the pond!! Now, can I give Laura a black eye?? Pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeee??? ;) ;D
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 18, 2008, 03:30:46 pm: hey, guess what? I wrote another chapter!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/269390.html 'Chapter 47'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 18, 2008, 08:20:41 pm: Great to see a new chapter up, Louise - I get twitchy if I go too long without Ellery :)

SPOILERS

Guess we can't forget about Amos, can we? :-\ You're doing a great job showing that dealing with Amoses and their attorneys is sometimes like playing a high stakes poker game.

I wonder how Pam's deposition is going .....and I wonder if it's too late to get the girls enrolled in classes - they need to find ways to occupy themselves without depending upon their dad, stepdad, Wes and Edna.

I'd forgotten about the plans for Dupree's party; it'll be nice to have something to celebrate - they could all use it!

Marie

P.S. Now that Ellery is getting their phone number changed, here's his chance NOT to give it to Wayne! LOL!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on May 19, 2008, 01:19:08 pm: Two things. Firstly is there any news on getting The Tales of Greenlea County published, and secondly, once all this is over, "our boys" will need a honeymoon. They certainly deserve and need some time away together. But please, NO speedos on the beach!!! BLURGH. I can,t STAND men in speedos, horrible things. Nice tight denim shorts will do nicely thanks. *thinks of those gorgeous thighs of Hughs, encased in tiny denim shorts* *THUD* ;) ;D
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 19, 2008, 08:41:50 pm: sorry about my lack of regularity. I am trying to adjust mentally to putting in full days of development work. Unlike my last job, this one demands ACTUAL LABOR! So my mind is occupied fully with technical tasks for a whopping 8 hours a day. Which means, of course, that I think about what didn't get done when I get home. So this might take a bit of adjustments. I did manage to clear my mind enough by Sunday night to eke out a chapter, and next week is the Memorial Day 3 day weekend holiday. So -- good news for more chapters then.

About getting the Greenlea Tales published, we are still slogging away trying to get an agent, but the first book is ready to go, edited to a nicety and all publishable. But after 7 turndowns from agents in a row, and further deep research by my associate Leslie, we are finding that general publication is getting to be harder and harder, and not only this, if we are lucky enough to get a 'general publication' we might be on our own for publicity, since publishers more and more are not investing in publicity even for the books they publish and distribute. This is very disheartening. As a result, we are considering the alternatives in POD and e-book publication, and Leslie has gone forward with e-book publication for Mobipocket and Kindle for my already-in-print novel, 'The Erotic Etudes' as a test to find out what kind of sales might be generated through e-publication.

But we are still at it, and still want to get the entire series in print! It's a question of ... effort.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on May 19, 2008, 09:38:50 pm: It is a question of effort and it is a question of, the publishing world is changing right under the nose of publishers, and they don't even realize it. Publishers seem to believe the adage, "the vast majority of Americans don't even read one book a year." Well, maybe that is true, but there is a sizable minority who are reading one or two books a day. I know this is true, I hang out on the Kindle forum and these folks (folks, plural) are posting and talking about their reading habits. I am becoming more convinced on a daily basis that ebooks are going to take hold. It is exciting to be in on the ground floor.

And with the ground floor...if you want to read The Erotic Etudes Opus VI you can find it here on mobipocket:

http://www.mobipocket.com/en/eBooks/eBookDetails.asp?BookID=83150

It includes a free download for a sample. The ebook link is not live on amazon.com (yet) but I hope it will be in 24 hours or less. Here's the link...refresh it every now and then and eventually there will be a book for sale.

http://www.amazon.com/The-Erotic-%C3%89tudes-Opus-VI/dp/B0019R0YK4/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s=digital-text&qid=1211220787&sr=1-1
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 21, 2008, 08:57:05 pm: new chapter!

It's Deposition Day!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/269571.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 22, 2008, 01:06:51 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on May 21, 2008, 08:57:05 pm
new chapter!

It's Deposition Day!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/269571.html

Hey, you surprised me - I wasn't expecting a chapter until the weekend!

SPOILERS

Well, that was troubling. It's unusual - and disturbing - to see such animus between a prosecutor and a victim. Am I connecting the dots correctly, Louise? Are we seeing that Ellery was correct when he said a few chapters back that there might be a "misguided" Republican investigator goading Laura on just to keep her on the hook and entertain himself? >:( And while I suppose Blue and Langtree could stir up bad publicity and bring Ellery and Colson's relationship to the attention of others in the state - I don't understand his remark aobut not prosecuting unrelated indecency cases. Ellery and Colson are in Greenlea County - outside of Langtree's jurisdiction, he couldn't prosecute them anyway. (Although Laura wouldn't realize that). I hope the plea offer works out - I wouldn't like to see Pam put through a trial.

In any event, Chief Cantrell is indeed going to be fit to be tied. Obviously, the folks up in Yavapai County don't know Ellery at all.

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 22, 2008, 04:52:48 pm: it appears someone was just letting Laura believe that somehow she could get some "justice" by spilling her guts about the family skeletons in the closet. Which turns out to make for good drama! Amazing what my characters do when I wasn't looking.

But when Chief Cantrell gets ahold of this information he won"t be happy, and that's for certain.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 22, 2008, 07:38:56 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on May 22, 2008, 04:52:48 pm
...Amazing what my characters do when I wasn't looking.

Ha ha! Indeed! ;)

Quote from: louise van hine on May 22, 2008, 04:52:48 pm
But when Chief Cantrell gets ahold of this information he won"t be happy, and that's for certain.

I know it's not good for his blood pressure, but the evil part of me is looking forward to this. When his fury is properly directed, kick-ass Ellery can be a beautiful thing! LOL!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 22, 2008, 07:54:17 pm: Heheheh well as long as you didn't think I planned this. I just can't plan things this devious - the characters do it all by themselves...!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 25, 2008, 01:02:20 am: and here is a chapter with some Fanciness in it!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/270064.html#cutid1 Chapter 49
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on May 25, 2008, 12:29:59 pm: Ah, it is good to have our boys naked and in bed after a long dry spell...LOL
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on May 25, 2008, 03:12:21 pm: Quote from: MaineWriter on May 25, 2008, 12:29:59 pm
Ah, it is good to have our boys naked and in bed after a long dry spell...LOL

Indeed!

That Ellery, he's a caution.

“Okay, what do I do?” he thought to himself. “Grab em an pin em down or look pretty an wait for em ta finish sulkin?”

:laugh: at the 'look pretty' thought. Shouldn't be too difficult Ellery.

I'm glad they got a few things out in the open. And, in spite of all Colson's fears, I loved how easy that 'the day we got married' rolled off his tongue.

thanks for the update Louise!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 25, 2008, 06:59:05 pm: Quote from: MaineWriter on May 25, 2008, 12:29:59 pm
Ah, it is good to have our boys naked and in bed after a long dry spell...LOL

I third this! :)

Quote from: belbbmfan on May 25, 2008, 03:12:21 pm
That Ellery, he's a caution.

