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The Persistence of Memory: New Greenlea Tale
louisev:
all very true. I have sometimes noticed that in serial stories, such as fan fiction, there seems to be a tendency to pile on the tragedy, or the drama, or the confrontation, but there are times when the most heat that gets generated between people in normal every day life is the petty arguments and bickering between people who really do care about each other but sometimes don't get along. And that is part of what this story is about, too, the inner psychological life of a community which is for the most part, cohesive, but suffers from incursions from drug dealers, and the regular average people get caught up in petty greed and lies, sickness, accidents and aging... but life goes on anyway.
louisev:
Chapter 118!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/318316.html
mariez:
--- Quote from: louisev on July 11, 2009, 06:16:22 pm ---Chapter 118!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/318316.html
--- End quote ---
SPOILERS
“Hey, darlin,” Colson whispered, leaning close to Ellery’s ear. “You in there?”
Awww.... the way he whispers and leans in close, desperate for the real Ellery to emerge.... :(
I like how their conversation veered from prosaic to humorous ("..a cottony ring dusted with Downy Fabric Softener.” :laugh:) to life-changing - very believable and natural. But the time period immediately following a traumatic event, especially when you haven't even physically recovered, is not the time to be making life-changing decisions.
Wes and Edna's presence is a comfort and a relief - different from the sundry others who've crossed their doorway, all of whom, while sincerely concerned for Ellery, have their own little agendas and issues regarding their relationship with him.
What Wes said about Ray Keynes gave me pause. I don't think Nick has any interest in returning to the Carousel, but it's worrying that there are people who think Nick was part of some undercover operation. :-\ I'm guessing, since Ellery wasn't aware of the rumors, that Jeremy isn't either.
“We can’t have ya backslidin on gettin yer weight up a bit.”
No, we can't. That's a vicious cycle with Ellery, and I'm glad Edna's on top of it. Thanks, Louise!
louisev:
spoilerish
I guess it was time to put some of the passion and longing in the forefront of their struggle to regain their contact with one another and to get down to what is really important - to both Colson and Ellery. Their relationship to one another. Colson has been through enough rounds of narcotics with Ellery not to take what he says seriously or give it any weight - but it does trouble him when he brings up his fantasy of quitting, whether it be the more fantastical "Tahiti getaway" version or his "hobby ranch" version, it's the same fantasy with different minor details.
louisev:
And the next chapter is now posted!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/318648.html Chapter 119
And yes, this story IS coming to an end. Soon!
spoiler
This chapter made me consider that perhaps my next story should be called "The Homewrecker of Greenlea County"
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