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Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
MaineWriter:
--- Quote from: mariez on January 20, 2007, 01:19:47 pm ---
Thanks for all the quotes, Leslie!
Marie
--- End quote ---
My pleasure, always. And there will be more tomorrow.
L
MaineWriter:
Hello re-readers...today, Chapters 46-50
http://louisev.livejournal.com/62433.html
“I don’t need powder, Mr. Worrell,” Mel said, voice dropping to an intimate, deadly softness. “I have eyewitnesses of unimpeachable character. You have until four to inform your defense counsel of your desire to enter a plea agreement in exchange for detailed knowledge of the homicides we spoke about.”
Worrell’s glance shot daggers at Ellery. “You got to em, eh? Your kind always does. Just a little too smart, an a little too pretty. You think yer protected, an you ain’t. Cause what I know... what I know is gonna wipe that pretty smile off yer faggot face, Ellery Cantrell.”
Ellery swallowed, his eyes unwavering as he looked into the hate-filled eyes of Justin Worrell. “You’re wasting time,” he said, voice soft, sandpaper-dry.
“I got all the time in the world,” Worrell snapped back. “But you don’t, boy.”
L
MaineWriter:
Chapter 47, I love this exchange:
“He was gonna try. That may be why he tried ta kill himself, because he found out that wasn’t gonna happen. Mel Ruskin told em so. Listen Ennis I know I never mentioned this but I was thinking a havin Dupree over an maybe we could grill somethin out on the patio an visit. You up for that at all?”
“Sure. I like Dupree.”
Ellery lowered his voice. “Well I didn’t want ta interrupt any early evenin plans Mr. Coyote might a had, that’s all.”
Ennis smiled, reddening slightly, aware that Edna was hovering in the kitchen doorway. “Always time later darlin.”
“Okay, well I’ll call again if we’re gonna be runnin late after this Worrell thing, who knows, maybe Mel will want ta come talk ta us again.”
“Okay.”
“I love ya Ennis.”
“Yeah, I never get sick a hearin that. I love ya too, darlin. See ya soon.”
He set the phone down, head bowed, and Edna bustled into the room. She obviously had been listening to at least the end of the discussion. She came right at Ennis and threw her arms around him. He hugged her, blinking and confused. “Hey,” he said, patting her quivering shoulder.
“Oh Ennis, you don’t know how relieved an happy I am that Ellery finally found a good, decent man ta love em,” she said, her voice cracking with emotion. She pulled back, a tear in her eyes, and she gazed up at him, face tight with emotion. “We care so much about em an he has been so lonely, I can’t tell ya.”
“Jesus Edna…” Ennis said, running out of things to say before he had completed a sentence.
“You don’t have ta say nothin, Ennis. He is like our only boy, an havin you has put a smile on his face at last, an that warms our hearts, me an Wes both. God bless ya, Ennis.” She pulled him close once more, betraying a strength Ennis didn’t know she had in her, and his own eyes began to sting.
“Th-thank you,” he managed finally. “I do love em.”
“I know you do sweetie,” she said, and gave Ennis a paper-dry kiss on the cheek, causing him to blush deeply.
L
MaineWriter:
Chapter 48, more interesting Dupree conversations...
"He can't pull his own dick, not in this state," Ellery said, appearing in a snug tank top and his cutoff jeans, leaning over to smell the steak. "Geesh Ennis that smells wonderful, what'd you put on em?"
"A little a this, a little a that, I went an got some barbecue spices an sauce at the Safeway since you said you might be late comin home, made a fruit salad an a vegetable salad too an these vegetable skewers." Ennis smiled modestly.
"Yer spoilin me boy," Ellery said, bending over slightly and kissing the nape of his neck.
"Ellery, yer makin Dupree uncomfortable." Ennis gulped, looked shyly at the Army vet sitting comfortably at the table, cigarette in his lips.