Isn't he? Even when he's been drinking ice water instead of Glenfiddle! ;D

Thanks, Louise! WeThey needed that!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 26, 2008, 12:26:05 pm: and a Memorial Day chapter!

Chapter 50: http://louisev.livejournal.com/270333.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 26, 2008, 02:43:16 pm: SPOILERS

Okay, first :

“If that is Wayne on the front porch with a mouse in a box I swear I’ll make em eat it,” Ellery said, tugging his arm back from under Colson’s shoulder.

:laugh: Not only can I picture that perfectly, I can't dismiss the idea that it may still happen!

How I wish Paula had gotten a hold of Ellery before the girls barged in and scared Colson to death with their (well-intentioned, I know!) jumbled version of events. But I am relieved that Ellery is aware so that he can start the ball rolling on teaching Blue and Langtree a few things.....

And speaking of Blue and Langtree...I guess I'm seeing an additional angle to this entire sorry mess. There are now two more men who have used Laura and made a fool of her for their own purposes. They may be the first ones who have done it with malice - but the effect is the same.

I think this may be the most complex of the tales (that's a good thing!) and that's saying something.

Thanks,
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 26, 2008, 03:39:08 pm: well if I have a chapter on Wayne eating a mouse I think that will be the end of my reputation, Marie!!

and it didn't start off complex, it just sorta... ended up that way!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 26, 2008, 04:19:04 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on May 26, 2008, 03:39:08 pm
well if I have a chapter on Wayne eating a mouse I think that will be the end of my reputation, Marie!!

LOL!!! No, no, Louise! Not the part about eating a mouse, the part about him showng up with one at the door!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on May 27, 2008, 01:53:02 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on May 26, 2008, 12:26:05 pm
and a Memorial Day chapter!

Chapter 50: http://louisev.livejournal.com/270333.html

Okay....I've just read the first paragraphs of this chapter and LOUISE!!! You should definitely think about putting in an 'do not start to read this while you've having a drink in front of your computer, you might end up spitting all over the screen because you're laughing so loud' alert.

I mean, really, OMG, I can just picture this...'Daddy!!' Daddy??? :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:

*off to read the rest, now that I've calmed down a bit*

:)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on May 27, 2008, 02:00:27 pm: Gosh, I guess this is what they call 'the sh%t hitting the fan' :-\

As usual, Ellery's right about giving Paula a call immediately. And Colson needs to calm down.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 27, 2008, 04:13:24 pm: well gee Fabienne I thought as a veteran of the Greenlea Tales you had already learned that lesson!

Quote from: belbbmfan on May 27, 2008, 01:53:02 pm
Okay....I've just read the first paragraphs of this chapter and LOUISE!!! You should definitely think about putting in an 'do not start to read this while you've having a drink in front of your computer, you might end up spitting all over the screen because you're laughing so loud' alert.

I mean, really, OMG, I can just picture this...'Daddy!!' Daddy??? :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:

*off to read the rest, now that I've calmed down a bit*

:)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on May 27, 2008, 04:17:03 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on May 27, 2008, 04:13:24 pm
well gee Fabienne I thought as a veteran of the Greenlea Tales you had already learned that lesson!

I know, I know! *slaps forehead*

It was a hilarious scene though... :laugh:
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 30, 2008, 10:11:29 pm: Workin in a coal mine!

I haven't forgotten our Tourmaline denizens... but I have been working extra hours on some things for my job and I just finished a 12 hour stint, part of it from home now that they have provided me with remote access and a laptop. The fun never ends!

Fortunately despite a major emergency, we solved the crisis and ended Friday back on track without jeopardizing the schedule for our system going live... and maybe tomorrow I'll have enough brain power to write again!!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on May 31, 2008, 09:35:53 am: Quote from: louise van hine on May 30, 2008, 10:11:29 pm
Workin in a coal mine!

...Goin' down down down....

Now I'll have that song stuck in my head all day! LOL!

I hope you had a restful night after such stressful day(s). Take care of yourself, Louise - we'll be here (and I have faith in your considerable brain power). :)

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on May 31, 2008, 09:56:13 pm: hahahah, I spent the day doing something very peculiar, watching live streaming CSPAN video of the Democratic Party Rules and Bylaws Committee argue over the primary results for Florida and Michigan.

It was... um... relaxing!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 01, 2008, 05:53:51 pm: ok I finally did my duty! thanks for your patience!

Chapter 51: http://louisev.livejournal.com/270362.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 01, 2008, 10:37:54 pm: SPOILERS

Oh, my. That was upsetting. Our favorite candy striper Nadine and that fool hospital thing did flicker through my mind, but patient confidentiality is no small thing and that would be a big can of worms for the hospital. I think Paula's theory is right.

So....Laura's pain and anger have already sent her over the edge, which in turn have caused Colson's fears to resurface and now his pain and anger is sending him over the edge.....

...and there sits their daughter, the rape victim. >:( I wish I could say that things can't get much worse - but I know better than that. Compelling to say the least.

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 08, 2008, 11:57:06 am: no I haven't forgotten about you all, but I did get distracted by a new device that has had me reading quite a bit, the Amazon Kindle, courtesy of Leslie. So blame here for infrequent updates!

Chapter 52! http://louisev.livejournal.com/270614.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 08, 2008, 02:50:30 pm: Well, this is good timing, I log on to see that you posted a new chapter just a couple hours ago! Reading is always a good thing - I could never fault anyone for doing a lot of it - via any device! :)

SPOILERS

If I'm going to look for the silver linings (as I tend to do), it seems that maybe Katie Ann is gaining a good measure of maturity and insight from all of this. It was really nice to see her and Ellery communicating so honestly and calmly - like two adults. And as I've mentioned before, it's also nice to see Ellery and Paula's respectful and open give-and-take.

Pam is right that it's been many years since her parents' divorce, but I keep going back in my mind to that talk that Colson and Laura had at the motel the first night she came to town when he told her, the woman he was married to for years and who gave birth to three of his children, that he had never loved her or wanted her. I thought Ellen made such a great comment about that on your LJ - that that revelation isn't years old, it's fresh, and it would have to make Laura look at her whole adult life differently.

I'm relieved that Colson called. The more time he spends alone, stewing, the more things will build up in his mind and I can understand that. The fears that cause a lifetime of hiding, as Ellery put it, probably don't ever go away completely. Now, go get your man, Ellery!

Thanks, Louise
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 15, 2008, 01:30:13 pm: and at last, chapter 53:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/270931.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 15, 2008, 04:21:04 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on June 15, 2008, 01:30:13 pm
and at last, chapter 53:

http://louisev.livejournal.com/270931.html

SPOILERS

Their anguish is so palpable it leapt off the page and damn near broke my heart. I have no words of wisdom and no idea how, or even if, any of this ("this" being the entire knot of painful issues) can ever be mended, and that's precisely why it's just like real life.

Damn fine writing, Louise. Thanks.

