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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #80 on: March 25, 2009, 12:59:43 pm »

SPOILERISH
 However, you wouldn't want to spoil a plot point for me now would you Marie?

Ha!  I knew the eye color talk wasn't thrown in there for nothin'!  You've always got something up your sleeve, Louise!  And in this story, I'd say both sleeves at least!  :laugh:
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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #81 on: March 25, 2009, 01:58:45 pm »
Ha!  I knew the eye color talk wasn't thrown in there for nothin'!  You've always got something up your sleeve, Louise!  And in this story, I'd say both sleeves at least!  :laugh:

well you know, I start out writing a stream-of-consciousness deep psychological insight story and end up writing another mystery and detective thing.  I guess I just can't help it!
“Mr. Coyote always gets me good, boy,”  Ellery said, winking.  “Almost forgot what life was like before I got me my own personal coyote.”


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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #82 on: March 25, 2009, 06:46:44 pm »
okay for all you people who don't want the plot spoiled for you ahead of time!!!

here's chapter 23!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/293923.html
“Mr. Coyote always gets me good, boy,”  Ellery said, winking.  “Almost forgot what life was like before I got me my own personal coyote.”


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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #83 on: March 25, 2009, 08:49:03 pm »
okay for all you people who don't want the plot spoiled for you ahead of time!!!

here's chapter 23!

http://louisev.livejournal.com/293923.html


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And I thought my heart was breaking for Colson before.   :'(  Oh, dear.  I can't even imagine what that would be like.  And what a god-awful frightening feeling for Ellery to have as well.  To have a chunk of your life just disappear on you.  I figured Ellery had gone into a coma, but I know next to nothing about this kind of stuff, and now it appears that his short-term memory is suffering along with his amnesia b/c Colson's been coming into his room for a week and it looks like they're going through some kind of Groundhog Day.   :-\   

I don't have to tell you that you've got us on the edge of our seats here, Louise!  Terrific storytelling. 
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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #84 on: March 25, 2009, 09:06:43 pm »

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And I thought my heart was breaking for Colson before.   :'(  Oh, dear.  I can't even imagine what that would be like.  And what a god-awful frightening feeling for Ellery to have as well.  To have a chunk of your life just disappear on you.  I figured Ellery had gone into a coma, but I know next to nothing about this kind of stuff, and now it appears that his short-term memory is suffering along with his amnesia b/c Colson's been coming into his room for a week and it looks like they're going through some kind of Groundhog Day.   :-\   

I don't have to tell you that you've got us on the edge of our seats here, Louise!  Terrific storytelling. 

well I sure hope I gave everybody enough buildup!!  To think I was originally going to start the story HERE... no no that wouldn't do at all.  It would just be too much!
“Mr. Coyote always gets me good, boy,”  Ellery said, winking.  “Almost forgot what life was like before I got me my own personal coyote.”


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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #85 on: March 25, 2009, 10:12:35 pm »
well I sure hope I gave everybody enough buildup!!  To think I was originally going to start the story HERE... no no that wouldn't do at all.  It would just be too much!


Strangely enough I would have liked that as a starting point - as long as you immediately went back and explained everything.  I just started reading this story a couple of days ago and as usual I'm completely sucked in.  Great story, Louise!  You've got me completely hooked.

Carol

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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #86 on: March 25, 2009, 10:43:28 pm »

Strangely enough I would have liked that as a starting point - as long as you immediately went back and explained everything.  I just started reading this story a couple of days ago and as usual I'm completely sucked in.  Great story, Louise!  You've got me completely hooked.

Carol

I thought about it and considered the pros and cons before I decided to do it this way.  Anyway... onward and upward!

Chapter 24

http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html

“Mr. Coyote always gets me good, boy,”  Ellery said, winking.  “Almost forgot what life was like before I got me my own personal coyote.”


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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #87 on: March 26, 2009, 02:16:42 am »
I thought about it and considered the pros and cons before I decided to do it this way.  Anyway... onward and upward!

Chapter 24

http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html




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Gosh, Louise, I'm taking deep breaths here.

I'm ready for some positive news about Ellery now.  :-\ But, like Colson, I guess I'm just going to have to be patient.

Like Marie said, fantastic storytelling.  :)
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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #88 on: March 26, 2009, 10:46:56 am »
I thought about it and considered the pros and cons before I decided to do it this way.  Anyway... onward and upward!

Chapter 24

http://louisev.livejournal.com/294399.html



Now I'm completely lost.  Was chap 23 a figment of Ellery's coma? 

Carol

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Re: The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
« Reply #89 on: March 26, 2009, 11:33:23 am »

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Gosh, Louise, I'm taking deep breaths here.

I'm ready for some positive news about Ellery now.  :-\ But, like Colson, I guess I'm just going to have to be patient.

Like Marie said, fantastic storytelling.  :)

I guess all I can do is keep on writing and all you readers just have ta hold on tight!
“Mr. Coyote always gets me good, boy,”  Ellery said, winking.  “Almost forgot what life was like before I got me my own personal coyote.”