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Offline ifyoucantfixit

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He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« on: February 18, 2007, 01:58:15 am »
                         He


         He was strong,  a sight to behold.
        
         He was honest,  as a knight of old.

         He was brave, and his legends were many.

         He was bright, his talents uncanny.

         He played many sports, and was good at them all.

         His favorite one, was played in the fall.

         He was surrogate father.

         He found it no bother.

         He gave of his love.

         He found none above.

         He searched and he searched, he found no relief.

         He strived forever, but found no belief.

         He is in the place where no pain can reach.

         He no longer hears the psalms that they teach.

         He bought a gun, kept it hidden away.

         He used it one day.

         i miss him...

         





         

      
« Last Edit: February 18, 2007, 02:04:07 am by ifyoucantfixit »



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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #1 on: February 18, 2007, 04:35:40 pm »
Janice

Just beautiful and painful. Thank you

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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #2 on: February 26, 2007, 07:00:21 pm »
Here here.
Cheers Janice.  :)


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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #3 on: February 27, 2007, 06:47:53 am »
Wow Janice what a beautiful yet painful poem. Right to the core. I loved it.
Good judgement comes from experience. Experience comes from bad judgement. -Mark Twain.

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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #4 on: February 27, 2007, 12:24:14 pm »
I feel as if I know him now, I don't of course, but that is the feeling I am left with.

Bless his soul.
"It was only you in my life, and it will always be only you, Jack, I swear."

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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #5 on: March 05, 2007, 08:03:45 pm »


 Thanks guys, i appreciate your comments, i do.. more than you will know.
\                                                                          janice 



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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #6 on: October 01, 2007, 12:27:38 am »
{{{Janice}}}

hard day?

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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #7 on: October 01, 2007, 02:41:03 pm »




            Yes He was in my mind all day.



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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #8 on: December 08, 2007, 12:55:43 pm »


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              The Phantom                   

            The chill is deep
            and the pain is still
            the feeling is unspoken
            you left me a neap
            there is no sure thing
            of which I am aware
            What so offended thee
            Was it that i cared?

            whenst thy nearness burnt
            did i frighten you with phantom?
            Was that the offense I made.
            Will it ere be so,     
            will it never heal?
            Or shall i always have
            this inner pain I feel.
                                                                                 sorry to use your space.
                     



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Re: He, a poem by ifyoucantfixit
« Reply #9 on: December 08, 2007, 11:14:13 pm »

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              The Phantom                   

            The chill is deep
            and the pain is still
            the feeling is unspoken
            you left me a neap
            there is no sure thing
            of which I am aware
            What so offended thee
            Was it that i cared?

            whenst thy nearness burnt
            did i frighten you with phantom?
            Was that the offense I made.
            Will it ere be so,     
            will it never heal?
            Or shall i always have
            this inner pain I feel.
                                                                                 sorry to use your space.
                     

 :( :( :'(