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Our BetterMost Community => Creative Writer's Corner => Topic started by: louisev on March 08, 2009, 05:01:01 pm
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And surprise surprise...
please read the "warning" notice about a slight change in genre here, but yes, there is a new Greenlea Tale coming, and you have my nightmares to thank for it!
New Story Announcement
http://louisev.livejournal.com/288008.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/288008.html)
http://louisev.livejournal.com/288382.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/288382.html) "The Persistence of Memory: Chapter 1"
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and... for those who need to get off the cliff just a tad:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/288667.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/288667.html)
but while I can assure everyone that Ellery is going to be okay, Ellery's words at the end of this chapter pretty much describe how things will be for the time being!
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This is MOST WONDROUS news! ;D Can't wait to delve into the newest tale! Thank you Louise!!
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This is MOST WONDROUS news! ;D Can't wait to delve into the newest tale! Thank you Louise!!
whoo wee! And here I thought people were getting bored with the "franchise"!
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whoo wee! And here I thought people were getting bored with the "franchise"!
No way! This is very exciting as well as intriguing.
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First, thanks for getting us off the cliff - a tad.
I found the first chapter so interesting in a number of ways. Esteban seems to want to talk to Dr. Caulfield about his issues, but I'm betting he's in the minority on that count. Also, the TAT (or at least the one picture we saw with the frowning man and the woman behind his shoulder) seems geared toward heterosexuals, which should make it very interesting when Dupree and Ellery get their turn ..... although it appears Ellery many not have his appointment for a while....
Holy Crap, Louise. The second chapter was amazing! Have you had an injury similar to Ellery's? Because that stream of consciousness was so real! I've never had a blunt force trauma to the head, but I have passed out and you described that feeling of forcing your way back into a conscious state so perfectly. And I really appreciated that, even in that condition, Ellery was so very Ellery, worrying about Colson and Dupree - and thinking Jes stop sayin okay, asshole.
.. it ain’t fuckin okay, an it won’t be okay for a long time ta come.
Oh my. Looks like we have to fasten our seat belts. Terrific start, Louise. Thanks!
Marie
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Heheheh yeah if that card is used in Ellery's TAT it might reveal a whole different perspective.
I have had falls, yes. I've never actually been clocked with a baseball bat! But I have had serious physical trauma involving wickedly bad pain, yes, so I generally try, because I like to get these things right, to write about things that - if they aren't exactly something I have experienced, are in some way analogous or can be extrapolated.
And guess what!
Chapter 3!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/288907.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/288907.html)
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And guess what!
Chapter 3!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/288907.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/288907.html)
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Wow. Another heart-pounder. Our star rookie has been through more than a lot of seasoned vets in the department.
He thought he could hear the blood dripping from the upstairs breezeway.
This struck me as a particularly evocative sentence - when we're in these high stress situations, details like this (real or imagined) are always heightened.
And I see that Leslie is still with emergency dispatch! :) I remember how she stayed on the phone with Colson way back when .... I think when Sevigny was nosing around. Which reminds me that there is still a Sevigny matter to be dealt with! This is great, Louise.
Thanks,
Marie
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yep, good old Leslie is still there. But the Sheriff is fully in control of his men here, and can't help but cut in.
Well I seem to have gotten some excited attention from everybody, I'm glad it's not causing a panic like the kidnapping plot did!
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yep, good old Leslie is still there. But the Sheriff is fully in control of his men here, and can't help but cut in.
Well I seem to have gotten some excited attention from everybody, I'm glad it's not causing a panic like the kidnapping plot did!
Yes, there is never any doubt about who is the Sheriff of Greenlea County!
God, yes, I remember the frantic search for Colson, the relief when his call came in, and how Ellery rushed to his side. Which also reminds me that Colson should be running into that hospital any time now!
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Yes, there is never any doubt about who is the Sheriff of Greenlea County!
God, yes, I remember the frantic search for Colson, the relief when his call came in, and how Ellery rushed to his side. Which also reminds me that Colson should be running into that hospital any time now!
heheheheh... well, yes, but remember I promised a more stream-of-consciousness approach. Things aren't necessarily going to happen in realtime in this story! I am rather pleased at how the initial chapters turned out, though! If I can get my head around what comes next I'll probably be writing another chapter today, but I may need to think about it a bit.
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As promised...
Chapter 4: http://louisev.livejournal.com/289049.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/289049.html)
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As promised...
Chapter 4: http://louisev.livejournal.com/289049.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/289049.html)
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Louise, I find this story so compelling. I really like your use of the stream of consciousness mode. It's very effective, and the way we learn about Henry through his interactions with, and observations of, Wes and Ellery was very well done. I liked that Henry noted he can sometimes learn more about people from observing and interacting than he can from "testing." Obviously, Henry won't be "testing" Colson, but I know he'll be watching him closely when they do meet!
So Ellery has already had his meeting with Henry....not a surprise that he found his time with Ellery so interesting b/c Ellery is interesting, and I found his reaction to the "Boy with Violin" card fascinating!
Ellery Cantrell is not his employee. He’s his son
You've got that right, Henry. Watching Wes through Henry's eyes was so touching b/c we know the depth of his feelings and how much self-control he's demonstrating.
Stellar writing, Louise. It's clear you feel energized! :)
Thanks,
Marie
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well whew! I'm glad somebody doesn't mind getting out of romance and smooching mode!!! I always feel like I have to EXPLAIN when I do something new. But there are other features that will distinguish this narrative more than the point of view, but I really don't want to give it all away.
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Louise, I can't believe you're into chapter 4 of a new story already!! :o
I've read chapter 1 and 2 during my lunch break and didn't have time to comment. I was going to wait untill this evening. But then I got some really bad news this afternoon, my sister in law has been diagnosed with bowlcancer and it has spread to her liver and lungs. This news has left us all shattered. I'm terrified thinking of what is to come. :(
But I wanted to tell you anyway, thanks for the new story. It's been great so far. I'm still reading.
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I am so sorry to hear this tragic news, Fabienne!!! My thoughts are with your family.
I had a burst of creativity over the weekend and decided to try the experimental thing, so we will see how it goes!
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Louise, I can't believe you're into chapter 4 of a new story already!! :o
I've read chapter 1 and 2 during my lunch break and didn't have time to comment. I was going to wait untill this evening. But then I got some really bad news this afternoon, my sister in law has been diagnosed with bowlcancer and it has spread to her liver and lungs. This news has left us all shattered. I'm terrified thinking of what is to come. :(
But I wanted to tell you anyway, thanks for the new story. It's been great so far. I'm still reading.
Oh Fabienne, that's terrible news! My thoughts and prayers and healing energy go out to all of you...especially your sister in law. How old is she? Is this Dirk's sister?
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She's Dirk's younger brother's wife. We're all very close. They're part of the group of friends that we go on holiday with every year. She's only 44 years old, with two teenage daughters.
It's all so unfair...
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I hope this helps make you feel better...!
Chapter 5: http://louisev.livejournal.com/289396.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/289396.html)
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Thanks Louise, I'll catch up later. :)
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(((((Fabienne))))) Here's a hug for today that I'm adding to yesterday's. We can't have too many.
Chapter 5: http://louisev.livejournal.com/289396.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/289396.html)
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Wow - I keep using the words "compelling" and "fascinating" but this really is. I love getting inside the guys' minds like this and seeing everyone through each other's eyes.
What was Henry's thought about everything in the Sheriff's department leading to Ellery? Never more apparent than in the bizarre but utterly believable showdown between Esteban and Dupree. Poor Jeremy - that pool of blood is bringing forth all kinds of feelings inside of him. Looking forward to more. Thanks, Louise!
Marie
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(((((Fabienne))))) Here's a hug for today that I'm adding to yesterday's. We can't have too many.
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Wow - I keep using the words "compelling" and "fascinating" but this really is. I love getting inside the guys' minds like this and seeing everyone through each other's eyes.
What was Henry's thought about everything in the Sheriff's department leading to Ellery? Never more apparent than in the bizarre but utterly believable showdown between Esteban and Dupree. Poor Jeremy - that pool of blood is bringing forth all kinds of feelings inside of him. Looking forward to more. Thanks, Louise!
Marie
yes, all roads lead to Rome. Esteban is being pushed forward in his career by Wes, and despite all his best efforts to keep distance between Dupree and Esteban, it just isn't possible all the time. And this is the worst possible moment for Dupree to be put under Esteban's watch, when both of them are upset as hell. Esteban gets closed down and pushy, and Dupree gets fixated. But they've been circling one another for a while now anyway.
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it's a busy week!
Chapter 6: http://louisev.livejournal.com/289702.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/289702.html)
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“So what was it like lyin on the beach in the nude with the man you love?”
Oh, good grief. Maybe Edna needs another run-in with their nightstand to curb her curiosity! Poor Colson.
I feel like we're getting into the nitty gritty of everyone's psyche in ways that we haven't before. I like how we see that his horses are Colson's form of therapy, and I thought his reaction to the news about Ellery - "helpless rage" and his need to have someone to blame - was so very human and so very Colson. I hope he gets a chance to see Wes, or better yet, a lucid Ellery, before he runs into Dupree! More great stuff. Thanks, Louise.
Marie
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And here is chapter 7, courtesy of the good folks who didn't turn on the LAN at my new office today. I didn't have anything to do while waiting for the phone to ring!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290024.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290024.html)
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And here is chapter 7, courtesy of the good folks who didn't turn on the LAN at my new office today. I didn't have anything to do while waiting for the phone to ring!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290024.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290024.html)
Well Yay! for the good folks who didn't turn on the LAN!
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I love that Ellery is still his sarcastic, funny and commanding self, even with a moderately severe head injury. And how fascinating that Bruce showed up in his mind! I hope he doesn't start talking to Bruce out loud in his cloudy Demerol induced state when Colson sees him! Can't wait for more. Thanks!
Marie
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stay tuned for the next chapter, which I am working on now.
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And here is chapter 8:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290229.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290229.html)
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And here is chapter 8:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290229.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290229.html)
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I keep using the word "fascinating" to describe this story because it is. Each chapter brings such interesting revelations about all the characters and we're getting to know them like never before. They are in desperate need of adult supervision at the crime scene, which is turning into a cluster fuck. Holy crap, if Wes knew what was going on he'd be banging some heads together. It looks like there will be no shortage of work for Dr. Caulfield!
Thanks, Louise!
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oh, and I forgot to post the announcement of chapter 9!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290485.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290485.html)
and yeah, Marie... something akin to a clusterfuck it certainly is!!!
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oh, and I forgot to post the announcement of chapter 9!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290485.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290485.html)
Yeah, I just saw this! You are on a roll :)
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Henry's assessment of Wes was great. The selfless, natural leader with wisdom and compassion, more interested in being an effective sheriff than in politics.
But that ain’t all it is. I think Esteban gave Ellery a pass on bein queer for his own reasons, but he don’t like queers.
Yes, I've sensed this, and the ugly business with his son only increases Esteban's discomfort and resentment. I'm curious to see how all of this plays out with regards to Jeremy, who is still going through an adjustment period of his own - and how it in turn affects Nick. (And speaking of Nick, I bet Henry's fingers would really itch for his pen and notebook if he met him!) It looks like Jeremy could use a session with the good doctor sooner rather than later! Thanks, Louise.
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Gosh Louise, fantastic stuff! Thank you so much for continuing to share your talents with us! :-*
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The insight into all the characters we've known for so long is great. I bet dr. Henry never thought his new job would be this interesting.
Hope Ellery's pain medication kicks in soon. And Colson gets there. These two haven't had it easy have they? :-\
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hey Fabienne, hope things are going better for you.
And I have a little Sunday gift for y'all!
Chapter 10:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290710.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290710.html)
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I bet dr. Henry never thought his new job would be this interesting.
You can say that again! And it looks like he's going to be talking to Dupree soon - and I'm betting "interesting" will be an understatement for the conversation!
I'm glad Edna drove Colson to the hospital, but I was really relieved when Colson pullled the medical POA out of his wallet! That's been in the back of my mind since the story started. Colson's thoughts were so realistic and heart-wrenching. I'm hoping when the nurse replied "yes" to Colson's question, she was referring to the "or something"!
LOL that Colson immediately thought of whiskey when Wes mentioned wetting their whistles! Thanks for the quick updates, Louise, you've got us champing at the bit!
Marie
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Heheheh well don't champ at the bit too long! I'm working on the next chapter!!!
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okay now, chapter 11
http://louisev.livejournal.com/290968.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/290968.html)
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You are spoiling us! :D
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Aw, I just wanted to give Jeremy a big ol' hug. He's such a good person and so damn earnest. I'm glad he got along so well with Henry and that he'll be talking to him again. It would hurt Jeremy so badly to be reassigned - I hope they can find another solution ....
Joe's talk with Henry was enlightening as well. With the center of gravity gone from the department, things are spinning out of control quickly! Looks like the good doctor got there just in time. And, yes, I'm sure Reynolds has lists, and maybe a few charts, too!
Terrific, Louise!
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Okay, I'm spoiling you all too much, I'll stop!
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Okay, I'm spoiling you all too much, I'll stop!
:laugh: Well, only for tonight, I hope! Although if you really felt like writing another chapter tonight, I don't think anyone would mind being spoiled some more....
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changing your mind are you?
Fickle women!
It's getting a little late to pull out another chapter, I'm afraid. This is my reading time!
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and ta da!
Chapter 12:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/291210.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/291210.html)
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and ta da!
Chapter 12:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/291210.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/291210.html)
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Still no memory of Colson...yikes! That's scary.
The memories of Ellery's 'bad hair days' were hilarious though. :)
thanks Louise.
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Still no memory of Colson...yikes! That's scary.
It sure is. My medical knowledge is almost nil, but that doesn't seem like a good sign .... but he is conscious and thinking.
Yeah, the memories of high school and the bad haircut were so well done! Easy to understand why Ellery likes to wear his hair so long now!
But that memory thing ..... :-\ You've got us all hooked once more, Louise!
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I just posted a reply to the Nervous Nellie brigade assembling in the comments of the last chapter and all I can say is, read the label!
I have never seen fit to write a warning on a story before, but in this case I did, with some very specific guidelines. I also gave nervous readers the option of spoiling the plot for them privately if they want it spoiled. So everybody's got a choice here!
And just as a point of interest, I have personal knowledge and experience of retrograde amnesia (amnesia that occurs from the point of injury backward). I once was hired to perform in a wedding ceremony as the singer and got all gussied up (ended up in the same color dress as the bridesmaids, peculiarly enough), and the wedding was a second marriage for two forty-somethings who were living together but wanted to confirm a commitment. They arranged their wedding on a boat, which I believe was a medium-sized yacht, in Lake Union in Seattle. While the bride was going to and fro up the gangplank before dressing for the ceremony, she tripped over her shoe and landed in the lake, getting a rather savage bump on the head in the process. After taking some aspirin and temporarily attiring herself in my change of clothes which I had handy, they decided to go on with it, and the ceremony proceeded per normal followed by a reception with about 40 people seated on the deck. I found out the following week that the bride soon began to suffer from severe headaches, and following the ceremony, promptly - forgot it, as well as the events of the previous couple of months, including the decision to marry. The marriage was annulled. I don't know if she ever retrieved her memory of that period of time, but it was enough to cancel one marriage!
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"Nervous Nellie Brigade" - :laugh:
Yeah, I remember your caveats and I'll hold on to that and see where we go. It's an amazing ride.
I found out the following week that the bride soon began to suffer from severe headaches, and following the ceremony, promptly - forgot it, as well as the events of the previous couple of months, including the decision to marry. The marriage was annulled. I don't know if she ever retrieved her memory of that period of time, but it was enough to cancel one marriage!
OMG. That's scary. All from tripping over her shoe!
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I had two choices when I considered writing this story: 1) tell people ahead of time how it turns out so that there wouldn't be any shrieking, or 2) tell them ahead of time that we were going to go into unreliable narration territory and leave it at that! 1) is not too fun but 2) might be too anxiety-producing.
All in all, I think it will be an interesting experiment. But I am holding out the plot spoiler option for anyone who gets too nervous during the course of the story!!!
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Well so far nobody has cried "Uncle" and asked for me to give away the plot, so... onward.
Chapter 13:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/288382.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/288382.html)
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And here is chapter 14!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/291787.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/291787.html)
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Well so far nobody has cried "Uncle" and asked for me to give away the plot, so... onward.
Chapter 13:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/288382.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/288382.html)
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I ended up with chapter 1 on my screen, with dr. Henry and Esteban doing the card thing.
I don't know how to go from one chapter to another.
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I ended up with chapter 1 on my screen, with dr. Henry and Esteban doing the card thing.
I don't know how to go from one chapter to another.
whooops!!!! wrong link!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/291787.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/291787.html)
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whooops!!!! wrong link!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/291787.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/291787.html)
I think that's Chapter 14, Louise. Here's Chapter 13:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/291556.html?#cutid1 (http://louisev.livejournal.com/291556.html?#cutid1)
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Wow - two chapters at once to read!
And speaking of Chapter 13 .... well almost every workplace has a Reynolds! Looks like he's just been waiting for the opportunity to whip out that notebook. His take on events is interesting - I'd love to hear his take on some of those test cards! This "part-time" job is really turning into something for Dr. Henry.
Chapter 14 ... I feel so sorry for Colson, Wes and Edna, too. This type of waiting is pure hell. No, not a good time to tell Colson about Pam's new boyfriend.
Ellery opened his eyes and fixed them quizzically on Wes’s face. “When did yer hair turn gray?”
Oh, boy. Wes recovered pretty quickly, but I'm sure his blood pressure just went through the roof. Now what? And who's going to tell Colson? And since Ellery isn't surprised about the bite on his neck - who does he think put it there? And ..... well, I'll stop. One step at a time. :-\
What a terrific story, Louise!
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I'm just doing my best to keep everybody hopping, Marie!!!
And for some reason this seems much easier to write. I guess it's because I'm not ruminating over how much sneaking out of the closet Colson could do at one time!
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and by the way, for those who may not be familiar with the reference in the title of this story:
(http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/d/dd/The_Persistence_of_Memory.jpg)
The Persistence of Memory, by Salvador Dali
An iconic painting that characterizes the Surrealist movement as a whole, the painting as well as its title illustrate how reality is distorted by our dreams, and how vivid they are. (HINT HINT!)
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....and...
Chapter 15!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/291923.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/291923.html)
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Yes, it's a very apt title, Louise!
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Ellery's mind is a fascinating place even when he's conscious and lucid - but this Demerol-induced twilight state he's in just magnifies that.
I could go for a guy with nice big brown eyes. You ever look at a cow up close? Or a bull, don’t matter which, an they got these big beautiful eyes an eyelashes about two inches long, an if they didn’t have that big wet pink snout there an teeth the size a tent pegs ya might actually want ta kiss em,” Ellery commented.
Yes, you do like nice brown eyes, Ellery - especially on a bull, or better yet, a coyote!
Jes call me darlin,” he replied, licking his suddenly-dry lips.
Awww.
Okay, so they're moving him to a room. Colson with the nice brown eyes must be dying to see him .....
Thanks, Louise!
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well not to contradict you or anything, Counselor, but Colson's eyes turned blue during the rewrite, so if Ellery's thinking of anybody's big brown eyes (besides Elisie the Cow's, that is), then it might be a different lover he is reminiscing about.
And on that note...
Chapter 16:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/292283.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/292283.html)
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well not to contradict you or anything, Counselor, but Colson's eyes turned blue during the rewrite, so if Ellery's thinking of anybody's big brown eyes (besides Elisie the Cow's, that is), then it might be a different lover he is reminiscing about.
:laugh: :laugh: Contradict away! I was so anxious for Ellery to be thinking of Colson I totally forgot about that! Well, shit. :-\ I'm thinking this is before Fuckin' Bill, and I can't remember if Bruce has brown eyes? Of course, there have to be a couple others in there, we just don't know all the names. Huh. But I can still hang on to the Jes call me darlin,”, right?
This is like Churchill's quote about a riddle wrapped in a mystery inside an enigma - and I think we'll be adding a few more layers in there before we're done!
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Joe is doing his best, but things are deteriorating pretty quickly, and a lot of stuff that's been held back is starting to spill over.
Esteban thought for a moment. “Ellery used ta be my partner, an he used ta be my friend.”
“An now he ain’t. An Dupree has never been my friend.”
I notice that he definied his relationships with them in terms of what they are not, not what they are. What a sad, complicated mess. And I think Esteban knows very well what the reasons are for not wanting to be Jeremy's friend.
Can't wait for more! Thanks, Louise.
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well the "Darlin" is a very big clue.
Unless of course... he's had other lovers in the past who called him that! Which... even the most assiduous student of the Greenlea Tales probably could not suss out.
However, we do know that "Fuckin Bill" called Ellery "El", so maybe there was no pet name...
maybe.
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And as the weekend closes in,
Chapter 17! http://louisev.livejournal.com/292386.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/292386.html)
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And as the weekend closes in,
Chapter 17! http://louisev.livejournal.com/292386.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/292386.html)
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Aw, poor Wes is beside himself with worry, and it is doubly hard for someone who is used to having his commands obeyed when his questions aren't answered to his satisfaction.
