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Brokeback Mountain: Our Community's Common Bond => Brokeback Mountain Fan Fiction & Poetry => Topic started by: el_wing on January 27, 2007, 03:25:53 pm
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New Fic Love is Blind--Chapter 1 by el_wing
Howdy. This is my first time posting here so I hope I get this right. I'll put all the chapters to date on this same thread. Right now I'm up to chapter 11.
My name is el_wing, and I'm a LotR fanfic writer gone bbm. I'm new to this community.
I love to read your comments. Please feel free to respond to the chapters. I like reading critiques and commentary on all stories. Please feel free to do so for mine.
About this fanfic: This is an AU where Ennis learns that Jack is still alive from Lureen. He finds Jack living in a hovel off the banks of the Rio Bravo del Norte. He learns on his way, that Jack was left blind.
You can find the first chapter here: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/482904.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/482904.html)
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Instead of posting each chapter, I'm going to put two- eight here. I hope that's ok with everyone.
Chapter 2:http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/526171.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/526171.html)
Chapter 3:http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/582714.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/582714.html)
Chapter 4: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/649341.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/649341.html)
Chapter 5: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/683642.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/683642.html)
Chapter 6: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/709820.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/709820.html)
Chapter 7: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/797781.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/797781.html#cutid1)
Chapter 8: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/827064.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/827064.html#cutid1)
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Here they are.
Chapter 9: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/843504.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/843504.html#cutid1)
Chapter 10: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/878438.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/878438.html#cutid1)
Chapter 11: http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/917838.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/917838.html#cutid1)
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Thanks, el_wing...
Welcome to Bettermost, glad to have you here! We are a friendly and welcoming bunch, if I do say so myself. LOL
Here's to new readers and good discussion of your story...
Leslie
MaineWriter
Moderator, Fanfic
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Thanks Leslie for the kind welcome. I'm sure I'll have questions for you in the chat room. :)
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I started reading this, I am at chapter 8 - it is very good so far. :)
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I started reading this, I am at chapter 8 - it is very good so far. :)
Thanks for reading. Hope you like the next chapters as much. ;D
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Hi el-wing
I started reading Love is Blind yesterday evening and finished reading chapter 11 today .
I hope you will update soon , cos I love this story .
Thanks .
Nancy
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Mornin'.
I've read this story from the beginning, and have enjoyed it. The idea that Jack didn't die, but either chose to make Ennis and others think he did for various reasons, or was hurt but escaped and needs help, or some other scenario, reaches deep into us. We want a "happy" ending, at least one where Ennis and Jack have a chance to be together and work out the words they threw at each other in anger and frustration at their last meeting.
In particular, I see in yours that Ennis suffered a very signficant emotinal event, belieiving Jack to be dead, which caused him to rethink who he is and should be and wants to be. When he hears that Jack may be alive, he drops everything to find him. Now that he has him, he still is cautious, because of his background and what happened to Jack, but he won't lwave Jack regardless.
Jack has suffered. [Because of the canon, he seems to be the one who suffers physically, leading to more psycholigical suffering.] And he lost faith and hope in Ennis, who didn't come for him. But, once Ennis is there, he clings to him, the rock, the island in his sea of pain and despair.
Love is blind? Good choice for a title. Several layers to it, and you are explouring those. Dr. Reynoldo's house may be a save haven for now, but I don't think it is where they should be forever. They need to go back into their world, and confront those who tried to kill Jack, and confront LD and Lureen, and try to explain things to Bobby and Jack's parents. Then, they both can truly heal, and seek the right place to live their sweet life together.
Thanks for the story. I look forward to your updates.
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Hi el-wing
I started reading Love is Blind yesterday evening and finished reading chapter 11 today .
I hope you will update soon , cos I love this story .
Thanks .
Nancy
Thanks Nancy for commenting and liking the story. I should be updating it again sometime next week. ;D
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I am jonesing for an update here !!!! I LOVE this story.