Marie

P.S. What kind of bribe can I offer to get the next chapter soon-ish? ;D
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 15, 2008, 08:09:43 pm: well I don't know, Marie, but it might help you to know that this chapter weighed heavily on me too, which is why I am writing the next one right away!

it should be up soonish.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 15, 2008, 08:50:48 pm: ... and as promised...

chapter 54

http://louisev.livejournal.com/271273.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 15, 2008, 10:41:06 pm: Oh, thank you, Louise! *runs off to read*

SPOILERS

Okay, I'm back. Hmmm...well. You know, I adore Colson and I'm usually his biggest supporter and have always tried to be very understanding of his issues, which I understand are complex. But having said that, right now I can't decide if I want to give him an understanding hug of reassurance or slap him silly! And the urge to slap him silly is winning.

“So... don’t push me, okay?”

Don't push him? Gah! I'd like to push him all right. Things are not the same as when he first came to town. A lot has changed - not the least of which is the fact that he made vows to Ellery. Ellery has the right to push him - but right now he's scared to death and I know he won't. It's past time for everyone to be walking on eggshells around Colson's (and Laura's) feelings. I get that Colson is fearful, I do - but someone needs to point out that he's also being selfish. Why do his fears take precedence over Ellery's fears? Marriage is supposed to mean that you take your spouse's feelings into consideration - that you think of your spouse before thinking of yourself. He'd rather break Ellery's heart than deal with this? I remember when he had that terrible episode when they were planning the wedding reception and how Wes was upset that Ellery's feelings were being hurt and wanted to give Colson a talking-to, but Ellery wouldn't let him. I don't know what Wes is going to say when they get there, but at this point I hope he doesn't mollycoddle him, because I think tactic just makes Colson feel his fears are justified and valid.

Right now I feel like Cher in "Moonstruck" - "Snap out of it!" LOL! I have to stop, the more I type, the more pissed off I'm getting, and it takes a lot to get me pissed off. :laugh:

You're taking us for some ride, Louise - thanks!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 15, 2008, 11:07:11 pm: I have to say, Marie, I agree with every word you say!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on June 16, 2008, 05:01:17 am: Hmmmmmmmm like you Marie I,m torn between feeling sorry for Colson and wanting to shake him out of it. The thing is, he,s been terrifed all his life of being "found out" and being beaten to death for it, and now, with what Laura has been up too, he thinks someone is going to come and beat down the front door, drag him off and beat him to death. He genuinally can,t help it. He,d probably like to snap out of it, but I don,t think he knows how too. He,s been this way all of his life, and now he wants to run away and hide. I knew it would come to this in the end. Colson has been wound up like a spring ever since evil bitch Laura showed up. She,s hell bent on revenge for what Colson did to her, ie leave her for another man, and if that means breaking him and Ellery up then so be it, she couldn;t care less. This is all her fault, and someone really needs to have stern words with her. Wes is the ideal man for the job. I think Ellery might hit her if he did it. The thing is, this fear is never going to go away is it? Not for Colson. He has two options, Either he accepts that this his is life with Ellery and gets on with it, OR, he does what he,s done all his adult life, runs away. It,s all very well saying, "get a grip" but it,s easier said than done. Old habits die hard.
Damn Laura. What a nasty spiteful, vindictive sour faced old crone she is. >:( >:( I don,t know how she sleeps at night. In fact I hope she has nightmares, really dreadful horrible ones. >:(
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 16, 2008, 09:21:53 am: Yes, of course, everything is easier said than done, souxi. I totally agree with that. But that doesn't mean it can't, or shouldn't be done.

If I recall correctly, Colson doesn't have an "Earl and Rich" type incident in his past (unless we just haven't heard about it), so I while I sympathize with his fears, I don't put them on the severe childhood trauma level of, for example, Ennis's. I'm not saying his fears aren't genuine and deep, I just don't see him as deeply traumatized in the psychological sense. Besides which, someone has "come to his door," more than once now - and he's survived. He also made a commitment to Ellery, which he seems to have forgotten about (playing house? >:( >:( )

I also don't lay the blame for how Colson's been behaving on Laura's head. In fact, except for the fact that she is in total denial about Pam beng raped, I think they've both been behaving selfishly. I don't see where Colson has the right to moan about Laura not being able to let go of the past, when he can't either. He can't let go of his fears and she can't let go of her resentment and she has just as much right to be resentful as he does to be fearful. Why are his feelings more valid than hers? They're not - and they're making him act like a jerk.

He tells Laura that he never loved her and never wanted her and has the nerve and insensitivity to ask her why she doesn't have faith in people. He tells Ellery - his husband! - that they've been "playing house" and that he doesn't want to be "pushed." What about Ellery's feelings? What about Ellery's fears? He has them, too! He acts put out about having to sit through dinners with the twins and Wes and Edna - when the Browns are the ones who've been stuck with his girls more than he's been! He didn't ask Pam one word about how her deposition went - as it relates to her and her feelings. He didn't ask one little word about a plea deal and how Pam might avoid the trauma of a trial - because he has his own set of blinders on and he's thinking about himself. So if he's going to complain about Laura, maybe he better take a good look in the mirror first because although he believes Pam was raped, I haven't seen hm displaying much concern for that fact lately. Neither Colson nor Laura are pulling themselves together for the sake of their own daughter - and Colson actually believes she was raped! And it hasn't escaped my notice that Colson has a strong support system surrounding him of people who love him and understand, people he can talk openly to - something that Laura doesn't have.

I'm not making excuses for Laura, but those words you said about "old habits" and "easier said than done" apply to her as well as Colson. I love Colson, but I'm disappointed in him right now - and angry with him, too. And I'm very curious about Wes and Edna's reaction to all this.....I know they love Colson, but Ellery is the son the never had, and if someone were treating my son the way Colson is treating Ellery right now, I'd be none too pleased.

Woo Wee, Louise - you've really got me riled! :laugh: :laugh:

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on June 16, 2008, 09:43:27 am: I agree with everything you have said Marie, BUT, the only reason Colson is so scared now, is because of Laura trying to get the law to do a little digging into his life, and find out what he,s "up too". So I blame him being scared on her. However, your right about how he,s not thinking about Ellerys, feeling, but I honestly think that he is so scared he can,t think straight. He just wants to run away and hide, where no one knows him. They all need a good kick up the backside if the truth be known, and I,m just the one to do it. Louise can I please please please have a walk on part to knock a couple of Lauras teeth out?? :laugh:
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on June 16, 2008, 11:32:49 am: Quote from: mariez on June 16, 2008, 09:21:53 am
Yes, of course, everything is easier said than done, souxi. I totally agree with that. But that doesn't mean it can't, or shouldn't be done.