“An my wife an boy here.
Aw, Colson is his boy, too, isn't he? Sniff.
Well, if Ellery named Reagan then he can't be thinking further back than 1981, (ETA: but he just said "the past five years" so that would indicate he knows what year it is,so hmmm. ) and he apparently got the day and the month right too .... so more hmmm...
“You ever kiss a man on the lips?” Ellery’s hoarse, whispering laugh followed him as he stalked out the door.
:laugh: Gotta love frisky Ellery! Thanks, Louise.
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Spoilerish!
whew, well I sure hope it was clear by the doctor's satisfaction with the answers that Ellery is adequately oriented in space and time!
And now for chapter 18!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/292814.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/292814.html)
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Spoilerish!
whew, well I sure hope it was clear by the doctor's satisfaction with the answers that Ellery is adequately oriented in space and time!
And now for chapter 18!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/292814.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/292814.html)
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Yes, it was clear that Ellery knows it's a Thursday in June, 1985, but as for some other things .... :-\
Nice conversation between Paula and Henry - I like how direct and honest they were with each other, and I thought it was interesting that once they got the Ellery issue out of the way they fell into a easy rapport. It looks like they may be a good source of support and information for each other, both being relative newcomers in a tight-knit group. Thanks for the quick updates, Louise!
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... and I always LURV the feedback, Marie! and Fabienne, and all of you other lurkers!
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And here is Chapter 19!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/292954.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/292954.html)
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And here is Chapter 19!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/292954.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/292954.html)
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Louise, I do love how your characters don't "act like characters" but rather simply behave as real people do. Wes's conversation with "Mrs. Hill" and the exchanges between Wes, Edna and Colson are perfect examples.
And leave it to Ellery to have such colorfully detailed fantasies! :laugh:
“And you have some visitors.”
Ack .... now what? Don't tell me he's going to ask for the naked Indian brave when Colson gets in the room!
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Louise, I do love how your characters don't "act like characters" but rather simply behave as real people do. Wes's conversation with "Mrs. Hill" and the exchanges between Wes, Edna and Colson are perfect examples.
And leave it to Ellery to have such colorfully detailed fantasies! :laugh:
“And you have some visitors.”
Ack .... now what? Don't tell me he's going to ask for the naked Indian brave when Colson gets in the room!
High compliments coming from you, Marie! And if you want to know what is going to happen next, the truth is, I haven't any idea!
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And here is Chapter 20!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293241.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293241.html)
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And here is Chapter 20!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293241.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293241.html)
Oh, dear, it never rains but it pours right? And now Esteban's in trouble too...and Nick's mad, Jeremy's upset....
Thank God Joe's stepping up to the plate, and trying to get everyone to focus on the job at hand.
And now the girls are headed to the hospital as well. The nurses better brace themselves!
Thanks Louise. :)
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Oh, dear, it never rains but it pours right? And now Esteban's in trouble too...and Nick's mad, Jeremy's upset....
Thank God Joe's stepping up to the plate, and trying to get everyone to focus on the job at hand.
And now the girls are headed to the hospital as well. The nurses better brace themselves!
Thanks Louise. :)
Yep, Joe is worth his ample weight in gold. I wonder if Wes did bring Esteban back too soon? A lot of unresolved business there ....
And I know Colson loves his girls, but I honestly don't see how their presence can do anything but make matters more tense. :-\ Maybe Edna can rein them in a bit.
I hope Deputy Legs is okay.
That's so Nick! LOL. It's so interesting to see, not just how many lives are affected by one man, but how deeply they're affected!
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And here's chapter 21:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293487.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293487.html)
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And here's chapter 21:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293487.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293487.html)
Wow! This is very intense Louise.
I'm so glad Ellery knew who Colson was. That 'sweetheart' was soooo good.
But now what? :-\
Thanks for all the quick updates! :)
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so far so good..!
I'm glad the story seems to be coming out more quickly! I may get a chance to write some more today, we shall see!
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Yes, the "sweetheart" was good to hear, and the way Colson hung back at first was so realistic. But, oh my. That was wrenching and my heart was breaking for poor Colson.
But now what? :-\
Yes, that is the question! Thanks, Louise.
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Yes, the "sweetheart" was good to hear, and the way Colson hung back at first was so realistic. But, oh my. That was wrenching and my heart was breaking for poor Colson.
Yes, that is the question! Thanks, Louise.
I'll try not to keep you poor readers waiting too long before the next puzzling mystery is revealed!
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okay, it might be too late for Europe but here is chapter 22 anyhew!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293861.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293861.html)
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okay, it might be too late for Europe but here is chapter 22 anyhew!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293861.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293861.html)
Oh, there's nothing like reading a new chapter after breakfast! :)
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Louise-
Here is what I love about you as an author:
You have respect for your readers.
You write manageable chapters
You post often
Your stories have continuity
Your characters are engaging
Your plot lines are interesting.
Thanks
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Louise-
Here is what I love about you as an author:
You have respect for your readers.
You write manageable chapters
You post often
Your stories have continuity
Your characters are engaging
Your plot lines are interesting.
Thanks
I'll second that. :)
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Louise-
Here is what I love about you as an author:
You have respect for your readers.
You write manageable chapters
You post often
Your stories have continuity
Your characters are engaging
Your plot lines are interesting.
Thanks
awwww. thanks!!! Sometimes I wonder that my stories are invisible to everyone but a few people, but my hit counter on my site tells me differently. They rarely get discussed outside of LJ itself or this forum, but evvvvery once in a while somebody posts something like this and I realize it isn't just me that's hooked on this stuff! I'll take all the feedback that comes my way!
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Louise-
Here is what I love about you as an author:
You have respect for your readers.
You write manageable chapters
You post often
Your stories have continuity
Your characters are engaging
Your plot lines are interesting.
Thanks
Wow. What a perfect summation. I love when people can state things so clearly and succinctly! And, yes, I'll third that!
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Well, they took the circuitous route, but, praise the Lord, Paula has a date! Paula and Henry seem to be good sounding boards for each other, which is nice to see. And I love that Paula has an actual appetite and isn't afraid to show it! :laugh: I hate when women pretend they can't eat more than two bites of anything when they're with a man. Interesting info about Esteban and the Griffin case. I can see why Ellery and Joe are keeping this close to the vest. There are a lot of different scenarios there.
Does Paula really think Ellery's grey eyes are hazel or was she just trying to pay a compliment to Henry and didn't know how to go about it? I find Paula to be a very interesting combination of awkward and direct. But we now know they find each other attractive and they're going out (which should make more fodder for the local gossip mill)! More great stuff, Louise - thanks!
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Well I just got a LJ message from reader Ellen who accurately states she has been waiting for Paula to get a date for a YEAR! For someone who doesn't spend a lot of time with Ellery they could easily get gray and hazel confused, and in fact, a lot of gray-eyed people are officially hazel-eyed. However, you wouldn't want to spoil a plot point for me now would you Marie?
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However, you wouldn't want to spoil a plot point for me now would you Marie?
Ha! I knew the eye color talk wasn't thrown in there for nothin'! You've always got something up your sleeve, Louise! And in this story, I'd say both sleeves at least! :laugh:
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Ha! I knew the eye color talk wasn't thrown in there for nothin'! You've always got something up your sleeve, Louise! And in this story, I'd say both sleeves at least! :laugh:
well you know, I start out writing a stream-of-consciousness deep psychological insight story and end up writing another mystery and detective thing. I guess I just can't help it!
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okay for all you people who don't want the plot spoiled for you ahead of time!!!
here's chapter 23!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293923.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293923.html)
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okay for all you people who don't want the plot spoiled for you ahead of time!!!
here's chapter 23!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/293923.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/293923.html)
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And I thought my heart was breaking for Colson before. :'( Oh, dear. I can't even imagine what that would be like. And what a god-awful frightening feeling for Ellery to have as well. To have a chunk of your life just disappear on you. I figured Ellery had gone into a coma, but I know next to nothing about this kind of stuff, and now it appears that his short-term memory is suffering along with his amnesia b/c Colson's been coming into his room for a week and it looks like they're going through some kind of Groundhog Day. :-\
I don't have to tell you that you've got us on the edge of our seats here, Louise! Terrific storytelling.
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And I thought my heart was breaking for Colson before. :'( Oh, dear. I can't even imagine what that would be like. And what a god-awful frightening feeling for Ellery to have as well. To have a chunk of your life just disappear on you. I figured Ellery had gone into a coma, but I know next to nothing about this kind of stuff, and now it appears that his short-term memory is suffering along with his amnesia b/c Colson's been coming into his room for a week and it looks like they're going through some kind of Groundhog Day. :-\
I don't have to tell you that you've got us on the edge of our seats here, Louise! Terrific storytelling.
well I sure hope I gave everybody enough buildup!! To think I was originally going to start the story HERE... no no that wouldn't do at all. It would just be too much!
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well I sure hope I gave everybody enough buildup!! To think I was originally going to start the story HERE... no no that wouldn't do at all. It would just be too much!
Strangely enough I would have liked that as a starting point - as long as you immediately went back and explained everything. I just started reading this story a couple of days ago and as usual I'm completely sucked in. Great story, Louise! You've got me completely hooked.
Carol
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Strangely enough I would have liked that as a starting point - as long as you immediately went back and explained everything. I just started reading this story a couple of days ago and as usual I'm completely sucked in. Great story, Louise! You've got me completely hooked.
Carol
I thought about it and considered the pros and cons before I decided to do it this way. Anyway... onward and upward!
Chapter 24
http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html)
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I thought about it and considered the pros and cons before I decided to do it this way. Anyway... onward and upward!
Chapter 24
http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html)
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Gosh, Louise, I'm taking deep breaths here.
I'm ready for some positive news about Ellery now. :-\ But, like Colson, I guess I'm just going to have to be patient.
Like Marie said, fantastic storytelling. :)
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I thought about it and considered the pros and cons before I decided to do it this way. Anyway... onward and upward!
Chapter 24
http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html)
Now I'm completely lost. Was chap 23 a figment of Ellery's coma?
Carol
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Gosh, Louise, I'm taking deep breaths here.
I'm ready for some positive news about Ellery now. :-\ But, like Colson, I guess I'm just going to have to be patient.
Like Marie said, fantastic storytelling. :)
I guess all I can do is keep on writing and all you readers just have ta hold on tight!
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Now I'm completely lost. Was chap 23 a figment of Ellery's coma?
Carol
I sent you a pm.
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Chapter 24
http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html)
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He could barely remember the ride to the hospital now, or what he had been doing when Edna called him to the phone. It didn’t even seem like the same day, now.
This is so true. Whenever we experience a traumatic event, it's like our life gets lopped off quickly into two halves: before and after. And anything that occurred even a few moments "before" feels like ancient history. The "perfect body my ass" line made me laugh. I remember that well.
I'm glad the girls have each other - I think Colson, Edna and Wes all need some quiet time.
And talk about not-so-ancient history - dropping coins in a pay phone and smoking in a hospital! Thanks, Louise.
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He could barely remember the ride to the hospital now, or what he had been doing when Edna called him to the phone. It didn’t even seem like the same day, now.
This is so true. Whenever we experience a traumatic event, it's like our life gets lopped off quickly into two halves: before and after. And anything that occurred even a few moments "before" feels like ancient history. The "perfect body my ass" line made me laugh. I remember that well.
I'm glad the girls have each other - I think Colson, Edna and Wes all need some quiet time.
And talk about not-so-ancient history - dropping coins in a pay phone and smoking in a hospital! Thanks, Louise.
oh, the good old days. Remember when phone calls were 10 cents? That changed in the mid 1970's, when I was in high school!
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Okay gang, chapter 25!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/294538.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294538.html)
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Okay gang, chapter 25!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/294538.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294538.html)
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It's so great to see Nicky again! He knows how to be there for his Sweet Thing. And I have to say this was a nice bit of comic relief:
“You didn’t actually get ta third base an find this out, please tell me ya didn’t....” Nick said, his voice pleading, but the tone was one of restrained hilarity. He was about to start laughing out loud.
LOL. That is so Nick! And, yes, in a lot of ways he's very much like Ellery!
We got to visit the Red Stallion, too - and Lauren and Lance! But the news about Ellery will certainly put a damper on things. And what will Wayne's reaction be? So much to think about, Louise! Thanks.
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okay gang, onward and upward!
Chapter 26! http://louisev.livejournal.com/294662.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294662.html)
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okay gang, onward and upward!
Chapter 26! http://louisev.livejournal.com/294662.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/294662.html)
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Colson got up, and Ellery observed him. Muscular, fit, nice tight butt...I could just ask em ta get up an get me stuff an get a nice show every damn time
OMG, Louise, Ellery is cracking me up! What kind of drugs do they have him on? I loved this description:
Details eluded him, shifting through his distorted memory like carp darting through shadowy water.
And this really caught my eye:
Maybe because you are new an don't have any loyalties, yet," Colson offered.
That is one wild world Ellery is living in right now, complete with Emilio the drug dealer, the Holiday Inn, and handcuffs! Can' wait for more. Thanks!
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oh, there's more on its way!!! I'm working on it now. Muah hahahahah. And make sure to pay attention to Ellery's wild world, because believe it or not, it all means... something!
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and thar she blows!
Chapter 27! http://louisev.livejournal.com/295093.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295093.html)
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and thar she blows!
Chapter 27! http://louisev.livejournal.com/295093.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295093.html)
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Well, a lot of verrrrrrry interesting stuff here! It's like hallucinogenic amnesia with a good bit of deja vu thrown in there - or something like that! I wonder if Ellery can discover things during this coma that will help him remember stuff he forgot during the first coma? Does that sentence even make sense? :laugh: But I have to agree with Colson, even if it was 14 years ago, I think the doctors should be aware that Ellery has been through this before.
And when Wes mentioned how there was "nobody to make the decisions otherwise" 14 years ago, I was relieved all over again that Colson has those papers in his wallet! Top-notch stuff, Louise! Thanks.
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Well, a lot of verrrrrrry interesting stuff here! It's like hallucinogenic amnesia with a good bit of deja vu thrown in there - or something like that! I wonder if Ellery can discover things during this coma that will help him remember stuff he forgot during the first coma? Does that sentence even make sense? :laugh: But I have to agree with Colson, even if it was 14 years ago, I think the doctors should be aware that Ellery has been through this before.
And when Wes mentioned how there was "nobody to make the decisions otherwise" 14 years ago, I was relieved all over again that Colson has those papers in his wallet! Top-notch stuff, Louise! Thanks.
ah hah, no flies on you, Marie! Very good deduction. I am not sure whether I'll crank out another chapter today but we'll see!
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I just caught up with the last two chapters.
This amnesia thing,....it's complicated! ;D Maybe I should start taking notes too. ::)
Fascinating story Louise. :)
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and here is chapter 28, where Ellery remembers an important detail!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/295332.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295332.html)
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and here is chapter 28, where Ellery remembers an important detail!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/295332.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295332.html)
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Well, Ellery started to make some progress in both worlds. I'm anxious to learn more about left-handed Emilio and how he fits into things. I'm relieved that the doctors will be looking into his past records, and it's sweet that Ellery wants Wes to get "that cowboy, Colson Grey" back to the hospital! :) Thanks, Louise.
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Well, Ellery started to make some progress in both worlds. I'm anxious to learn more about left-handed Emilio and how he fits into things. I'm relieved that the doctors will be looking into his past records, and it's sweet that Ellery wants Wes to get "that cowboy, Colson Grey" back to the hospital! :) Thanks, Louise.
well I'm sure glad that, while somewhat nonsensical still, there's an element of coherence occurring!
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Chapter 29!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/295523.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295523.html)
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.....and
Chapter 29!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/295523.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295523.html)
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Well, thank goodness Colson has Wes and Edna to stay with. This is hard enough for him w/o having to sleep alone in their bed at home.
A body in a dumpster now? Not just pouring rain but a monsoon. Very interesting watching Wes and Joe interact. Wes does favor his "prize rookie" Dupree and it's a good thing that Joe isn't simply a yes man. I really like all the complexities of the characters. No one is a simple anything, and I'm wondering if Wes isn't jumping to some conclusions about Esteban .... Wes's remark about the "magical qualities" of his office made me laugh, and it looks like Henry is already a valuable part of his staff. Thanks, Louise!
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whoo hoo!
Chapter 30:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/295909.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295909.html)
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whoo hoo!
Chapter 30:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/295909.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/295909.html)
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Edna turning her nose up at hospital cafeteria pie made me LOL. But I sure am glad Wes gave Colson and Ellery some privacy. I think Colson may be an even better enticement for Ellery than that dead body in the dumpster! :laugh:
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sorry for the no chapter night... but I got my 1099 documentation and was finally able to do my taxes.... and well, I've explained here
http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg495983.html#msg495983 (http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg495983.html#msg495983)
If I weren't going in early tomorrow to see my dentist i would be out celebrating tonight. My years of scraping and saving have finally netted me some material prosperity. 2008 was my highest income year in my life, and I still have a good chunk of 2008 money.
Your amnesia fic will resume tomorrow!
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....and we're back!
Chapter 31:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296076.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296076.html)
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....and we're back!
Chapter 31:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296076.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296076.html)
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You know, I think Joe is kind of the unsung hero around the department - and I think he likes it that way. His conversation with Henry was both interesting and kind of amusing. Henry naturally wants to dig into whatever brain he's sitting across from and Joe naturally has other things on his mind. But I'd love to see Henry and Joe in a session some time.
I wonder what Ellery would think about Henry using his office.
“I hope that doesn’t mean you regret last night.”
Huh. I'm trying not to read too much into that - or maybe I should? In any event, their date sounds like it was a success and I think it's cute that Henry blushed! LOL.
It sounds like Jeremy has his work cut out for him being the principal with this murder investigation - I wonder if Joe thinks it's too much for him. :-\ So much going on here, Louise. I don't know how you keep track!
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SPOILERISH!
Well, feel free to speculate because ... well, both of them are dead tired! (hint hint.)
And no, Joe is very much concerned that Jeremy can't handle the murder case, even with wingmen Reynolds and Taylor!
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SPOILERISH!
Well, feel free to speculate because ... well, both of them are dead tired! (hint hint.)
And no, Joe is very much concerned that Jeremy can't handle the murder case, even with wingmen Reynolds and Taylor!
A very successful date then! LOL. I'm glad to know that Paula is tired, too!
Yeah, I figured Joe was uneasy about Jeremy being principal. Even though he's a "star" rookie, he's still a rookie and there's no shortcut to years of experience. I'm a little worried for Sweet Thing.
Hopefully, Ellery won't be in a coma for long - but it looks like he's going to wake up to some interesting changes!
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And just in time for the weekend,
Chapter 32:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296383.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296383.html)
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And just in time for the weekend,
Chapter 32:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296383.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296383.html)
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..and he realized – half of this is really happening, and half of it is in my mind. And I can’t tell which half is which. But Colson’s voice was the same, but rougher, more immediate, more raw and present to him...
Aw, Ellery is fighing his way back to Colson - and out of both his coma and his "amnesia." But will he solve the mystery of Emilio before he comes to, and how much of his delusions will he remember? How maddening it would be to try and open your eyes and be unable to. Aside from the blow to his head, all of his emotional turmoil is enough to give anyone a crushing headache!
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And onward into Crime Scene Investigation!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296502.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296502.html)
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And onward into Crime Scene Investigation!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296502.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296502.html)
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I don't think I could love Joe more. :) I'm impressed with how artful he is with his pragmatism. Joe's idea for the one-man "crime scene unit" is inspired, and Jeremy certainly does seem to fit the bill. LOL at "Larry and Curly." Jeremy probably does feel like banging some heads together! I loved all the dialogue. Thanks, Louise!
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I spent most of the weekend watching the Lord of the Rings extended edition and it took, I don't know, 12 hours altogether I think! I'll be back at work in Tourmaline as soon as possible, I promise!
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Okay, onward and upward!
Chapter 34:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296847.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296847.html)
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Okay, onward and upward!
Chapter 34:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/296847.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/296847.html)
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Aw, Ellery is so loved and treasured by his husband, family and friends.
I imagine "Emilio" is not that unusual of a name in their parts? I understand Wes's excitement at Ellery's utterance, but I hope he isn't jumping the gun and sending the department off on a wild goose chase. But then again, there has to be some reason that name is so important to Ellery - but what reason? I love how you keep them - and us - guessing! Fantastic story, Louise!
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Aw, Ellery is so loved and treasured by his husband, family and friends.
I imagine "Emilio" is not that unusual of a name in their parts? I understand Wes's excitement at Ellery's utterance, but I hope he isn't jumping the gun and sending the department off on a wild goose chase. But then again, there has to be some reason that name is so important to Ellery - but what reason? I love how you keep them - and us - guessing! Fantastic story, Louise!
well of COURSE he's sending them on a wild goose chase! Every great leader has to make a bonehead move when he's not thinking straight, right?