Karen
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I love this story! Glad to see it posted here :) Welcome to bettermost :-*
I haven't had a chance to read the newest chapter but hope to do so tonight!
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Love is blind? Good choice for a title. Several layers to it, and you are explouring those. Dr. Reynoldo's house may be a save haven for now, but I don't think it is where they should be forever. They need to go back into their world, and confront those who tried to kill Jack, and confront LD and Lureen, and try to explain things to Bobby and Jack's parents. Then, they both can truly heal, and seek the right place to live their sweet life together.
Thanks for the story. I look forward to your updates.
Thank you. Blindness is more than physical in the story--it's the love they share in all its complexity. And yes, I do feel they can not reach it by staying with the kind Doctor. He will be a source of healing, but more importantly a resource for Jack and Ennis to understand the world of the blind.
I've thought a lot about the vet and how he will continue in the story. He's got wisdom and an extra room for now that they can glean from.
Thanks for reading and thoughtful comment and analysis.
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I am jonesing for an update here !!!! I LOVE this story.
Karen
I'll try not to make you have to wait much longer Karen ;)
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Hey, Chapter 12 is now up and ready to be read.
I backed off on the sex/bronco riding metaphor. It started taking over that whole exchange between the two. I went back and changed part of it. I have a tendency to trip over the edge sometimes. Let me know what you thinkā¦
this link also is to other chapters too...
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/935024.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/935024.html)
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El...... I love ya.... and I certainly love this story. Jack telling Ennis about his accident.... guh...... Ennis holding him. That was all so hard to hear. I love the direction you are taking our guys.
Karen
PS..... Sex was hot as hell too !!! ;D
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El...... I love ya.... and I certainly love this story. Jack telling Ennis about his accident.... guh...... Ennis holding him. That was all so hard to hear. I love the direction you are taking our guys.
Karen
PS..... Sex was hot as hell too !!! ;D
Thanks Karen. I had a time writing parts of that--thought it came out well in the end. Right now I'm a bit muddled in the head, trying to think how to write the next chapter. I've started twice now. I was going to write the beginning from the vet's POV then changed my mind and am writing this next chapter from only Ennis' POV.
I always enjoy reading you're comments. I love ya too. :D
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Hi, el_wing,
I'm finally caught up with your story and wanted to drop you a line and thank you. I really like the original premise of your story and am very impressed with how well you've handled the issue of Jack's blindness and Ennis's reaction to it - so touching and so real.
This line in this last chapter really jumped out at me -
"I need you Jack Twist, more 'n you ever'll need me."
How important for a blind Jack to hear those words.
Thanks again - I look forward to hearing Ennis' POV in the next chapter.
Marie
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Hi, el_wing,
I'm finally caught up with your story and wanted to drop you a line and thank you. I really like the original premise of your story and am very impressed with how well you've handled the issue of Jack's blindness and Ennis's reaction to it - so touching and so real.
Thanks so much Marie. Having a close friend who is blind helps with the realism. Working on the next chapter. It's going well now. I was stuck for a few days there...
The part about Ennis needing Jack more will be telling in the coming chapters.
Thanks again for reading and commenting.
Thanks. I love reading comments of all kinds.
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Look at what I found , a new chapter ;D
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/956654.html chapter 13.
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Look at what I found , a new chapter ;D
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/956654.html chapter 13.
Thanks for giving the heads up for me. Oops!
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How'd I miss that heads up? Thanks!
Great, great chapter, el. Jack felt great using those muscles and it was great seeing him do that. So, so important for us humans to feel useful and needed, isn't it?
How much did I love watching Ennis watching Jack . . . wow, that was very nicely done!
And Randolph? Yep, coward is the perfect word. Ennis's love for Jack is so evident in the fact that he was able to control his own temper here because Jack was so understandably out of control - and Jack comes first.
Loved their talk - some real communication taking place here - great to see.
Thanks!
Marie
P.S. I love your avatar - makes me laugh every time I see it!
