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Gift of Exile - first fanfic
louisev:
oh great! I thought you had snuck off with the ending!
I give about one or two story recs per lifetime, as many people know... and this is one of them!
Marge_Innavera:
--- Quote ---oh great! I thought you had snuck off with the ending!
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Mea culpa. Choi oi!
I tried a disastrous experiment with posting just Chapter 16 on bbmslash and Wranglers with links to the chapters before. Never again! Some of the people who commented said they'd almost missed the two preceding chapters and a few thought Chapter 16 was the end of the story!
At least they let me know - I went back and posted the other two to the communities, better late than never. Glad you're still reading, Louise, and thanks for the rec. :D
mvansand76:
I think I need to read this from the beginning again, because I can't seem to get back into it without doing that. But, I love your writing Marge and that chapter with Jack and Ennis' wedding night moved me to tears, so it's worth reading again!
one_of_one:
I read quite a substantial part of this to start with because I arrived rather late to the party and now I'm reading a couple of chapters at a time feel i'm missing out on a lot because I forget things and reading sporadically just doesn't have the same sense of satisfaction as reading all in one go had. I just saw your post, Mel, and I feel that way with a lot of fics. When I reread The Belwether recently it was amazing how much better it was being able to go straight through.
So I'm going to set aside some time this weekend to reread Gift of Exile. I really love the classy way Marcia writes this moving on scenario...from right at the start when Ennis met David and the fact that he was gay was out in the open, nothing to be wondered about, through the scene where they brushed hands and Ennis had an urge to slide his hand up David's shirt, right through to their ongoing conversations on the phone which have now left Ennis in the position of having to phone David instead of David calling him.
I think the whole thing is so good and believable. Even the metaphysical aspects with Jack. I liked them having that time together on the mountain, that it gave Ennis the reassurance that whatever happened in the future there was no necessity for him to wallow in grief for the rest of his life, that along with the unhappy times he had some very good times to think about and remember, both in the real world and in some other in between place.
A wonderful story!
louisev:
I admit, I am full up, having just ploughed through the editing and rendering-down of 40,000 words of another unrelated story... I function best when I am editing one thing and taking breaks from it to write others, and have done NO reading this week. Which means when I burn out on editing again NEXT week I'll have plenty to read.
But I truly savored the "Wedding Night" chapters, enough hotness to show Ennis's yearning, and a very original evocation of the relationship between Jack and Ennis. Yeah, I got dewy, but in your hands, Marcia, the sense of despair and loss are offset well by the hope for the future, and there is a sense in your work (and I wish it was in mine) that Ennis does not have to choose between holding onto the sweet moments of his past and Jack, and moving forward, because there is a natural progression from one to the other. I think you conveyed this transition somewhat better than I did, and made me do some more thinking.
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