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Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
mariez:
--- Quote from: haunted_by_bbm on March 29, 2007, 07:20:57 pm ---. . .
LOL You mention 're-reads.' So, I'm gonna mention something to you. lol
I hope Part 5A was part of your 're-read' session, ;),
because I changed it just a little.
Maybe not enough to be noticeable to some,
but you're pretty detail oriented, as am I. lol
. . .
--- End quote ---
Cristine, this is so funny! I did re-read 5A - and I thought something seemed different - but I couldn't put my finger on exactly what and just thought I was misremembering. It's wonderful, of course, but then I thought it always was - you couldn't possibly write anything that would be "cringe worthy!" LOL!
Now, on to 5B - (cross-posting again) :) -
Wow, Just Wow. Where do I begin?
“Hits it…just right…every time…” During my second read of this (yep, immediately following my first) I thought, "Well there's something C has in common with Ennis" - because you hit it just right every time, too! LOL!!
"Jack’s laugh fairly leapt from his body, wrapping Ennis in significant and considerable warmth, deeper and stronger than any coat or blanket could ever hope to provide, greater and finer than any dwelling place Ennis had ever known."
Love that. They are each other's safe havens.
"For unexpressed did not mean unknown." - That may be one of my favorite sentences in all BBM fanfic. A world of truth in six words.
And these phrases are so beautiful and real:
"Like therapy for his soul, Ennis couldn’t help but feel completely detached from worldly cares whenever he was stroking that head of hair."
". . .that smoky-eyed gaze of complete and total trust and surrender… Jack held on, tearing at Ennis’ chest with both hands, eyes gazing straight through to the man’s soul…"
Ahhh .... it's wonderful to be back in your heavenly realm, Cristine!
Do take care of yourself - you know we'll be happy to wait. :-*
Thanks so much,
Marie
P.S. Ennis's four (or was it five?) "Well"'s . . - so sweet and funny - and so Ennis!
MaineWriter:
Cristine....
Glad to hear you are feeling better and glad to have you back. I missed you!
Hugs,
Leslie
haunted_by_bbm:
--- Quote from: MaineWriter on March 30, 2007, 04:47:41 am ---Cristine....
Glad to hear you are feeling better and glad to have you back. I missed you!
Hugs,
Leslie
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Thank you so much, Leslie. :)
Missed you!
:-* :-* :-*{{{{{{{{{{L}}}}}}}}}}}} :-* :-* :-*
haunted_by_bbm:
--- Quote from: atz75 on March 29, 2007, 08:03:22 pm ---Hey Cristine!
Great to see you back online! Hope all is well.
:-*
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Amanda,
Thank you so much!
I missed you guys. :-*
I'm doing much better.
Just have to be smart and listen to the doctor. ;)
Thanks, sweetie.
Cristine :)
haunted_by_bbm:
--- Quote from: mariez on March 29, 2007, 09:27:18 pm ---Cristine, this is so funny! I did re-read 5A - and I thought something seemed different - but I couldn't put my finger on exactly what and just thought I was misremembering. It's wonderful, of course, but then I thought it always was - you couldn't possibly write anything that would be "cringe worthy!" LOL!
Now, on to 5B - (cross-posting again) :) -
Wow, Just Wow. Where do I begin?
“Hits it…just right…every time…” During my second read of this (yep, immediately following my first) I thought, "Well there's something C has in common with Ennis" - because you hit it just right every time, too! LOL!!
"Jack’s laugh fairly leapt from his body, wrapping Ennis in significant and considerable warmth, deeper and stronger than any coat or blanket could ever hope to provide, greater and finer than any dwelling place Ennis had ever known."
Love that. They are each other's safe havens.
"For unexpressed did not mean unknown." - That may be one of my favorite sentences in all BBM fanfic. A world of truth in six words.
And these phrases are so beautiful and real:
"Like therapy for his soul, Ennis couldn’t help but feel completely detached from worldly cares whenever he was stroking that head of hair."
". . .that smoky-eyed gaze of complete and total trust and surrender… Jack held on, tearing at Ennis’ chest with both hands, eyes gazing straight through to the man’s soul…"
Ahhh .... it's wonderful to be back in your heavenly realm, Cristine!
Do take care of yourself - you know we'll be happy to wait. :-*
Thanks so much,
Marie
P.S. Ennis's four (or was it five?) "Well"'s . . - so sweet and funny - and so Ennis!
--- End quote ---
Marie,
Thank you so much!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter,
and you quoted all the 'sweet' parts. :)
I really loved writing that line about Ennis being detached
from worldy cares when stroking Jack's hair.
Somehow, I can really picture it being just that way. :)
And all Ennis' "Wells..." lol That was just so much fun to write.
I'm glad it came through the way I wanted it too. :)
Thanks so much for reading, sweetie.
I'll pop over to the Drabblefest as soon as I can.
I've been trying to catch up on a myriad of 'life' things...some of them I just wish I could ignore and hope for them to go away. ;) LOL
Take care, sweetie.
C* :)
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