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Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
MaineWriter:
Hey Marie, thanks for that quote. Chapter 48 is full of good stuff. Here's another little tidbit:
"No shit. Well as men go, he is the only rival ta Ennis, lookswise. The rest of em ... well..." he chuckled. "Gene said ta me most a these guys he wouldn't be able to do it with em unless they had a bag over their heads."
Ennis let out an uncomfortable laugh. "That's fer sure."
Ellery raised both eyebrows. "Ennis! You been lookin at guys down at the Stallion when you should be ... lookin at what their hands are doin?"
"Well?" Ennis shrugged. "They're right there, can't help but notice some of em are butt ugly."
"That's fer sure, an I ain't even queer," Dupree chimed in.
"Okay steaks are ready an we can talk about somethin interestin for a change." Ennis lifted one chunk of meat at a time onto a platter and brought it to the table, juice oozing from them. "They's all medium so if you want yers more cooked I'll put it back on."
Dupree shook his head. "Don't take my steak away now, Ennis, or I'll bite yer hand." Ennis went back for the skewers, loading them onto another platter, and Ellery opened the beers that were setting out on the table.
Ennis took a seat between the two men. "Eat up, boys. Oh, forgot the salads." He leapt back up again and disappeared in the kitchen.
Dupree leaned over slightly, reaching for a steak knife. "Hope I didn't make em feel uncomfortable, Chief."
"He's got ta deal with it sooner or later," Ellery said, shrugging.
"What a I got ta deal with?" Ennis said, frowning slightly as he came out of the kitchen, holding a large bowl, one containing fruit salad, the other, a green salad with tomatoes and bright chunks of pepper. He had gone all out, serving a full course meal with fruits, vegetables and meat, sitting down again and reaching for the salad bowl.
"Bein queer, Ennis, an people knowin about it."
"Well I'm comin along. All well an good fer you city boys ta go marchin in parades, but back where I come from a boy ends up dead for bein one a those kind."
"Yeah," Dupree said. In school they teach us about hate crimes. But a lot a people don't think assaultin queers is really a hate crime, an that has got ta change."
"Damn right it's got ta change."
L
mariez:
Hey, Leslie - yep, this whole section is full of good stuff:
The beginning of Chapter 49 is interesting in so many ways:
"I ain't happy with you," Ennis said, rattling the dishes unnecessarily as he stacked them in the sink for rinsing. Ellery was wiping down the patio table with a wet cloth, and looked up.
"Okay what'd I do, snuggle ya too much in front a Dupree?"
"Among other things. Ya treat me like I'm a cripple learnin ta walk. An that just ain't so. I'm just gettin used ta things in my own way an you seem determined ta make it some kind a trial by fire."
"It's make me feel a whole lot better if ya didn't freeze like a statue when I gave ya a welcome kiss on the cheek in front of a trusted colleague in my own home, Ennis."
"I'm sorry but that is the way I am... ya knew that when I met ya an I ain't changed a whole lot. If ya don't like it then ya shoulda hooked up with one a the boys who swishes his hips an writes his number on the bathroom wall down at yer bar, there's enough of em."
Ellery came and loomed in the patio doorway, staring at him. "You can't be serious, Ennis."
"I just wish you'd leave me be about it is all!"
"Hard ta do, Ennis. I only have one way a doin things. I try not ta rub it in ta people that I'm queer but if it ain't at my office an it ain't gonna get me a bullet in the head then I ain't gonna avoid it or lie with people. But you... yer a touchy feely guy an a demon in the sack, but the minute somebody else walks in the room it's like, the three faces a Eve. So ya got ta cut me a little slack that I ain't used ta adjustin all the time to the two sides a you. Let those be, you did all the cookin, I do the dishes, remember?"
SPOILER FOR "A SMALL CIRCLE OF FRIENDS
Interesting parallel with what is going on in the latest chapter of "A Small Circle of Friends" with Jeremy frowning upon a kiss on the cheek from Nick in front of Lauren. That Louise is a clever one! :)
Thanks - Marie
MaineWriter:
Ah, Marie...
more from 49:
"An you ain't dressed decent for company, Ellery."
"You afraid Dupree was gonna get all hard for me?"
"I think he likes ta watch queer boys, if ya want the whole truth."
Ellery grinned. "Ya know I was thinkin the same thing. He's curious. That's why he was watchin when I gave ya a kiss. It don't disgust him like it does the queer bashin types."
"Yeah well he might not want ta... you know, get it on with a guy but he sure likes watchin an thinkin about it."
"I'll have ta ask em. You suppose he got his eye on somebody special?"
Ennis nodded. "But I ain't gonna say... cause you'll say somethin at work."
"Come on Ennis, I won't say a word."
"Jim, the new bouncer who don't bounce worth a damn. He's always hangin around an Dupree just lets em talk em up while he's doin his oh look at me ain't I just the cock a the walk. Notice he didn't say nothin about how good lookin Jim is... just me an Gene."
"Interesting psychological view, my dear," Ellery said, plucking at his lip. "You may have a point. Now get away from that sink before I push ya away from it. An if I do that you might get all fancy an we could have another one a them arguments that ends in sex."
MaineWriter:
And more! Still 49...
"Ya know, I really do love ya a lot Ennis, that's why I can't take my hands off a ya when I see ya."
"I know, Ellery. Ya know why Edna came up an gave me a hug?"
"Nope."
"Cause she heard me call ya darlin on the phone."
"Yep, an holdin hands lookin out in the sunset. She just thinks it is so sweet someone besides her calls me darlin."
"She didn't hear me say it was the Marlboro man callin an I'd just as soon she didn't learn all those special names."
"Ya mean like Mr. Coyote? An Mr. Please an Thank you?"
"Yeah, them."
"Let me see, I need a new name fer when you freeze up when I come up behind ya an kiss ya in public. Maybe Mr. Freeze."
"Ain't he some kind a Superman villain or somethin?" Ennis frowned, setting down the cigar.
"Dunno, never followed comics."
"I think he is. Now ya gonna call me Mr. Freeze, huh?"
"Only when yer Mr. Freeze."
"I like Mr. Coyote better," Ennis said, standing up. "Or some a them other bedroom names..." he dropped his voice, moving closer.
"I ain't done with the dishes..." Ellery said, holding up a hand.
"Well I am." And Ennis grabbed him around the waist, pulling him roughly away from the sink, heedless of his soapy, wet hands. "C'mere."
and after this, we get into some seriously hawt stuff...LOL...go re-read, friends, see what you are missing.
L
MaineWriter:
Ha, ha, from chapter 50, the anticipation of Alma, Jr.'s visit is more than Ennis can cope with!
“It’s all right Ennis,all right…” Ellery whispered softly,sinking to the bed in stages under his weight, twisting slightly as he looked up into his eyes, but they were half-mast, the whites showing, and Ellery struggled against dead weight.
“Ennis?” He grabbed the side of the mattress and got out from under him, turning Ennis gently onto his back. He was out cold. Ellery patted his face, listened to his breathing, kissed his cheek, and gradually he came back and stirred.
“Huh…” his lashes fluttered open.
“I thought I was the one who was supposed ta pass out,” Ellery smirked.
“Yeah,” Ennis sat up. “I think I got carried away. Yer shoulder okay?”
“Aside from the usual coyote bite, sure.”
“I think I came.”
“I think we both did.”
L
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