If I recall correctly, Colson doesn't have an "Earl and Rich" type incident in his past (unless we just haven't heard about it), so I while I sympathize with his fears, I don't put them on the severe childhood trauma level of, for example, Ennis's. I'm not saying his fears aren't genuine and deep, I just don't see him as deeply traumatized in the psychological sense. Besides which, someone has "come to his door," more than once now - and he's survived. He also made a commitment to Ellery, which he seems to have forgotten about (playing house? >:( >:( )

I also don't lay the blame for how Colson's been behaving on Laura's head. In fact, except for the fact that she is in total denial about Pam beng raped, I think they've both been behaving selfishly. I don't see where Colson has the right to moan about Laura not being able to let go of the past, when he can't either. He can't let go of his fears and she can't let go of her resentment and she has just as much right to be resentful as he does to be fearful. Why are his feelings more valid than hers? They're not - and they're making him act like a jerk.

He tells Laura that he never loved her and never wanted her and has the nerve and insensitivity to ask her why she doesn't have faith in people. He tells Ellery - his husband! - that they've been "playing house" and that he doesn't want to be "pushed." What about Ellery's feelings? What about Ellery's fears? He has them, too! He acts put out about having to sit through dinners with the twins and Wes and Edna - when the Browns are the ones who've been stuck with his girls more than he's been! He didn't ask Pam one word about how her deposition went - as it relates to her and her feelings. He didn't ask one little word about a plea deal and how Pam might avoid the trauma of a trial - because he has his own set of blinders on and he's thinking about himself. So if he's going to complain about Laura, maybe he better take a good look in the mirror first because although he believes Pam was raped, I haven't seen hm displaying much concern for that fact lately. Neither Colson nor Laura are pulling themselves together for the sake of their own daughter - and Colson actually believes she was raped! And it hasn't escaped my notice that Colson has a strong support system surrounding him of people who love him and understand, people he can talk openly to - something that Laura doesn't have.

I'm not making excuses for Laura, but those words you said about "old habits" and "easier said than done" apply to her as well as Colson. I love Colson, but I'm disappointed in him right now - and angry with him, too. And I'm very curious about Wes and Edna's reaction to all this.....I know they love Colson, but Ellery is the son the never had, and if someone were treating my son the way Colson is treating Ellery right now, I'd be none too pleased.

Woo Wee, Louise - you've really got me riled! :laugh: :laugh:

Marie

You tell him ~~Edna~~ Marie!!!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 16, 2008, 01:01:02 pm: Quote from: souxi on June 16, 2008, 09:43:27 am
Louise can I please please please have a walk on part ...

:laugh: :laugh: Wouldn't that be a blast if we could plop ourselves down in Greenlea County and give everyone what for! We'd put that town in order in no time!

souxi, you're right that this time, Laura's actions (with no small amount of coaxing by the very unscrupulous Yavapai County police detective and prosecutor!) have caused Colson's fears to resurface. But there are always going to be people out there for him to fear. Laura isn't the cause of his root fear - that's something that is inside of him. In "A Small Circle of Friends" he learned that maybe he can't control his feelings of grief over Adam's death, but he can control how he deals with those feelings, how he acts upon them. And that's what he needs to learn with regards to his fear. A psychologist would have a field day trying to figure out why Colson didn't run away from Ellery after looking down the barrel of Worrell's gun, after being shot at, after being kidnapped, and after being harrassed by Bunny Ruskin - but wants to run now. Perhaps it's because when he unravels the entire ugly knot of what's happening to his family now - he sees himself at the beginning of it. Maybe what he really needs to do is find a way to forgive himself. Or maybe I'm just overthinking the whole thing. :laugh: I don't know. But he can't go on the way he has been. This can't be doing Ellery's blood pressure any good, and that doesn't seem to have occurred to him either. :-\

Quote from: belbbmfan on June 16, 2008, 11:32:49 am

You tell him ~~Edna~~ Marie!!!

:laugh: :laugh: I'd love to - I doubt that Edna would go on such a rant!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 16, 2008, 02:46:05 pm: I am glad to see that there aren"t any complaints about my portraying the characters as too perfect!

hahah.

This is preying on my mind about now so don't be surprised if you see an update again quite soon! After a hectic 14 hour Friday things have settled back down at work and I am doing a lot less actual technical thinking so I might just be able to pull off some during-the-week updates! Stay tuned!!!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on June 16, 2008, 03:33:20 pm: I think that half the reason Colson wants to run now, as apose to before, is because Laura has got the police involved in looking into him. Even though Ellery is a policeman the law still pretty much terrifies him doesn't it? The thought of his past/background being investigated must be scaring him beyond belief. I think he,s just about ready to run for the hills now. No Laura isn,t the cause of his root fear, your right, but she obviously knows just how to scare him, and it,s working. She,d like nothing better than to see them two split up. Come on Louise, just one teeny weeny little walk on part? I only wanna give her a black eye...........pleaaaaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. *flutters eyelashes* ;) :laugh:
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on June 16, 2008, 03:45:09 pm: Quote from: mariez on June 16, 2008, 01:01:02 pm
:laugh: :laugh: Wouldn't that be a blast if we could plop ourselves down in Greenlea County and give everyone what for! We'd put that town in order in no time!

souxi, you're right that this time, Laura's actions (with no small amount of coaxing by the very unscrupulous Yavapai County police detective and prosecutor!) have caused Colson's fears to resurface. But there are always going to be people out there for him to fear. Laura isn't the cause of his root fear - that's something that is inside of him. In "A Small Circle of Friends" he learned that maybe he can't control his feelings of grief over Adam's death, but he can control how he deals with those feelings, how he acts upon them. And that's what he needs to learn with regards to his fear. A psychologist would have a field day trying to figure out why Colson didn't run away from Ellery after looking down the barrel of Worrell's gun, after being shot at, after being kidnapped, and after being harrassed by Bunny Ruskin - but wants to run now. Perhaps it's because when he unravels the entire ugly knot of what's happening to his family now - he sees himself at the beginning of it. Maybe what he really needs to do is find a way to forgive himself. Or maybe I'm just overthinking the whole thing. :laugh: I don't know. But he can't go on the way he has been. This can't be doing Ellery's blood pressure any good, and that doesn't seem to have occurred to him either. :-\

You raise some excellent points Marie. And I agree with you. It all comes back to the fact that Colson hasn't dealt with his past with Laura. Or his past with his daughters. He has asked Adam to forgive him and he should do the same with his family (or ex-family). And like you said, he ultimately needs to forgive himself. He can't change the past, or ignore it. :-\

Quote from: mariez on June 16, 2008, 01:01:02 pm
:laugh: :laugh: I'd love to - I doubt that Edna would go on such a rant!

Marie

Hmm, doesn't Edna have a rolling pin? Didn't Wes make a comment about that once? ;) ;D
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on June 16, 2008, 04:00:25 pm: Oh, and I forgot to say...

