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In the Land of the Lotus Eaters: New Greenlea Tale
louisev:
Whoops - thanks for catching that mistake, Marie!
I have been toying with the idea of getting into the next case with our new psychologist and his investigation of the Sevigny case and call it "The Lawman" - but that's just a fancy of a Saturday afternoon. I think I need more plot than that!
louisev:
and here is chapter 41
http://louisev.livejournal.com/286243.html
mariez:
--- Quote from: louisev on February 08, 2009, 05:37:49 pm ---and here is chapter 41
http://louisev.livejournal.com/286243.html
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SPOILERS
To Ellery’s surprise, Colson let out a choked noise that sounded like a sob, and his shoulders trembled beneath Ellery’s chest.
Like Ellery, I wasn't expecting that and I think that's what made it even more moving and powerful. That Colson was honest about his feelings and didn't keep them hidden says so much about his growth. That was beautifully written, Louise! Thank you.
Marie
P.S. I hope Colson kicks the cigarettes again once they get back home! :-\
louisev:
--- Quote from: mariez on February 08, 2009, 07:14:30 pm ---
SPOILERS
To Ellery’s surprise, Colson let out a choked noise that sounded like a sob, and his shoulders trembled beneath Ellery’s chest.
Like Ellery, I wasn't expecting that and I think that's what made it even more moving and powerful. That Colson was honest about his feelings and didn't keep them hidden says so much about his growth. That was beautifully written, Louise! Thank you.
Marie
P.S. I hope Colson kicks the cigarettes again once they get back home! :-\
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You know, one of the reasons why I am keeping to this gradual schedule is that it gives me time to consider the organic growth of the relationship between Ellery and Colson. Unlike the action-packed plots of many of the earlier stories, this story is about Ellery and Colson themselves, when they actually have time to relate to one another every day, for several hours a day, and it has a different texture to it. With the time to think about each scene between writing them, I am getting a lot more of the deeper texture of their relationship that I would not be able to get if I were writing a chapter a day after work. In that respect it is much "easier" to write action that it is to write the psychological relationship between them, and at this point, Colson is just unwinding enough to start experiencing new things and telling Ellery how he feels. Even though the phone does still ring, it is not the same time of pressure cooker they had been living in for so many months in Tourmaline.
As for the cigarettes... time will tell!
louisev:
needless to say, if you've been following my blog, old man Winter and his cousin Influenza came to visit (again) and I am just now starting to get some semblance of a night's sleep again after several days. I haven't had the concentration or the energy to do any writing at all - mostly the concentration, since I'm downing narcotic cough syrup that makes me very fuzzy. I am hoping I can resume the story - well, by this next weekend!
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