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Just thought I'd let people know, chapter 14 is posted:
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/973376.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/973376.html)
Happy reading!
el
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I somehow missed chapter 13, too :-\
Oh well, now I just have two chapters to read!! :D
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I somehow missed chapter 13, too :-\
Oh well, now I just have two chapters to read!! :D
well, that makes two of us! I really like this story. Can't wait for the next update. I hope it's soon.
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just checking ;D
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Hey everyone, just wanted to tell you chapter 15 is up!
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/994681.htm (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/994681.htm)
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I forgot to post that 16 is up:
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1024147.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1024147.html#cutid1)
Also, I have another story (Memoirs of a Rodoe Fuck-up). You can find it here:
http://community.livejournal.com/rodeofuckup (http://community.livejournal.com/rodeofuckup)
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Chapter 17 was posted yesterday.
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1059772.html#cutid1
I'm enjoying this story. :) but the next update can't come fast enough... :-\
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Chapter 17 was posted yesterday.
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1059772.html#cutid1
I'm enjoying this story. :) but the next update can't come fast enough... :-\
Thanks for the heads-up, Fabienne - I'm enjoying it, too :) ... off to read...
Marie
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Hey, wanted everyone to know that chapter 18 is up.
Here's the link:http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1095441.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1095441.html#cutid1)
Thanks everyone for reading!
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Chapter 19 is up for anyone reading - if you're not - check it out! You won't be disappointed - great story.
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1128902.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1128902.html#cutid1)
Marie
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I added Chapter 20 this week! http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1162613.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1162613.html)
This one is most definitely NC/17
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I'm way behind the times with this story... I just started reading it from the beginning this weekend. And, I'm jumping in here to say that I think it's really excellent and a very powerful idea for a story.
:)
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I'm glad you bumped this, Amanda. Powerful is a great description - and it's beautifully and skillfully written.
Marie
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:)
It was also recently updated last week.
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Thanks Marie! I am so lax on posting updates. For those of you who wonder if Jack will ever get his sight back, I answer the question in this link:
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/21049.html
I'm glad you bumped this, Amanda. Powerful is a great description - and it's beautifully and skillfully written.
Marie
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Chapter 24 is up!
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1456932.html (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1456932.html)
We meet private detective Wesley C. Linden - who absolutely rocks!
And some very interesting developments regarding L.D. The plot thickens.......
Marie
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Hooray! I love this story, so I'm excited about this news. 8)
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YEE HAW!!!! ;D ;D ;D
I'm wiith you Amanda - just started reading this amazing story over Labor Day weekend! So glad I did!
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Chapter 25 is up!
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1510941.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1510941.html#cutid1)
SLIGHT SPOILERS
And it is a heart-pounder all the way....if you thought it was intense before.....
Top-notch, all the way around.
Marie
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Yay! I just noticed the update too! I'm excited and off to read...
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Another update!
8)
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1538284.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1538284.html#cutid1)
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Another update!
8)
http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1538284.html#cutid1 (http://community.livejournal.com/brokebackslash/1538284.html#cutid1)
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Another excellent chapter - we get a brief (hot and funny!) respite while they are making some plans. Yay for Benito - the boys can always count on him.
Marie
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I like Benito too. I think it's a nice touch that Ennis has found a new father-figure... someone to replace (to a certain degree) his own less-than-stellar father.
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New chapter up! 8)
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23017.html (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23017.html)
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New chapter up! 8)
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23017.html (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23017.html)
Wow - another writer on a roll! Running off to read......
Marie
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A new and very exciting chapter...great finally we are getting some fanfic rolling...
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Update! Chapter 28:
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23338.html (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23338.html)
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Her usual excellence - a nice combination of touching, smexy and funny! I'm enjoying this peaceful interlude....I know it can't last for long!
Marie
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Update today!! 8)
Chapter 29
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23722.html (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/23722.html)
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Hey, everyone... just wanted to give you a heads up that Chapter 30 is now up and ready to read.