SNAP OUT OF IT COLSON!!!! >:( >:(

There, much better now. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on June 16, 2008, 04:00:44 pm: Here you go Laura. You,ve been asking for this for a long time. >:(
(http://bestsmileys.com/violent/18.gif)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on June 16, 2008, 04:04:12 pm: And yes it,s true that Colson probably does have to snap out of it. He,s hurting Ellery something awful talking about leaving him. He can,t change the past, but he can try and change the present. Don,t let Laura ruin your life Colson. Don,t let the old bitch ruin your relationship with Ellery. Toughen up and face it like a man. I,ll deal with Laura, no problem atall. muahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
;) ;D
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 16, 2008, 04:23:59 pm: Quote from: souxi on June 16, 2008, 03:33:20 pm
I think that half the reason Colson wants to run now, as apose to before, is because Laura has got the police involved in looking into him. Even though Ellery is a policeman the law still pretty much terrifies him doesn't it? The thought of his past/background being investigated must be scaring him beyond belief....

Oh, you're right - Colson is absolutely terrified of the police/authority figures! And that's why I don't think this has to do with fears of being dragged out of his house and beaten - Det. Blue and the prosecutor aren't going to do that and he knows it. But they could expose him to a larger group of people outside of the safety zone Ellery has created for him in Tourmaline. I understand that. But it almost seems that he doesn't want to listen to Ellery's reassurances that he can't be prosecuted - he's fighting that logic tooth and nail. So the deeper questions still remain.

Quote from: belbbmfan on June 16, 2008, 03:45:09 pm

Hmm, doesn't Edna have a rolling pin? Didn't Wes make a comment about that once? ;) ;D

:laugh: Oh, there have to be a lot of interesting utensils in Edna's kitchen!

Quote from: louise van hine on June 16, 2008, 02:46:05 pm
This is preying on my mind about now so don't be surprised if you see an update again quite soon! After a hectic 14 hour Friday things have settled back down at work and I am doing a lot less actual technical thinking so I might just be able to pull off some during-the-week updates! Stay tuned!!!

You're the best, Louise! Thanks! :-*

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 16, 2008, 08:41:02 pm: and here it is, without any ado whatsoever!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/271409.html Chapter 55 !
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 16, 2008, 10:39:33 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on June 16, 2008, 08:41:02 pm
and here it is, without any ado whatsoever!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/271409.html Chapter 55 !

SPOILERS

You've had a lot of truly fine moments, Louise - but this is surely one of your finest. I'm so incredibly moved by the wisdom and depth and sheer beauty of your writing. A powerful chapter that will stay with me for a long time.

Thank you.

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 16, 2008, 11:46:17 pm: awwww *blush* thanks!

I got a lot of hits on this chapter today, I'm glad I stayed up to write it!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: souxi on June 17, 2008, 05:02:38 am: Boy that was tough on Colson. :(I know it was necessary and had to be done, but I still feel so sorry for him. He lost Adam, and now he thinks that because of his hateful ex wifes interference, he's going to loose Ellery too. He can't risk that so he's doing the only thing he knows how to do.....run away. When this is all over, can our boys PLEASE have their honeymoon?? They need it desperatly. But NO speedos on the beach. ewwwww@speedos. Nice tight denim shorts will suffice, or skinny dipping. ;) ;)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 23, 2008, 07:57:42 pm: sorry for the delay, folks... I got into doing a bit of 'recreational reading' and my job has been taking up space in my head again. I have to work this upcoming weekend and I'm doing job interviewing (again, again! I know I know!) but I will try to see if Colson and Ellery are ready to tell me what happens next!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 25, 2008, 07:34:15 pm: okay folks, I finally got off my duff! Actually, I was able to stop looking for a job this week due to getting my contract extended through the summer and into the fall, so my life has reached a very pleasing stage of stability! and here is the next chapter!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/271658.html Chapter 56

However, be forewarned, we are drawing near the conclusion of 'The Grey Girls.'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 26, 2008, 09:25:23 am: Hey, Louise!

I've been MIA for a few days - I didn't know you'd started the interview thing again - I'm happy you've reached that pleasing stage of stability - Congratulations!

SPOILERS

“Yeah ya did.”

“No I didn’t.”

“Yeah. Ya did.”

Yeah, ya did, Colson - I heard it, too! :) Really wonderful to see that grin back on Ellery's face! And some nice, open conversation with the girls - hope there's more of that.

You really have me curious about the conclusion ......there seems to be so much that's unresolved....I'm guessing a lot of things will be carried over into the next tale ? ;D Yes, I'm greedy.

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 29, 2008, 12:51:38 pm: hey folks, I am working on a production project all this weekend and working odd hours all this next week. So I am a LITTLE BIT TIED UP. I will be wrapping up the story as soon as I get some breathing space. This working all weekend is great for the pocketbook but not great for my fans!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 29, 2008, 04:06:32 pm: Louise, I'm a firm believer in making hay while the sun shines, and if it's great for your pocketbook, all the better!

Quote from: louise van hine on June 29, 2008, 12:51:38 pm
.. LITTLE BIT TIED UP...

Hmm... ya know, this reminds me of our favorite rookie and his naughty sailor! I wonder how they're doing...... (am I being obvious enough? LOL!)

Thanks for the heads-up!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 29, 2008, 11:06:32 pm: now for the good news: the implementation went okay, and in another two hours the system I was hired to bring to live usage will be going into use. It was stressful but ... the important thing is, it was successful! which means, once I am off this damned night shift I might be able to get more writing done!

I haven't even gone shopping, but I did get my hair washed. What a lost weekend!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on June 30, 2008, 01:19:08 am: Quote from: louise van hine on June 29, 2008, 11:06:32 pm
now for the good news: the implementation went okay, and in another two hours the system I was hired to bring to live usage will be going into use. It was stressful but ... the important thing is, it was successful! which means, once I am off this damned night shift I might be able to get more writing done!

I haven't even gone shopping, but I did get my hair washed. What a lost weekend!

Good to hear the project went okay Louise! Otherwise it definitely would have been a lost weekend.

We're leaving for Italy next wednesday and I won't have access to the internet for 2 and a half weeks (cold turkey for me :o). I'll look for all the goodies here when I get back.

Quote from: mariez on June 29, 2008, 04:06:32 pm
Louise, I'm a firm believer in making hay while the sun shines, and if it's great for your pocketbook, all the better!

Hmm... ya know, this reminds me of our favorite rookie and his naughty sailor! I wonder how they're doing...... (am I being obvious enough? LOL!)

Thanks for the heads-up!

Marie

That's a great expression. I hadn't heard that before!

Tied up hunh? Oh, you bad Marie! ;D ;)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on June 30, 2008, 03:53:53 pm: Congrats on the successful implementation, Louise!

Quote from: belbbmfan on June 30, 2008, 01:19:08 am
We're leaving for Italy next wednesday and I won't have access to the internet for 2 and a half weeks (cold turkey for me :o). I'll look for all the goodies here when I get back.

Tied up hunh? Oh, you bad Marie! ;D ;)

Yep, Naughty Nicky is a naughty influence on me! ;D

Have a great time in Italy, Fabienne! Talk to you when you get back!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on June 30, 2008, 05:06:09 pm: Quote from: belbbmfan on June 30, 2008, 01:19:08 am
Good to hear the project went okay Louise! Otherwise it definitely would have been a lost weekend.

