Some very memorable ones that didn't make it to film:
"littlre darlin"
"That's one of the two things I need right now."
(Jack and Ennis making love by the fire on one of the later tripS, talking about their families as they get physically more and more intimate, "undoing buttons" "put his Cold hand between Ennis's warm thighs," and then finallty they tumble into the dirt, the sparts alighting on their clothes, "not for the first time"): "One thing never changed: the brilliant charge of their infrequent couplings was darkened by the sense of time flying, never enough time, never enough..."
All those incredigble lines in the motel in which Jack and Ennis assure each other that they couldn't be queer, because they have wives and children...but home was never like this.
In other words...I think a little more sex is in order. Keep the romasnce ( little in the story), put the sex back...
MAKE YOUR OWN ACCURTATE SCRIPT FROM "Story to Screenplay" It's fun.