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Gift of Exile - first fanfic
Marge_Innavera:
--- Quote from: MaineWriter on July 28, 2006, 09:58:29 am ---This paragraph:
"Hardly remember the first time I was ever on a horse. You ever ride?" The three generations of David’s family that had been at the wedding, the suit not secondhand like Ennis’, his ability to casually fly across several states just for a cousin’s wedding; all spoke of a cavernous gap between their backgrounds; so he was irrationally surprised at the affirmative answer. "Oh yeah. Haven’t been on a horse in awhile but I rode a lot growin’ up. My best friend’s parents, they had a place north of Atlanta. Used to spend weekends up there, go up a lot in the summer." He hesitated and then gave Ennis a slow, amused smile as if anticipating the reaction. "Not the kind of saddles y’all use out here, though. I learned on an English saddle, and the way you ride with those is way different."
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Ah good, that gives me something to go on. As I was visualizing the scene at the bar, it wasn't hard for me to know who was talking, but having a metaphysical subplot doesn't including expecting readers to be telepathic.
Might have happened, too, because I have a second job transcribing minutes for a local municipality and while I can be creative with verbs like "observed", "confirmed", "remarked", etc. I do have to put in constant modifiers to make it clear who in the meeting is speaking. In that kind of writing, they want a certain amount of style but that has to take a back seat to straight reporting. Maybe in the bar scene there was a subconscious "yee-hah! I don't have to write this up like a meeting!" going on. ;D
mvansand76:
Hiya! I liked the first four chapters, how much time do you spend on writing?
Marge_Innavera:
I do a lot of business writing, specifically minutes for a City entity and that plus a full-time job eat up a lot of time. Actually, some of my writing is in longhand initially as I get ideas and then typed up on breaks as a draft. Several years ago, I wrote for a weekly newspaper doing feature writing and local music coverage.
Am still feeling my way in fiction writing, and that includes trying different ways of putting together scenes and chapters to see what works best. The first two chapters of this story went quickly; the next two much slower going because of introducing a new character. So far, what's happened is that I get enough drafts written to put together a chapter and then sit down and type it out all at once. That can be a lunch break at work, or it can be 6:00 in the morning. :)
Thanks so much for reading and commenting! I hope to have at least one more chapter up by the end of the week.
notBastet:
A chapter by the end of the week... cool!
:)
Marge_Innavera:
I have Chapter 5 finished, but want to get Chapter 6 ready and post them both at the same time. Chapter 6 is another Jack-centered part.
And this doesn't relate to my fanfic, but I don't know where else to post it --
Does anyone know what's going on with "Widower For a Year" over at LiveJournal? It looks like the author is starting to wind up the story but the last chapter was posted two months ago, on June 1st. This story is wonderfully done, and I'd hate to think he wasn't able to finish it after getting this far.
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