A lot of story to read too (extra long chapter).
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/24098.html
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Wow what a great day this has been.
Another update. I have been really missing new chapters. Now I feel renewed...thanks El Wing..
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Thanks for stopping by, el, and for the heads-up. You've been very busy lately - lucky for us!
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Wow - this was a really intense chapter full of some really scary stuff. I'm enjoying watching this mystery unfold and trying to put the pieces together, but poor J&E. They're both digging deep and drawing on their inner strength - and the strength of their love. I'm so proud of Jack and how he's learned to deal with, and use, his blindness. Top-notch storytelling.
Marie
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Thanks for stopping by, el, and for the heads-up. You've been very busy lately - lucky for us!
SPOILERS
Wow - this was a really intense chapter full of some really scary stuff. I'm enjoying watching this mystery unfold and trying to put the pieces together, but poor J&E. They're both digging deep and drawing on their inner strength - and the strength of their love. I'm so proud of Jack and how he's learned to deal with, and use, his blindness. Top-notch storytelling.
Marie
Thanks so much! I've neglected this forum so badly...
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Howdy. This is my first time posting here so I hope I get this right. I'll put all the chapters to date on this same thread. Right now I'm up to chapter 11.
My name is el_wing, and I'm a LotR fanfic writer gone bbm. I'm new to this community.
Hello el_wing,
I read your first chapter to, "Love is Blind". Great stuff, so far. Very imaginative premise! I can't wait to read the rest of the story.
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Hello el_wing,
I read your first chapter to, "Love is Blind". Great stuff, so far. Very imaginative premise! I can't wait to read the rest of the story.
Thanks. It's a WIP but I have a good track record of finishing fics, so have no fear-- it will be completed.
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Chapter 31 is now up!
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/24330.html#cutid1 (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/24330.html#cutid1)
Marie
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I posted chapter 32
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/25292.html
:D
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I posted chapter 32
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/25292.html
:D
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Read it and loved it, as usual. I really liked getting Linden's perspective in this chapter. I have such a soft spot for that goofy guy. Jack made me laugh with his "moaning like a banshee" thoughts. Ha! I totally get that, though - your mind knows one thing, but viscerally we just can't help ourselves sometimes. I can't blame Ennis for being so fidgety, it's all so nerve-wracking. I'm afraid I will be "frettin'" for a while yet. This is scary stuff.
Marie
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Chapter 33 is posted.
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/26220.html
This was the most difficult chapter for me to write.
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Mornin', el.
Well, It was a difficult chapter to read, especially the last one-third. But, a very good read and it moves the story forward. Have to remember your earlier comment, about there being only two or three more of these before the guys can get started on figuring out their sweet life together.
Hope there's a monetary reward for the guys, would help them set up their life. And would serve LD right to have his money pay for it, or at least part of it.
Thanks again.
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The angst and suspense in this chapter are really palpable.
**Spoilers**
I wrote this in my comment to the story... but I'll just repeat that it was really hard to read about Jack and Ennis fighting so violently even though we know they were just pretending to fight in that public setting. Also, to see Ennis collapse when he thinks they've lost Jack is heartbreaking. This update ends with quite a cliff-hanger indeed!
:)
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......about there being only two or three more of these before the guys can get started on figuring out their sweet life together.
Well, that's good to know, cwby....but I don't want to the story to end! LOL! I hope we get to stick around for some of that sweet life.
The angst and suspense in this chapter are really palpable.
**Spoilers**
I wrote this in my comment to the story... but I'll just repeat that it was really hard to read about Jack and Ennis fighting so violently even though we know they were just pretending to fight in that public setting. Also, to see Ennis collapse when he thinks they've lost Jack is heartbreaking. This update ends with quite a cliff-hanger indeed!
