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louisev:
 
which is right.... HERE.

http://louisev.livejournal.com/185888.html  "5.  Professional Charm"

notBastet:
Spoiler...



wow, I really liked that chapter!!!

some favorite parts...

I reflected on why I was actually fantasizin about havin a relationship wtih this guy, but chalked it all up to the hangover

and

and gave him what I hoped was that hopeful innocent puppy look that said “don’t you just want ta rub my tummy” rather than that hungry, ravenous wolf look that said “why don’t you just come out a that brick house so I can eat you up little pig?”

and

And to my surprise, he came with, ate a Texas omelet with me, and let me pay. So dumbass was off the table and I was workin on bein a shameless flirt with a closet case in tow by the time the omelets were eaten and we had a few more coffees in us.

and

So by the time I came back out of the office I had a much-too-long list of Wilson Brand’s weaponry, confirmation that Brando waitin in the outer office was really divorced, and my day was lookin way up until I did a U-turn on Center Street and some dumbass in a uniform cruiser puts on his lights and pulled me over. “Oh, kiss my ass.” Which I would much preferred to have said to the man sittin next to me under very, very different circumstances.

I guess Ellery hadn't planned on falling so hard for a 'closet-case,' huh?

louisev:
no, no, he didn't expect that aTALL!

mariez:
SPOILER






I keep repeating myself, but Louise, that was GREAT! 

Cocky, confident Ellery has his insecure moments too:

"“All part a my professional charm,” and decided to go for irony instead. And that’s when things got real quiet, and when I first started feelin like a total dumbass.


And another piece of the puzzle falls into place:

"Desperate situations call for desperate measures, so I flirted with the waitress to take his mind off of flirtin with him, hit the coffee again to sober me up a bit more, and waited for him to eat almost the whole damn omelet before he finally said he was full."

And what a great chapter ending:

"“Oh, kiss my ass.” Which I would much preferred to have said to the man sittin next to me under very, very different circumstances."

YES!

Thanks - Marie

louisev:
oh i dont mind your repeating yourself ONE BIT!

bring it on baby!

and yes, he is insecure... and at this moment, isn't quite sure why!

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