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well of COURSE he's sending them on a wild goose chase! Every great leader has to make a bonehead move when he's not thinking straight, right?
:laugh: :laugh: Yeah, it looked like that, but I was trying to be gentle on Wes, being he's so wrapped up with Ellery and all. But, as you point out - he's not thinking straight, so we'll give him a pass on this bonehead move - but I'm not so sure the Fearless Leader will give himself a pass!
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:laugh: :laugh: Yeah, it looked like that, but I was trying to be gentle on Wes, being he's so wrapped up with Ellery and all. But, as you point out - he's not thinking straight, so we'll give him a pass on this bonehead move - but I'm not so sure the Fearless Leader will give himself a pass!
Heheheh but on the other hand, if your chief deputy wakes up and seems to answer a question "who hit you over the head" and comes up with a name... it would be a mistake not to follow it up, right?
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and now, chapter 35!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297166.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297166.html)
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and now, chapter 35!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297166.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297166.html)
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Yay - Ellery's awake! I think. :-\ Or maybe he is still dreaming? Or did Colson fall asleep in the chair and now he's dreaming? :laugh:
So .... he thinks it's 1971 - but he knows Colson and he also recognized Dupree's name, so he hasn't forgotten the events of 1984 .... he just thinks they happened in 1971... or something like that? Okay, I have to stop b/c now I'm getting a headache! :laugh: And Emilio is a detective from Tucson? Holy crap.
But Joe, with his "cool" voice and his "Like I always do" remark sounds a little miffed with Wes. That's understandable b/c they're all under so much pressure, but I hope they can clear things up when things get back to normal - or whatever passes for "normal" in the Sheriff's Department! Can't wait for more. Thanks, Louise!
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the boy had to wake up sometime!!!
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And chapter 36!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297463.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297463.html)
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And chapter 36!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297463.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297463.html)
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All roads were leading to Ellery Cantrell, just as he had thought.
That just becomes more and more evident, doesn't it? I had to laugh when Reynolds used the "Yes, my liege" line, too. LOL. Glad to see him loosening up some - but, not too much, of course! I hope Paula gets over her hurt feelings - there really isn't any reason for her to go to the hospital, but it's an awkward situation all around. And poor Joe - he's taking it from all ends! Jeremy is dying to get to that hospital! Maybe Wes can have Edna bake Joe something special when this is all over with. Thanks, Louise!
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And here is chapter 37!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297638.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297638.html)
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And here is chapter 37!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297638.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297638.html)
"..if he rides at paso corto pace.”
:laugh: That's our Ellery. Some things never change - memory loss or no memory loss. But it's a very bad idea for him to pretend he remembers more than he does just to get sprung from the hospital in a hurry! His memory is all over the place. It will be very interesting to see what happens when Henry gets in the room - he hasn't met Colson yet, I don't think. Hmmm.... Terrific stuff, Louise. Thanks!
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coming right up, chapter 38!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297874.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297874.html)
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coming right up, chapter 38!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/297874.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/297874.html)
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Wow. This was just chock full of all kinds of fascinating stuff. I love all the primitive reactions - Colson sizing up Henry as a threat, the hair rising on the back of Henry's neck, the shift in Ellery's demeanor in the absence of his dominating "other half." Interesting that Henry realizes that Ellery are Colson are "mates" in the purest and best sense of the word, while also realizing that their relationship is something that he won't be able to fully understand. Exceptional writing, Louise!
And now we have a last name for Emilio - and his occupation! Wow again. To say this is an interesting turn of events is an understatement! This job has taken on dimensions I'm not sure even Henry could have anticipated.
"...before Wes comes marchin back in here with Edna an a basket full a baked goods..."
:laugh: :laugh: Yes, I imagine Edna is in full-fledged baking mode!
Can't wait for more - thanks, Louise!
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it's nice to know after a million and a half words I can still surprise!
Note to readers - after this past chapter, rereading Ellery's initial "fantasies" in the first few chapters might provide more insight into what happened in Tucson that long ago April night.
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and chapter 39 comes along right on time!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298060.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298060.html)
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and chapter 39 comes along right on time!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298060.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298060.html)
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Thanks for the heads up on re-reading! Damn, poor Ellery being set up! How despicable. I'm glad he felt comfortable enough with Henry to confide in him - it's important Ellery didn't keep that in. But now what? I don't want him to keep secrets from Colson, but I don't know what he'll do when he finds out!
Ellery's warning to Henry about Colson being jealous reminded me that Colson did not like the looks Paula gave Ellery once upon a time - I wonder if it will make him feel better to know that Paula and Henry are an item .....
Have I told you this story is terrific? :)
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Thanks for the heads up on re-reading! Damn, poor Ellery being set up! How despicable. I'm glad he felt comfortable enough with Henry to confide in him - it's important Ellery didn't keep that in. But now what? I don't want him to keep secrets from Colson, but I don't know what he'll do when he finds out!
Ellery's warning to Henry about Colson being jealous reminded me that Colson did not like the looks Paula gave Ellery once upon a time - I wonder if it will make him feel better to know that Paula and Henry are an item .....
Have I told you this story is terrific? :)
I am really glad you like it... it is probably the most unusual one of the series, and mainly due to its unusual genesis. Did I mention that the plot for this story came out of a dream I had - a dream about having amnesia?
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aaaaand... happy easter chapter 40!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298350.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298350.html)
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aaaaand... happy easter chapter 40!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298350.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298350.html)
Happy Easter to you, too, Louise. :)
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Yeah, I think we're all wondering about those same niggling questions. We all knew that the idea of Ellery keeping anything from him wouldn't sit well with Wes, but I know his first concern is Ellery's well being.
And, yes, just as Ellery predicted, Edna and her baked goods have arrived! LOL.
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Okay, if anyone is following my blog you know I went and had my eyes examined yesterday, which involved putting in drops and being half blind for most of the day, but everything is back to normal now and I expect to be writing again this evening!
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And I'm back. With chapter 41!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298562.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298562.html)
And for those of you who are curious as to what influences me in my attitudes to my characters, sometimes it is the things I read.... I wrote a long blog post about it which some of you may find gruesome or fascinating, as is your wont!
http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg500511.html#msg500511 (http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg500511.html#msg500511) "The Descent Into Oatesian Horror"
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And I'm back. With chapter 41!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298562.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298562.html)
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Holy Moly, what a mess of overlapping circumstances and events! And just what will be the ramifications of delving back into this "long-forgotten case"?
Looks like everyone has their work cut out for them. An awful lot has happened in a relatively short amount of time. And I think we all know where Jeremy is headed as soon as he gets off his shift!
And for those of you who are curious as to what influences me in my attitudes to my characters, sometimes it is the things I read.... I wrote a long blog post about it which some of you may find gruesome or fascinating, as is your wont!
http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg500511.html#msg500511 (http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg500511.html#msg500511) "The Descent Into Oatesian Horror"
I'll check it out - thanks, Louise!
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*resurfaces*
Well I'm caught up with all the chapters. Phew!
I have a little confession to make. I stopped reading about 10 chapters ago. I dreaded opening a new chapter because I found it very difficult to read about what was happening to Ellery and the worry and panic Colson felt about their future. I'm sure it's because of events with my sister in law. It's like my 'worry levels' had reached maximum capacity and there just wasn't room for more.
But we spent the easter weekend in the country side with all our friends (including my sister in law and her family) and I can't tell you how good that was. Just like old times, lots of silliness and laughter, with unfortunately some tears as well. I think I have adjusted a bit to this new situation, awful as it may be. 'No way out but through', right? :-\
Anyway, after last weekend I felt like I was ready to start thinking about Ellery again. And this story is something else. You've had me scratching my head a couple of times Louise, wondering if maybe I was suffering from amnesia. :laugh:
I'm so relieved that:
- Ellery's awake
- Colson's at his side
- Wes still is the fearless leader, even in hospital
- Edna's baking
- Paula and the doc are hitting it off. (I'm dying to read more about that, please, please, please)
- Joe is such a rock solid man
- Jeremy has Nicky to comfort him.
I hope my 'reading pause' makes sense Louise. It's a testament to your writing that I care so much about these people.
And Marie, your comments are always great to read! You really are the true spokesperson of the 'Colson and Ellery appreciation society' :-* :)
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oh you don't owe me anything, Fabienne! I never expected when I started writing "Taking Chances" that I was writing any more than a 10 chapter story, so 3 years and more than 12 books later the fact that people are still reading at all! is something of a pleasant surprise. It is great to get your feedback though.
I was somewhat nervous about following through on this innovative narrative because I knew it would be stressful for readers to not know what was happening to Ellery, which is why I tried to put in a warning. I've written almost all realistic and reliable narration without too much delving into subjective states, so a warning was necessary. But we are too far into this world to start knocking off main characters now - it wouldn't be true to the genre!
I am glad you are doing okay now, Fabienne, my heart goes out to you and your family.
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sorry for not producing more chapters... this week the guy leading our project bugged out and was replaced with the Godzilla of replacement consultants who has sent me 9 emails already today and phoned me 4 times, and wants to know what I'm working on day by day. I feel like I just got demoted 20 years. And I'm not even answerable to him. So my mental space has been rather intruded upon. But today is Friday and the weekend is upon us, so soon I can purge my brain of this... um... stuff. You get the idea.
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okay, finally back on track!
Chapter 42!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298891.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298891.html)
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okay, finally back on track!
Chapter 42!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/298891.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/298891.html)
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“Coffee should never come out of an aluminum box, Colson, you should know that.”
:laugh: I can't argue with that. But, you know, I do think Edna's coffee and muffins serve an important purpose here - she's using them to help buffer a very sticky situation. Doctor/patient confidentiality is coming head-to-head against two no-bullshit kind of guys who would do anything to protect Ellery. Looks like Henry may be going through his own kind of test! Wow - this is great. Thanks, Louise.
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Edna is no slouch when it comes to playing peacemaker in a tense situation that's for sure!
And now that I've had "movie night" last night I'm back to work on the story!
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and here is chapter 43!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299047.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299047.html)
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and here is chapter 43!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299047.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299047.html)
Caulfield looked at Colson, his face set with anger and suspicion, and then at Wes, and back again, and then settled on Wes.
Ha! Good choice, Henry! I don't think he needed to use any of his degrees to figure that one out. I knew Henry wouldn't break Ellery's confidence, but now that they know it's Ellery choice not to pursue the Emilio matter they're not going to rest until they know why. It may not be high on the priority list, as Wes said - but no way will either of them simply let that ride.
And to make things even more interesting, now Wes has to return Joe's phone call and Jeremy should be showing up anytime now, too! Thanks, Louise!
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bonus chapter considering that I didn't write one Saturday
Chapter 44!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299454.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299454.html)
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bonus chapter considering that I didn't write one Saturday
Chapter 44!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299454.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299454.html)
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Well, Joe may be tired but that doesn't stop him from having some very interesting thoughts about what happened to Ellery.
“Does this mean I’m meetin you in a dark alley with the evidence box an the files tonight?”
And it's good to see he's keeping his sense of humor too. :)
Thanks Louise.
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Well, Joe may be tired but that doesn't stop him from having some very interesting thoughts about what happened to Ellery.
“Does this mean I’m meetin you in a dark alley with the evidence box an the files tonight?”
And it's good to see he's keeping his sense of humor too. :)
Thanks Louise.
Yep, I know he'd prefer not to be center stage, but Joe really does know how to come through in a crisis. And although he cares about Ellery, he's a lot more objective about him than Wes is.
But they're making headway on the Alamo case - or so it seems. This just gets better and better! Thanks, Louise!
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now don't you be writing our Sheriff off so quick. He didn't get to be Sheriff because of his pretty face you know!
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now don't you be writing our Sheriff off so quick. He didn't get to be Sheriff because of his pretty face you know!
Pretty face! :laugh: Can you imagine saying to Wes? Nope, never underestimate Wesley Brown!
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I just figured that you ladies who study the ins and outs of the Sheriff's department so carefully would appreciate that the discussion between Joe and Wes is a critical one for the denouement of the story.
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Yeah, the ins and outs of this department...
I sure would like to be a fly on one of those walls at times. Thanks for letting us have a peek Louise.
And I had a feeling that conversation between Wes and Joe was important. The questions and conclusions that Joe was coming up with were just to big and Wes' dismissal of them too quick.
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You know us so well, Louise! It's great to see Joe play such a major role in this story. :)
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You know us so well, Louise! It's great to see Joe play such a major role in this story. :)
Joe just sort of grows on ya... as long as he has donuts and muffins!
and now for chapter 45!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299652.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299652.html)
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Joe just sort of grows on ya... as long as he has donuts and muffins!
and now for chapter 45!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299652.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299652.html)
Gosh, Edna's such a tower of strength isn't she? And she knows Colson so well, how to talk to him, reassure him. It must be nice having an Edna in your life. I'm glad Colson showed his appreciation by giving her a hug, that was very sweet.
But...because she's such a strong woman, I never thought of her (or her shoulders) as frail. :-\ It makes me wonder whether she maybe needs some reassuring too.
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Gosh, Edna's such a tower of strength isn't she? And she knows Colson so well, how to talk to him, reassure him. It must be nice having an Edna in your life. I'm glad Colson showed his appreciation by giving her a hug, that was very sweet.
But...because she's such a strong woman, I never thought of her (or her shoulders) as frail. :-\ It makes me wonder whether she maybe needs some reassuring too.
Fabienne, I had the same thought about Edna's "frail" shoulders. Right now she's tamping down her own worries about Ellery in order to be strong for Wes, who is not only worried about Ellery but has his hands full trying to solve some pretty serious crimes - old and new! Maybe when this is all over, Wes can take her on a vacation of their own. I loved that Colson gave her such a heartfelt hug. :)
..despite what he thinks he remembers..
Yes, this is key, isn't it? The difference between what you think you remember - and the truth.
“I think Ellery’s tryin ta cover because he thinks he did somethin wrong. An I am not gonna believe that unless I see proof in black an white.
"Proof in black and white." A high standard - but a good one! Reasonable doubt is worth consideration. Thanks, Louise!
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and now for chapter 46 and the new suspect walk-on!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299957.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299957.html)
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and now for chapter 46 and the new suspect walk-on!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/299957.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/299957.html)
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Well, Sanchez is right - Eddie Ripley is a pretty ironic name for a "witness." Looks like he's going to keep everyone on their toes, though!
It also looks like Paula is counting the minutes until quitting time, which now means Henry time!
Okay okay!” Jeremy backed away, went through the door and closed it behind him. “Power goin to his head.”
“What’d you say, Sergeant?” Joe shouted through the door.
“You got somethin on your head!” Jeremy called back, and went to find some petty cash.
:laugh: :laugh: Well, somebody has to be the smart-ass when Ellery's not around! And speaking of Ellery, I do believe he was asking for his husband ......
This is terrific. Thanks, Louise!
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Jee, it's uncanny how much Joe is starting to sound like Wes. And Jeremy like Ellery.
Good to see that they're keeping a handle on things at the station.
And 'Eddy Ripley'? Hmm, he reminds me of Brad Sevigny, which is not a good thing.
You're keeping us on our toes Louise. Thanks!
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yes, Fabienne that is an interesting phenomenon. But if Joe is going to get out of his comfortable zone of being just the scheduling and HR guy and has to do the dirty work of management, who is he going to emulate?
And same for Dupree.
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and back at Memorial Hospital:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/300065.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/300065.html)
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yes, Fabienne that is an interesting phenomenon. But if Joe is going to get out of his comfortable zone of being just the scheduling and HR guy and has to do the dirty work of management, who is he going to emulate?
And same for Dupree.
Oh absolutely. Wes has taught them well. I had to laugh at the back and forth between Joe and Jeremy. It all sounded very familiar.
*Off the read the new chapter* :)
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and back at Memorial Hospital:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/300065.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/300065.html)
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Well, no matter what, Ellery is always Ellery...
demanding and direct: “I want ta see Colson. Colson Grey. Tall, nice lookin. You know which one he is.”
vulnerable: What was he going to tell Wes? And how was Colson going to forgive him for belatedly messing up his career this way?
pragmatic: He knew when he extracted that promise from Caulfield that he was not going to be able to keep this under wraps.
incorrigible: Did ya lie like I said so ya can get me sprung out a here?”
sensitive: I love you, boy. I am not gonna die an leave ya. Remember what I said about leavin my job. If ya want me ta do it ya can have me full time.”
loving: “I mean it. Anythin ya want. Tell me what ya want an I’ll do it.”
horny: Ohhh... I wish I was well an we could...”
funny: “As long as he don’t love me like you do that’s fine with me. Edna bring any snacks? The food here sucks an I’m starved.”
Little wonder all roads lead right to him! And Edna's going to be thrilled - once Colson tells her Ellery is hungry she'll start cooking as well as baking. I see fried chicken and biscuits in their future! :) This was wonderful. Thanks, Louise!
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I just love coming on here and seeing all these comments - it's what keeps me writing!
One of the things that makes it easy for me to write Ellery, is I have really gotten to know him in all of his little quirks, and after the trip to California, I knew I wanted to get deeper into the psychology of his relationship with Colson and the stresses of being him and how his life impacts his commitment to being a couple, which he really has not ever had to go the distance with before. Colson broke out of his closeted shell, and now Ellery is challenged once again with having to reveal himself and maintain his integrity under fire, and that means having to be honest with his man.
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and chapter 48!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/300518.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/300518.html)
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and chapter 48!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/300518.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/300518.html)
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It was great watching everyone work the case and the back-and-forth between and among them has a very authentic feel. Eddie is a handful, that's for sure.
“So am I an I didn’t see a damn thing, Jeremy said. “If you saw it happen, where was I standin?”
He's also not quite as clever as he thinks he is, but that's not unusual for a 17 year old. Can't wait to see what happens now that there's No more fiddle faddlin around. Thanks, Louise!
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and now more story!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/300562.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/300562.html)
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and even more story!
Chapter 50!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/300820.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/300820.html)
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I lost my power for a while last night and look what I wake up to find - more story and even more story! :D
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Chapter 49:
Well, it looks like Paula and Henry are already getting hit hard with the reality of just how complex and sticky it can be to get romantically involved with some you also deal with professionally :-\ Yikes - so many land mines here - especially since they moved things along so quickly on their first date. Paula's reaction was very human and realistic, being annoyed with herself for being annoyed! :laugh: But I can't see that she had any legitimate reason to accompany Henry to the hospital - she still needs to work on keeping her professional and personal emotions separate and I can see that's going to be even more challenging in light of the fact that she's seeing Henry and that she can't seem to get Ellery off her mind. :-\
Her thougths about Henry and confidentiality were astute - it's clear he isn't comfortable with subterfuge, which makes him a good forensic psychologist, but perhaps not the best person for Ellery to have confided in - imo, he may have already said too much to Paula about Ellery and now that Paula is going to bring up Hezekiah Waldrop, I'm wondering how and if they can "get it out of the way" and get to "dinner."
Chapter 50:
Wow - that is some chapter you wrote for the 50th! Holy crap. Not only set up but drugged, too. And now we have to wonder what other parts of this puzzle are still missing? Poor Ellery. Thank goodness we know that his Fearless Leader won't stop digging. That pay phone sure is getting use (makes me even more grateful for cell phones!). Thanks, Louise!
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and chapter 51
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301187.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301187.html)
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and chapter 51
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301187.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301187.html)
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Reynolds and his trusty notebooks! Poor Jeremy is so disappointed at not seeing Ellery, but it's probably for the best - there are as many complications and mysteries at the hospital as there are at the sheriff's office!
I have to mention again that Joe is such a gem; he really knows how to keep the boys in line and make quick decisions. He deserves that pizza! And LOL at giving Ripley the burrito he bit into!!! Terrific, Louise. Thanks!
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well you KNOW Joe doesn't like to waste food. I'm holding out for the explanation as to why he's got such a prejudice against Taco Bell myself!
As far as I know Joe has NEVER turned down food!
And now, Chapter 52! Yes, I really did write four chapters this weekend! And made a pizza and a cornbread, and washed my sheets! I must be on a roll!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301553.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301553.html)
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well you KNOW Joe doesn't like to waste food. I'm holding out for the explanation as to why he's got such a prejudice against Taco Bell myself!
As far as I know Joe has NEVER turned down food!
And now, Chapter 52! Yes, I really did write four chapters this weekend! And made a pizza and a cornbread, and washed my sheets! I must be on a roll!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301553.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301553.html)
You sure are on a roll! Pizza and cornbread - yum!
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“Sure...” he backed away, every step of distance between him and the now-sleeping figure on the bed increased his anxiety about him. Why couldn’t they just let him go an let me take care of em? I know how ta do it.
Aw, that was so touching. And I really like how you described his thoughts and the feeling of being unmoored. I think standing vigil in a hospital will do that to most everyone, and Colson's situation is even more complex than most!
It looks like the Rose Hotel is a popular destination tonight! I'm guessing Henry and Paula should be showing up soon, and that should be .... well, I'm not sure what that's going to be like. Which makes me all the more curious!
