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louisev:
 
and here is chapter 1 of my new story...

http://louisev.livejournal.com/256824.html

frantic65:
yay!! a leap year treat!!

I have a feeling the Grey Girls are gonna give their Daddy some gray hairs before this story is done!!  ;) (And

Daddy's girls are gonna get in Ellery's hair because now that they have made the move to Tourmaline they are

going to be even more jealous of the time & attention Colson gives him. But, I think they will have met their

match in Chief cock of the walk!! I love that nickname BTW!)

Hey, are there really enough straight cops in Tourmaline for two girls?? lol!!

Thanks for the quick start to a great new tale Louise!!

Fran

mariez:
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The dialogue between the twins was so natural and true and it made me feel sad for them.  They are still being affected by their parents' history, and the repercussions on their mother's life continues in her second marriage -  and that, as well as their father's marriage, can't help but skew their view of relationships and romantic love - in a good and a bad way.  And it's understandable that they feel a competition with Ellery for their father's attention and affection - something they feel they've been deprived of.

This is sure to be an eye-opening experience for Colson, too.  He lived with Katie Ann while she was a married woman - and seeing his girls "on the prowl" so to speak may give him a better understanding of what their mother had to deal with during their teen-age years.  And, again, I like how the stories are dovetailing - just recently in "LWH" Colson told Katie Ann that Ellery's never been a daddy and he naturally wouldn't have the same patience and understanding that Colson was bound to have.  So very true - and it will interesting to see how Ellery rises to the challenge in his role as step-father. 

Thanks,
Marie

belbbmfan:

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The dialogue between the twins was so natural and true and it made me feel sad for them.  They are still being affected by their parents' history, and the repercussions on their mother's life continues in her second marriage -  and that, as well as their father's marriage, can't help but skew their view of relationships and romantic love - in a good and a bad way. 

Thanks,
Marie

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I thought it was odd for Pam to want to go find some exciting men, given what has just happened to her.  :-\ Your comment makes a lot of sense Marie. 

We're off to a great start Louise. I'm sure this is going to be yet another story I'm going to enjoy very much.

Thank you.  :)

louisev:
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Well, if I may point out that Pam is the one so desperate to stay in Tourmaline... and she is, in her own subtle way, trying to give Katie Ann reasons to stay, because she knows Katie is interested in finding a new man.

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