"Me? Hell no, you ferget I see that four hours a night four nights a week at the Stallion, Ennis. An a whole lot more I could do without seein. Nothin worse than watchin that little asshole Leon grindin his ass inta Lang's crotch to the tune a 'Stand by Yer Man.' Every time I hear Loretta Lynne come on that juke box I pull my hat over my eyes."
Ellery laughed. "See?"
"Besides, you two are ... well yer cute. Like a real couple."
Ennis stared at him as though he had pulled a gun. "Cute?"
"Yeah, kissin in the park cute. It looks... well, normal if ya want my view."
Ellery gave Ennis his distance and sat down. "Right nice a you ta say that Dupree. I hope ya ain't sayin it ta get raise in pay cause I don't control the paychecks, Wes does."
It was Dupree's turn to laugh. "Hadn't thought a that. Ya do control the pay at the Stallion though. What a ya say I take a nice picture a you two arm in arm an whenever someone comes up ta me an says 'hey can ya get me a date with yer cowboy friend?' I can show em the picture an say 'no dice, friend.'
"No," Ennis said flatly. "Don't be takin no pictures a me an Ellery."
"I wouldn't mind, Ennis..." Ellery said, plucking his lip.
"I mind," he said, back stiff.
"Didn't mean nothin by it," Dupree said softly.
"It's okay Dupree."
"Sorry," Ennis mumbled. "Ain't ready fer... for that kinda ... thing yet."
"Do a lot a guys ask ya that, Dupree?"
He nodded. "Matter a fact. Ennis is the nicest piece a eye candy there, except for that skinny blond who goes there an dances up a storm an makes their eyes roll in their head. Blond men are the popular ones, just like with women."
"Well shit," Ennis said. "Time ta dye my hair grey or summat."
"Don't you fuckin dare," Ellery said. "You got beautiful hair an you better not be hidin it. Ain't a hat enough cover for ya?"
L
mariez:
Good afternoon - I've been happily anticipating this section of "A Second Chance" - Chapters 48 and 49 are two favorites! We get E&E and Jeremy!
At the start of Chapter 48:
Jeremy Dupree and Ellery arrived home a little after six, a telltale smoke rising from the patio, and he parked the El Camino in the carport. Dinner was well underway. Dupree led the way up the walkway and onto the patio, and Ennis looked up from hovering over three large steaks sizzling alongside some vegetable skewers.
"Hey, Dupree, good ta see ya."
"Ennis that all smells great. Thank you so much fer invitin me over. I had no idea you trained horses AND were a grill chef." Ellery followed behind, fanning himself with his hat.
"Ennis Del Mar is a lot a things, Dupree, and as Ennis straightened up, setting down his spatula, Ellery came over and slipped an arm around him, brushing his lips against Ennis's cheek. "Aint ya?"
Ennis stiffened slightly, did not pull away. "Nice ta see ya darlin," he murmured, the red blotches on his cheeks might have been a reaction to the heat. Dupree was busy looking at the water feeder and a collection of small variously-colored birds, and Ennis glanced up. "You wouldn't believe it, earlier, there was a parakeet peckin at the suet."
Ellery opened the patio door and stepped in, loosening his tie. "I'm gonna change if ya don't mind, Dupree." Dupree had changed into his usual olive drab pants, a camouflage tank top, and wore his soft hat in matching cammo
Love the description of Dupree's outfit (another bit of minutia!), especially because I've got hats on my mind now because of J&N - and, of course, I love picturing Jeremy in a camouflage tank top! :)
Some random thoughts on little things that caught my interest - the mention of Dupree with the cigarette made me remember that Jeremy decided to quit smoking when Ellery did! And now that I think about it - we haven't seen Nick with a cigarette lately - I think Jeremy is influencing him in lots of good ways!
Would love to see E&E entertain some more when they get the chance - Ennis really seemed to enjoy it! -
Also, the discussion about the picture has me wondering if E&E will ever take a picture together (purposely) - we know the photographer at Joe's son's wedding took one.
Thanks - Marie
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