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Yeah, I agree, Amanda. I thnk part of the reason it was so hard to read is because I could feel some kernels of truth behind the "acting" - Ennis really was uncomfortable with being outed so publicly and somewhere deep inside Jack was remembering those years of hurt (and, truthfully, he may have even taken a bit of satisfaction in punching Linden - although he knows logically he has no reason to be jealous). And OMG, when Ennis was yelling "No, no, no" it was ripping my heart out. I wonder what's up with Jorge? Great chapter.
Marie
(P.S. Your new picture is great, Amanda - always makes me smile when I see you smiling! :) )
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(P.S. Your new picture is great, Amanda - always makes me smile when I see you smiling! :) )
Awww, that's really sweet Friend. :-* That pic was taken at Rocky Mtn. National Park last May during the BBQ weekend. So, I was having loads of fun.
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Chapter 34 is up!
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/27084.html (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/27084.html)
Oh, man.......All I can say is that this is the kind of chapter that makes me really greedy and selfish - I want el to quit her job and ignore real life just so she can get the next chapter up right away! LOL!
Marie
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Yay! I'm looking forward to reading this when I get home from work!
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Chapter 35 is up and read to read.
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/27886.html
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Chapter 35 is up and read to read.
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/27886.html
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And a great chapter! Some interesting plot twists and a killer cliffhanger....but one sweet little bit of comic relief, too!
Marie
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chapter 36 is up!
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/28497.html
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Whew! What a heart-pounder. Still lots of loose ends to tie up - but the last words of the chapter:
"Ennis, I'm safe."
(and the knowledge that Linden would be fine) are all I need for now. :)
Marie
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Yep, it's a great chapter, action-packed and exciting. :) I'm glad everyone including Nina came through! Though poor Linden has gotten his big share of cuts and bruises, not to mention gunshots, during his companionship with J&E. He'd better take up a quiet life with Jorge instead! ;)
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Hey everyone! Chapter 37 is up!
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/29346.html
Happy reading...
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Thank you el wing for announcing the new chapter here. :)
A chapter to breeeaaaaaaathe at last :laugh:.
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A chapter to breeeaaaaaaathe at last :laugh:.
Yep, and there's some pretty nice heavy breathing, too! LOL!
I really love how Jack's blindness is handled in this story - it's never been gimmicky or over-dramatized. It just is. And even though I obviously don't want him to be blind, I don't pity him. Because we've been shown that he may be blind, but he's also strong, smart and caring - and never sightless when it comes to what really matters.
And now that we can breeeeeaaaathe at last, I'm looking forward to seeing them set the foundation for that sweet life.
Marie
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Chapter 38 is up! It's the final chapter...........of Part One! :D
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/29948.html (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/29948.html)
Here's part of el's author's note:
..I thought long and hard on making this my final chapter. There just no way to end Jack, Ennis and company here. I had said there will be more chapters, and there will. I feel to do the story justice, I can't gloss over their life together in just two or three more chapters. I decided to continue the story, do a part two. I've got plans for the story, and where it will go. I hoping on my vacation to set ground work for it. For now, this part of their lives is complete. Happy dreams Jack and Ennis
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What a wonderful, satisfying end to Part One! Linden and Jorge are so sweet together - and what a beautiful image of the two of them in Jorge's "living" home, Taresa. And the final scene with Lureen, Jack, Ennis and Bobby rang so true.
I'm looking forward to seeing how Jack's blindness and Ennis's own issues play out in the new "real" world they'll be entering!
Marie
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Chapter 1 of the sequel, "None So Blind" is up! :)
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/32020.html?view=602644#t602644 (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/32020.html?view=602644#t602644)
Marie
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Chapter 1 of the sequel, "None So Blind" is up! :)
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/32020.html?view=602644#t602644 (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/32020.html?view=602644#t602644)
Marie
Ooooo! This is exciting! Thanks for the heads-up Marie! :)
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Another surprise! Chapter 2 of "None So Blind is up! :)
http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/40330.html (http://elwings-things.livejournal.com/40330.html)