Author Topic: The Only Thing That's Real, by littleguitar  (Read 16080 times)

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 2 up!
« Reply #10 on: January 25, 2007, 01:13:06 am »
Great Chapter Mandy.  Love, love, LOVE the dialogue between Ennis and Jack.  I think your story may end up being better than SFU  ::) for a brokie like me.

Shit Dottie, that's some high praise there! LOL  ::)

Thanks you two, I really appreciate it  :-*
‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 2 up!
« Reply #11 on: January 25, 2007, 01:13:46 am »
oh, and I'm really really glad you like the dialogue... I'm always worried about that!
‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 2 up!
« Reply #12 on: January 27, 2007, 02:20:42 pm »
I really really love this Jack and Ennis. Love the sexual tension between them, love that Jack just came straight out and asked Ennis what was going on in his head. I think it's great that Jack is an artist and I love it that Ennis talks with the ghosts!
These lines were gorgeous:

Sunday came and he found himself with nothing to do so he sat outside in a t-shirt and jeans, his feet bare against the sun-warmed wooden slats of the Del Mar’s big front porch. He drank sweet tea from a sweating glass. It tasted good since the day was unusually warm for this far into autumn.
A voice broke him from his reveries, a voice he wanted to smile at but he didn’t know if he should, so he didn’t, just turned his head slightly in its direction.

“Well looky here,” Jack Twist said. “If it ain’t that Del Mar fella swept me offa my feet then left me heartbroken without another word few nights ago.” He grinned at Ennis and walked up the steps.


I'm so into this story, Mandy, I love everything about it  :)  You have a writing style that I just really love  :)

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 2 up!
« Reply #13 on: February 02, 2007, 05:36:58 pm »
Chapter 3 up

http://minchout.livejournal.com/19693.html

Enjoy, comments and con. crit. always welcome...
‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 2 up!
« Reply #14 on: February 02, 2007, 05:40:46 pm »
Chapter 3 up

http://minchout.livejournal.com/19693.html

Enjoy, comments and con. crit. always welcome...

*Wheeeee and Squeeeee*  ;D  Off to read! Good to see you back, Mandy!  :-* Did you have a good time?  :)

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 3 up!
« Reply #15 on: February 02, 2007, 09:19:58 pm »
Yippee skippee and I can't wait to get home!

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 3 up!
« Reply #16 on: February 03, 2007, 12:27:42 am »
LOL Roux! I didn't even know you were reading this!  :)

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*Wheeeee and Squeeeee*    Off to read! Good to see you back, Mandy!   Did you have a good time? 

I had a great time, thanks for asking  :-* I was actually in Memphis for a good amount of time, so I got a lot of inspiration for this story  ;)
‘cause the truth is, I already give him everythin’ I got to give, more than I ever even knew I had; ‘n it all for him, all of it, him who is my brother, my father, my child, my friend, my lover, my heart, my soul; my Ennis.

-- del Mar Painting, Ch. 48 by b73

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 3 up!
« Reply #17 on: February 03, 2007, 02:48:32 am »
Sweet, sweet chapter Mandy.  Thank You.  Did you have a nice trip?  Sure hope so.
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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 3 up!
« Reply #18 on: February 03, 2007, 05:13:49 pm »
Wow, they're kissing!  :o

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Re: The Only Thing That's Real, chapter 3 up!
« Reply #19 on: February 03, 2007, 05:21:57 pm »
Wow, they're kissing!  :o

YEAH!! WHOOO! And weren't those kissies just wonderfully sweet *sigh* Lovely, Mandy  :-*