I´m back with a couple of questions I´m hoping you can help me with. I´m writing a short piece in English and here are a couple of sentences I´m not happy with
Sitting barefoot in an orange plastic chair behind his suburban home at ten thirty at night, Leaphorn felt relaxed for the first time in a long while.
He has a patio in the backyard where he is sitting. Can I use the word "behind" here or does it sound strange?
Chee lifted his gaze towards the sky, Leaphorn did the same and both sets of eyes followed the white smoke as it floated upwards and for a moment took the shape of the Water sprinkler with his arms stretched out holding the bowl of rain water that The Old Ones so often had prayed for, before dissolving in the night air.
I`m just not sure whether this sentence reads well or not?(the Water Sprinkler is a character in the old Navajo religion)