I agree that something's wrong with it. But Annie Proulx uses wrong sentences effectively. However, this one's confusing too.
In the May 21 issue, I read the "Talk of the Town" mini profile of Dustin Lance Black (Milk). I was charmed to read there that according to the mother of author Pat Conroy, "All Southern literature can be summed up in these words: 'On the night the hogs ate Willie, Mama died when she heard what Daddy did to Sister.'"
Thanks, dude. Reading that just sent Starbucks coffee right up the back of my nose...
Personally, I love them. Sentence fragments.Though I'm sure Mr. Shawn and I would disagree about any number of things.
I don't like Dexter Flikins' or Jon Lee Anderson's articles mainly because they're too long. However, I read them anyway because I figure they're Important and also good for me.
I know what you mean. The New Yorker as cod liver oil.