The "ABCs of BBM": Round 965! (Rules in first post)

[Ellemeno]

Sometimes a simple shift in the grouping of words evolved from the short story to the screenplay:

Short story:  "Them boxes a soup are real bad to pack."
Screenplay:  "Them soup boxes are hard to pack."



=aside= Players
Thanks kindly for your replies to my concerns about the rules.  I will lighten up, and stand the ambiguity. 

[memento]

The screenplay changed Jack's honest declaration about his feelings from: "... he missed Ennis bad enough sometimes to make him whip babies", to "The truth is... sometimes I miss you so much I can hardly stand it."

[Toast]

"Friend this letter is a long time over due. Hope you get it. Heard you was in Riverton. Im coming thru on the 24th, thought Id stop and buy you a beer Drop me a line if you can, say if your there."     [story]

Jack and Ennis had to worry about interception of their messages to each other.  By using postcards, they could hide in plain sight, using codes like 'buy you a beer,' 'fish will be jumping,' etc.

In the story, Jack's first message to Ennis was a "genral" delivery letter - later changed to a postcard.   However the message still refers to itself as a letter.

"Friend this letter is long over due. Hope you get it. Heard you was in Riverton. I'm coming thru on the 24th, thought I'd stop and buy you a beer. Drop me a line if you can, say if your there."      [screenplay]

[Ellemeno]

During their leave-taking at the end of the summer -

Short story: "If the draft don't get me."

Screenplay: "if the army don't get me. "


=apology= Players

I was called away just after I posted the L, and was gone til now.  Very sorry.

[southendmd]

Ennis's offer was middling:  they could get together once in a while way out in the back (story) or middle (screenplay) of nowhere.

[Toast]

Jack did not express any tiredness of noshing on beans in Annie Proulx's story.

"No More Beans," and the ordering of soup seamlessly entered the tale in the screenplay.

[memento]

The screenwriters wisely decided to omit the line: "Gun’s goin off.”

[southendmd]

In the story, Ennis is peeing in the sink.  In the screenplay, Cassie prevents Ennis from peeing when she drags him onto the dance floor.

[Toast]

"  ...  and their bedroom was full of the smell of old blood and milk and baby shit, and the sounds were of squalling and sucking and Alma's sleepy groans, all reassuring of fecundity and life's continuance to one who worked with livestock."

Only Annie Proulx could describe such a reeking bedroom.
None of the screenplays tried to duplicate this - maybe art-house films cannot afford Smell-O-Vision.

[Meryl]

In Proulx's story, Jack sported an eagle feather in his hat, but screenplay Jack went about featherless.