Enjoy your pizza and cornbread, Louise! Thanks.
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and here is chapter 53!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301730.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301730.html)
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and here is chapter 53!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301730.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301730.html)
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Aw, poor Ellery. That dream demonstrated all his fears and warring emotions, not to mention his very understandable confusion. And I can't imagine any of this is helping his blood pressure any. But it looks like the dots are starting to be connected. He hasn't been in the hospital that long, but it must feel like forever. :-\ Thanks, Louise!
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Aw, poor Ellery. That dream demonstrated all his fears and warring emotions, not to mention his very understandable confusion. And I can't imagine any of this is helping his blood pressure any. But it looks like the dots are starting to be connected. He hasn't been in the hospital that long, but it must feel like forever. :-\ Thanks, Louise!
Ellery hates hospitals. And so does Colson. While it is hard for me to write Ellery as vulnerable as he is right now - if he was ever going to be vulnerable it would be over either his love or his career, and this involves both.
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Ellery hates hospitals. And so does Colson. While it is hard for me to write Ellery as vulnerable as he is right now - if he was ever going to be vulnerable it would be over either his love or his career, and this involves both.
Yes, it is a kind of worst-case scenario for him as far as vulnerability goes. :(
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Yes, it is a kind of worst-case scenario for him as far as vulnerability goes. :(
Well, the Beagle thing was pretty devastating. No gay man wants his boyfriend to leave him to get married, that's for sure!
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Well, the Beagle thing was pretty devastating. No gay man wants his boyfriend to leave him to get married, that's for sure!
So true. And then there is Fuckin' Bill, who not only cheated on him, but almost ruined his career. Thank God for Colson!
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and now back to the thick of the plot!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301952.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301952.html)
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and now back to the thick of the plot!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/301952.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/301952.html)
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“I just had an idea. If this is the original crime scene... an we’re missin a knife... then suddenly the toilet is overflowin cause one a the workmen happens ta use it when it’s all clogged up...”
“Ah hah...” Sanchez smiled. “Let’s do some plumbin.”
Ah, yes, police work is so glamorous! Good thinking, Sergeant Dupree. :) Thanks, Louise!
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“I just had an idea. If this is the original crime scene... an we’re missin a knife... then suddenly the toilet is overflowin cause one a the workmen happens ta use it when it’s all clogged up...”
“Ah hah...” Sanchez smiled. “Let’s do some plumbin.”
Ah, yes, police work is so glamorous! Good thinking, Sergeant Dupree. :) Thanks, Louise!
yep, sometimes police work is all plumbing and toilet snakes!
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and here is chapter 55!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302200.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302200.html)
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and here is chapter 55!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302200.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302200.html)
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Wow. What a fascinating look at a ruminating Esteban. He's so understandably conflicted over his feelings for Ellery and over just about everything else in his life, too.
He spared a kind look for her – at least she hadn’t changed toward him. Joe, his oldest friend in the department besides Ellery – had seemed to turn on him, especially now that the Griffin thing was coming apart. It was like being the man standing on the streetcorner doing nothing in particular when somebody gets punched in the kidneys.
The way he went to the hospital determined to see Ellery, but then balked and left the card instead really moved me. This was beautifully written, Louise, with such depth and humanity. Thank you!
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Wow. What a fascinating look at a ruminating Esteban. He's so understandably conflicted over his feelings for Ellery and over just about everything else in his life, too.
He spared a kind look for her – at least she hadn’t changed toward him. Joe, his oldest friend in the department besides Ellery – had seemed to turn on him, especially now that the Griffin thing was coming apart. It was like being the man standing on the streetcorner doing nothing in particular when somebody gets punched in the kidneys.
The way he went to the hospital determined to see Ellery, but then balked and left the card instead really moved me. This was beautifully written, Louise, with such depth and humanity. Thank you!
I had originally intended to get much more deeply into the Esteban situation, but it turned out to be a lot more of a group Sheriff's department police procedural - which seems to be what my stories end up being nowadays, I just can't help them getting that way!
Which means maybe I have to do a real Esteban-centric story one of these days!!
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...and chapter 56!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302396.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302396.html)
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...and chapter 56!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302396.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302396.html)
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They really are a family, and it's always heartening to see how their closeness fulfills so many of their needs, both emotional and practical. And no, Wes and Edna are definitely not ignorant old fuddy-duddies! :laugh:
Yay for Sgt. Dupree! I'll bet Jeremy will be so happy to have Ellery back at work he won't mind doing his paperwork - at least for a little while! Thanks, Louise!
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I went out to see "Wolverine" and have dinner with a friend tonight so no chapter from me! But I'll be hard at work again tomorrow!
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ok here we go, chapter 57!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302724.html#cutid1 (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302724.html#cutid1)
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ok here we go, chapter 57!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302724.html#cutid1 (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302724.html#cutid1)
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Once again .............. all roads lead to Ellery!!!! Paula wouldn't make a good poker player, that's for sure, but at least she doesn't beat around the bush, as Henry noted. It's interesting to compare her ruminations about Ellery with Esteban's. There's just something about that man that inspires loyalty and admiration, but there's a certain amount of resentment of him, too.
And now that there is going to be even more Ellery talk, I'm not sure if they'll ever get past the "business" part of their night! Or maybe it'll be good for Paula to vent? But I have to believe that being the Main Topic of Conversation at their dinner is something that could put both of them out of Ellery's good graces. :-\ What a fascinating cast of characters! Thanks, Louise.
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...and chapter 56!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302396.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302396.html)
Wow, this was a truly heartwarming chapter, despite all the worrying that's going on too.
“Edna’s tryin ta say in her oh-so-subtle way that she knows we both play second fiddle ta you in Ellery’s heart, so don’t take us for ignorant old fuddy-duddies, Colson,” Wes grumbled, but then gave Colson a big smile. “He is lucky to have ya, a yer lucky ta have him. We’re all lucky ta have em.”
*sigh* All the words that Colson needs to hear right now. Gotta love Wes and Edna.
And LOL at Colson's 'tying to the bed' comment! :laugh: Poor Edna. ;D
A great chapter Louise. Thanks! :)
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I went back and found a bunch of typos in it too! I must have been writing too fast!
Anyhew, here is chapter 58!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302895.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302895.html)
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I went back and found a bunch of typos in it too! I must have been writing too fast!
Anyhew, here is chapter 58!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/302895.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/302895.html)
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Love the dialogue!!! You don't write their words, you channel them, and I don't read them, I hear them. Poor boys. On top of all the worry, wondering what Ellery is keeping from him is eating at Colson something awful. And on top of all the pain, wondering what the hell is real and what is imagined is eating at Ellery something awful. Hope they both can put their minds to rest soon so they can get to some grabbin and makin kissy faces! Then we'll know for sure everything's as it should be! :laugh: Thanks, Louise!
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Hehehehe, the things I like writing best are those moments alone between Colson and Ellery. They are heartbroken when they are apart and keeping things from one another, but it sure makes for good drama, don't it?
I have to do a bit more housework today (it's my week) and I may feel inspired to get to the next chapter by then! whoo hoo! thanks for the comments, I thrive on them!!
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Bonus chapter 58!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303115.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303115.html)
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Bonus chapter 58!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303115.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303115.html)
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Well, at this rate, Ellery's headaches aren't going to subside any time soon. :-\ Jeremy's right, Ellery should be smelling flowers and watching tv instead of trying to solve crimes, past and present from his hospital bed.
I know, I know, I sound like Edna, but what can I say? I want our boys home soon making kissy faces! :)
It's amazing how fast the updates are popping up, Louise. Great job! :)
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Bonus chapter 58!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303115.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303115.html)
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“So just outta curiosity, how come Joe is goin through the archives lookin at cold cases from 1971 an havin long secret talks with Wes on the phone?” Jeremy asked. “Speakin a secrets...”
Ellery blanched. “He’s doin what?”
Uh oh. I think Ellery's headache is about to get much worse, and I think Wes is about to get one himself. Thanks, Louise!
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“So just outta curiosity, how come Joe is goin through the archives lookin at cold cases from 1971 an havin long secret talks with Wes on the phone?” Jeremy asked. “Speakin a secrets...”
Ellery blanched. “He’s doin what?”
Uh oh. I think Ellery's headache is about to get much worse, and I think Wes is about to get one himself. Thanks, Louise!
yes, definitely!
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and a little showdown!
Chapter 60!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303427.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303427.html)
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and a little showdown!
Chapter 60!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303427.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303427.html)
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Yes, a little showdown, but quite touching. It's hard for anyone to think clearly when they care so damn much. And, no, Ellery is a lot of things, but never a crybaby. But he really does need to go home and be loved by Colson and give his poor abused brain a chance to heal instead of being constantly picked at.
An Colson half convinced I got some deep dark secret a hetrosexuality or somethin I’m keepin from em,” ..
Well, thank God we know it's not that bad!!! :laugh: :laugh: Yes, even with a cracked brain he's still Ellery! Thanks, Louise.
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Yes, a little showdown, but quite touching. It's hard for anyone to think clearly when they care so damn much. And, no, Ellery is a lot of things, but never a crybaby. But he really does need to go home and be loved by Colson and give his poor abused brain a chance to heal instead of being constantly picked at.
An Colson half convinced I got some deep dark secret a hetrosexuality or somethin I’m keepin from em,” ..
Well, thank God we know it's not that bad!!! :laugh: :laugh: Yes, even with a cracked brain he's still Ellery! Thanks, Louise.
Being attracted to women or having sex with them truly IS one of the worst calamities Ellery can imagine befalling him. The most fun I ever had with that aspect of his personality was when he had the pulled rib and was trying to watch porn in the Holiday Inn and the woman kept blocking his view of the man and it just wouldn't work for him.
I really do like how this story is turning out.
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Being attracted to women or having sex with them truly IS one of the worst calamities Ellery can imagine befalling him.
Oh, God, ain't that the truth!
The most fun I ever had with that aspect of his personality was when he had the pulled rib and was trying to watch porn in the Holiday Inn and the woman kept blocking his view of the man and it just wouldn't work for him.
:laugh: :laugh: It was a lot of fun to read, too, Louise! I remember that so well - Wes called him right in the middle of it and, of course, it was another one of those "I didn't need to know that, Ellery!" moments!
I really do like how this story is turning out.
You're not alone - I can tell that your readers are having a great time with this!
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:laugh: :laugh: It was a lot of fun to read, too, Louise! I remember that so well - Wes called him right in the middle of it and, of course, it was another one of those "I didn't need to know that, Ellery!" moments!
You're not alone - I can tell that your readers are having a great time with this!
hehehehe good times.
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:laugh: :laugh: It was a lot of fun to read, too, Louise! I remember that so well - Wes called him right in the middle of it and, of course, it was another one of those "I didn't need to know that, Ellery!" moments!
That was a hilarious scene Louise. Ellery was telling Wes that he was watching 'normal people porn' or something like that. :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
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That was a hilarious scene Louise. Ellery was telling Wes that he was watching 'normal people porn' or something like that. :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
This won't be the end of Ellery telling Wes things he just doesn't want to know!
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And now, chapter 61
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303777.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303777.html)
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And now, chapter 61
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303777.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303777.html)
*claps hands*
Bravo!
Those two are really hitting it off, and I'm very pleased about it. And I don't care whether Paula had too much merlot or not, they said all the right things. Looks like Cupid has struck! :)
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*claps hands*
Bravo!
Those two are really hitting it off, and I'm very pleased about it. And I don't care whether Paula had too much merlot or not, they said all the right things. Looks like Cupid has struck! :)
Yep, it was nice to watch their rapport! And I think the merlot actually helped! :) Thanks, Louise!
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And here is chapter 62!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303955.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303955.html)
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And here is chapter 62!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/303955.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/303955.html)
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Women – bane a my existence,” he muttered..
::) Except when they leave you homemade muffins! :laugh:
I'm relieved that Ellery is going home. It has to be one of the greatest ironies that hospitals are the absolute worst places to recover from anything!
Listening in on his thoughts made me feel so sorry for him, and I was so touched by his thoughts of Colson tossing and turning and then going for a midnight ride. He does know his man. What an awful mishmash of circumstances and emotions. I do agree that he has to find out - he won't be able to simply put it behind him now.
And to find out – he would probably have to commit at least one crime.
Hmmm....... Thanks, Louise!
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that was the "where do we go from here" chapter.
And now I'm going to have to mull that a bit. One of the things I sort of like to do with my plots is to arrive at a dilemma that I do not know how to solve and have the characters figure it out themselves. And that's where I am right now. Ellery has a dilemma and has to decide where to go from here... with the added complication of being flat on his back for at least two weeks, and the ever-present hazard of what Colson might do when he learns all that Ellery knows.
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and chapter 63!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/304131.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/304131.html)
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and chapter 63!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/304131.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/304131.html)
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Love all the grumbling banter among the guys, and especially the interaction between Joe and Jeremy here. Despite Joe's anger and Jeremy's persistence, there's a lot of mutual respect and it's clear they're comfortable with each other, too. I like Jeremy's idea of bringing Cortez and Ripley in.
Joe pointed a finger at him. “You know what? You are way too much like Ellery for your own damn good.”
Jeremy smiled back at him. “I’ll take that as a compliment....
:laugh: I'll say. That will make Jeremy's day for sure! Thanks, Louise.
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and for those of you patiently waiting another WHOLE DAY!!!
Chapter 64:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/304489.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/304489.html)
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and for those of you patiently waiting another WHOLE DAY!!!
Chapter 64:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/304489.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/304489.html)
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The fact that Ellery is so strong intellectually and perceptively, but can be so physically and emotionally vulnerable is yet another fascinating aspect of his character that makes him so damn lovable.
“How can ya stand kissin me, I look like goddamn Alfalfa.”
“I close my eyes. Besides, Alfalfa wasn’t half bad lookin in them little shorts.
:laugh: Here's hoping it won't be too long before Ellery will be wearing his own all-the-way-to-France shorts and soaking up some sun.
And I must say that the closing lines were so touching they had me blinking rapidly, too. Thanks, Louise.
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The fact that Ellery is so strong intellectually and perceptively, but can be so physically and emotionally vulnerable is yet another fascinating aspect of his character that makes him so damn lovable.
“How can ya stand kissin me, I look like goddamn Alfalfa.”
“I close my eyes. Besides, Alfalfa wasn’t half bad lookin in them little shorts.
that's the way I wrote him. I remember back during the fandom war, when the most common objection to Ellery as an original love interest for Ennis was that he was a "perfect man" and a "Mary sue", the principle element of Mary Sueism is a character so perfect, so flawless and shining with every conceivable advantage that wins over the hero in a fantasy ending that is basically wish-fulfillment. Mary Sue's are never disabled, never injured, never miss, and never get a cold. If they lose their temper it is a noble event and always perfectly justified. They are always in the right. So, being somewhat offended at this charge against Ellery, I submitted him to the "Mary Sue Test."
http://www.katfeete.net/writing/marysue.php (http://www.katfeete.net/writing/marysue.php)
The results are here:
Ellery Cantrell is nothing like you. He isn't really very cool: he blends into crowds, he hangs out on the fringes at parties, and wearing shades after dark makes him run into things. There's never been anything special about him that he could see; boy, is he in for a surprise. He's come in for his share of hurt, but gotten off with minor damage. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever he gains, he's worked for.
In general, you care deeply about Ellery Cantrell, but you're smart enough to let him stand on his own, without burdening him with your personal fantasies or propping him up with idealization and over-dramatization. Ellery Cantrell is a healthy character with a promising career ahead of him.
the ranking was 21 on the Mary Sue test - out of a possible 100. The higher the number, the more of a fantasy-wish fulfillment character it is. On another test, he came out a 26, which was on the "borderline" area, because being a policeman and a sharpshooter, as well as attractive to those not of his sexual preference, tended to drive up the score.
anyhew... enough about Mary Sues...
Here is chapter 65!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/304890.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/304890.html)
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Well, thankfully, I missed a good bit of all that nonsense, but the idea of Ellery as a "perfect man" is so laughable, that charge could only be made by someone who doesn't understand him at all, imo. I've heard of "Mary Sues" of course, but I had no idea there was a "Mary Sue Test"!!! I can see how a novice writer (which you obviously are not) could fall into the Mary Sue trap.
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Good, honest conversation between two more no-bullshit kind of guys.
I’ll go see Bates. I’m the sheriff, after all, an if he’s gonna give anybody the real story, it’ll be me.” Wes had hitched up his belt. “I am too old ta be doin this, but sometimes ya just got ta get in the saddle an ride, Joe.”
This is where years of experience - and the power and authority that come with a sheriff's badge - are priceless. Luckily, Wesley Brown has them all, along with a fierce desire to get to the truth.
LOL at Jeremy being punished by having to work wtih Reynolds! And I'm looking forward to seeing Wes handling Bates and watching Joe take his licks! Thanks, Louise.
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Yep, the Sheriff has to get in the saddle and ride this time, while rookie Dupree heads out to stem the tide of violence in South Tourmaline! This story promises to be quite a bit longer than my recent ones, and I really did not expect it to get this complicated... but you know me, I can't live a crime scene alone.
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and here is chapter 66!!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/304985.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/304985.html)
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and here is chapter 66!!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/304985.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/304985.html)
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It's the milquetoasts like Bates that enable the Featherstones and the Lagos of the world to keep running unchecked, all the while convincing themselves that they're not responsible in any way.
Bates held a hand up. “Look. Whatever happened on that case I got nothin ta do with. Randy told me keep yer head down an that is what I did. You know Randy.”
And that's what he did. Ugh. At least Wes got a lead. Wonder who and what that old phone book contains. Thanks, Louise!
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and now more mumble mumble police procedure!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305270.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305270.html)
winces while I wait for Madame Prosecutor to tell me I misread the Arizona witness arrest procedure wrong...!
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and now more mumble mumble police procedure!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305270.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305270.html)
winces while I wait for Madame Prosecutor to tell me I misread the Arizona witness arrest procedure wrong...!
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It all sounds kosher to me! I understand why Paula suggested they try to get the witnesses without force and only use the warrants if they had to, but I imagine Jeremy will make sure someone keeps an eye on them if he does have to go back for the warrants, even though there's "Too much work, not enough detectives.”
I found Paula's attitude toward Jeremy interesting. I guess she could just be cranky about being called in to work on a Saturday morning, and it was clear she wasn't gung ho on the warrants, but now I'm wondering how the rest of her evening with Henry went. :-\ It seemed like they were headed in the right direction when we last saw them and now I'm really curious as to how they ended the evening once they got past the business part!
In any event, things are sure hopping at the sheriff's department this morning, and I loved the dialogue, as usual. Poor "Don’t you dare call me Sheriff" Joe - he must feel like one of those guys who has to keep all the plates spinning! And how in the world did anyone get anything done before e-mail and cell phones? :laugh: Thanks, Louise!
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It all sounds kosher to me! I understand why Paula suggested they try to get the witnesses without force and only use the warrants if they had to, but I imagine Jeremy will make sure someone keeps an eye on them if he does have to go back for the warrants, even though there's "Too much work, not enough detectives.”
I found Paula's attitude toward Jeremy interesting. I guess she could just be cranky about being called in to work on a Saturday morning, and it was clear she wasn't gung ho on the warrants, but now I'm wondering how the rest of her evening with Henry went. :-\ It seemed like they were headed in the right direction when we last saw them and now I'm really curious as to how they ended the evening once they got past the business part!
In any event, things are sure hopping at the sheriff's department this morning, and I loved the dialogue, as usual. Poor "Don’t you dare call me Sheriff" Joe - he must feel like one of those guys who has to keep all the plates spinning! And how in the world did anyone get anything done before e-mail and cell phones? :laugh: Thanks, Louise!
they got it done with TWXses! I remember back when I did temporary office work, I was always running out to send TWXses. Which at some indefinite time in the mid 1980's gave way to FAXES. There were also SECURE TWX, which I have no idea what that entailed, just that a code had to be put in before they got sent.
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they got it done with TWXses! I remember back when I did temporary office work, I was always running out to send TWXses. Which at some indefinite time in the mid 1980's gave way to FAXES. There were also SECURE TWX, which I have no idea what that entailed, just that a code had to be put in before they got sent.
I remember the early FAX machines! Thermal paper on rolls and the printing was usually kind of blurred.
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I remember the early FAX machines! Thermal paper on rolls and the printing was usually kind of blurred.
they sure were blurry!!!!
And now, chapter 67!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305601.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305601.html)
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they sure were blurry!!!!
And now, chapter 67!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305601.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305601.html)
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Uh oh. Batten down the hatches for Hurricane Wayne! LOL. But Colson's right, he just might be a distraction. Lord knows he'd be change of pace from the nurses and doctors. I hope Ellery is awake when Wes does get there - that should be an interesting conversation!
And a swooping, hovering Colson is adorable - and, yep, even "sweet." :) Thanks, Louise.
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he doesn't like being called sweet though... it impugns his manliness!
