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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #410 on: November 28, 2008, 04:53:24 pm »
HAPPY THANKSGIVING JANICE!!!

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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #411 on: December 10, 2008, 12:28:12 pm »



             Reproduced here with permission by the writer:   Moo the Moose



                       
               TWO WORDS

The stoical cowboy with treacle for curls
Sits on the sofa, his heart all a-whirl,
Awaiting his darlin' he ain't seen in years
He sits amid six empty bottles a beer.

A motor outside, the sweet screech of tires
He's up on his feet, his body's on fire
Longing for Jack, he ain't seen in years:
Quick, cowboy, quick, get rid a them tears.

He bursts out the door and flies down the stairs;
Giddyap, cowboy, take 'em in pairs.
Waiting below, his beautiful boy,
His darlin', his Jack: his heart and his joy.

Cowboys collide, the force almost hurts,
With wide crow's-feet smiles, and fistfuls of shirt.
Four years of yearning were four years amiss.
Four years of lonely dissolved in that kiss.

The wall took the brunt of their four years apart,
Those slats felt the force of their wild, cowboy hearts.
Breathless and giddy, they came up for air,
The scent of the mountain in both of their hair.

But the kiss and embrace, which bridged all the years
Could not hold a candle, could just not come near,
When the stoical cowboy bent to Jack's ear,
“Little darlin”, he whispered, extracting a tear.
     



                         


RETURN TO SENDER

 

Returned to sender,
M'hands how they shook.
Oh Lawdy, oh shit,
I can't bear to look

He'll answer, in Texas,
He'll answer for sure.
He's got to!  He will,
The son of a whore.

Alas.  Alas.  Lureen,
Your wife.
Her story, her tale
A godamned sharp knife.

Thrust in the heart,
Plunged into the soul.
Jack Fuckin Twist
Will never grow old.

Reduced ta ash y'could hold
In your hand.
Can't rightly be fixed...
But too much ta stand.

Let the campfire die,
Leave your bay mare bereft.
Your bull's all alone,
My Rodeo's left.

Pack up the pup tent,
Let the woolies roam free.
Brokeback is empty
Let be, let be.










 

           THE COWBOY'S LAMENT

The wind in the Rockies is the voice of my soul
The great, lonely plains - I feel just as old.
A life that knew love, but a life lived without
A life now akin to that long-ago trout.

Oh, for a scapegoat, my heart how it longs
Oh to blame somebody else for the wrongs.
I'm nothin', I'm nowhere, I can't stand to be
So hard to press on, Jack, now there's no We.

The huge, great big sadness of the vast northern plains
Rolls down on my head...goddamn, how it rains.
The rue an' regret, oh it aches like a bitch
It nags me and nags me; a fishwife shrew witch.

A banshee regret that haunts all my sleep
More often than not, I wake then I weep
But sometimes, my friend, sometimes I dream
Sweet dreams of our Mountain and all that it means.

In this sweet slumber, friend, you and I meet,
I shed salty tears, ensconced in wet sheets.
I cling to these dreams, disperse that they may
I grasp the fine fragments, they might stoke the day.

Too good were you, Jack,
A pearl 'fore the swine
So, hung from a tack:
Your shirt in mine


   Thanks to

   moo_the_moose
   


                           








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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #412 on: December 10, 2008, 02:06:16 pm »



       I thought so too.  Thats why I asked her to allow me to post them here, so more people could enjoy them as well..



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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #413 on: December 10, 2008, 04:37:32 pm »

Those poems are really great, Janice  :)

Thank you.
 

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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #414 on: December 10, 2008, 10:11:59 pm »

       Im glad you enjoyed them Rob...


      Here is another poem some of you are probably more familiar with. 

     Its the source of Madlori's fanfiction soon to be published,,, Zero at the Bone






Author’s Note: A lot of people have asked me where the title of this story comes from. It is from Emily Dickinson’s poem “A Narrow Fellow In the Grass” which reads as follows:

A narrow fellow in the grass
Occasionally rides;
You may have met him,--did you not,
His notice sudden is.

The grass divides as with a comb,
A spotted shaft is seen;
And then it closes at your feet
And opens further on.

He likes a boggy acre,
A floor too cool for corn.
Yet when a child, and barefoot,
I more than once, at morn,

Have passed, I thought, a whip-lash
Unbraiding in the sun,--
When, stooping to secure it,
It wrinkled, and was gone.

Several of nature's people
I know, and they know me;
I feel for them a transport
Of cordiality;

But never met this fellow,
Attended or alone,
Without a tighter breathing,
And zero at the bone.
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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #415 on: December 12, 2008, 01:54:01 am »

That was good, Janice.

But, hmmmm, I don't think I understand poetry at all.
Except Chuck's, perhaps. Maybe it takes practice.

Hey, btw. I did send a PM to you, but had no reply.  :)

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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #416 on: December 12, 2008, 08:02:36 am »
But, hmmmm, I don't think I understand poetry at all.
Except Chuck's, perhaps. Maybe it takes practice.

Or maybe mine are just simple.

 :laugh:

Not a lot of complex thought going on here.  *taps own head*

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Tell him when l come up to him and ask to play the record, l'm gonna say: ''Voulez-vous jouer ce disque?''
'Voulez-vous, will you kiss my dick?'
Will you play my record? One-track mind!

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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #417 on: December 12, 2008, 04:23:42 pm »




        I am not really what you would call an expert myself.  Not by any stretch of reasoning.  I just know
that I love it.  I find that the more I am exposed to it, the more I love it. 

      I love the many different kinds of poetry, and really do appreciate those who are good at writing it.  It takes
so many different parts of the brain to make it happen.  I am such an inept person at it, but I love to try.   

      We have lots of people here that are really good at it.  I am in awe sometimes at the bulk of talent that is
here in the BBM universe.



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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #418 on: December 13, 2008, 04:00:03 am »
Janice, are you back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I certainly hope you are!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I want you to be here even if you do have to have shells with your crab like in San Francisco, it was still fun, right?

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Re: Notes for Janice!!
« Reply #419 on: December 13, 2008, 05:42:47 am »
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