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Midnight Rant of a Beta

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delalluvia:

--- Quote from: latjoreme on June 03, 2006, 12:44:33 am ---Me too, Jeff, and I have found that letting go is the hardest part. (Which is why I never stuck with editing for long -- too much of a control freak, I guess.) It requires a delicate touch. You need to fix things that are outright wrong, but the writer's voice must somehow remain (even if you think that voice is $#$^%&@##).

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Hmmm, Kat gives me hope that perhaps I can make a go out of being an editor.  I'm controlling, but not that much so.  If I think a story is lame-o, I will certainly be happy to let that sucker go.  You can only do so much.

delalluvia:
Ye gods.  The story has completely turned to Swiss cheese.  Plot holes so big you could drive a truck through them:

Rebels attack the negotiating parties by simply walking into the same room - even though the stronghold supposedly has strict security and guards at every hallway entrance.
The rebels set off a bomb - that doesn't move anyone from the room, much less send them screaming and running.
The rebels escape/hide/stop for coffee - no one knows because once they set off a bomb and run down a hall, they are promptly forgotten.
One hero is supposedly undercover, but the two heroes talk openly of their individual missions.
One hero was specifically asked for because of secret fears of one ruler, but it's never explained what those are and the ruler doesn't even show up to say goodbye.
One hero has a mental breakdown and is poisoned - but he's quickly cured by someone who diagnosed his condition just by looking at him and his partner pretty much says, "Well, if you're feeling better we can go now"  With neither showing any desire whatsoever to find out who tried to poison him or why.
The two are on their way home, with no care whatsoever about how the rebels got through their security, what they wanted or why, where they went or if they were captured, who tried to murder one of them and are more concerned about the one hero's mental condition.
One hero is so concerned about his friend's mental health and injuries that he refuses to leave his side as he sleeps...until he decides he'd rather have a bath and clean clothes and decides his friend will be OK without him.

AAAARGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!

This 3rd part is just god-awful.  The really sad part is that she has been working on this story for 3 years.   :-\

serious crayons:
Um, not to say I told you so, Del, but I repeat that this is why I'm not an editor. There are people out there who are good at the job, so it must be possible.

delalluvia:

--- Quote from: latjoreme on June 13, 2006, 01:14:51 am ---Um, not to say I told you so, Del, but I repeat that this is why I'm not an editor. There are people out there who are good at the job, so it must be possible.

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Yes, you did Kat, I must say.  But OMG, what a horrible story this is.  I've almost 10 full pages of corrections/suggestion/questions and I had to stop in the middle of one chapter to just line up all the plot holes.  The last little peculiar behavior made me LOL.

His beloved friend is injured, mentally, emotionally and physically.  He's been attacked, almost murdered, is mentally failing so one hero refuses to leave his bed side, resisting all suggestions he go to his room and rest.  He's fierce, resisting, loyal..until, hey, a bath and clean clothes sound good.  See ya bud, you'll be OK.  :laugh:

Jeff Wrangler:
Del, let me elaborate on something I said earlier: You get through this one and a) keep your sanity and b) don't murder the author, you're a candidate for secular sainthood.

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