We're leaving for Italy next wednesday and I won't have access to the internet for 2 and a half weeks (cold turkey for me :o). I'll look for all the goodies here when I get back.

That's a great expression. I hadn't heard that before!

Tied up hunh? Oh, you bad Marie! ;D ;)

I hope you have a wonderful trip... and that you won't leave before I have a chance to write just one more chapter for you at least!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 04, 2008, 01:23:13 pm: hey guess what!

Chapter 57!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/272023.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 05, 2008, 09:26:46 am: SPOILERS

...An when he does how foolish is your momma gonna look then? She is gonna owe you a big apology, ain’t that so?”

Yeah, I've been thinking along this same line, but admitting you've been dead wrong is one of the hardest things in the world to do, even for the most well-adjusted person. And Laura's denial and beliefs are mixed up with so much emotional investment in her pain and bitterness...sigh. :(

But it's great to see that Colson and Ellery will be getting some alone time! And, yes, Pam, I'm quite sure they don't want a phone call back! LOL!

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 12, 2008, 12:52:17 pm: and here is another chapter, with some grade-A fancy mansex!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/272315.html 'Chapter 58'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on July 12, 2008, 04:47:31 pm: Yeah, and real good sex too. I needed that for a Saturday afternoon. Thanks, Louise!

L
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 12, 2008, 06:15:47 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on July 12, 2008, 12:52:17 pm
... some grade-A fancy mansex!

Quote from: MaineWriter on July 12, 2008, 04:47:31 pm
Yeah, and real good sex too. I needed that for a Saturday afternoon. Thanks, Louise!

L

Woo Wee! I second both those statements! Nice to see that the boys aren't out of practice! ;D

“Yer too good lookin ta just waste away in bed like that.”

Ain't that the truth!!!!!! And Colson's "special request" always turns me into a puddle of goo! Thanks, Louise!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 12, 2008, 06:59:05 pm: can you stand more?

http://louisev.livejournal.com/272553.html 'Chapter 59'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 12, 2008, 08:27:10 pm: SPOILERS

You sneaky Louise, you! You reeled us right in, didn't you? I thought it might be Wayne - but usually he's calling about something stupid like mice! PI's? I didn't see that coming at all. Damn. Good thing they already had Colson's "intervention." And the grade-A fancy mansex x 2.

I'm trying really hard to think that it's not what I think it is, but I'm not succeeding very well........Well done, Louise - thanks!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 12, 2008, 10:44:14 pm: hahahah Marie, can I outthink you? That is the question!

And I figured since I have been so remiss recently - being a reader rather than a writer, that I should somehow make up for it.

I am hoping to do some more writing tomorrow and not leave you all in such suspense!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 12, 2008, 10:52:02 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on July 12, 2008, 10:44:14 pm
hahahah Marie, can I outthink you? That is the question!

And I figured since I have been so remiss recently - being a reader rather than a writer, that I should somehow make up for it.

I am hoping to do some more writing tomorrow and not leave you all in such suspense!

Louise, I don't have any doubt that you can outthink me! LOL! More tomorrow? Yay!

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 13, 2008, 01:14:41 pm: ok now did I manage to outthink anybody? heheheh

Chapter 60: http://louisev.livejournal.com/272882.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 14, 2008, 08:09:16 am: Quote from: louise van hine on July 13, 2008, 01:14:41 pm
ok now did I manage to outthink anybody? heheheh

Chapter 60: http://louisev.livejournal.com/272882.html

*waves hand* Yep, you outthought me! A great surprise to see Jeremy. I've missed him! Jeremy was stoic about being shot in the chest, and he didn't hesitate before jumping into a burning car to save a life, but ringing Ellery and Colson's doorbell when he knows he's probably "interrupting" them? Now, that's courage! LOL! Poor Jeremy.

And why do I think Colson calling Laura is a very bad idea?

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 14, 2008, 10:49:53 am: it"s always a very bad idea!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 19, 2008, 05:16:39 pm: and here is chapter 61!!!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/272951.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 19, 2008, 06:30:29 pm: SPOILERS

Louise, you totally rock!!!! LOL! How many times will I be saying 'I didn't see that coming!" I didn't think Laura sent the PI's - too obvious - but I never would have guessed Steve, and I really wouldn't have guessed what he was thinking!

“Not half as excitin as your life with Colson, Chief. I swear.”

You said it, Jeremy! Although, I know they could both do with less excitement of that kind.

But.....where does this leave Laura? It appears that her husband is not only cheating on her, he's conspiring against her - and not only in her imagination. She really does appear to be alone in the world.

Great job, Louise - thanks!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 19, 2008, 08:19:07 pm: I figured I must have really out-thought you on that one, Marie! heheh.

But that is a very good question - where does that leave Laura?
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on July 20, 2008, 01:25:04 pm: *waives*

hey everyone. I'm back from my Italian holiday and what do I find?? chapters 57, 58, 59, 60 AND 61!!!! YAY!!!

And did I read 'Jeremy', 'a special request' and 'mansex'? DOUBLE YAY!!!!

Thanks Louise. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 20, 2008, 01:32:49 pm: I wish I had written more but after our go-live weekend demands have been very high on my time and will probably be that way till the end of the month. Argh!!!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on July 20, 2008, 01:44:19 pm: Oh, Louise, not to worry!

There's reading and then rereading, followed by more rereading. :) :)

*off to read right now* (and feeling a tad guilty about it, me behind the computer while my poor husband is slaving away over the holiday laundry)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on July 20, 2008, 01:59:46 pm: I just read chapter 58.

Colson closed his eyes, speaking once again with that slight caress of his hand, this time smoothing back Ellery’s hair and closing on his shoulder. “I need ta have my man inside a me...” he said softly.

AAARGGGHHHHH! (http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/thfaint.gif) (http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/thfaint.gif) (http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m312/Belbbmfan/thfaint.gif)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: MaineWriter on July 20, 2008, 02:00:36 pm: Welcome back, Fabienne!

Yes, we've had some good stuff while you've been gone. Enjoy!

L
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on July 20, 2008, 02:19:02 pm: Thanks Leslie.

Yes, lots of goodies here, that's for sure.

chapter 60

Jeremy Dupree was standing on the stoop, looking sheepish. “I caught you in bed again didn’t I?”

Oh Jeremy! :laugh:

I know Colson and Ellery won't agree with me, but it's so nice to see Jeremy again!

I loved all the endearments too. So sweet. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 21, 2008, 08:35:56 am: Fabienne, it's great to see you! Welcome back! I hope you had a wonderful holiday!

Quote from: belbbmfan on July 20, 2008, 02:19:02 pm
I know Colson and Ellery won't agree with me, but it's so nice to see Jeremy again!

