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Was: Laramie Tales: New Working Title: Tales of Greenlea County (ARCHIVE)
MaineWriter:
Oh my God, I LOVE this paragraph...
And rushin down those stairs, throbbin everywhere a man could throb without bein beat up, was when I realized I’d fallen in love with a man I’d just met, at the moment when there wasn’t a damn thing I could do about it. It was time to be the law. For that half hour, I really fuckin hated my job.
Oh, Ellery!
L
notBastet:
--- Quote from: MaineWriter on December 20, 2006, 01:02:48 pm ---Oh my God, I LOVE this paragraph...
And rushin down those stairs, throbbin everywhere a man could throb without bein beat up, was when I realized I’d fallen in love with a man I’d just met, at the moment when there wasn’t a damn thing I could do about it. It was time to be the law. For that half hour, I really fuckin hated my job.
Oh, Ellery!
L
--- End quote ---
I just went back and reread the next part in TC where Ellery comes back upstairs after talking to Wilson... it's pretty fun reading back and forth between the two. Anyhoo - I am all warm and fuzzy thinking about Ellery's exuberant return to worried Ennis, where he proposes the 'date'.
(misuse of the word exuberant, i'm sure, but oh well)
mariez:
SPOILER
Damn, you're good, Louise! :-*
In addition to the line Leslie quoted above - I love that word "throbbin" and I love knowing that Ellery already realizes he's in love! - there are so many great lines -
I gave Ennis the hottest bedroom eyes I could an took out my pistol, hopin he got the metaphor as I cocked it. :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
And from close range he flashed his eyes at me an he stammered “Just be careful. I don’t want nothin ta happen to ya.”
Black comes in awful handy for not showin when ya suddenly get aroused on the job, an I hoped I was standin too close for him to see what that look did ta me, and said “Don’t worry – we got a getaway car, remember?”
His smile made me ache on top of bein rock hard. ;D ;D
All of which had the silver linin effect of keepin my mind off what it would be like to lick up an down those chiseled shoulders an those firm pecs an maybe sneak a lick to see how much perk I could get out a them nipples sittin upstairs,. . . ;D
God, I love Ellery!
Thanks, Marie
louisev:
update time
More fantasizing as Ennis gradually caves in to Deputy Darlin:
http://louisev.livejournal.com/187317.html "10. Sweet Mystery of Lust"
louisev:
there will be a late-breaking chapter tonight before I finally succumb to sleep. Stay tuned.
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