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okay it took quite a while, due to being very distracted by a myriad of other silly things, but here's chapter 69!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305760.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305760.html)
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okay it took quite a while, due to being very distracted by a myriad of other silly things, but here's chapter 69!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305760.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305760.html)
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Whoa...I did not see that coming! And things were complicated enough when they thought they at least knew the players! :-\
Go easy on Ellery but remember – under that cracked skull he’s still Ellery an he ain’t helpin much right now.”
LOL. That's exactly what I thought when Ellery said that Joe could come over as long as Ellery was the one asking the questions. Thanks, Louise!
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I have not lost the element of surprise I see.
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and now...
chapter 70!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305974.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305974.html)
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and now...
chapter 70!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/305974.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/305974.html)
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Mabel is a lovely person. It's not unusual for women to sometimes think they can change a man or save him from himself; but, of course,no one person can ever "change" another person. It's been interesting to watch Wesley interact with both Bates and Mabel. He has good instincts and a direct, but non-combative manner that helps him get the information he needs. And, of course, he's a naturally compassionate person. As the Fearless Leader, he's a fine example for his men. And now he has the address book! Thanks, Louise.
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I neglected to post that I was out watching Star Trek tonight and so missed my writing window. But I have very little to do this weekend except get prepped for moving to Chicago... so I'll unavoidably be doing more writing tomorrow!!
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and now, chapter 71:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/306299.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/306299.html)
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and bonus Saturday chapter 72:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/306586.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/306586.html)
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Two chapters to read at once - yay!
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Well, I can certainly understand Mel's reaction and I know in his heart Wes does, too. But Wes is a papa bear when it comes to Ellery. I'm hoping Joe is right and there is someone down in Tuscon with a need to purge their conscience. And maybe that person (or Mabel?) can help clear the confusion of the TWX picture.
And back at the Cantrell/Grey household - He was relieved to have Ellery all to himself once more.
Aww, how very Colson. LOL at the "lumpy head" :laugh: Colson does love his Rapunzel's hair, and I have to say that Ellery with a military cut is all kinds of wrong!
I think it's sweet that the girls made a quiche - with meat! - and want to bring it over. As long as Wes and Edna are going to be there, the girls might as well be, too. Sounds like family dinner night and Colson and Ellery's. Thanks, Louise!
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And here is chapter 73!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/306851.html#cutid1 (http://louisev.livejournal.com/306851.html#cutid1)
because everybody needs a little tenderness!
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And here is chapter 73!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/306851.html#cutid1 (http://louisev.livejournal.com/306851.html#cutid1)
because everybody needs a little tenderness!
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Lovely.
..gaze of tender sympathy..
Aww...that and the "I love you's" - along with the relief of telling Colson - are the best medicine. Hope the family dinner isn't too much for him! Thanks, Louise.
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SPOILERISH
One of the things I was trying to illustrate in the Ellery-POV area is that one of the side-effects of head injury is emotional volatility. Not that he isn't emotional volatile at other times, but things like depression, crying, and extreme emotional sensitivity are also part of the short-term side-effects of a head trauma, so the Ellery we've got right now is definitely not our "usual hard-headed Ellery."
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and here is Chapter 74!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/306980.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/306980.html)
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and here is Chapter 74!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/306980.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/306980.html)
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Not surprised Ripley was gone, but I don't think he'd be terribly hard to track down if he's still in the Dodge. And they do have Cortez at least.
Whoops,” Jeremy said. “Not supposed ta say anythin.”
Well, I suppose too many people knew for that to remain a secret for long. :-\ Good thing Ellery is home and not at the office! Which investigation will be solved first, I wonder.... Thanks, Louise!
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it's hard to say what will be solved first, even the author doesn't know that!!!
I can say however, this story won't be done before I leave for Chicago!
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it's hard to say what will be solved first, even the author doesn't know that!!!
I can say however, this story won't be done before I leave for Chicago!
Well, I know I'm in no hurry for it to end! We're getting to know these people in new and fascinating ways - not to mention the compelling plotlines.
I can't believe you're already up to Chapter 74!
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I know, this was really a "dish ran away with the spoon" plot. I thought it was going to be a short little novella like thing about Ellery getting hit over the head. Whoopsie.
Now we've got Ellery facing a mini personal meltdown, Dupree front and center in multiple investigations, Joe vs. the Sheriff in a leadership vacuum, Colson finding his tender side, Esteban in hot water again, Paula hemming and hawing about whether she's stumbled over Dr. Right, and Dr. Right ... where IS Dr. Right?
how'd all this happen?
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And I got most of my organizing and about two thirds of my packing done tonight... then I settled down and got chapter 75 banged out!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/307266.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/307266.html)
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And I got most of my organizing and about two thirds of my packing done tonight... then I settled down and got chapter 75 banged out!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/307266.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/307266.html)
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Oh, dear. Let's see...a drugged and not-yet-recovered Ellery, a worried and short-tempered Colson, an unannounced skin-tight pink shorts subtle as a bulldozer (“Oh my god, they butchered your beautiful hair!”) Wayne, the overly eager-to-be-helpful twins, not to mention the imminent arrival of mother Edna and the Fearless Leader.
Yep, all the elements of a perfect shitstorm! ::) Thanks, Louise!
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well, you KNEW it would happen, didn't you?
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Okay folkses, today is my last day at work, and last night I was occupied cleaning and packing and organizing. And it paid off, I got everything in the car and I am ready to roll!
I'll be dining with a friend I've never met in person tonight who helped me get "Erotic Etudes" finished back in 2004 (that seems so long ago...!) , and tomorrow's destination - Elko! If I'm not too tired by the time I get to Elko I'll try to get a chapter written then!
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I've finished the first leg of my journey and I'm now in Elko NV. I posted a couple of pics of the landscape. And I am hard at work on chapter 76 now!
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and here we are!!!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/307471.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/307471.html)
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and here we are!!!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/307471.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/307471.html)
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I'm with Wes - they all need to have the rest of their weekend and Ellery and Colson need some space. And if Wes thinks Edna is making a fuss, wait till he sees the twins and Wayne!
Jeremy is handling the Prince investigation well, but he keeps sticking his foot in his mouth and other undesirable places when it comes to the Lago matter. He needs to head home and chill out with Nicky! Thanks for updating from the road, Louise!
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and the party on Ellery's patio begins to converge!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/307952.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/307952.html)
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and here I am in York, Nebraska, and fortunately the muse has not abandoned me!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/308068.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/308068.html)
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Two chapters to read! :D
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“I think two pairs a short shorts is two too many for em today,” Ellery said wryly. “It’ll pass.”
:laugh: :laugh: Well, if Wayne is wearing one of the pairs it is! Nice that Pinky left Wayne some money - but Ellery out of the Red Stallion? No way!!!! As for the party - so far so good (but the night is young).
Jesus Christ, how come it’s always Dupree breakin all the cases here?
Because he's your star rookie, Sheriff! Damn good work, Jeremy! :) Thanks, Louise - I'm sure glad your muse likes to travel!
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Two chapters to read! :D
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Because he's your star rookie, Sheriff! Damn good work, Jeremy! :) Thanks, Louise - I'm sure glad your muse likes to travel!
Good thing for me it does! Or I'd be driving down the highway sweating bullets wondering whether everyone's mad about not getting their chapters!
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*resurfaces*
Well, I don't know what I did wrong but the computers I work with (at home and at work) gave up on me last week. My home computer crashed and my work computer got infected with a trojan horse, twice, in one week! Ack!
The work computer has been fixed, but I'm still weary though. I have no idea how my computer got infected and the repair guy told me it was probably 'some internet thing'. Gosh, he made me feel like I was doing nothing but surf the internet visiting unsafe sites. :laugh: I'm not, though, really not.
The home computer was a different matter. My brother spent the best part of sunday fixing it. And luckily, he managed to do so. 'Some windows thing' he muttered. (he's a mac guy ;D)
But I lost all my files. :-\ I have made back ups, so my documents and pictures were saved. I never thought about e-mails though. I lost all of them too.
So, I'm back in computerland. And I've been wondering how Ellery and Colson are doing. I have sooo much catching up to do.
Off to read! :)
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welcome back Fabienne! you have a lot to read, that's the good part!!!
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and here is chapter 79!
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Fabienne, it's great to see you! :) Computer problems suck, don't they? Glad you're up and running!
and here is chapter 79!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/308383.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/308383.html)
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"...He’s enough of a pain with his clothes on.”
:laugh: :laugh:
But I must say that it's touching to see Ellery surrounded by his family with all their hovering and helping and scolding. He is truly loved. :) Thanks, Louise!
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Yes, I had heaps to read. About 40 pages of Greenlea goodness. Yummy!
and here is chapter 79!
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I can’t get enough a fresh air an good friends,
Right Ellery. This is just what he needs, to be surrounded by his family and friends.
And I laughed at Edna's comment about 'the naked boy on the patio'. She wasn't shocked or anything. She's come a long way from her vaseline moment. LOL!
Thanks Louise :)
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Awww now, see I wish I could have written another chapter, but I went into emergency mode after some extremely unexpected bad news on my first full day in Chicagoland.
See my blog for details. It's almost 9 p.m. and I'm yawning to beat the band! Hopefully I'll have a home tomorrow sometime and I'll have some nibbles on new job opportunities to keep me settled enough so I can write the next chapter then!
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okey doke, now that I have settled a few things, and have a home to look forward to, I managed to get my concentration back... and here is chapter 80!
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okey doke, now that I have settled a few things, and have a home to look forward to, I managed to get my concentration back... and here is chapter 80!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/308697.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/308697.html)
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Well, things are moving along quickly now! Esteban adds a very interesting dynamic to the sheriff's office - and to the story. He's in a very awkward position on a lot of levels. (And I have to agree with him - hospitals really aren't for "sittin around visitin.") Thanks, Louise!
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and let the party resume!
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and let the party resume!
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Now that is one party that only this particular blend of characters could put together!
I could tell ya what’s been happenin over at the bar, that’d satisfy yer curiosity,” Wayne offered brightly.
“Lemme guess, yer breedin an army a mice ta invade the secret Brotherhood HQ up in the White Mountains an they’re gonna go chew off all their –“
:laugh: :laugh: :laugh: So funny! You've got it all there - a bit of irony, a lot of banter, along with a nice bit of farce, too - except that you're not exaggerating these people at all. They're just being themselves! I love that the Fearless Leader stops being fearless when it comes to Edna! Thanks, Louise!
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you are very right about Wes and Edna - there is only one person who can take Wes in tow, and that's Battleship Edna!
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For anyone who missed the old navigation forward/back buttons, I changed my LJ style so that it has the buttons back at the top for anyone who wants easy rereading.
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This was a very hard chapter to write, because it required knowledge of things that only those who actually do the job of prosecutors would know, and so therefore I'm putting a disclaimer on it.
Chapter 82: http://louisev.livejournal.com/309178.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/309178.html)
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I didn't know when I had my suspects flee over 100 miles away into Cochise County that I was setting myself up for an intercounty extradition issue! Because I found out in discussion with a lawyer of my acquaintance who happens to be partly whom I based some of my characterizations, and who betas some of my legal and law enforcement stuff, that police officers from one county are civilians in the next county, and they can't give chase. So now that my suspects are way the heck off in Cochise County (the southeast corner of Arizona where I lived for a whopping 8 months back in Ellery's day!) now I had to find out what the actual procedures are for getting those suspects back once they are arrested and booked. And I didn't really find the exact information. I've got ten tons of information on the details of the actual prisoner transport procedure, since law enforcement procedures are everywhere. What ISN'T everywhere are the legal procedures for request and authorization of intercounty prisoner transfers. All my lawyer friend could tell me (specializing in family law as he is) is that paperwork and and a judge is almost always required. I managed to find out who PERFORMS prisoner transportation (Sheriff's deputies and/or Sheriff's posses - who are for the most part, trained volunteer police adjuncts). I also found a brief document explaining the types of warrants a judge should issue to facilitate an intercounty arrest and to authorize (order) transportation of an arrested person from one county to another, but not an Arizona procedure. So I sort of adapted. it. And it took several hours to get that much... so I fudged it a bit.
So if any of you prosecutors (ahem) want to help clear up the details of what kind of warrant a judge has to issue to get my arrestees out of Cochise County lockup and on their way back to Tourmaline, I'd love to know more! Because I googled myself into a frenzy just getting what I DID find!
My new roommate's son is a career police officer, he could probably tell me in a minute and a half!
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God bless you for doing this! Thank you!
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Oh, dear, Louise! I hate to see you googling yourself into a frenzy! :laugh: But I do appreciate your attention to detail. :)
Okay ..... keeping in mind that statutes and procedures vary widely from state to state (and that we're dealing with 1980's) I think you've got your bases covered pretty well b/c all the procedures you have them following sound plausible. Now, I don't know about Arizona, but speaking only for procedures in my own state - it's true that normally police officers do not have jurisdiction in other counties...
(1) A peace officer of a county, city, village, township, or university of this state may exercise the authority and powers of a peace officer outside the geographical boundaries of the officer's county, city, village, township, or university under any of the following circumstances:
(a) If the officer is enforcing the laws of this state in conjunction with the State police.
(b) If the officer is enforcing the laws of this state in conjunction with a peace officer of any other county, city, village, township, or university in which the officer may be.
and if I recall, Wes did call the Cochise County sheriff, so you have that covered. Also, I know there was a warrant for Eddie, but do we have warrants for Ozzie and Eddies' mom? If any event,
Warrant; pursuit and apprehension of party in other county; aid.
Sec. 2.
If any person against whom a warrant shall be issued for an alleged offense committed within any county, shall, either before or after the issuing of such warrant, escape from or be out of the county, the sheriff or other officer to whom such warrant may be directed, may pursue and apprehend the party charged, in any county of this state, and for that purpose may command aid and may exercise the same authority as in his own county.
And in that case, they could be brought right back to Greenlea, but I don't know what the law is in Arizona.
As for the techanlities of transporting, yes there would need to be paperwork signed by a judge, but:
If the judge [of the county in which the arrest is made] refuses to allow the arrested person to post bail, or if sufficient bail is not offered, the official having charge of the arrested person shall take the arrested person before a judge of the judicial district in which the offense is charged to have been committed.
so basically the arresting county is required to return the person(s) to the county in which the crime is alleged to have been committed (barring some legal wrangling by Ozzie Prince, which I'm guessing you don't want to get into). If some type of transport "warrant" would be required in Arizona, then the "transportable statewide warrant" that Wes refers to sounds reasonable to me!
I really wouldn't sweat over these details too much, Louise - you've got a lot of leeway and you never venture into implausibility. Your police work and legal stuff is a lot more accurate and authentic than most of what I've read in books - and don't get me started on tv shows and movies! :laugh:
Okay, now to the important stuff - Paula and Henry are moving along nicely - he has a lot of respect for her and her work. And I'm happy for Paula that she can look forward to spending quality time with that "an attractive and personable man" at the end of her long day! Thanks, Louise!
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whoo wee! thanks Ms. Prosecutor!!!
Well I got that "statewide warrant" thing from Utah law. But they do need a warrant before they can transport them, because all they had was a probable cause for arrest based on the Sheriff's phone call to Cochise county, so it's back to Judge Conover, the poor dear.
But I am thrilled that my police work is plausible - whenever I get into a doubt situation I always start digging in the code or asking my lawyer friends!
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whoo wee! thanks Ms. Prosecutor!!!
Well I got that "statewide warrant" thing from Utah law. But they do need a warrant before they can transport them, because all they had was a probable cause for arrest based on the Sheriff's phone call to Cochise county, so it's back to Judge Conover, the poor dear.
But I am thrilled that my police work is plausible - whenever I get into a doubt situation I always start digging in the code or asking my lawyer friends!
You're welcome, Louise :) Ah - they didn't already have warrants for Ozzie and Eddie's mom, then. I couldn't remember. The Greenlea County jail is going to get crowded! Well, Paula will be busy this afternoon. But at least she has something to look forward to while she's working!
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well I'm going to have another issue with what to do with our Protective Custody folks the Cortez family!
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Well, look what I found on my f-list! - Chapter 83:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/309474.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/309474.html)
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I'm glad Wayne came over. Being a part of Ellery's extended family is some of the best medicine he could get.
It was great listening to Colson talk to Wes and seeing how very far he has come and what a solid relationship they have. Colson is kind a cross between a son and a son-in-law to Wes! :)
No, Lago won't be talking, that's for sure. But people like Lago have a tendency to leave enemies in their wake - and there have to be others who know things and just might be willing to talk - but that's going to be tricky since Wes doesn't have authority over anyone in Tuscon :-\ Hmmm....what will he do? Great mystery. Thanks, Louise!
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and the police action goes on! Chapter 84!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/309739.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/309739.html)
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and the police action goes on! Chapter 84!
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Yes, all kinds of action going on! Well, they definitely need to find a place for Mama and Manuel apart from Ozzie and Eddie and Eddie's mom (and do I remember correctly that there was some question as to exactly who she was married to - Danny or Ozzie?).
Great to hear Nicky's voice - he does know how to rile his man, doesn't he? ;D Thanks, Louise!
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Yes, all kinds of action going on! Well, they definitely need to find a place for Mama and Manuel apart from Ozzie and Eddie and Eddie's mom (and do I remember correctly that there was some question as to exactly who she was married to - Danny or Ozzie?).
Great to hear Nicky's voice - he does know how to rile his man, doesn't he? ;D Thanks, Louise!
we won't be quite sure what the story with Eddie's mother is until she appears on the scene... which should be pretty soon!
Uh oh, I think I got too many plots going at once, don't I?
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we won't be quite sure what the story with Eddie's mother is until she appears on the scene... which should be pretty soon!
Uh oh, I think I got too many plots going at once, don't I?
Nope, you're keeping us on our toes - that's a good thing!
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Nope, you're keeping us on our toes - that's a good thing!
hehehehe I never know where these things are going to go when a crime happens!
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I am moving house to Aurora tonight - and out of the Super 8 Motel (thank all the powers that be!) but the internet is not yet installed at my new home, so I won't be able to be online tonight to upload a chapter. I will, however, give writing it the old college try, and I'll upload it to LJ tomorrow.
Hope you can all hang on ! heheheh
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You're a trouper, Louise - thanks!
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You're a trouper, Louise - thanks!
I'll have to content myself with practicing piano tonight I guess!!! at least I have a grand piano to practice on!
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ah hah! an unsecured network on a night before my Comcast installation!
And here's Chapter 85! I practiced piano too!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/309776.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/309776.html)
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ah hah! an unsecured network on a night before my Comcast installation!
And here's Chapter 85! I practiced piano too!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/309776.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/309776.html)
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Was it ever great to be back at the Red Stallion, seeing the gang just being themselves! And it was especially great to see Nicky and his swagger ;D
Wayne clucked with his tongue. “Come on, Lauren. I just have a word question. What the hell is a coxcomb?”
“Ain’t that the red fleshy thing on a rooster’s head?”
:laugh: :laugh:
Can't wait till Sweet Thing arrives! Thanks, Louise!
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Was it ever great to be back at the Red Stallion, seeing the gang just being themselves! And it was especially great to see Nicky and his swagger ;D
Wayne clucked with his tongue. “Come on, Lauren. I just have a word question. What the hell is a coxcomb?”
“Ain’t that the red fleshy thing on a rooster’s head?”
:laugh: :laugh:
Can't wait till Sweet Thing arrives! Thanks, Louise!
I had fun writing it! Although I admit that Lauren's reply to Wayne's question was an afterthought...I could think of all sorts of retorts Wayne could have made to it as well and then decided, particularly since my internet access was very flaky, to just leave 'as is.'
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A changeup chapter, hopefully, to keep everyone
distracted entertained.
http://louisev.livejournal.com/310172.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/310172.html)
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I am hoping to get a chapter written tonight, but as I am going on a flight tomorrow on an all-day junket to do a job interview, I may have to go to bed early and forgo the usual Tourmaline turbulence. Just a forewarning! I expect to be home tomorrow night in time to write something tomorrow night.
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A changeup chapter, hopefully, to keep everyone distracted entertained.
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What a wonderfully evocative chapter! Colson standing guard over Ellery and his dreams, but knowing that he can't always be there to protect him and that neither of them has control. And it was interesting to see how he came to the conclusion that Ellery was not fantasizing - because the pain and the shame of what he told Colson was too fresh, too genuine and the way he describes the cyst of encapsulated pain that must be removed so that Ellery can move forward.
And I love the poignant image of Colson settling down to watch the birds until dark while he ponders and broods....
That's not a bad idea about the hustler - I hope he brings it Wes's attention. And Ellery's familiar dream was so very Ellery, pulling together so many different aspects of his life.
I am hoping to get a chapter written tonight, but as I am going on a flight tomorrow on an all-day junket to do a job interview, I may have to go to bed early and forgo the usual Tourmaline turbulence. Just a forewarning! I expect to be home tomorrow night in time to write something tomorrow night.
Good luck with the interview, Louise!