Oh, I agree! I've missed my Nicky's Sweet Thing! And Colson's "special request" is always.....special! ;D

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on July 21, 2008, 03:26:07 pm: Thanks Marie, the holiday was great, very relaxing.

It was so nice to read several chapters in one go. And my god, what chapters they were! Phew :o
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 21, 2008, 10:10:37 pm: stealth chapter!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/273334.html 'Chapter 62'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on July 22, 2008, 12:42:15 am: Quote from: louise van hine on July 21, 2008, 10:10:37 pm
stealth chapter!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/273334.html 'Chapter 62'

Dang! Are they EVER going to get some peace and quiet? :-\

Thanks Louise!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 22, 2008, 11:08:41 am: er, no?
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 22, 2008, 01:01:20 pm: Quote from: belbbmfan on July 22, 2008, 12:42:15 am

Dang! Are they EVER going to get some peace and quiet? :-\

Thanks Louise!

Quote from: louise van hine on July 22, 2008, 11:08:41 am
er, no?

Well, kudos for the honesty, Louise! LOL! Sigh. With all the sturm und drang, it was almost a relief to hear about those effin' mice again! I loved hearing Jeremy chide Ellery about his "rookie mistake" and the "homosexual tendencies" talk was a hoot! LOL!

But, oh my.....the rib? That's not good. Not good at all. (And I didn't see that coming either! ;D )

Thanks for the stealth chapter!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 22, 2008, 01:32:41 pm: come on now, I have been giving hints in the past ten chapters or so about Ellery's chest!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 22, 2008, 02:06:54 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on July 22, 2008, 01:32:41 pm
come on now, I have been giving hints in the past ten chapters or so about Ellery's chest!

I should re-word that. You hardly ever give hints - so I didn't think you'd actually go through with it! :laugh:

And is it harder for a rib to go back into place the second time? Good thing they were able to get some good fancy mansex in this morning b/c it looks like they're gonna have a dry spell, which won't improve anyone's mood I'm sure. :-\

Good grief. Now what?

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 22, 2008, 05:35:27 pm: dry spells are a real pain in the you know what!

But to find out what all's going to transpire... STAY TUNED.

I might actually get another chapter written tonight... just like the good old days! I know I don't have to cook so there just might be time to squeeze it in!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 22, 2008, 08:34:01 pm: well lookie here, it's chapter 63!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/273647.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 22, 2008, 10:37:02 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on July 22, 2008, 08:34:01 pm
well lookie here, it's chapter 63!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/273647.html

SPOILERS

It's hard to explain why I love this chapter so much. Even though Ellery is in bed with his rib problem, it still has such a nice, comfortable rhythm and such a sense of serenity about it. I think Jeremy's presence has a lot to do with that. He is such a steady rock and a true friend. It also brought back some nice memories. Those early chapters when Colson put up the bird feeder were always some of my favorites and it was lovely to re-visit that and see him take pleasure and comfort in his little friends.
And I especially love that Jeremy has a chance now to be the one to give advice and support, in the same way Colson supported him when he first met Nick. And what great advice - an out-the-door I love you, a kiss on the cheek, a pat on the ass. Yep, those little things can make a world of difference.

“What the hell do you two get up to that he pops a rib out of his chest?” Jeremy asked, disbelieving.

LOL! And so funny how Ellery kept yelling stuff from the bedroom!

A classic chapter, for sure. Thanks, Louise!

Marie

P.S. I'm glad that Colson's been thinking about his conversation with Laura at the motel - too late to take back the words, but it speaks well of how far he's come that it's been weighing on him.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on July 23, 2008, 01:02:47 am: Quote from: mariez on July 22, 2008, 10:37:02 pm
SPOILERS

It's hard to explain why I love this chapter so much. Even though Ellery is in bed with his rib problem, it still has such a nice, comfortable rhythm and such a sense of serenity about it. I think Jeremy's presence has a lot to do with that. He is such a steady rock and a true friend. It also brought back some nice memories. Those early chapters when Colson put up the bird feeder were always some of my favorites and it was lovely to re-visit that and see him take pleasure and comfort in his little friends.
And I especially love that Jeremy has a chance now to be the one to give advice and support, in the same way Colson supported him when he first met Nick. And what great advice - an out-the-door I love you, a kiss on the cheek, a pat on the ass. Yep, those little things can make a world of difference.

“What the hell do you two get up to that he pops a rib out of his chest?” Jeremy asked, disbelieving.

LOL! And so funny how Ellery kept yelling stuff from the bedroom!

A classic chapter, for sure. Thanks, Louise!

Marie

P.S. I'm glad that Colson's been thinking about his conversation with Laura at the motel - too late to take back the words, but it speaks well of how far he's come that it's been weighing on him.

There's nothing much I can add to that. I'm glad I got to read this before we leave (it's 7 am here LOL). Colson and Ellery aren't going anywhere, so we decided to do the holiday-ing in their place. It's a tough job, I know ;D

We'll be back next tuesday. I hope Ellery's rib will be better by then! :)

Thanks Louise, for a great chapter!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 23, 2008, 11:39:09 am: well now that you all know I do foreshadowing, you won't be in the least surprised at some of the things that come next!

And yes I hope to be writing again tonight! Some of the mental pressure is off at work and it is allowing me to think a bit more clearly.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 23, 2008, 09:12:38 pm: and the next chapter 63!!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/273865.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 24, 2008, 03:02:48 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on July 23, 2008, 09:12:38 pm
and the next chapter 63!!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/273865.html

SPOILERS

Good news that it's not as bad as last time! But Friday is going to take forever to get here for these two .....

I like that Ellery always manages to put in a good word for Jeremy when he's with Doc Sampson.

“There was shit goin on at the time, sweetheart, don’t look at me that way!”

Uh, I hate to state the obvious, Ellery - but there's always shit goin on with you two! LOL! The easy "I love ya no matter what" and shoullder pat were sweet. Jeremy done good! :)

Thanks, Louise!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 24, 2008, 04:26:06 pm: Ellery always likes to imagine that his ignoring his own warning signs are due to external factors. The true sign of someone who doesn't look after himself.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 24, 2008, 09:49:38 pm: change up!

Chapter 65: http://louisev.livejournal.com/273970.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 25, 2008, 01:03:31 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on July 24, 2008, 09:49:38 pm
change up!

Chapter 65: http://louisev.livejournal.com/273970.html

SPOILERS

Ah, yes - I've been wondering about ol' Amos. Poor Jeremy. I understand his nervousness, but I know he'll do fine. He always comes through when he needs to. And so does Paula.

Three years for Eldredge? Shit. That sucks. But I don't want Pam to go through a trial. I wonder if Laura really understands the repercussions of her actions. Sigh.

I can tell that you like the law and order stuff - you do it so well. :)

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 26, 2008, 01:48:11 pm: and chapter 66!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/274197.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 26, 2008, 09:22:17 pm: SPOILERS

Louise, I thought the deal was five years probation, but he only serves three?