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I eked out chapter 87 so I wouldn't feel so guilty leaving town tomorrow!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/310486.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/310486.html)
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I eked out chapter 87 so I wouldn't feel so guilty leaving town tomorrow!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/310486.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/310486.html)
No guilt allowed - but the chapter is appreciated!
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Reynolds thinks it’s some sort a plot ta keep ya back, but he don’t understand jealousy. Reynolds is slow that way.”
:laugh: Murdoch is a regular Dear Abby, isn't he? And if Jeremy is going to be at the station at 8 a.m. tomorrow, he'd better go get Nicky at the Red Stallion and bring him home toot sweet! Thanks, Louise!
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I'm home from the wars now, and it's 9:30 p.m. and I am exhausted and haven't had dinner yet. So no chapter tonight unless I can't sleep!
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I eked out chapter 87 so I wouldn't feel so guilty leaving town tomorrow!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/310486.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/310486.html)
No guilt allowed - but the chapter is appreciated!
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Reynolds thinks it’s some sort a plot ta keep ya back, but he don’t understand jealousy. Reynolds is slow that way.”
:laugh: Murdoch is a regular Dear Abby, isn't he? And if Jeremy is going to be at the station at 8 a.m. tomorrow, he'd better go get Nicky at the Red Stallion and bring him home toot sweet! Thanks, Louise!
Yes, hurry up Jeremy. But I think he's going to have some explaining to do with Nicky about having to go to work, again! But he can't not go, can he? I like his strong sense of duty and responsability, even if it is interfering with his personal life. Let's just hope they have next weekend.
thanks Louise. Hope you slept well. :)
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Oh, I did. And I woke up to an early morning job offer, the best kind of phone call!
But man, I am TIRED. I expect to have a very relaxing and joyful weekend though, after the hectic past couple of weeks and frantic, though productive, job search.
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Not as tired but still stiff as a board, I'm back to working on "Persistence of Vision". I think I can say with some confidence I'll get this book done by the time I leave Chicago!!
Heheheh. Really, though, it's a one-day drive to Minneapolis, so I don't expect any real interruptions in my life in the next... SIX months! Stay tuned for the next chapter!
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and now, chapter 88!
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and now, chapter 88!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/310703.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/310703.html)
I know it has to come to its natural conclusion, but I'll be sorry to see this tale end!
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I think there's a country song entitled, "I Love This Bar" - and I sure do. There's always a terrific blend of characters.
It had been three hours since he had phoned Nick – how much trouble could he have got up to in that short a time?
Oh, I think Nick could probably get up to a whole lot of trouble in a lot less than three hours - if he wanted to. But luckly for Jeremy he doesn't want to - at least not the type of trouble Jeremy is worried about. They do make a good match. I love how Nicky pouts so quickly - but gets over it quickly too, and that he's only mildly annoyed with Jeremy's reticence with PDA. And while he's probably a little more than mildly annoyed that Jeremy has to work tomorrow, his feelings about that, combined with Jeremy's jealousy over all the attention being given to his Nicky's ass, should make for some hot lovin' tonight!
So it appears that Lance and Sergio are back to the "on again" phase of their relationship. Poor Jeeves. Thanks, Louise!
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okay gang, I got distracted this weekend doing some editing work on a friend's horror novel, but this evening is reserved for writing the next chapter!
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and here is Chapter 89!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/310805.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/310805.html)
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and here is Chapter 89!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/310805.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/310805.html)
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Oh, dear. I don't know what to think. On the one hand, he was just released this morning; but on the other hand, the pills don't seem enough to manage the pain.
And there was no assurance, lacking Wes Brown’s influence over the hospital, that anyone would let Colson in to see him or speak to him.
I'm so glad you addressed this, Louise. Even with the precautions of wills and poa's, etc., gay couples can't piece together the protection and security and rights that only legal marriage can provide. Poor boys. I'm glad Colson called Edna. Thanks, Louise.
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Oh, dear. I don't know what to think. On the one hand, he was just released this morning; but on the other hand, the pills don't seem enough to manage the pain.
And there was no assurance, lacking Wes Brown’s influence over the hospital, that anyone would let Colson in to see him or speak to him.
I'm so glad you addressed this, Louise. Even with the precautions of wills and poa's, etc., gay couples can't piece together the protection and security and rights that only legal marriage can provide. Poor boys. I'm glad Colson called Edna. Thanks, Louise.
yep... one of the biggest potential challenges of writing a follow-on story to BBM with a gay couple living together was what to do about the legal hurdles and public condemnation, the lack of rights and privileges allowed to Colson and Ellery? I had originally conceptualized "Taking Chances" as the tale that would be a "bringing the killer to justice" which meant my original character had to either be a lawyer, or better still, a detective with enough seniority to investigate something off his own turf, and this had the additional advantage of giving him the power to open doors that would be firmly closed to most any other gay couple.
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And now, Jeremy has a spitfire on his hands!
Chapter 90:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311062.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311062.html)
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And now, Jeremy has a spitfire on his hands!
Chapter 90:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311062.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311062.html)
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Woo wee, spitfire is right! But he wouldn't be his Nicky otherwise. And Jeremy knows when to take his bait ("Not a bit of it”) and when to swim on by. I love how Nicky's little boy "I’ll be good" transformed into "You bet. Now get in here” in a flash! It's so great to watch these two together, I've missed them! Thanks, Louise.
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Woo wee, spitfire is right! But he wouldn't be his Nicky otherwise. And Jeremy knows when to take his bait ("Not a bit of it”) and when to swim on by. I love how Nicky's little boy "I’ll be good" transformed into "You bet. Now get in here” in a flash! It's so great to watch these two together, I've missed them! Thanks, Louise.
yeah but doesn't absence make the heart grow fonder?
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yeah but doesn't absence make the heart grow fonder?
You bet!
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stay tuned for the next chapter!!
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staying tuned.....
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and here we go, chapter 91!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311488.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311488.html)
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and here we go, chapter 91!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311488.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311488.html)
Wow - that was fast. You weren't kidding about staying tuned!
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“It’s okay, yer safe from me, yer much too young.”
:laugh: Among other things! Interesting dream he had. I know he doesn't want to retire to a tropical beach, but the anxiety about losing Colson has to be coming from something else. :-\
“No problem with that. Not sure I could sit up unless ya pointed a gun at me –“ he stopped dead, a thought slipping away from him like an overcooked noodle slipping from a spoon.
Now that sounds like a clue to ..... something????
Here comes your man, Colson - and no, he ain't feelin any pain at all! Thanks, Louise!
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yes, Ellery got a clue on the verges of his morphine dream!
more clues to come...! muah hahahah!
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Chapter 92:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311707.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311707.html)
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Chapter 92:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311707.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311707.html)
Well, Colson hasn't been living with a chief deputy this past year for nothing! But, uh oh. I know one a.d.a who will be none too pleased to have her evening interrupted when her date is called into service ..... :-\ Thanks, Louise!
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stay tuned for the next chapter which is under construction!
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And here is chapter 93! and the early wake-up calls begin!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311832.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311832.html)
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And here is chapter 93! and the early wake-up calls begin!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/311832.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/311832.html)
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Well, I'd be relieved that the calls didn't start until early morning, except that it looks like there was nothing to interrupt the night before as far as Henry and Paula are concerned! :-\
Looks like this may turn out to be a very productive Sunday with Ozzie, et al back in town and in custody and with Ellery on the edge of a breakthrough.
“Yeah, ya asked me that already, are you testin my mental acuity here?”
:laugh: Poor Henry. It's hard enough to deal with Ellery, let alone when you're half-awake, slightly hung over and urgently needing to pee! Thanks, Louise!
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Yep, there was a bit of a no-showing last night...as you know I have a bit of an allergy when it comes to happily-ever-afters. After all, the only happy couple that is a really happy couple in that story without bumps or diversions, is Edna and Wes. Mel and Bunny (good god!) Esteban's marriage is probably on the rocks, Colson and Ellery fight regularly, Jeremy and Nick even moreso, and even the otherwise-idyllic partnership of Pookie and Simon has seen trouble in paradise. Not to mention the on-again off-again fortunes of Jeeves, Lance, Sergio, Clyde and Jerry from the Red Stallion. So will a Happily Ever After firm up for Henry and Paula? Weeelllll, not so fast, amiga!
I guess this is why I don't think my work is suitable for the "romance" genre, cause I just don't see a lot of happily ever afters in my characters' lives.
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Yep, there was a bit of a no-showing last night...as you know I have a bit of an allergy when it comes to happily-ever-afters. After all, the only happy couple that is a really happy couple in that story without bumps or diversions, is Edna and Wes. Mel and Bunny (good god!) Esteban's marriage is probably on the rocks, Colson and Ellery fight regularly, Jeremy and Nick even moreso, and even the otherwise-idyllic partnership of Pookie and Simon has seen trouble in paradise. Not to mention the on-again off-again fortunes of Jeeves, Lance, Sergio, Clyde and Jerry from the Red Stallion. So will a Happily Ever After firm up for Henry and Paula? Weeelllll, not so fast, amiga!
I guess this is why I don't think my work is suitable for the "romance" genre, cause I just don't see a lot of happily ever afters in my characters' lives.
No, you defintely do not write "romances," Louise! :laugh:
But, gosh, poor Paula. Happily Ever After may not be in the cards for her and Henry, but maybe a little Happily For A Little While So She Can Get Her Mind Off of the Charming But Definitely Unavailable Chief Deputy? But, then again, angst-free couplings are not only unrealistic - they're flat-out boring! And boring is another thing that you definitely do not write!
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No, you defintely do not write "romances," Louise! :laugh:
But, gosh, poor Paula. Happily Ever After may not be in the cards for her and Henry, but maybe a little Happily For A Little While So She Can Get Her Mind Off of the Charming But Definitely Unavailable Chief Deputy? But, then again, angst-free couplings are not only unrealistic - they're flat-out boring! And boring is another thing that you definitely do not write!
well, not genre romances in any case! I've been still trying to define where to put the Greenlea Tales in terms of genre, and I'm not sure it fits anywhere in the romance area. Maybe GLBT fiction, without the strictures on "romance." Who knows!
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and a little retro here to fill in the blanks!
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and... chapter 95!
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Oh, boy - two chapters to read :)
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Well, holy moly, Louise! Ouch, ouch, ouch. I once had just a couple drops of boiling water fall onto my hand and it was excruciating, so I don't even want to think of poor Paula's pain! At least she was able to hold it together until 911 got there, and even though she let Kelly know what happend, she must be frantic! Really good talk between Paula and Kelly, though.
And, yet again, we see how very valuable Wesley is, not only to the sheriff's department and to the county, but to his colleagues and friends as well. He doesn't miss a trick, knows how to delegate, and brooks no nonsense with anyone. I know Jeremy's concern is genuine, but he needs to learn to rein in his White Knight Syndrome a bit. Wes's hunch is right that it would be awkward for Jeremy to show up along with Henry. And, frankly, if Nick found out I can't say I'd blame him for being peeved.
But, man oh man, they could all use a break from drama. Thanks, Louise!
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I take it that twist in the plot was a surprise!
muah hahahahah. Something in me just loves doing that.
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And onward to the main subject
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And onward to the main subject
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Colson wandered to the window, pushed aside the curtain and looked out toward the water feeder. There were two red hummingbirds there now, and he ached to return to his comfortable seat on the patio, or go out to try to find a camera that would allow him to zoom in on the tiny creatures as they fluttered like tiny windmills, holding themselves perfectly still as they sipped with sharp bills at the flower-shaped water troughs.
Oh, that's lovely! From the first moment Colson spotted those birds in Ellery's yard, I have always loved watching the relationship he's developed with them and how that allows him not just an escape valve from his worries, but also let's him tap into his inherent connection with nature. Thanks, Louise!
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Colson wandered to the window, pushed aside the curtain and looked out toward the water feeder. There were two red hummingbirds there now, and he ached to return to his comfortable seat on the patio, or go out to try to find a camera that would allow him to zoom in on the tiny creatures as they fluttered like tiny windmills, holding themselves perfectly still as they sipped with sharp bills at the flower-shaped water troughs.
Oh, that's lovely! From the first moment Colson spotted those birds in Ellery's yard, I have always loved watching the relationship he's developed with them and how that allows him not just an escape valve from his worries, but also let's him tap into his inherent connection with nature. Thanks, Louise!
Colson's going to be developing some new hobbies with his man in a sickbed!!
As you might imagine, I have some experience in watching hummingbirds - I especially love the red ones that flutter around those water feeders!
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and now, back to Memorial ! Chapter 97
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and now, back to Memorial ! Chapter 97
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Henry is a keeper, Paula! I liked everything about his visit - he was genuine and funny and honest and direct. I thought it was great that he "came clean" in front of Mel and said he had nothing to hide. And he finds Paula adorable! :) Thanks, Louise!
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Henry is a keeper, Paula! I liked everything about his visit - he was genuine and funny and honest and direct. I thought it was great that he "came clean" in front of Mel and said he had nothing to hide. And he finds Paula adorable! :) Thanks, Louise!
I wasn't sure whether Paula giggling like a schoolgirl at his "adorable" comment might have been over the top, but she DOES have the excuse that she's on intravenous pain meds and just had a traumatic shock!
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...and chapter 98!
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I wasn't sure whether Paula giggling like a schoolgirl at his "adorable" comment might have been over the top, but she DOES have the excuse that she's on intravenous pain meds and just had a traumatic shock!
Yes, there's that - but I kind of liked seeing the spontaneous side of Paula, not over the top, at all!
SPOILERS - Chapter 98 (98?!? We are zeroing in on the big 100!)
Okay, now we're getting somewhere! Not surprisingly, Wes is a masterful interrogator. Easy to understand why Manuel and his mother are so frightened.
“Oh yeah. Who hit my Chief Deputy over the head with a toilet snake?”
Louise!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Yes, there's that - but I kind of liked seeing the spontaneous side of Paula, not over the top, at all!
SPOILERS - Chapter 98 (98?!? We are zeroing in on the big 100!)
Okay, now we're getting somewhere! Not surprisingly, Wes is a masterful interrogator. Easy to understand why Manuel and his mother are so frightened.
“Oh yeah. Who hit my Chief Deputy over the head with a toilet snake?”
Louise!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
you're not the only one squealing about how that chapter ended!!!
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and while there's not quite an answer...
there is some progress.
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and while there's not quite an answer...
there is some progress.
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Wes is having to do some fancy footwork there. What a weekend this is turning out to be - and it's not over yet by a long shot.
Had to laugh that Joe told Wes he had to be the one to talk to Colson next time he called. I don't blame him! This is great. Thanks, Louise! Looking forward to the big 100!
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Wes is having to do some fancy footwork there. What a weekend this is turning out to be - and it's not over yet by a long shot.
Had to laugh that Joe told Wes he had to be the one to talk to Colson next time he called. I don't blame him! This is great. Thanks, Louise! Looking forward to the big 100!
and it won't be long till he does call! Chapter 100!
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and it won't be long till he does call! Chapter 100!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/313622.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/313622.html)
:o 100 chapters already! Wow!
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I hope that this visit with Dr. Sampson will be a turning point for Ellery. I know how he (and Colson) hate to go to the hospital. Knowing that he can get pain relief from the visiting nurse will relieve the stress. This means he can just stay at home and get better. You describe what this medication is doing to him in a very realistic way Louise.
And isn't it amazing that Ellery never looses his sense of humour, no matter how poorly he's feeling. Glad to see Colson is playing along a bit, even in the presence of company.
Thanks Louise. :)
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I've had my share of run-ins with intravenous and intramuscular narcotics, that's for sure!
and that has a lot to do with Ellery keeping his sense of humor!!!
Thanks for reading! I think you folks like the daily updates more than the weekly ones!
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I'm working on Wesley Does Everybody's Job For Them,,, it'll be posted soon.
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And at last, after several hours of rereading and waffling over various and sundry things...
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And isn't it amazing that Ellery never looses his sense of humour, no matter how poorly he's feeling. Glad to see Colson is playing along a bit, even in the presence of company.
Yeah, I had the same thought Fabienne - and it's always comforting to see that humor even when things are so screwed up.
I'm working on Wesley Does Everybody's Job For Them,,,
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Well, now, ain't that the truth! You can't buy years of experience and Sheriff Brown is proof of that. It was only a matter of time before Manuel and Eddie turned on each other, but I'm glad Wes speeded up the process.
Colson seemed unphased that Wes came out of an important meeting to take his call - which is a good indicator that Wes has gone a wee bit overboard in indulging both Colson and Ellery, as Joe, bless his heart, was quick to point out.
And, as much as I adore Jeremy, his apparent obsession with running off to the hospital when there are important matters to tend with - first for Ellery, now for Paula - is getting on my nerves. I can understand to a degree why he was anxious to visit Ellery, but Paula? Sheesh. If he wonders why Nick is so insecure, he might want to take a look at himself and some of the vibes he puts out. :-\ Loving all the layers of this. Thanks, Louise!
P.S. A couple of places where I think you meant to type "Danny":
...then what were you doin disposin of Eddie’s body in the dumpster on Thursday night?”
So you an Manuel were wrappin up Eddie’s body ...
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whoopsie on the typos!
Yeah I was tired last night!
And yes, you aren't the only one who has commented that Colson and Ellery are taking the lion's share of Wes's goodwill right about now... and we might have to ask ourselves....
DO THESE BOYS NEED A WEEKEND?
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Dr. Caulfield poses as an M.D., however briefly.
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DO THESE BOYS NEED A WEEKEND?
Yep! They all need a weekend!
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Poor Paula - my heart goes out to her, as well. I guess being a psychologist can be a double-edged sword when it comes to your own relationships for the exact reason Henry noted. He can't help but analyze, but he also can't be objective.
I really can't blame Henry for being irritated. Once again, all roads lead to Ellery, but Henry is trying to forge a new road! I have to admit, though, to being very curious about the hypnosis! Thanks, Louise!
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Poor Paula - my heart goes out to her, as well. I guess being a psychologist can be a double-edged sword when it comes to your own relationships for the exact reason Henry noted. He can't help but analyze, but he also can't be objective.
I really can't blame Henry for being irritated. Once again, all roads lead to Ellery, but Henry is trying to forge a new road! I have to admit, though, to being very curious about the hypnosis! Thanks, Louise!
okay, BIG SPOILER NOW.....
you do realize it's going to be a complete fiasco, right?
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okay, BIG SPOILER NOW.....
you do realize it's going to be a complete fiasco, right?
Oh, Louise, you don't think we actually think this is going to go smoothly do you? ;D Ellery under hypnosis, hmmmm, can't wait. ;) Will this turn out to be a 'didn't need to know that Ellery' situation? Or more funny Ellery?
I just hope they don't take too long. Henry needs to get back to Paula!
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okay, BIG SPOILER NOW.....
you do realize it's going to be a complete fiasco, right?
:laugh: Oh, I'm counting on it!! I just can't figure out what kind of a fiasco! As Fabienne pointed out - there are all kinds of possibilities!
And, yes, Paula needs Henry, so let's hope it's not a long, drawn-out fiasco!
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Well this is turning out to be a very long book...! I really didn't think I'd still be writing it by the time I left for Minneapolis, but I can't see wrapping it up in the next four days (chapters) somehow.
And it has to be a really GOOD fiasco!
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And notes leading down to the fiasco! Chapter 103
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And notes leading down to the fiasco! Chapter 103
http://louisev.livejournal.com/314369.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/314369.html)
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Good typin, Dupree, you got a bright future in police administration
:laugh:
Oh, yeah, that's exactly what every young detective is dying to hear! I like how Wes told him not to pout - it's true that they're making lots of progress. But I think Jeremy might still be a little put out about not going to the hospital.
And what a smart Dr. Caulfield! Bringing food to hungry men is guaranteed to get him high marks and a lot of good will!
I like how forthright Wes is about his "coddling." I wonder what he'll say after the hypnosis! Thanks, Louise!
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Good typin, Dupree, you got a bright future in police administration
:laugh:
Oh, yeah, that's exactly what every young detective is dying to hear! I like how Wes told him not to pout - it's true that they're making lots of progress. But I think Jeremy might still be a little put out about not going to the hospital.
And what a smart Dr. Caulfield! Bringing food to hungry men is guaranteed to get him high marks and a lot of good will!
I like how forthright Wes is about his "coddling." I wonder what he'll say after the hypnosis! Thanks, Louise!
Henry is no dope, and he's got many years' experience in dealing with police detectives under stress - that's his stock in trade. And no PhD psychologist can get one over on Wes Brown, particularly after he broke a case wide open - on a Sunday no less!!!
Cocky bastard, one might conclude.
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And now ... on the other side of town on this eventful Sunday...
http://louisev.livejournal.com/314697.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/314697.html) Chapter 104
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And now ... on the other side of town on this eventful Sunday...
http://louisev.livejournal.com/314697.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/314697.html) Chapter 104
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Well, that was a stroke of good timing, for both Esteban and poor Mr. Waldrop. But I'm not sure that the "What Would Ellery Do?" approach is a good idea - mostly because only Ellery is Ellery! I really do feel for Esteban, though. He feels like the odd man out personally and professionally. All the more reason he should not be missing his A.A. meeting! :-\ I think Esteban and his issues add a really interesting element to the story. Thanks, Louise!
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Well, that was a stroke of good timing, for both Esteban and poor Mr. Waldrop. But I'm not sure that the "What Would Ellery Do?" approach is a good idea - mostly because only Ellery is Ellery! I really do feel for Esteban, though. He feels like the odd man out personally and professionally. All the more reason he should not be missing his A.A. meeting! :-\ I think Esteban and his issues add a really interesting element to the story. Thanks, Louise!
I had promised at the beginning of this story when it was just a gleam in my eye, lo those many months ago, that this story would involve Esteban, and in fact the opening chapter featured Esteban.
And he's soon to get embroiled in the fiasco!!! Bet you can't wait!
However, tonight is my goodbye dinner with my landlady Holly and my former landlady Rosemarie. so unless I am super-inspired after dinner at the East China Inn, you'll have to wait till tomorrow for the next update!
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I'm typing, I'm typing!
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Ellery gets a visit!
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Ellery gets a visit!
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And here we are again, with all roads leading to Ellery! Or, I should say, Chief Deputy Cantrell. Even in a t-shirt, bermuda shorts and full of morphine he is "back in action" when need be. Poor Esteban, having to face an angry Colson! But Colson is right that Ellery really didn't seem to mind the intrusion at all. But how long until the next group arrives at Grand Central Station.... Thanks, Louise!
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And here we are again, with all roads leading to Ellery! Or, I should say, Chief Deputy Cantrell. Even in a t-shirt, bermuda shorts and full of morphine he is "back in action" when need be. Poor Esteban, having to face an angry Colson! But Colson is right that Ellery really didn't seem to mind the intrusion at all. But how long until the next group arrives at Grand Central Station.... Thanks, Louise!
bwah hahahah you might have to wait to find out! I was busily preparing for my imminent departure from Illinois, including multiple bread-bakings, cooking up my remaining food, and packing. I had the actual time to do the writing, but I didn't have the mind for it. I'll have time on the road - if I leave tomorrow morning... to consider the next phase of the fiasco! But as soon as I get there, I'll have the next 5 days to devote almost entirely to the novel!
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bwah hahahah you might have to wait to find out! I was busily preparing for my imminent departure from Illinois, including multiple bread-bakings, cooking up my remaining food, and packing. I had the actual time to do the writing, but I didn't have the mind for it. I'll have time on the road - if I leave tomorrow morning... to consider the next phase of the fiasco! But as soon as I get there, I'll have the next 5 days to devote almost entirely to the novel!
Safe travels, Louise! Five days to devote to the story? :D
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I miscounted... I dont start my job until Wednesday, and today was taken up with driving, so taht leaves me Sunday through Tuesday... more than the amount I usually get between jobs!
I arrived safe and sound, I'm on the net, and turning my attention now to where we last saw Ellery!
Sunday morning ETA: I didn't have an ounce of imagination left in me by 10 last night, so I came up blank. But now I'm back at the computer and looknig at the page so another chapter will be out soonest!
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and here is Chapter 106!!
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and here is Chapter 106!!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/315374.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/315374.html)
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Well, I think your imagination was just sleeping last night - because it's certainly back today! The fiasco is off and running ...... Good grief, Ellery!
“Madre de Dios!”
Si. What Esteban said! Thanks, Louise!
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Well, I think your imagination was just sleeping last night - because it's certainly back today! The fiasco is off and running ...... Good grief, Ellery!
“Madre de Dios!”
Si. What Esteban said! Thanks, Louise!
bwah hahahah, see what spending 6 hours in the car will do for a plot?
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and chapter 107!
Colson isn't the only one seeing green!
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and chapter 107!
Colson isn't the only one seeing green!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/315633.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/315633.html)
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“Say, maybe we should ask the girls if they want ta tag along an see how things are goin? Maybe they can bring some cookies over or somethin.”
“Great idea!” Nick skipped down the last of the steps and rang the bell.
:laugh: :laugh: :laugh: OMG. If those aren't famous last words. Let's take roll call. A pissed off and jealous Colson, a high-flying hypnotized Ellery, an astonished and confused Henry, a double-scale and in a hurry Glligan, an embarrassed and nervous Esteban, an out-of-sorts Jeremy, a jealous, but momentarily appeased Nicky, and a set of eager to please and too curious twins. Ay yi yi! This isn't a fiasco - it's a FIASCO!
Thanks, Louise!
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“Say, maybe we should ask the girls if they want ta tag along an see how things are goin? Maybe they can bring some cookies over or somethin.”
“Great idea!” Nick skipped down the last of the steps and rang the bell.
:laugh: :laugh: :laugh: OMG. If those aren't famous last words. Let's take roll call. A pissed off and jealous Colson, a high-flying hypnotized Ellery, an astonished and confused Henry, a double-scale and in a hurry Glligan, an embarrassed and nervous Esteban, an out-of-sorts Jeremy, a jealous, but momentarily appeased Nicky, and a set of eager to please and too curious twins. Ay yi yi! This isn't a fiasco - it's a FIASCO!
Thanks, Louise!
oh no, that isn't all, Marie. Not by a damn sight.
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oh no, that isn't all, Marie. Not by a damn sight.
Holy shit, Louise! Now my imagination is working overtime! :laugh:
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Holy shit, Louise! Now my imagination is working overtime! :laugh:
if you ever guess who else is going to show up I will personally give you the Ellery Cantrell Mystery Plot Twist Award of the Century.
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if you ever guess who else is going to show up I will personally give you the Ellery Cantrell Mystery Plot Twist Award of the Century.
:laugh: :laugh: Okay, now I'm really racking my brain!!!! Let's see.... Wes and Edna wouldn't be a surprise...Wayne was just there and he wouldn't be too much of a surprise either.... Lauren? could Beagle show up out of the blue? How about a pregnant Laura and/or her husband? Larry Esteban, Jr.? Couldn't be Lago himself... or the mystery man from Tuscon... Fuckin Bill is still in prison.... no, wait, wait ---- Didn't Sampson's nurse mention sending a visiting nurse for morphine shots? Don't tell me the blonde nurse Jeremy used to date will show up - what was her name - Janice? The one who was sitting outside his apartment watching Jeremy and Nicky? I suppose Paula's girlfriend could've flown in b/c she was concerned, but she would go to the hospital, not to Ellery's ...................jeez, I've thrown everything in there but the kitchen sink and I'm sure I'm still missing something.....I'll keep thinking!
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OMG!
One of your guesses is correct! You win!
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And here is chapter 108:
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OMG!
One of your guesses is correct! You win!
OMG! You are kidding!!!!! I'm dusting off a shelf for my award! :laugh: Running off to read .....
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OMG again! :laugh: :laugh: I honestly thought that was just a wild long-shot!!! Man oh man, if Jeremy thought he was having a bad day before ......... This is terrific, Louise - thanks!
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OMG! You are kidding!!!!! I'm dusting off a shelf for my award! :laugh: Running off to read .....
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OMG again! :laugh: :laugh: I honestly thought that was just a wild long-shot!!! Man oh man, if Jeremy thought he was having a bad day before ......... This is terrific, Louise - thanks!
exactly.
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okay, after starting back to work and having some interrupted sleep for a couple of nights, I'm back at the computer hard at work on the next chapter!
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and here it is, chapter 109!
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and here it is, chapter 109!
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Ellery, Ellery, Ellery! Yeah, I couldn't imagine that Ellery would have a high level of suggestibility, even with the morphine - there is just too much going on in that brain of his all the time! But they did get a drawing and the tatoo should help.
“Could a fooled me,” Ellery said, winking.
:laugh: He loves to stir the pot, doesn't he? Jeremy may have been better off taking Nicky up on his offer to visit Paula with him, although I'm sure Paula would disagree.
And speaking of Paula - I hope Henry hurries back to the hospital! Thanks, Louise!
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I was relieved to see the chapter turned out as good as it did, when I wrote it it seemed so disjointed to me...
working on the next one now...
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annnnnd... here's chapter 110!
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annnnnd... here's chapter 110!
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Each member had his or her own special act, and claimed a portion of the spotlight from time to time, but it all revolved around and was driven forward by the ringleader, who never really gave up the spotlight in the middle of everything. Not even when seriously ill, in pain, and supposedly, under hypnosis. The only thing that kept Henry from openly showing his annoyance was his acute awareness of just how much pain Ellery must be in, and how hard he was working to keep from showing it to those who were gathering here to show their support for him.
Yep. Excellent assessment, Dr. Caulfield.
And, although he has a lot on his mind, I'm sure he's tucked away the information he's gleaned from the Jeremy/Nicky/Janice incident. I can't deny that Nick is over-reacting to Janice, however, I do think his reaction is heightened somewhat by the fact that he was already feeling wounded by Jeremy being so intent on visiting Paula. Calling Paula a "friend" is stretching it, imo. They aren't really friends - they had one disastrous date that Paula would just as soon forget. So I'm a bit puzzled as to why Jeremy feels this need to see her. Is he still feeling a bit guilty over the date or is he still ambivalent about accepting his sexuality? He's sending mixed messages, imo, and I don't blame Nick for being miffed by it. Fascinating stuff, Louise - thanks!
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. Calling Paula a "friend" is stretching it, imo. They aren't really friends - they had one disastrous date that Paula would just as soon forget. So I'm a bit puzzled as to why Jeremy feels this need to see her. Is he still feeling a bit guilty over the date or is he still ambivalent about accepting his sexuality? He's sending mixed messages, imo, and I don't blame Nick for being miffed by it. Fascinating stuff, Louise - thanks!
There's a lot more to Jeremy than meets the eye... and Nick knows it. He's been with enough men to know that Jeremy hasn't got it all settled in his mind, despite all of his protestations to the contrary!
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More fiasco unfolds!
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More fiasco unfolds!
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Oh, geez, and I thought the next phase of the fiasco would entail the return of Nurse Janice, but I should've known you had more up your sleeve!
Ellery really can be insufferable. In addition to the morphine shot, can someone put some duct tape on his mouth? He's stirring up shit everywhere and antagonizing everyone just because he can!
I'm rolling my eyes along with Pam ::) Katie Ann is trying to make up for sticking her foot in her mouth with the line about Jeremy not acting "straight enough" by flirtiing with Jeremy, and Jeremy is trying to regain his ...... I don't know ..... pride? "manliness"? by making googly eyes back at her. No, he certainly hasn't got it all settled in his mind. Well, he wanted to go to the hospital and I guess he's getting that part of his wish granted. And where did Nick go I wonder? And how and when will he find out about Jeremy? One thing Jeremy and I agree upon is that it is indeed a fuckin mess.
But, as always, you gotta love Joe, who is solid as a rock. Thanks, Louise! I'm not even going to try to guess what happens next.......
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Oh, geez, and I thought the next phase of the fiasco would entail the return of Nurse Janice, but I should've known you had more up your sleeve!
Ellery really can be insufferable. In addition to the morphine shot, can someone put some duct tape on his mouth? He's stirring up shit everywhere and antagonizing everyone just because he can!
I'm rolling my eyes along with Pam ::) Katie Ann is trying to make up for sticking her foot in her mouth with the line about Jeremy not acting "straight enough" by flirtiing with Jeremy, and Jeremy is trying to regain his ...... I don't know ..... pride? "manliness"? by making googly eyes back at her. No, he certainly hasn't got it all settled in his mind. Well, he wanted to go to the hospital and I guess he's getting that part of his wish granted. And where did Nick go I wonder? And how and when will he find out about Jeremy? One thing Jeremy and I agree upon is that it is indeed a fuckin mess.
But, as always, you gotta love Joe, who is solid as a rock. Thanks, Louise! I'm not even going to try to guess what happens next.......
you know how to call em, Marie. And while Joe seems to be the solid rock, he IS after all avoiding the Sunday barbecue at his house! (or so he says.)
Things eventually have to get back to normal at Chez Cantrell, but it's not going to happen right away...!
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And here's chapter 112!
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you know how to call em, Marie. And while Joe seems to be the solid rock, he IS after all avoiding the Sunday barbecue at his house! (or so he says.)
Things eventually have to get back to normal at Chez Cantrell, but it's not going to happen right away...!
Yeah, I wonder what's up with Joe and the Sunday barbecue..... and "normal" for Chez Cantrell is a relative term to say the least! :laugh:
And here's chapter 112!
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You know, it's amazing that I almost feel like one of the characters in that Ellery has the same effect on me that he does on everyone else in town - I want to strangle him at times, but I also find him irresistible, and I hate seeing him in so much pain. I guess I need to remind myself that it's only been a few days since he was hit on the head. But I feel so bad for Colson - I can see why he's so worried about all that morphine and it must be agony for him to feel so helpless while Ellery is suffering so.
Scrap the duct tape for Ellery - he'll be sleeping soundly soon. But can we use it on Katie Ann? Good Lord. Get those girls out of there, Wes! Thanks, Louise!
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Yeah, I wonder what's up with Joe and the Sunday barbecue..... and "normal" for Chez Cantrell is a relative term to say the least! :laugh:
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You know, it's amazing that I almost feel like one of the characters in that Ellery has the same effect on me that he does on everyone else in town - I want to strangle him at times, but I also find him irresistible, and I hate seeing him in so much pain. I guess I need to remind myself that it's only been a few days since he was hit on the head. But I feel so bad for Colson - I can see why he's so worried about all that morphine and it must be agony for him to feel so helpless while Ellery is suffering so.
Scrap the duct tape for Ellery - he'll be sleeping soundly soon. But can we use it on Katie Ann? Good Lord. Get those girls out of there, Wes! Thanks, Louise!
very interesting comment about Ellery... the problem is he gets by on his charm so much that when the charm fails what's left is anger, sarcasm and no patience at all, for anyone.
I'm finally settled in at my new home and working on the next chapter now...!
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and now, back to the next-to-the-busiest place in Tourmaline right now!
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and now, back to the next-to-the-busiest place in Tourmaline right now!
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“So from a gestalt perspective, both Sergeant Dupree and Paula are involved with Chief Cantrell, to the point of participating in his crisis. That is one way to look at it.”
Yes, that certainly is one way to look at it! And I wonder what Henry would think if he knew that Sergeant Dupree and Paula were not only involved with Chief Cantrell - but had also been kinda, sorta involved with each other - albeit briefly and disastrously!
Interesting stuff, Louise! As Joe said - "Thanks for the psychology lesson!”
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I wanted to get a little more deep into Henry's psychology to show that he does know his stuff, and is definitely dedicated to the new revelations of Frederick Perls' "gestalt" approach, which was one of the latest and greatest approaches in psychology and psychiatry, along with "rational-emotive" therapy, which is the dominant form of psychological counseling in America today. Just as a side-note, I took a minor in psychology in college and did a great deal of reading on rational-emotive therapy and Gestalt psychology, and found the "crackpot" ideas of Perls to be refreshing and even comical in some ways, and have always wanted to write about someone trying to apply the teachings of Perls in a clinical setting.
In fact... this gives me a very interesting idea for a follow-up story about Henry trying to establish a practice as a Gestalt psychologist, and to build his clientele, offers discount rates. Just imagine who would be looking to line up for counseling with the good Doctor!
bwah hahahaha I'm chuckling already thinking about it.
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I wanted to get a little more deep into Henry's psychology to show that he does know his stuff, and is definitely dedicated to the new revelations of Frederick Perls' "gestalt" approach, which was one of the latest and greatest approaches in psychology and psychiatry, along with "rational-emotive" therapy, which is the dominant form of psychological counseling in America today. Just as a side-note, I took a minor in psychology in college and did a great deal of reading on rational-emotive therapy and Gestalt psychology, and found the "crackpot" ideas of Perls to be refreshing and even comical in some ways, and have always wanted to write about someone trying to apply the teachings of Perls in a clinical setting.
In fact... this gives me a very interesting idea for a follow-up story about Henry trying to establish a practice as a Gestalt psychologist, and to build his clientele, offers discount rates. Just imagine who would be looking to line up for counseling with the good Doctor!
bwah hahahaha I'm chuckling already thinking about it.
What a great idea! That story would really be a hoot! I can hardly wait to start reading it.
Yes, I'm reading this story, and enjoying it immensely. I think your stream of consciousness unfolding is a great device.
I'm truly addicted to your writing. :)
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What a great idea! That story would really be a hoot! I can hardly wait to start reading it.
Yes, I'm reading this story, and enjoying it immensely. I think your stream of consciousness unfolding is a great device.
I'm truly addicted to your writing. :)
Wow! Fred! Great to see you here, and glad to see you're enjoying it.
And uh-oh! now I'm going to be committed to writing the Henry story! Marie and Fabienne and various and sundry others have been faithfully commenting and it has been keeping me going, and now this story is 135,000 words, and I can hardly believe it! I've moved twice since I started writing it! Or is it three times? Can't keep track. But Ellery can still be found at 92 (or is it 91) Tourmaline Road, and there's always more hijinks happening at that address!
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In fact... this gives me a very interesting idea for a follow-up story about Henry trying to establish a practice as a Gestalt psychologist, and to build his clientele, offers discount rates. Just imagine who would be looking to line up for counseling with the good Doctor!
bwah hahahaha I'm chuckling already thinking about it.
:laugh: You know who I'd like to see "on the couch"? Edna! There is a lot more to Edna than meets the eye, I think! Actually, the possibilities are endless for interesting clients in Tourmaline .....
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:laugh: You know who I'd like to see "on the couch"? Edna! There is a lot more to Edna than meets the eye, I think! Actually, the possibilities are endless for interesting clients in Tourmaline .....
oh no, now a title has popped into my head: "Edna on the couch"!
clearly my job is getting too tedious for me if I start imagining things like this!!
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I'm working on the next chapter... this story just WON'T end! Actually it will... but not today.
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Here is chapter 114!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/317429.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/317429.html)
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Here is chapter 114!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/317429.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/317429.html)
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...the toilet water a the queer elite...
:laugh: Nicky has a way with words! But I was moved by his thoughts, and his insecurity is easy to understand. I don't doubt that Jeremy does have a bit of a "soulful puppy look" about him when Ellery is around. It wasn't so long ago that Jeremy was giving Colson some advice about being more sensitive to Ellery's needs - and if Colson didn't have his hands (and mind) full right now worrying and caring for Ellery maybe he could return the favor and give some advice back to Jeremy because he could use some, I think. The broken record litany is useless so long as he's sending mixed messages and being dismissive of Nick's feelings. I imagine Nick will be running into that emergency room like gangbusters ......
So many interesting threads to this story - I can't decide who I want to see next! Thanks, Louise.
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I imagine Nick will be running into that emergency room like gangbusters ......
So many interesting threads to this story - I can't decide who I want to see next! Thanks, Louise.
you are getting very good at predicting things, Marie! I wonder if that means I'm becoming predictable!
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you are getting very good at predicting things, Marie! I wonder if that means I'm becoming predictable!
Nah, I didn't see Paula's accident or Jeremy's fall coming at all - and I'm still not sure what's going to happen with Paula and Henry. As for Nick running into the emergency room like gangbusters - that's not so much a prediction as just knowing Nicky. Having said that ..... I'm not at all sure what Nick will say to Jeremy - and vice versa - when he does get there!
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Nah, I didn't see Paula's accident or Jeremy's fall coming at all - and I'm still not sure what's going to happen with Paula and Henry. As for Nick running into the emergency room like gangbusters - that's not so much a prediction as just knowing Nicky. Having said that ..... I'm not at all sure what Nick will say to Jeremy - and vice versa - when he does get there!
heheheh, and I can't wait to get home to write it!
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And here we go!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/317616.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/317616.html) Chapter 115
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And here we go!
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You know, I'm really glad Wes is there - not just b/c he was able to quickly dismiss the twins and Janice, but his authoritative presence and love for Ellery has to give Colson some comfort when he has so much weighing on him right now. Not surpirsingly, Colson has a good insight into what's going on with Nick and Jeremy - but, of course, he doesn't know about how Jeremy wanted to visit Paula and how that enters into the equation. Wonder what he'd think about that.
And that nurse certainly had the legs. If he hadn’t been up to his eyeballs with Ellery, and sick at heart for the past five days since the attack, he would have given that one a second look himself.
:laugh: I guess that pesky 20% is bound to pop up from time to time. And Jeremy's 20% has poor Nicky pretty scared right now.
As for Wayne .... sigh. He just never learns. Why in the world he would purposely taunt Colson of all people and now of all times. I have to say that the evil part of me wouldn't mind seeing Simon show up ..... Great stuff, Louise. Thanks!
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The logic of Wayne
Generally speaking, Wayne taunts people to grab attention, when he fears their attention will veer away from him. Regardless of how much their attention is required elsewhere. He prefers being the sickest man in the room, and if someone else is sick or had an accident, trust Wayne to act up! And besides that, he's miffed that his expensive liqueur was confiscated by Colson so he's getting his own back.