Well, it wasn't hard to convince Pam. I understand how much she wants to put it all behind her, but I have to believe that won't be as easy to do as Pam might think. :-\ Paula's conversation with Laura will be very interesting, to say the least.

“Poor boy has a trick rib now I imagine,” Edna said..

LOL! Ellery and his famous "trick rib." If Colson could hear his girls......

Oh, and that reminds me: Note to Colson: I know there's crap flying all around you and you're stressed out, but Paula is being very generous in doing your daughter a big favor here, so maybe next time you cross paths with her, a polite "thank you" might be in order? You are 'Mr. Please and Thank You" after all! ;)

Thanks, Louise!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 27, 2008, 11:34:24 am: you are absolutely right, I was getting the two plea offers mixed in my mind, I corrected it on the chapter!

He may be Mr. Please and Thank You but when his man is hurting, Mr. Coyote can be gruff!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on July 28, 2008, 06:17:54 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on July 27, 2008, 11:34:24 am
He may be Mr. Please and Thank You but when his man is hurting, Mr. Coyote can be gruff!

So very true. I do love that big, strong, walking paradox of a man! :)

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on July 31, 2008, 12:07:21 pm: sorry for the lack of updates, but I am doing two things this week - changing projects, and changing homes. last week I had a "finishing up lull" and now is the "finishing up last minute stuff!" along with hauling my food and suitcases and computers over to my new place.

But I feel quite chipper about it all!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on August 03, 2008, 10:12:05 pm: and here is a new chapter of The Grey Girls!!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/274579.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on August 03, 2008, 10:53:26 pm: SPOILERS

Looks like good news on the Amos front - I think he's finally running out of delaying tactics. It made me laugh how they're passing that 'hot potato' of a phone call to Ellery onto Wesley! He's one of the few people not intimidated by Colson LOL!

Jeremy is a sweetheart and he's good at handling awkward situations. But poor Paula - she needs a social life, Louise!

Thanks!
Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on August 04, 2008, 09:57:55 am: well you know how hard I resist happy endings for everybody, Marie!!!

there's no plot if everyone has a happy ending. Besides... I got plans.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on August 10, 2008, 07:52:50 pm: and lookie here, another chapter at last!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/274847.html 'Chapter 68'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on August 10, 2008, 09:00:10 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on August 04, 2008, 09:57:55 am
.....Besides... I got plans.

Now, that makes me a happy camper!

SPOILERS

Colson reading Agatha Christie always reminds me of the early days in their relationship :) But Colson really needs to calm down about Paula! I know he's a jealous guy but I can't help but believe this jealousy thing is just being exacerbated by all the other crap that's flying around him.

“Cause...” Jeremy paused, and Ellery heard a brief intake of breath before Jeremy spoke again. “Cause he’s right.”

Sigh. I'm not so sure honesty was the best policy here. I mean, what the heck is Ellery supposed to do with that information? And things were going so much better between Paula and him......

Thanks, Louise - even though they're cranky right now, I always love seeing our boys together!

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on August 11, 2008, 08:13:14 pm: we are getting near the end here folks!

Chapter 69: http://louisev.livejournal.com/275147.html
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on August 11, 2008, 09:15:45 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on August 11, 2008, 08:13:14 pm
we are getting near the end here folks!

Chapter 69: http://louisev.livejournal.com/275147.html

I can't believe this is already Chapter 69, Louise - I'm always a little sad to see one of the tales come to an end, but you did say you had plans, and I always like your plans ...... :)

SPOILERS

“I guess that’s a bit too much, huh...” he trailed off.

Um, yeah, Colson. Just a bit. ::) Good Lord, what would he do if Ellery didn't get nauseous thinking of women?

...Don’t hate me cause I’m beautiful..”

That's a shampoo commercial from the 80's! LOL! I love it. And, actually, Ellery is a lot more beautiful than the actress that did the commercials. Glad they came to an understanding (for the time being). I do love when Colson tucks a lock of hair behind Ellery's ear. Sigh.

Thanks, Louise!

Marie!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on August 11, 2008, 09:24:04 pm: boy you're quick!!! I always love to read your faithful commentaries, Marie!

And yes, I have plans. I have to let them stew a bit though!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on August 12, 2008, 03:10:24 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on August 11, 2008, 09:24:04 pm
And yes, I have plans. I have to let them stew a bit though!

Hey, that's fine, Louise! "Stewing" makes things tastier! ;)

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on August 17, 2008, 05:21:01 pm: okay folks, the final chapter!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/275270.html 'Chapter 70'
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on August 18, 2008, 10:37:25 am: SPOILERS

Great to see Colson and Ellery in (relative) peace! :) And, although it was under the worst of circumstances, it appears to be a very good thing indeed for the girls to move to Tourmaline and get a chance to spread their wings. I can't help but feel for Laura, though, up in Prescott with a husband who so clearly doesn't want her or his own child she's carrying... will we get to hear more about how she's doing?

“Wasn’t so what? Ah ha! Now we get down to it. It ain’t me that finds Samuelson sexy, it’s you! Good thing she don’t wear no black leather cat suit huh?”

LOL! The truth comes out! Hmmm, let's see...

(http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z196/mariez65/emma_peel9.jpg)

Tall - check
Slender - check
Long dark hair - check

Looks like Ellery has it all (and a lot more!!!) covered - he doesn't have anything to worry about! :laugh: And, it was great to see Wayne again, too! Thanks for another great story, Louise. Now that the girls are living near Jeremy and Nick, I hope we get to see a lot more of them................. *blatantly obvious hint* ;D

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on September 07, 2008, 07:41:41 pm: Well gang, it's been a few weeks... three to be exact. I have had a chance to do a little recreational reading in the fantasy and science fiction world... and I am pondering writing another Greenlea story.

Just waiting for a plot to hit me.

One thing I can tell you is it will be a complete break from the plot lines of the Greenlea stories we have had so far. In order to write another story I have to get on an entirely new track and time frame.
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on September 08, 2008, 01:51:18 am: That's great news Louise. :)
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: mariez on September 08, 2008, 12:45:43 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on September 07, 2008, 07:41:41 pm
One thing I can tell you is it will be a complete break from the plot lines of the Greenlea stories we have had so far. In order to write another story I have to get on an entirely new track and time frame.

Oh, that sounds exciting, Louise! Thanks for letting us know :-*

Marie
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: louisev on September 09, 2008, 02:34:03 pm: don't get too excited until I start WRITING!!!

But the really good news is that if you are following my blog, the future looks pretty rosy, and when I go back to California I'll have a long period of prosperity and nothing particularly interrupting the flow of life!
Title: Re: New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
Post by: belbbmfan on September 09, 2008, 03:05:36 pm: Quote from: louise van hine on September 09, 2008, 02:34:03 pm
don't get too excited until I start WRITING!!!

But the really good news is that if you are following my blog, the future looks pretty rosy, and when I go back to California I'll have a long period of prosperity and nothing particularly interrupting the flow of life!

I like that about nothing interferring the flow of ~~writing~~, errr, life! :)