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If there's no chapter posted tonight, you know the reason why:
http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg526215.html#msg526215 (http://bettermost.net/forum/index.php/topic,6973.msg526215.html#msg526215)
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and I did it... I might just get to bed by 11 too!!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/317869.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/317869.html) Chapter 116!
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Hope you had fun with your new piano!
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Man oh man, you have that sister bickering down perfectly! :laugh:
Ya know, yer turnin inta momma.
Ouch. But I think Pam's got a point, actually .... we learn by example whether we realize it or not.
So if I recall, it's summer and the girls haven't been able to start college classes yet, right? Because they need SOMETHING TO DO. And it shouldn't involve Ellery, Colson, Jeremy or Nick! Maybe they can help out at the ranch..look for part-time jobs....go the library.....do volunteer work..... basically anything other than what they are doing now! Thanks, Louise!
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Hope you had fun with your new piano!
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Man oh man, you have that sister bickering down perfectly! :laugh:
Ya know, yer turnin inta momma.
Ouch. But I think Pam's got a point, actually .... we learn by example whether we realize it or not.
So if I recall, it's summer and the girls haven't been able to start college classes yet, right? Because they need SOMETHING TO DO. And it shouldn't involve Ellery, Colson, Jeremy or Nick! Maybe they can help out at the ranch..look for part-time jobs....go the library.....do volunteer work..... basically anything other than what they are doing now! Thanks, Louise!
bwah hahahah, can you see Katie Ann going to the library when she's got the answer to all men's dreams in her French dessert cookbook?
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bwah hahahah, can you see Katie Ann going to the library when she's got the answer to all men's dreams in her French dessert cookbook?
:laugh: :laugh: True. When she thinks she and her French cookbook can outdo Edna, you know there's no reasoning with her!
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typing the next chapter in the opus at this hour!
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and here we go
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and here we go
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Joe has a nice light touch with people - he brooks no nonsense - but he can be deceptively amiable about it. Smart guy. Of course, he might need more than a light touch when he gets home and sees Doris ..... :laugh:
I like how it went with Nick and Jeremy. Nothing overly dramatic, but very real and matter of fact. Nick with his “All that runnin you do, gives ya strong muscles” and Jeremy with his “Yer right on time, boy" and squeezing Nick’s hand. The issues between them still remain, of course. But it was clear from both their attitudes that neither one of them is going anywhere.
"...an the man I live with thinks everybody I look at twice wants ta jump inta bed with me.”
Hmm...well, actually Jeremy, Paula, Janice and Katie Ann probably would all like to jump into bed with you (or did at one time). I understand why he thinks he should talk to Ellery about it b/c Colson is a jealous guy, but I don't know.... a part of me thinks that Colson might actually give him better advice than he thinks.
Nick gave him a tender smile. “I’ll drive as slow as ya like, sweet thing.”
Aww....there's his Nicky. :) Thanks, Louise!
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awwww and here I was thinking maybe it was too boring and there should be another knock-down drag-out confrontation!
some confrontations take longer to engage though...!
muah hahahah
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awwww and here I was thinking maybe it was too boring and there should be another knock-down drag-out confrontation!
Nope, that was just right. It wouldn't have felt believable for them to get into a big argument again right then and there.
some confrontations take longer to engage though...!
Oh, yeah, Jeremy and Nick are quite skilled at building up to confontations! And there's always something or someone around to give it a little push! :-\
muah hahahah
Uh oh. This is going to be a doozy, I think! :laugh:
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all very true. I have sometimes noticed that in serial stories, such as fan fiction, there seems to be a tendency to pile on the tragedy, or the drama, or the confrontation, but there are times when the most heat that gets generated between people in normal every day life is the petty arguments and bickering between people who really do care about each other but sometimes don't get along. And that is part of what this story is about, too, the inner psychological life of a community which is for the most part, cohesive, but suffers from incursions from drug dealers, and the regular average people get caught up in petty greed and lies, sickness, accidents and aging... but life goes on anyway.
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Chapter 118!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/318316.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/318316.html)
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Chapter 118!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/318316.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/318316.html)
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“Hey, darlin,” Colson whispered, leaning close to Ellery’s ear. “You in there?”
Awww.... the way he whispers and leans in close, desperate for the real Ellery to emerge.... :(
I like how their conversation veered from prosaic to humorous ("..a cottony ring dusted with Downy Fabric Softener.” :laugh:) to life-changing - very believable and natural. But the time period immediately following a traumatic event, especially when you haven't even physically recovered, is not the time to be making life-changing decisions.
Wes and Edna's presence is a comfort and a relief - different from the sundry others who've crossed their doorway, all of whom, while sincerely concerned for Ellery, have their own little agendas and issues regarding their relationship with him.
What Wes said about Ray Keynes gave me pause. I don't think Nick has any interest in returning to the Carousel, but it's worrying that there are people who think Nick was part of some undercover operation. :-\ I'm guessing, since Ellery wasn't aware of the rumors, that Jeremy isn't either.
“We can’t have ya backslidin on gettin yer weight up a bit.”
No, we can't. That's a vicious cycle with Ellery, and I'm glad Edna's on top of it. Thanks, Louise!
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I guess it was time to put some of the passion and longing in the forefront of their struggle to regain their contact with one another and to get down to what is really important - to both Colson and Ellery. Their relationship to one another. Colson has been through enough rounds of narcotics with Ellery not to take what he says seriously or give it any weight - but it does trouble him when he brings up his fantasy of quitting, whether it be the more fantastical "Tahiti getaway" version or his "hobby ranch" version, it's the same fantasy with different minor details.
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And the next chapter is now posted!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/318648.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/318648.html) Chapter 119
And yes, this story IS coming to an end. Soon!
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This chapter made me consider that perhaps my next story should be called "The Homewrecker of Greenlea County"
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Well, well, well, the lady doth protest too much, methinks!
All it’d take is a nice lookin girl ta start showin Jeremy all sorts of attention with his bad ankle an all, maybe even goin up there an cookin an lookin after em an all – without even bein asked, an lookin all innocent at the same time –“
Man oh man, does he have her number, or what? :laugh:
“That went well,” Colson commented, looking at the phone.
Actually, I think it did - from Colson's end at least. He made his point quite well and didn't get sucked into the melodrama. Now we need to have Jeremy do his part - or, maybe I should say, not to do his part! And leave it to the Chief Deputy, even in his state, to be aware of the exact amount of Glenfiddle left in the bottle! Thanks, Louise!
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Well, well, well, the lady doth protest too much, methinks!
All it’d take is a nice lookin girl ta start showin Jeremy all sorts of attention with his bad ankle an all, maybe even goin up there an cookin an lookin after em an all – without even bein asked, an lookin all innocent at the same time –“
Man oh man, does he have her number, or what? :laugh:
“That went well,” Colson commented, looking at the phone.
Actually, I think it did - from Colson's end at least. He made his point quite well and didn't get sucked into the melodrama. Now we need to have Jeremy do his part - or, maybe I should say, not to do his part! And leave it to the Chief Deputy, even in his state, to be aware of the exact amount of Glenfiddle left in the bottle! Thanks, Louise!
Ellery watches the scotch bottle like a hawk! which doesn't bode well for his addictive tendencies, certainly!
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I'm all caught up with the latest chapters. And boy, oh boy, it never rains but it pours right?
I couldn't believe all the drama that is going on. Someone should bang a few heads together and make people see sense. Jeez, at this rate, Ellery will end up in the hospital again because it's the only place he can get some peace and quiet!
Maybe Wes should be a big, and I mean a very big 'DO NOT DISTURB - SHERIFF'S ORDERS' sign in the front yard.
But....it's so much fun reading! Thanks Louise. :)
I wonder how Paula's doing.
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I'm all caught up with the latest chapters. And boy, oh boy, it never rains but it pours right?
I couldn't believe all the drama that is going on. Someone should bang a few heads together and make people see sense. Jeez, at this rate, Ellery will end up in the hospital again because it's the only place he can get some peace and quiet!
Maybe Wes should be a big, and I mean a very big 'DO NOT DISTURB - SHERIFF'S ORDERS' sign in the front yard.
But....it's so much fun reading! Thanks Louise. :)
I wonder how Paula's doing.
but who is going to do the banging? they're all busy solving crimes!
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And now, chapter 120!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/318906.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/318906.html)
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Oh, crap. :-\ And things were looking so promising with that pool boy and general gofer position getting filled so quickly!
Poor Paula with her painfully bandaged feet and poor Jeremy hobbling on his crutches - most of me feels sorry for both of them. But a part of me is a little irritated with the two of them for the mixed messages they keep putting out there! Poor Henry, too. He's so genuinely concerned for Paula and so sincerely interested in her.
You may have to wait until your feet are healed, but you'll kick yourself if you blow this, Paula! Thanks, Louise!
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Oh, crap. :-\ And things were looking so promising with that pool boy and general gofer position getting filled so quickly!
Poor Paula with her painfully bandaged feet and poor Jeremy hobbling on his crutches - most of me feels sorry for both of them. But a part of me is a little irritated with the two of them for the mixed messages they keep putting out there! Poor Henry, too. He's so genuinely concerned for Paula and so sincerely interested in her.
You may have to wait until your feet are healed, but you'll kick yourself if you blow this, Paula! Thanks, Louise!
nothing is ever easy in my stories except how readily Ellery consumes baked goods and Wayne comes up with a new way to get under Colson's skin. The romances - they're never that easy!
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Chapter 121!
And yes, we are getting close to the end!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/319174.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/319174.html)
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Chapter 121!
And yes, we are getting close to the end!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/319174.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/319174.html)
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Even if they can't prosecute, Wes realizes that none of them will be able to rest until they know "who and "why." And they need rest! Dust off those mug books ....
“I like ta think it’s gotten less wicked, at least as far as people toleratin queers more than they used ta,” Ellery said with determination, and this time, when he looked at Colson, he held his sober gaze. “An I like ta think I’m makin a difference in that direction.”
I think you are, Ellery. And you've got some good people by your side, too. :) Thanks, Louise!
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and now... of course...
I have to contemplate WHAT TO DO NEXT.
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And here is chapter 122: http://louisev.livejournal.com/319306.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/319306.html)
there will be one or two more chapters after this, and I am officially entertaining ideas for the next story.
If anyone HAS ANY IDEAS of course.
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And here is chapter 122: http://louisev.livejournal.com/319306.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/319306.html)
there will be one or two more chapters after this, and I am officially entertaining ideas for the next story.
If anyone HAS ANY IDEAS of course.
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OMG, what an awful dream! I hope the pain eases up so that he can back off of the drugs a bit. I did love watching their cozy, intimate, middle-of-the-night chat, though. And I had to laugh when Colson asked him he'd been dreaming about Dupree again! :laugh: He'll never let Ellery forget that! But what's nice is there wasn't any real heat in the question and it got a chuckle out of Ellery.
IDEAS? Yes, I do have some ideas! Two, in particular ;D
NICK & JEREMY!!!!!!
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OMG, what an awful dream! I hope the pain eases up so that he can back off of the drugs a bit. I did love watching their cozy, intimate, middle-of-the-night chat, though. And I had to laugh when Colson asked him he'd been dreaming about Dupree again! :laugh: He'll never let Ellery forget that! But what's nice is there wasn't any real heat in the question and it got a chuckle out of Ellery.
IDEAS? Yes, I do have some ideas! Two, in particular ;D
NICK & JEREMY!!!!!!
bwah hahahahaha.
Maybe I ought to title the next story "The Color Green"
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wrapping up of loose ends down in the Sheriff's department:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/319569.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/319569.html) Chapter 123
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So far, so, good with loose-end wrapping! I'm glad for Esteban and I like how Wes is always no-nonsense, but doesn't lose sight of the fact that he's dealing with real live human beings and not automatons.
Nice to see Henry sounding chipper this morning - I guess he's feeling that the odds are with him that he won't be needing that per diem. :)
“Sheriff?”
“What, doc?”
“I really didn’t need to know that,” Caulfield replied. “I’ll see you later.”
:laugh: Go Henry! Love that he turned the tables and got a harumph out of Wes! Thanks, Louise!
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So far, so, good with loose-end wrapping! I'm glad for Esteban and I like how Wes is always no-nonsense, but doesn't lose sight of the fact that he's dealing with real live human beings and not automatons.
Nice to see Henry sounding chipper this morning - I guess he's feeling that the odds are with him that he won't be needing that per diem. :)
“Sheriff?”
“What, doc?”
“I really didn’t need to know that,” Caulfield replied. “I’ll see you later.”
:laugh: Go Henry! Love that he turned the tables and got a harumph out of Wes! Thanks, Louise!
Henry knows how to handle the Sheriff, which is a point in his favor in human relations - but this should be no surprise considering his profession. I suppose I made Henry a sort of a good guy without the compulsive overhead of so many of the other characters in town - we needed one truly healthy person to contrast everybody else...!
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Monday morning in Tourmaline!
complete with coffee and frozen peas!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/319895.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/319895.html)
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Monday morning in Tourmaline!
complete with coffee and frozen peas!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/319895.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/319895.html)
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What's so interesting about Nick's jealousy issues is that, even when he's being unfair or is over-reacting, he's not simply making things up out of whole cloth. Jeremy does still have a bit of an Ellery worship thing going on (that's apparent to more people than just Nick) and he is still struggling a bit with his sexuality. So Nick does need to learn to cope, but Jeremy could stand to learn a few things himself. I liked his remark about the "great future journalist of Tourmaline" and his imagination .... :laugh:
And their phone has the same bad timing as Colson and Ellery's! Lots of possibilities for who could be calling - and I can't decide whose call could start the most trouble! Thanks, Louise!
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What's so interesting about Nick's jealousy issues is that, even when he's being unfair or is over-reacting, he's not simply making things up out of whole cloth. Jeremy does still have a bit of an Ellery worship thing going on (that's apparent to more people than just Nick) and he is still struggling a bit with his sexuality. So Nick does need to learn to cope, but Jeremy could stand to learn a few things himself. I liked his remark about the "great future journalist of Tourmaline" and his imagination .... :laugh:
And their phone has the same bad timing as Colson and Ellery's! Lots of possibilities for who could be calling - and I can't decide whose call could start the most trouble! Thanks, Louise!
that is an excellent point about Nick. Sure - Nick has very little reason to complain about Jeremy considering his own wandering eye and his own tendency to put himself put there and thrive on the attention of gay men, hence his "dropping in" at the Red Stallion, and there isn't a man in that place who plays pool for the love of the game - they do it to show off their butts for the spectators in a socially acceptable way -- but you are very right about the fact that Nick isn't arbitrarily jealous. He is reacting to real chinks in Jeremy's armor which could very well represent threats to their fledgling life together.
And now that I'm resting after a day of frantic errands and - gasp! exercising! and *GASP!* cooking! it's time to get to the task of wrap-up.
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and here is chapter 125! answering the question on everyone's mind!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/320096.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/320096.html)
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and here is chapter 125! answering the question on everyone's mind!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/320096.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/320096.html)
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All kinds of good stuff in this chapter! I'm repeating myself, but I need to - your dialogue is just so real. I love how their conversation meanders from pain pills to a wig ( :laugh: good one, Colson!) to skunk piss to Edna's muffins to Ellery's momma vs. the school nurse (it was quite touching to hear Ellery speak of her) to the dangers of microwaves to law school (I actually think Ellery would make an excellent attorney - he can't bear to lose an argument :laugh:) to the bar to Joe and back to muffins! But Colson wins the prize for the best line:
“I was just bein myself,” Ellery said. “Just like I always am.”
“No, you were a whole lot ornerier than you always are,” Colson said. “Trust me on that.”
:laugh: Well, if you can't be honest with your own husband, who can you be honest with? Poor Nicky. Thanks, Louise!
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awww, I'm glad the dialogue went over well.
I am still cogitating on what I should be writing next, because this story had a very good arc to it and I want to keep up the type of momentum that this had. Although there are enough story hooks to write a sequel as it stands right now:
a) Paula's affair with Henry
b) the ongoing saga of Nick and Jeremy
c) Esteban leading the Alamo investigation
d) Joe as the temporary chief deputy
and of course, developments at the Red Stallion as Lauren gets used to being "in charge."
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Hm, I may post the final chapter of this story tonight. Stay tuned.
ETA: okay I didn't quite get to the end! but here is the super bonus chapter 126!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/320440.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/320440.html)
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awww, I'm glad the dialogue went over well.
I am still cogitating on what I should be writing next, because this story had a very good arc to it and I want to keep up the type of momentum that this had. Although there are enough story hooks to write a sequel as it stands right now:
a) Paula's affair with Henry
b) the ongoing saga of Nick and Jeremy
c) Esteban leading the Alamo investigation
d) Joe as the temporary chief deputy
and of course, developments at the Red Stallion as Lauren gets used to being "in charge."
Yes, with all those hooks, this tale does seem to be begging for a sequel!
ETA: okay I didn't quite get to the end! but here is the super bonus chapter 126!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/320440.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/320440.html)
SPOILERS
I really liked seeing Joe in action. Bates may not be perspicacious, but Joe certainly is! He played Bates perfectly, and even if Bates has a clean record, he did turn a blind eye and almost cost a fellow officer his life. I wonder what Allende is doing now - or even if he's still alive. Thanks, Louise!
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Yes, with all those hooks, this tale does seem to be begging for a sequel!
hehehe yeah that's sorta what I've been thinking. That simple whack over the head down at the Alamo Apartments turned into the biggest case since Worrell - actually - bigger.
SPOILERS
I really liked seeing Joe in action. Bates may not be perspicacious, but Joe certainly is! He played Bates perfectly, and even if Bates has a clean record, he did turn a blind eye and almost cost a fellow officer his life. I wonder what Allende is doing now - or even if he's still alive. Thanks, Louise!
Joe Tooey has always been sort of a supporting character, but gradually through the course of this he has taken on more and more of the center stage, by necessity. One thing I am going to need to do, however, is to compile a list of character and family names. I did a lot of research back in the previous books to come up with all of the data that I did, including the other members of the Sheriff's department that have played cameo roles. Now - it's just too much. So I am going to spend a bit of a hiatus period going through names (and I may include places, and then post a "Index to the Greenlea Tales" before getting to the next story. So I won't go totally mad! But it may take a few days to complete it.
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And here's the wrapup!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/320749.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/320749.html) Chapter 127
That is my largest story to date, outside of the original (and now downsized) original series books!
"The Persistence of Memory" weighs in at 155,000 words!!! holy COW!
What comes next is I'm going to take a little time to put together a character index with book and page references, and build my Wikipedia page on the GLBT Bookshelf.
After that, I may be dividng my time between editing and prepping the series as E-books for publication - actually, "Taking Chances" is already to go, and seeing how they test-market on the GLBT Bookshelf from my own imprint.
And then I'll be launching into the sequel to "Persistence of Memory". My tentative title for the sequel to this book is "Agents of the Law"
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And here's the wrapup!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/320749.html (http://louisev.livejournal.com/320749.html) Chapter 127
That is my largest story to date, outside of the original (and now downsized) original series books!
"The Persistence of Memory" weighs in at 155,000 words!!! holy COW!
What comes next is I'm going to take a little time to put together a character index with book and page references, and build my Wikipedia page on the GLBT Bookshelf.
After that, I may be dividng my time between editing and prepping the series as E-books for publication - actually, "Taking Chances" is already to go, and seeing how they test-market on the GLBT Bookshelf from my own imprint.
And then I'll be launching into the sequel to "Persistence of Memory". My tentative title for the sequel to this book is "Agents of the Law"
Holy cow is right - you really got on a roll! Let us know when you have your wiki page up at GLBT Bookshelf and I'll be sure to check it out! "Agents of the Law." I like that a lot - and there are certainly enough of them around!
SPOILERS
Aw, it was sweet watching the both of them being shy and a little awkward - which was perfectly understandable, considering all that's happened. I'm glad they got things "settled" to their satisfaction!
I had to laugh at Paula's descriptions of Jeremy and Ellery! She has Ellery pegged so perfectly with that line about how he only sees women as a source of nourishment! :laugh: It's so true about the twins - they've been showing up with food for as long as I can remember!
It would be funny to see how Nick and Jeremy would've reacted if they could've heard her describing Jeremy! Nick, of course, would've been pleased. But Jeremy? Not so much! And she's still bugged about the diction thing! :laugh: Well, just one more way in which she and Henry make a good match!
Thanks for this terrific tale, Louise! Truly outstanding! And good luck with the character index and with the e-books!
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glad I got the Marie seal of approval!!!
Although the biggest reason for the wrap-up is because the story had wrapped up the loose end of finding out who the man was who drugged Ellery, which closed off the original story arc - and the book was so damned big!
And the focus we ended on which seems to define the next book, at least what is tickling my mind right now, is the relationship between the different people involved in the law there - the psychologist, the lawyers, the prosecutors, the judges, and of course, the police - all agents of the law in a manner of speaking, and those who love them.
I'm working on the index for Taking Chances this afternoon and I'm up about 2/3 of the way through - and 23 characters! No wonder I can't keep them straight in my mind! I wonder how many it will be by the time I get through the original series! THIS is why I need an index!!!